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Posted: 12 years ago
#11
really nice plzz do continue!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it's really amazing! please please please please continue soon!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: PhoenixRadar


Itna bada comment-wa sirf tune hi diya, meri Sweetum Sweetu! 🤗 😆 writers like you force readers like us to leave long comments😳😃


Thanks, girl!😳 Your welcome sissy😉


I know that!😆 That was the intention. 😛 I know you are very good with cliff hangers😆


'Cause he is a teen..😆 His bro was teasing him, 'cause he's off to school... Again!😉 Yaa Allah!!!😲 Mera shak sahi tha😲

Hmm... the rest of the questions will be answered later in the coming chappies. Zoya or no Zoya... you'll get to know. For that you need to update soon🤔


Hahahaha...😆 You know it! I like that quote, and am curious myself. Sometimes it's too much to wait for the chapters to be updated and it feels like it's gonna eat you up if you don't get answers!😆 Too much?😲 Too too too much. I'll soon go insane if I don't get my answers😆 First time question poocha hai toh answer toh milna hi chahina *puppy face*


Desperate? Nah! You're being curious, Diya, that's all! Hahahaha... Nysh to know yaar! Adrenaline, eh? Wowie!👍🏼...Hehehe... I'm buttering you to update soon😎


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Ohh Goshh !!
i likes the new concept and beginning.
Do continue .

p.s- curious why was Asad out of school for two years??😳
and i loved that this Asad has an elder sibling 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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its so different! u write so beautifully..👏
would love to read more..😳
plz continue😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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#2

"Remind me why you are driving me, an already licensed driver, to my own school?," Asad groaned lightly, as he sat grumpily in the passenger seat of his beloved Mustang.

Razin looked over and back at the road, with a chuckle rumbling from his chest. A smug look crossed his features, and he said, "'Cause I need to get back home, baby bro!"

"Just stop calling me that, Rais! Or you'll know what'll happen next!," Asad rolled his eyes, while closing his eyes in exasperation. "And do come up with a better explanation than that! I know that you don't "need" it!," doing air quotes with his fingers.

"Why, of course, I need it, Ass!," Razin exclaimed loudly, glancing at Asad with wide eyes and then back.

"Really?," he chided, turning to face Razin, with an interested expression. "And who might that be?"

"W-What?," Razin glanced at Asad, in confusion. "What do you mean 'who'?"

"Oh cut that crap, Rais!," Asad nodded smugly, with narrowed eyes. "Who is it for?"

Razin hit the brakes harder than usual, making Asad hit the dashboard and bounce back to his seat.

"Dude! What the hell!!," Asad exclaimed horrified at his baby being damaged. "That's my baby that you're driving, you Ass!"

"Correction! I'm Rais. You're Ass!," Razin chuckled. "School's here, bro!"

"Just shut up, Raisin! If anything happened to my baby, you're so not going to be alive to even look at her the next time!," Asad shot out of his seat and stopped himself from shutting the door of his own Mustang with bang. Closing his eyes, he exhaled deeply, while feeling and even hearing a smirk on Razin's face.

Razin could see Asad all riled up and it was so much fun to see his brother all fuming with steam practically coming out of his ears. Chuckling at his thoughts, he turned to Asad still holding the door open, waiting for him to finish his thought process.

"Done are you?," Asad said, as he shifted his weight from one leg to the other. "You know that I can hear it all!" he continued smugly.

Razin masked his slow panic to a smirk, "Yeah so? I would rather be honest with you through it than go around speaking shit!," shrugging his shoulders.

"Well, look who's taking about honesty!," Asad raised his eyebrows in amusement. "Then why aren't you being honest when am asking you for whom are you borrowing my baby for?"

Huffing at his genius brother, Razin grabbed the steering wheel tighter, before loosening his hold over it, and mumbled, "Laura."

Asad raised an eyebrow, as the name got registered in his mind. He chuckled at his brother's futile attempt of mumbling. He saw Razin turn to face him with suspicion. Understanding why he was looking at him, he raised his hands up in surrender, taking a step back.

"You do know that mumbling won't reduce what we have!," Asad nodded with a grin, as he reached for his bag, and swung it over his shoulder.
While Razin just spared a glance at him.

"And you're seriously dating that.. that Laura chick?," he asked amused.

Razin looked quite offended. "Why? Why shouldn't I? I mean she's hot and damn she's good in--"

Asad twitched his lips and rolled his eyes, to make his brother stop himself from spilling the unnecessary private details.

