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Jassieg

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Posted: 12 years ago

#671

Very interesting. Loved it so much. I like this Asad and also Zoya's friends.

New twist?!! Should I be scared?

Will wait for ur update. Update soon.

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Asya0910

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Posted: 12 years ago

#672

that was awesome!!!!! pls continue

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MrMrsAsyaKhan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#673

Res.

First of all, sorry for such a late unres. You have no idea how I've been squirming all that while wanting to read it. Although i'm loving being away from home, I don't even have the time to take my phone out *sighs*

Dedication? *criesss* and i'm one of the last to comment. So sorry! Thank you soo soo soo much, I feel so special! *blushes* ( on my phone, failing with the emoticans)

And OMG! I absolutely adore this story! The tour was amazing, being the OCD freak that he is, I actually felt his discomfort yet him trying his best to stay calm and normal for her. GIRLL, I forgave him there and then. No more torture pleaseee! You are an amazing writer, and that's why I totally understood every emotion you put into this.

Okay, I think i'm the only one that feels sorry for him, although I did smile devilishly with Zoya.
I enjoyed the stair scene and his little prep talk. Bless the poor soul, mujhe yeh dekha nahi ja rahi hai, loool and i'm glad he noticed how she covers herself compared to other indian girls. Finally, I don't have to hammer his head in!

Lmfaooo! The best bit had to be her friends seducing him, poor soul I actually was sweating for him... Because i know he's not like that! Loved that bit, great addition my love. I've always wanted to see how her friends interact with her Mr Khan. I'm so glad they'll help her out. But the pizza scene was soo evil.
Ahhh, I love this chapter lovely, I'm not a New Yorker or anything... So I enjoyed every bit of this, I could imagine everything right in front of my eyes. It made me want to fly there right there and then, UK isn't so exciting anymore! This made me feel like I was watching a movie and i didn't want to come out of that dream world.

You are a fabulous writer and yet again you left me speechless. I had weird tingles in my stomach reading the whole thing. *sighs*
Okaay pleaseee don't let it be too big of a twist. Although I would enjoy a jealous track, I've already forgiven him in this chapter! I would dread seeing her get comfy with another hunk, but but i guess he needs a taste of his own medicine! Soo looking forward to it.

Once again, thank you for the dedication and for such an amazing chapter. I la love ittt! Keeep up the beautiful work, you rockkk!! Me loves loves loves! Continue sooon pleasseee.
I will try my best to comment first next time but doubt anything for the next 2 weeks :(!
Waiting very impatiently for the next part, thank you so much for the PM.
Much lovesss xoxo

P.S i'm bad with reviews. So end note: loved ittt!

Edited by MrMrsAsyaKhan - 12 years ago

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Posted: 12 years ago

#674

Awesome update! 😉 Asad's OCD problem and Zoya's pranks were hilarious! 🤣 So was Asad's being uncomfortable! 😆 Loved the use of the Subway, pizza, Zoya's friends, etc! 👍🏼 I ❤️ NY! My fave chapter so far, seemed really fun! 👏 Just loved it. 😳 Continue soon! 😛

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Monica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#675

Originally posted by: Naughtynatty
Awww amazing !!! Jaldi get them close yaar dont make us wait so long ... Her friends should totally help these two out inka to woh actually hi chalta rehta hai ufff
I need Mitwa moments fom you :)
and please pm me sweets :)

Aww THANKS! 😳 her friends will definitely play a role.. how big can't say 😉 but will PM for sure! 😃

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Monica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#676

Originally posted by: webuser7
Awesome update! 👏 👏 👏 I love your story! As a NYer, I was looking forward to the NYC trip. I live in the suburbs now, but worked over a decade in Manhattan! I miss NYC! Truly an amazing place!!

So here goes:

You nailed it! The best way to tour Manhattan is via Subway and walking on the streets! So glad you took Mr. OCD Khan on the MTA!! Loved Mr Khan's reaction to the scantily (yet very normal for us in summer!) dressed girls hitting on him! Poor Asad! Spicy Pizza! At least Zoya did not feed him Chicken satay again!

