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Annie

@_Annie_

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#21

That was Awesome dear! :) Thanks 4 the pm :)

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Rachel

@Rach.

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#22

Waaaw ! Truly brilliant man. I loved the last part when they had a heart to heart conversation. So simple, yet so beautiful :)

And the part when Asad says Dhyan se, behosh mat ho jaana, hahaha :D

Please write moooreee ? :D You're BRILLLIIAAANT :D

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sneaky-aj

@sneaky-aj

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#23

have to say this...
have read too many works by too many ppl ...but this is the first story on this forum that really touched me and brought a smile to my face :)

Edited by sneaky-aj - 12 years ago

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Avantika

@AeDilHaiMushkil

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#24

Oh my!! That was brilliant stuff, my dear.. 👏

Thi kahan yaar ab tak? I request.. Uh huh! Demand that you write more.. 😳😉
This was soo beautiful.. So very subtle and poignant!

Ayaan-Asad, I absolutely love their bonding.. Never on TV, have we witnessed something remotely similar.. 😊
And AsYa, Allah Miya! I'd never thought I could fall for any other couple after IPK.. But AsYa are slowly redefining magic on screen..
I wish we do get similar scenes on the show, in the future now that the ice between the duo is broken..
P.S.: that bit where she falls unconscious was hilarious! 🤣😉

And majaal kisiki toh tumse kahe, ki yeh phir aa gayi!! If you keep writing stuff like this, I'm sure tumhara peecha koi nahi chodega.. 👍🏼

P.P.S.: I've been struggling to hold myself back from writing on these two.. Already have too much on my platter.. But now you've provided fodder to my intentions.. 😛😉

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KoolKatz

@KoolKatz

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#25

Wow man it was superb...
Aur END to aur bhi khas tha...

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niyoti

@niyoti

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#26

Hello there!😃

I am truly amazed at your writing skills in Hindi. I cannot quote the parts i absolutely loved, but after the dialogues in the last bit i simply had to tell you how much i adored this little fic.

"Kabhi Kabhi sapno se ya apno se bhi takra deta hai" Is my favourite line ( Among others) ❤️😊

Ending it on a humorous note was absolutely brilliant!

Keep writing! And i totally understand how us writers need a little nudge to our egos once in a while😆

Cheers!

Niti

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Fari

@SmileyStar

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#27

This was like the most awesome OS everrr!! The ending had me grinning like an idiot 😆 It was the sweetest thing everrr when Asad told her k behosh mat ho jana 😃

Loved how you reflected Asad's state at being asked to stay away from his brother. I felt sooo sorry for him! Poor baby! 😔

But the thing that blew me away were the dialogues! How can you write such deep and meaning dialogues?? You should be writing scripts for movies! Seriously! You're God gifted Masha'Allah 😳

Keep writing more!! 🤗 🤗

*runs off to the next OS* 😉