Lonelier than before - AsYa SS [UPDATED PART 5] - Page 5

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Wow...dis is fab...i definately want u 2 pm me...continue soon...n do pm me...
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loved the update...my heartbreaks for zoya...
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Hey ...
That was fab !!!
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Wow! loved ur writing!😳 update soon..
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Amazing... I loved it! Continue soon
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WEll.. of course that is shortt. ME wants a looonger one and this time super duper soon. Thatz not askin for much is it? 😆
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I love the mature look that you took on this track. Very beautifully written !! Do PM me when you update the next part.
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Hey beautiful people!
I thank you for all your comments. 🤗
So like I promised, a super long update. I hope that whoever feels unsatisfied from the episode can feel a little better here.

Also - just wanna add that I've taken some liberties with the characters of Zoya's Jiju and Appi.

I hope you like this!

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Recap

But she knew that she would feel a little lonelier than she was before. She knew leaving India meant leaving him and his six packs behind. She knew it meant letting her heart sew stitches. She knew she'd be lonelier than she was before.

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Part 3

Meanwhile in NY'

"We can not just move without telling her."

"We aren't. When she comes ' she'll get our letter. I mean our new place is literally next door. Why are you panicking? We tried calling. No one's picking up. We sent her a mail. We left her messages. And we'll keep trying. Apart from that, we are the ones who get to pick her up from the airport anyway'so what's your problem?"

"I don't care. We aren't moving till she's here with us. I'm her Appi so my word is final."

"Fine. If that's what you see fit. We can stay on a while. But I don't see why you're fretting. And by the way, if we're gonna use that logic, then I'm her Jiju."

"I know. She won't be back for weeks."

"But isn't her visa about to expire?"

"God. I mean ' you'd think I'd know everything about her, down to the last detail, since I am her Appi. But nooo, you're her Jiju. You just always have to brag about how much you know her. Gosh."

"I smell smoke."

"Yeah. Take your big ego somewhere else."

"Still smelling smoke."

"Shush."

"Kay'by the way, I was thinking'"

"Again? I told you ' don't strain yourself."

"Ha. Ha. Glad to see that you're finally developing a sense of humor. I was thinking, and don't interrupt me ' it's rude - isn't it time that Zoya gets married?"

"I was thinking about that as well'but I doubt she'll listen to us when all she wants is to find out about her past."

"But you know what I'm afraid of?"

"What, my Zoya's dear Jiju?"

"That while she's out looking for her Abbu'she falls in love with a man who doesn't treat her like the diamond she is."

"I know. My Khalla once told me that the biggest coward is a man who awakens a women's love with no intention of loving her."

"Ya Allah, I hope no such thing happens to our Zoya

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Back in Bhopal:

Zoya had slowly started packing her things. It was all a bit overwhelming. Not the packing itself, but the memories and the disappointments. But slowly and surely, she packed away.

Before she knew it, it was time for dinner and she had to tell everyone that she was leaving. She knew Najma and Phoopi would get disappointed. That was the last thing she wanted. And well, Mr. Khan would finally be ecstatic. She would leave and take all her chaos with her.

Little did she know, there was a storm brewing between a son and a mother just outside.

"What kind of a son doesn't tell his mother about how tortured his father is while in jail?"

"What father? I don't have a father!"

"Asad!"

"It's true. What kind of a man leaves his family for money? I shall neither forgive nor forget a man like that."

"He is your father, whether you like it or not! And I understand how hurt you must be'but put yourself in his shoes, maybe then you'll sympathize with him."

" I shall never sympathize with him."

Dilshad could not bear such harsh words but she knew how stubborn her son was. She softly muttered, "No Asad, you haven't understood your father because you've never been in love. You've never understood why he had to take such drastic measures."

" And you understand him, Ammi? You understand his every decision?"

" No beta, I don't understand. But I do trust him. And before you ask why? It's because I love him."

"Love has nothing to do with it. He's just your habit. Love is just another name for a god forsaken habit."