Some suggestions:
Can you please have Zoya take him (and perhaps the others too) to Coney Island or Jones Beach? Want to see his eyes pop out seeing the bikini clad babes. He might just die of a heart attack! He truly belongs in the 17th century!
Perhaps, he witnesses a couple making out on the Subway or the streets! Imagine Asad squirming at that and glancing nervously at Zoya. Perfect opportunity for his closet passion thoughts to emerge!
Can the 2 go for a romantic Broadway or Radio City Hall show?!
How about Zoya trying to make Akdu eat the Middle Eastern street food: Rice with chicken/gyro?! He definitely cannot eat the street roasted peanuts!
Some gay man hitting on Asad in the Village! Like Masterji on the show!
Perhaps on the way home, they can watch a busker/musician perform!
Horse carriage ride near Central Park.
Asad buys jewelry for Zoya from Tiffany's while Zoya wants a stuffed animal fom FAO Schwarz!
A street fair. Asad getting uncomfortable in the crowd and noise!
OK, enough with my demands!! 😆 😆

So, what's the twist? Blast from the past! Let me guess: a hot, handsome hunk who loves Zoya?! Hope so. Looking forward to the green bug biting Mr. K!! Love it! Payback time! My poor baby Zoya suffered a lot due to Tanveer. Asad's turn now. Please?! Pretty please?! Make the man sweat it out! Yippee!

👍🏼 👍🏼 2 thumbs up for this update and the precap!

First of all THANK YOU! Loved your comment! And was anxiously waiting to see what you would say 😳

Haha glad you liked it 😃 And as for your suggestions... I think you know me better than I thought haha cause I actually had a few of these in mind 😆

The beach one I was unaware Coney Island had a beach (tourist lol) or that there was another beach (Jones) but now that I know I shall definitely include it *laughs evilly*. And the Broadway and Radio City ones I had indeed thought of! Just wasn't sure if Akdu Ahmed Khan would squirm LOL or enjoy it! But maybe as a way to indulge Zoya it could work 😛; Roasted peanuts! OMG 🤣 I had definitely not thought of that but I can't believe I didn't! That would go over SO WELL 😆

And the others I won't give away 😛 but you can certainly expect some, (most, if not all) of these in the next few updates for sure 😃 Sure the surprise isn't there but I'm hoping I can do the descriptions justice

And for the precap... hmmm well I can't say 😛

Thanks for the lovely comment! ❤️

Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago

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Monica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#677

Originally posted by: ButterflyKisses
Awesome update! 😉 Asad's OCD problem and Zoya's pranks were hilarious! 🤣 So was Asad's being uncomfortable! 😆 Loved the use of the Subway, pizza, Zoya's friends, etc! 👍🏼 I ❤️ NY! My fave chapter so far, seemed really fun! 👏 Just loved it. 😳 Continue soon! 😛

Aw thaaanks 😃😳

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webuser7

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Posted: 12 years ago

#678

Originally posted by: mochhug

First of all THANK YOU! Loved your comment! And was anxiously waiting to see what you would say 😳

Haha glad you liked it 😃 And as for your suggestions... I think you know me better than I thought haha cause I actually had a few of these in mind 😆

The beach one I was unaware Coney Island had a beach (tourist lol) or that there was another beach (Jones) but now that I know I shall definitely include it *laughs evilly*. And the Broadway and Radio City ones I had indeed thought of! Just wasn't sure if Akdu Ahmed Khan would squirm LOL or enjoy it! But maybe as a way to indulge it could work 😛; Roasted peanuts! OMG 🤣 I had definitely not thought of that but I can't believe I didn't! That would go over SO WELL 😆

And the others I won't give away 😛 but you can certainly expect some, (most, if not all) of these in the next few updates for sure 😃 Sure the surprise isn't there but I'm hoping I can do the descriptions justice

And for the precap... hmmm well I can't say 😛

Thanks for the lovely comment! ❤️

Aww, there was no need for you to be anxious. You are doing a fantastic job! 🤗

As for the beach, Coney Island is a mixture of beach, boardwalk and amusement rides - small scale suitable for NY. It's actually in Brooklyn, one of the 5 NYC boroughs. Jones beach on the other hand is much bigger and is in Long Island, so further away from Manhattan.

Looking forward to reading your future plots. Even if I may have guessed a few, I am sure the script will be unique! 😊

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Monica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#679

Originally posted by: webuser7
Aww, there was no need for you to be anxious. You are doing a fantastic job! 🤗

As for the beach, Coney Island is a mixture of beach, boardwalk and amusement rides - small scale suitable for NY. It's actually in Brooklyn, one of the 5 NYC boroughs. Jones beach on the other hand is much bigger and is in Long Island, so further away from Manhattan.

Looking forward to reading your future plots. Even if I may have guessed a few, I am sure the script will be unique! 😊

Thaaanks 😃 Ahh so that's where they are! Well then now I know more about NYC and I might be PMing (bugging you 😛) for info to keep it as accurate as possible 😳

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webuser7

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Posted: 12 years ago

#680

Originally posted by: mochhug

Thaaanks 😃 Ahh so that's where they are! Well then now I know more about NYC and I might be PMing (bugging you 😛) for info to keep it as accurate as possible 😳

Don't worry too much about accuracy, creative liberties you see!! 😆

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