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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hello fella's, how are you all? Finally got time to write another OS, this is a small one, sorry…

Happy reading :)

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It was raining, the lightning echoed through out the city, the traffic was heavy, and he sat in his car, stuck in that traffic. The wipers of the car swiped back and forth against the windshield, making a swoosh sound every time. He looked at his watch every now and then; the car in front didn't even move an inch

Tsk…

Out of all days, there was a storm today. His cell phone rang for the umpteenth time

He looked at the caller ID

"Tanveer... "He said to himself, and picked up

"Hello…" He said softly

"Jammy? Why aren't you picking up?" Tanveer asked from the other end

"I, um.. I gonna finally do it.." He replied

"O…" There was silence

"Uhh, Tannu??"

"Do it Jammy, and come back with a smile"

He smiled "I will…"

"All the best. Bye" and she hung up

He looked at the screen of his cell phone

Thanks for making me realize Tannu... He thought, and hopefully he would succeed.

The car in front started moving along again, and he looked up to see the cars picking their pace again. He let out a deep breath and started driving again.

About twenty minutes later, he stopped the car in front of a building.

He looked up to a balcony on the 16th floor, the curtains were blowing, and the light was visible. He gazed at it for a while, and wished she would walk out.

He looked down and stared at his shaking hands…

Should I do it? No.. I'll just go home. He thought, nut then remembered his friends words

"You should always listen to your heart, the heart is always right…"

He closed his eyes, what did his heart want?

He looked up at her balcony again, and saw as she walked out, a smile on her face… like always

Her hair was let loose, blowing all around, but she didn't seem to care, but pushed it back every now and then. She leaned on the railing of her balcony and looked up at the dark sky.

He opened the car door, and stepped out, letting the rain catch him under it's drops. He looked up at her again, and saw as she looked at him, and stood straight, her smile fading and confusion slowly took over, he watch her face expression change, He felt the rain make it's way all over, it rolled down his face and neck until it dissolved into his clothing.

She ran back inside and he slowly made his way to the entrance of the building, he was dripping wet, by the time he reached it.

He opened the glass doors and walked inside, his shoes squeaked against the floor. He walked to the elevator and clicked on it; every time it dinged closer he was getting more impatient. He gulped a couple of times and closed his eyes as it dinged for the last time. He hear the door slide open

"Asad?" He heard her sweet voice say

He looked up, to see her standing in the elevator, dressed in a night gown, white umbrella in her hand.

She looked worried, but he smiled and stepped in closer.

"Zoya…" he whispered, and pulled her into his embrace.

She stiffened under his touch, confusion screamed in her face expressions. It took her a couple of seconds to realize everything, and she calmed a bit into his arms.

He hands held him back, and she closed her eyes…

"I love you.." He said, gathering all his courage

She smiled and hugged him tighter, not giving any heed to his wet clothes

The tightening of her arms around him had given him her response; he kissed her hairs and closed his eyes also, smiling and still holding her in his arms.

Slowly he pulled out of the hug, and leaned his forehead against hers, she had light tears in her eyes, but a smile also spread across her face.

"I love you too…." She confessed from her side also.

He cupped her face and placed his lips on hers, taking her into a sweet kiss

……….After a while the elevator door slid shut cutting them away from the rest of the world.

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Fin….

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mochhug thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Beautiful! Actually like that Tanveer makes him realize :) I was hoping (before we found out that she's evil) that she would do that in the show.. but oh well haha This is a good consolation prize =P

Very well written btw and I love that you used a different color for the dialogue. 😉
Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Im happy that tannu isnt evil!!
Great os!
Sad that its short but it was still amazing
:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Good one! Love it! Since you write so well..I have a request for you..could you please by any chance write an OS on Mangalpur part 2? You see, I am getting a little impatient here and cannot wait for the actual scene to happen when Tanu hurts Zoya on the Nikkah day..well, we all want Mangalpur part 2 to happen in the show but we don't know for sure if it is gonna happen at all..so an OS on Mangalpur part 2 would be really appreciated...no pressure! :)
Edited by mbficoa1987 - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
#5
Beautiful! So adorable. 😳 And I'm so glad that Tanveer is good, she even helped Asad! 😲 Wow! 😆 Really, really nice job! 👏 I love it! 👍🏼 ❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Loved this OS!!!! I'm just getting anxious to see the much awaited confession from Asad!! I can't wait for that day!!! Hopefully it's soon!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Why mera Far wala Laaoo Way? Why is Tannu such a sweetooheart in your Fictions? 😆 i am jelly now! 😆 i DEMAND for an answer 🤣
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Posted: 12 years ago
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You write so beautifully Far! 🤗

This was beautiful!
I had to be kn akert wheather this tannu does end up as evil 😆
I love it! Short and sweet!😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
#9
Awesome ❤️By the way thanks for giving Tanu a +ve character
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Posted: 12 years ago
#10
Awww this was short and sweet
Loved it 😳
And tannu positive 😲
But I love this tannu more 😆

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