SS/FF: Engraved; #3 - Page 5, #4 - Pg 6

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"Hahaha! My li'l bro's off to school for his Senior Year!," exclaimed a very much jovial Razin, slapping the back of his younger sibling.

Asad let out a heavy breath, rolling his eyes at his Oh-so-Cool brother, mocking his dilemma. Note the sarcasm people.

"I am gonna miss you, baby bro!," Razin said, as he leaned forward a bit and peered into Asad's eyes with teasing.

Asad grimaced and made a face at his ass of an older brother, before shrugging off his annoying arm and shutting the laptop he was currently working on.

Razin tried to fight back a grin, as he saw Asad make his way to his bed, before falling down on it with a thud.

"Ass!"

"Just shut the hell up and get outta my room, Raisin!!," Asad groaned into his pillow, as he balled up a bit of his sheets lightly in his fist, snuggling deeper into the comfort of his bedsheet's fabric.

Suddenly he felt a hard hit on his butt, making him fall off his bed.

"Rais!," Asad yelled, as he gathered himself up and glared hard at Razin. "What on Earth are you--"

"That is no way to talk to your elder brother okay? And Not when he is--"

"Oh," Asad cut in with his arms folding across his chest, "And you're telling this to me now?" raising an eyebrow.

"Hey! Don't I have a right to get a good look at my baby bro, before he's sent off to 'school'?," Razin pretended to be hurt with his arms spread out wide in exasperation.

"Yeah right!," Asad scoffed at him, before heading to his bed shaking his head in disbelief. "It's a day-boarding, you knucklehead!"

"Asad!"

Asad instantly sensed his brother's anger flaring, and turned swiftly to him, with his eyebrows furrowed. He noticed how angry Razin's eyes were. He was about to apologise, when suddenly he saw Razin's eyes waver. And before he could say a thing, Razin burst out laughing.

"Dude! You should've seen your face!!," Razin laughed loudly, clutching onto his stomach and sitting on the edge of the bed. "You were looking... scared."

Asad's eyes flashed and he instantly glared at his brother, as softly as he could to not lose control. "You know that I know that you know me. And you know that I don't get scared.. Ever," he said calmly, smiling at his brother, who was calmer than before.

Razin blinked and nodded firmly, before getting up and slapping Asad's shoulder in brotherly affection. "I know."

Offering a lop-sided smile, he proceeded to switch off the lamp, when, "Hey, Ass? Do you think the girls will like you?"

"What?"

"I mean yeah, 'cause you are going back to school after like... 2 years?," Razin furrowed his eyebrows a bit.

"What do you mean?"

"I mean.. that you know... you haven't kept much in contact with females, let alone female friends... So I was worried if you could ever.. get.. laid!"

And Razin shot out of the door into the hallway, and into his room, at the far end of the mansion, laughing hard, before his baby brother came to kill him.

Asad stared in disbelief as he stood at his room's door, staring at the empty hallway, ticking his jaw every few seconds, wondering how in Hell did they end up together as brothers?

Rolling his eyes, he shut the door and fell face front on his bed, sniffing in the comforting washing powder's scent and drifting into a sleep, that he knew wouldn't be deep enough for him. Ever.
- - - - -

Banging the door of the stall shut, she sat herself on the closed pot and fished out the small stainless steel out of her bag.

She hissed and shut her eyes tightly, as the blade pierced her cream skin and left it as soon as it had come.

A warm liquid oozed out of the cut, relieving her of the pain she was feeling.. on the inside.

The physical pain made every other thought fly out the window.

She sighed as she saw the crimson hue travel down her palm, to her fingertips. One by one dropping to the floor, forming a small pool by her feet.
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So all kinds of feedback is welcome.😳

Felt like writing something new.
I will only continue if I get some feedback!

Annie😃

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#2 - Pg 3
#3 - Pg 5
#4 - Pg 6
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-RohitMaxwell- thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Annie another awesome begining. lovely work.

continue soon
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continue continue continue...ur work is awesome
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Sweetoo!!!😲




OH MY GOD!!!! This was brilliant sista👏 Loved it!!😳 BEAUTIFUL, like always

But have li'l bit of confusion.😕 No not li'l it's more than that...

Why would Asad go to school? Is he a teenager?? I doubt😕 Why was his bro teasing him? Did that girl try to commit suicide?😲 Who was that girl? Was it Zoya, maybe.

I know it's too early for me to ask such questions coz you just started with the story and everything can't be revealed at once. But you know 'Curiosity kills the cat'😳 *chuckles*

Anyways I think I'm sounding too desparate but can't help. Your story always increase my adrenaline😳 and I end up doing silly things😆

Challo CONTINUE SOOONNN!!!!!!!!!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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BEAUTIFUL
I loved the start
Continue(x's infinity)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Yaariyan-

Annie another awesome begining. lovely work.

continue soon


Thanks. Will continue soon.😃
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Originally posted by: shanakyasharan

continue continue continue...ur work is awesome


Thanks! I will!😃
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Originally posted by: asyaforlife

Sweetoo!!!😲

Itna bada comment-wa sirf tune hi diya, meri Sweetum Sweetu! 🤗 😆

OH MY GOD!!!! This was brilliant sista👏 Loved it!!😳 BEAUTIFUL, like always

Thanks, girl!😳

But have li'l bit of confusion.😕 No not li'l it's more than that...

I know that!😆 That was the intention. 😛

Why would Asad go to school? Is he a teenager?? I doubt😕 Why was his bro teasing him? Did that girl try to commit suicide?😲 Who was that girl? Was it Zoya, maybe.

'Cause he is a teen..😆 His bro was teasing him, 'cause he's off to school... Again!😉

Hmm... the rest of the questions will be answered later in the coming chappies. Zoya or no Zoya... you'll get to know.

I know it's too early for me to ask such questions coz you just started with the story and everything can't be revealed at once. But you know 'Curiosity kills the cat'😳 *chuckles*

Hahahaha...😆 You know it! I like that quote, and am curious myself. Sometimes it's too much to wait for the chapters to be updated and it feels like it's gonna eat you up if you don't get answers!😆

Anyways I think I'm sounding too desparate but can't help. Your story always increase my adrenaline😳 and I end up doing silly things😆

Desperate? Nah! You're being curious, Diya, that's all! Hahahaha... Nysh to know yaar! Adrenaline, eh? Wowie!👍🏼 😎

Challo CONTINUE SOOONNN!!!!!!!!!

🤗

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Originally posted by: risingsea101

BEAUTIFUL

I loved the start
Continue(x's infinity)


Hey risingsea!
Thanks! Will do soon!😃

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