"Just because you don't understand love doesn't mean you get to belittle it. Because, I guarantee that one day you will fall in love. One day, a girl is going to come into your life and turn in upside down. One day, your heart will stop beating if anything harmful happens to her. And one day, you will realize how much she means to you and you will trust her blindly. One day, you will change completely for her. One day, my dear Asad."

"I'm not going to let any such girl enter into my life Ammi."

Dilshad walked away from a son who was stubborn enough to think he could change the world, but she knew that one day her son would change. She just didn't know when.

Meanwhile, Asad couldn't stop thinking about what his Ammi said to him. But that wasn't his problem. Not the words. But the images in his head. Those were a problem. Because every time he thought of his Ammi's words, he thought of Zoya. He thought of her little quirks. He thought of her laughter. Her tears. Her blind trust. Her caring attitude. And then, as if he could shake his head and displace the image of Zoya, he walked away shaking his head.

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"Najma."

"Ji Ammi."

"Can you please go call Zoya for dinner? She must be starving. Poor girl. She never left her room today. She didn't even have lunch. She must be exhausted."

" Ji Ammi. I'll go call her right now. I wonder why she didn't eat."

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Zoya didn't want anyone to see her packed suitcases'at least not until she had told them that she was ready to leave. She didn't want to leave Phoopi while the court case was going on but moreover she didn't want to cause her anymore discomfort. Her Phoopi needed to take care of herself and her family. Not a guest. And plus, it was time she left...right?

As she was closing her bedroom door, Zoya's phone rang. She shook her head, hoping that all the worrisome thoughts would leave.

"Hello?"

"Is this Zoya Farooqi?"

"Yes. May I know who is calling please?"

"Ms. Farooqi, my name is Sahil Naib."

"Alright. And why are you calling me Mr. Sahil Naib? Who gave you my number?"

"A gentleman named Ayaan Ahmed Khan gave me your number. And I'm calling to give you some information about a building you were searching for."

"Oh. Right." Could it be that house from the photo? Is that what he's talking about? I can't believe it'am I finally getting closer to the truth of why Abu left me alone? "Yes Mr. Naib ' please continue. I'm listening."

"Yes, good. Well Ms. Farooqi, I'm the assigned real estate agent for that property. It has been recently put up on the market. Though no real offers ever come because of it's condition'"

"Sorry, Mr. Naib ' can you please hold on?"

"Yes."

"Thank you."

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Yes Najma?"

"Dinner is ready Zoya, please come."

"I'll be right there."

"Why are standing outside your room?"

"Oh, I was just heading over to the dining table'then a really important call came and interrupted me. So. Yeah."

"Oh okay. Is everything alright?"

"Yup."

"Alright, so please come soon. Ammi is waiting."

"Okay Najma."

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"Yes, Mr. Naib? Hello? Are you there?"

"Yes. Ms. Farooqi. Shall I continue?"

"Yes please, you were saying that you were the real estate agent. But I still don't know how you know Ayaan."

"Oh, I'm sorry. The caretaker, that you met that day, told me a man had come asking around. And then a girl and another man came to the property. But the first man that left a number with the caretaker."

"Oh. Right. Yes, please continue'" Raabert is smarter than I thought.

" So as you know, that place isn't much of a seller. But I was told by the caretaker that you were asking for any information about the property. I thought you'd like to know who is selling the place."

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Next part: Page 13

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So? Was it long enough? Did you like it?

Are you gonna comment? Huh? Huh? Huh?

Okay. Sorry. I had like four cups of coffee. I'm a little hyper.

But puh-leassse comment!

And again - forgive any mistakes. :) <3

Please add me if you want PM's. :)

Oh also I want to say thank you to asyaforlife (Diya) for the beautiful quote : "the biggest coward is a man who awakens a women's love with no intention of loving her."

Edited by e_enigma - 12 years ago
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LOVED it, dear!!!! continue soon!!!!! and do pm me!!!!! read both the parts together and they were really awesome!!!


I tried PMing you. But it said you've exceeded your limit! So I'm sorry but I tried.
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Good to see that you've included the track of Zoya's search for her Abu also. Wonder who that house belongs to.

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