~Saiyaara~ an AsYa FF THREAD 1

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: Fimmy
nice part...
but why such a tiny mini part...
u knw i am actually addicted to this story after reading these 2 parts...i don't knw how but i am addicted to it...
so plzzz plzzz plzzz give us a longer part...
and cont it super soon...
thnx...

Thank you so much ! :)
Actually I get tired typing up the whole update n never realise if its small :D
will try to make the next one longer ! :)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: AliciaZA

A very interesting and different Asya FF. I think I like it:). And I'm really intrigued to see where you take the story...

thank you :)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: Gurmeet4Drashti
Hey ...
That was amazing :D

thanks :)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: Drea_QH1fan
Hey now...We need longer chapters lady!!!
Dont take too long to update either!!!
Ok ok my bossiness is over now😆
It was really good. PM me if you can when you update it😊

Thanks :D
I'll try PMing...:)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: Fimmy
Wow!!! You have given a really wonderful title to your story...
Love it...

Thank you :)
I'm happy that you liked it !
I love that song and thought that it wud b perfect for the story :)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: Laila2009
OK...another piece of advise...you need to write more. three paragraphs is not enough...You have to have more confidence in your writing and write more and then take that risk instead of giving out morsels and then wondering how we think. A short story requires more...the reader cannot get into your story and when they do, it's like whoa, what happened to the rest?

And don't be afraid.😉

You say you don't know where to go...why not write to one of the seasoned writers on this forum for ideas?

Thanks for the ideas... I'll try to make the next update longer :)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: Laila2009
Here are some things to explain to the reader;

- does Asad love Zoya?
- they made love - she's pregnant - why did they?
- how is their relationship like?
- what do they want from it?

the second part gave us a summary of the show - what we already know...as a reader, I want to know how did they come together - arranged marriage? Did they just accept it blindly? How was their marriage like - the introduction? did they get along? Do they? How is she reacting to the pregnancy? Why is Asad ignoring her?

Lol... I guess I have answers to all ur questions in my mind and they'll come up one by one in the story...:) It'll just take me some time to set the platform !

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Aaniya

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Part 3

Soon the day of nikaah arrived. Everything was being done fast, as Zoya's Aapi and Jeeju had to go back to New York. The nikaah was to be kept a secret affair, between the family members only. They did not want to hype up the nikaah, much to Asad's dislike. He had agreed upon getting married very quietly and was calm about the whole thing, dangerously calm ! Dilshaad didn't need to make much efforts.

Something inside him had died the day he had seen the love of his life in someone else's arms. The fateful day that took place 2 months ago. And when he had asked for an explanation, the answer had pained him to death. The memories were so fresh in his mind as if everything had took place a minute ago. Ever since then, he hadn't spoken much to anyone. Just answered to what he was asked or even a simple nod was enough sometimes.

His Ammi had felt his pain but couldn't do much about it as she was helpless, especially when he didn't want to speak anything about that incident !

On the other side, Zoya was very much excited about her Nikaah, oblivious to what fate had in store for her !

She had fallen in love at first sight with Asad. As soon as she saw his pic, that her Aapi provided her with, she had felt a strange pull towards him ! Like she was meant for him. Never had she felt that sense of belonging to someone. But she had always dreamt of it !

Even though she spent her life in New York, she was well aware of her culture and her limits. Not once had she done anything that her upbringing or religion wouldn't allow. She never minded wearing western clothes 'coz she thought that clothes are the last thing that describe a person. Its the heart and soul that should be kept pure.

At first, she had felt shy to look at his photo and kept it aside but she couldn't keep her temptation to get his one look for long. And decided to take a glimpse of him.

As days passed, it had become a habit for Zoya to talk to his photo, share the day's happenings and hug it before sleeping. It seemed like he had become a part of her. She had started to dream a life with him. A happy married life !
Lekin wo kehte haina, ''kisi ko mukammal jahaan nahi milta !''
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Zoya came out of her chain of thoughts as she heard the clock strike 11. It was very unsual of Mr. Khan to come home late without informing. She began to get worried.

How much ever she tried to tell herself that he didn't love her nor would he ever, it was all in vain ! She had fallen irrevocably in love with him and the feelings only grew deeper day by day. There was something inside her that kept telling her that one day he would reciprocate her love too. She had that faith in her which kept her moving in life.

Her Dilshaad ammi and Tamatar weren't home. So she muttered up some strength and decided to make a call to Mr. Khan and ask him about his whereabouts.

As she headed towards the phone, the door clicked open and she saw him enter. The disturbed look on his face did not go unnoticed by her and she guessed that it might be due to some office work or any client.

By now she had learnt to read his expressions very easily. Infact, she could read him in and out ! Afterall, it had been 10 months since their marriage.

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prev part - page 4
next part - page 12

I hope its long enough this time :D
thanks for the likes and comments. They are really encouraging ! :)

Hope you guyz like it !

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Posted: 12 years ago

#59

Hey dear just read all 3 parts they r beautiful

I am surely glued to the story 2 no abt the baby y asad is like this

Will wait 4 ur updates surely everything would be clear

Plz pm the update

I hit thr like but buttons showing error so llz

Update soon

Lovely updates

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Posted: 12 years ago

#60

talent.. bharpoor talent.. girl in ur earlier responses ud mentioned u had no idea whr dis story is heading bt the way u r gving it shape its coming out really nice.. And i mean it.. its really awsum.. plz post anothr part soon i read all of them in one go n am hungry for more..:p grt work..🤗👏👍🏼

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