FF: Web of Lies - COMPLETED on p80 - Page 3

Originally posted by: xxDaydreameRxx

Reserved (I am SO excited to read this - I came across For You I WIll some time ago and found it to be one of the best things Ive ever read.) Looking forward to this.

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OMG this was such an amazing start! Im already hooked! Before I even mention Asad and how much I enjoyed his jealousy let me just say that you do an amazing job pinning down all the details - the way you explained the hacking stuff, it really gives more credibility and a touch of realism to your work! Just curious, do you also have the same job as Zoya?

Paly: No, I just did a little bit of research on the internet!

And now to Asad, OMG he was actually a LION! LOL i couldn't help notice and laugh at the little words you used to describe his actions - GROWL, SNARL! Ahaha totally a lion and I can't explain how much I actually enjoy it!

Coming to Malak...I went from WOW caz of the way you described his persona - he seems so understanding! to a little irritated when I felt that he was judging Asad a little too fast but then back to liking him as I realized how much he cared for Zoya and then I got thoughtful thinking is Asad actually sucking the life out of Zoya!? Not to mention, I was thoroughly impressed with the ease his boyish charm returned when Zoya called him. Asad has definitely got some tough competition!

Paly: Malak is a smooth New Yorker - they can easily slip from character to character. Asad doesn't play games, he's a straight-shooter. Both qualities have their advantages and disadvantages. You'll see them come into play as the story continues.

In short, I congratulate you for successfully creating such an impressive and multi-layered character in the first chapter itself!

Oh, and did I mention I loved the firmness with which Asad accepted Mallak's challenge!?

Paly: Asad may not know he's in love with Zoya (at this point in the story) but he knows he doesn't want to lose her! That's always been clear for him.

Okay, Im sorry Ive been droning on for too long! Just try and update as soon as you can though! :)

Paly: I'll post the next chapter on Sunday afternoon (New York time)

No romance? Dude, this is the highest kind of romance there is..at least in my dictionary! The way you've described his protectiveness beats all! ;)Paly: By 'no romance' I meant that the story will not focus on romance. Zoya and Asad are still themselves, still unable to stay away from each other, lost in their eye-locks and private moments. You'll start to see that in the second chapter!