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Andrea

@DreA

Stunner

Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Hey now...We need longer chapters lady!!!
Dont take too long to update either!!!
Ok ok my bossiness is over now😆
It was really good. PM me if you can when you update it 😊

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SaHillover101

@SaHillover101

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Aweesomme! Can't wait to read more! Do continue soon and pleeasee pm me if possible :) Thanks in advance :D

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Nida

@Gurmeet4Drashti

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Hey ...

That was amazing :D

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Devi Karishma

@DKB532

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#44

Omg! This is great! Please keep writing!

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Aparichit

@Phenyl

Sparkler

+ 15

Posted: 12 years ago

#45

Loved both the parts.Update soon.

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Fimmy

@Fimmy

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#46

Wow!!! You have given a really wonderful title to your story...
Love it...

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grad2011

@grad2011

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#47

really nice plzz do update soon :)

Edited by grad2011 - 12 years ago

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Laila Banu

@Laila2009

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#48

OK...another piece of advise...you need to write more. three paragraphs is not enough...You have to have more confidence in your writing and write more and then take that risk instead of giving out morsels and then wondering how we think. A short story requires more...the reader cannot get into your story and when they do, it's like whoa, what happened to the rest?

And don't be afraid. 😉

You say you don't know where to go...why not write to one of the seasoned writers on this forum for ideas?

Edited by Laila2009 - 12 years ago

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Laila Banu

@Laila2009

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#49

Here are some things to explain to the reader;

- does Asad love Zoya?
- they made love - she's pregnant - why did they?

- how is their relationship like?

- what do they want from it?

the second part gave us a summary of the show - what we already know...as a reader, I want to know how did they come together - arranged marriage? Did they just accept it blindly? How was their marriage like - the introduction? did they get along? Do they? How is she reacting to the pregnancy? Why is Asad ignoring her?