Razin raised his hands in surrender and instantly stopped talking, a grin spreading on his face. "Sorry! You know what, baby bro? Only because you don't listen to these things, they won't disappear or wipe out the fact that women are sexy and the bombs!," he said winking at his brother's bored expression.

"Yes and I am the unhappiest man who doesn't think so!," said Asad before turning on his heels towards to the school building.

"See? You admit it and I am happy, because acceptance is the key!," Razin said loudly, while coming out the car and following Asad.

"Acceptance is what?," shouted Asad, bewildered a bit at the sudden inclusion of such a statement. A few giggles, made him realise that he was loud enough. Way too loud, I guess. Clearing his throat, he willed Razin, who was busy winking at the girls of the school, to face him.

"Look Rais, if you get even a scratch on my baby," Asad glared long and hard at Razin, and continued, "I'll kill you with my own bare hands!"

Razin looked at his baby brother with a hurt expression, "Sweet Lord! How can you even think of killing your own brother for a piece of metal? This metal?"

"That piece of metal as you quote is my--"

Razin cut in, "Is your baby, I know, Ass! And do have some faith on your big bro... At least for once, dude!"

"Yeah, like that's gonna happen!," Asad shook his head with a deep chuckle and started for the building.

"Really? Then why haven't you still fought for the keys that are still in my unfaithful hands, eh?," Razin chuckled, his eyes holding a mischievous gint.

"That's because I trust you enough, for being my brother, Raisin! And I don't want another lecture from Mom about sharing and shit! And just leave before I tackle you to the ground, eh!"

Razin chuckled as he made way to the car and slid into the seat. He was just about to start the car, when he heard Asad.

"Hey Rais?"

Razin looked up to see Asad with his hands in his pockets.

"Yup?"

Sighing, Asad said, " Just don't do it in the car okay? I don't want my baby smelling from the awful shit you guys do in it!"

Chuckling, Razin proceeded to rev up the engine. "You got it, Ass!"

"And yeah... Be careful, Rais!"

Razin looked back at Asad, only to find him swing the door out and step into the building. He was surprised to hear his baby bro say such a thing. If anything, it was rare of him to show such emotions to anyone. Leaving out their mother.

But then again, he wondered if he meant about being careful about his car?
Exhaling heavily, he pulled the car out, shaking his head at the thoughts, before allowing his mind to be clouded with Laura's thoughts.
Edited by PhoenixRadar - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#17
res
Yippiee first one to comment
Ab thodi der rook
Unres
Before I even come to talking about the update. I sincerely apologize for not unreserving my comments on time.
I never intended to ignore any of your works. I just don't know how it happened.
I'm so very sorry😭😭 If you feel I'm worth being forgiven then please try and forgive me for this
Sweetoo humme maaf kardo. Hum tahe dil se aapse maafi mangte hai

Now to your update.
I love this brotherly bonding between Razin and Asad.
Enjoyed reading their sweet nok-jhoks and poking each other
Asad really loves his baby A scratch on it and he's ready to choke his bro's neck POSSESSIVE😆

Superb update
Enjoyed reading every bit of it

see you with the next one.

Yours,
Silly stupid sister
Edited by asyaforlife - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: asyaforlife

eres

Yippiee first one to comment
Ab thodi der rook



Bahut der ruk liya!! Kahaan hain tu? 😲
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Posted: 12 years ago
#19
Its OMG for me, bechare Asad ka name Ass kar dia yaaarrr 😆😆
this Asad is like an american version of high school guy..did i miss where this story is set???
n it was a small update, i really want a bigger one next time.

P.s- i want to know why this Ass was out of school and where is zoya, his nightmare for life😳
is someone going to save her or not.????😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: blueflames

Its OMG for me, bechare Asad ka name Ass kar dia yaaarrr 😆😆

this Asad is like an american version of high school guy..did i miss where this story is set???
n it was a small update, i really want a bigger one next time.

P.s- i want to know why this Ass was out of school and where is zoya, his nightmare for life😳
is someone going to save her or not.????😉


Hahahahaha... 😆 I just felt like it and gave a funnier nickname! 😉

You think so? I am trying to make an Asad like a High school boy, but not necessarily American! 😛 Umm... It is set nowhere, but in my Imagination, girl! So you are currently journeying in the paths of my Mind, that is weaving the story! 😎
Hahaha... I'll try, girl! :D

You'll get to know soon about it too! You seriously want a Zoya out here? 😲 As in in the story?? eh? 😳

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