WelCoMe to ABHIYA OS Celebration Updated-Page-150 JULY 30th

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Indu

@Paint.It.BlacK.

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#801

res!
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what on earth made you think that this one was hurried..??😲 😳 mansa this story got its perfect ending!!! 👏The fight,emotional tumult..the tension..everything was so well defined!!!👏
things fell into their respective places wth a free flow...that there was no place for taking things by force! (in ur words'hurry')
and u have to trust me on dis as u know i say exactly what i feel!
The pia sid portion was a well penned n catchy start! Then mercus abhay convo again too real n thrilling!! Believe me while reading that part i was feeling the tension inside me! ⭐️
the part where u mention marcus was excellent!!! I know maybe little more space n scope..lyk u said , would have done proper utilisatn of hs charcter portrayal bt then for me whatever little space he got, he stole the show wth his presence!! Dosnt matter whether its hate, fury or disgust ...whatever bt marcus left a strong mark in our minds i believe wth his magnetic brilliant presence! ⭐️ i mean u cn hate hm bt u cnt ignore hm!
Though me..i hardly felt any disgust, hate or fury towards him..as i was completely in awe of his marvellously strong persona!!😳 👏 u myt probably becum shockd 😆 n laugh at me for this bt really his presence was too strong to ignore!😛
So for me marcus in hs devil mode rocks !!😉👍🏼

and nw augustus! -well u knw frm the beginning i kinda knew ths man is genuine..and i simply loved him! A very amiable character! If abhay wud nt have been abhay { if u knw wat i mean😉 } then augustus would have undoubtedly been number 1 for me!! and at the end i am glad that he servived and possibly a fairytale is awaitng hm..i cn already see that n am very happy for hm!😃
throughout this story i loved pia n his bond!!😳
now abhay- i really felt bad when abhay lied to them abt marcus. Yes i was very dissapointd wth him,i didnt expect a brave slayer lyk abhay would do somethng like that! Bt ya ofcourse theres the saying that 'everythng is fair in love and war' and if we take into regard where abhay stands n what pia is to hm then keeping in mind hs love, what he did was natural! Bt otherwise endangering so many lives for ur lovd one is really hard to approve!
And nw the part where u show us the mental conflicts n thots of augustus is simply awesumm!! The way we get to feel his pain,emotions,urge,courage and desparate attempt to stop the monster named marcus, was fantastically explained!!!👏⭐️
and nt to forget the fight scene where u always superceed!!⭐️ they were of high quality n if it wasnt for the loss of all those slayers,it would have been a sure delight to read them!!!
and lastly thanks a ton for this wonderfully wonderful and amazing fairytale!!🤗
p.s. And u knw wat? The part where abhay talks to pia abt that fairytale thing..it made it even more perfctly perfct and beautiful!!⭐️ I loved it.❤️
all i want to say is you are a brilliant writer and a wonderful person!😊 Thank you so so very much for writing this dear!!🤗 You rock* ⭐️keep writing more..more n more...😳

P.p.s. And i am immencely sorry for keeping u waiting for so long. I know..i always keep u waiting..and am really sorry for that. I appologise..!

And ya i have few questns to ask from dis update.so if u permit only then i shall place them!😊

Edited by Bleak_House - 12 years ago

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bookworm-ALS--

@bookworm-ALS--

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#802

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*runs after mandy with all the weapons she has and bangs her repeatedly on the head*
ARE YOU MAD?
(Yes, I'm screaming.)
you were cribbing about this? Urgh Mandy...urgh... Youuu!!!

The update -

Kept me glued to it. I was downright terrified Abhay or Pia would die till the end and as usual you are a pro at writing fights...too god.
The last confrontation...this time, I didn't feel bad for Sid either...like Abhay said..he can go to hell and plan there. Ha!

And OMG what the! I honestly thought he was dead. I mean, seriously though, what a turnaround! Even the way Pia thought seemed to point at his death but 🤗 seriously I love you for not killing him off.

The OS was too good Mandy... You better have the Covenant update reallly sooon.
PS. Awesome banner!

Edited by bookworm-ALS-- - 12 years ago

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.SmokeySilence.

@.SmokeySilence.

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#803

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you said it's bad, terrible and all the unnecessary words 😳 its excellent 👏 it was very long though so for commenting i had to read twice again 😆 as i always say your supernatural stuff and action sequences are the best I have read on IF. nobody can write such intense action sequences like you do n yours one was full of that. I felt bad actually because Sid died. i donno why but i did. Abhay calling the other slayers were selfish true and for that many died but glad atleast marcus died and their scarifies didnt go in vein. I was sure Abhay will fight till anything to save Pia and he did the same way. oor him and sid.. i felt bad. Pia was kickass and i loved it how she fought. I thought Augustus will die with Marcus like harry and voldemort type stuff 😆 glad he didnt 😃 I love Marcus's dialogues how you wrote them. it stands out - the power, authority n arrogance jus smells from his character it seems. all credit goes to your writing 👏

it was fab and actually it deserves to be a SS and not just a OS. its so long and love reading it. there was no need to take so much time for this trust me. u did so well,i dont even understand why you were so confused n didnt like it. fab job.. amazing supernatural stuff n specially action sequences like i could see it 👏👏⭐️

Edited by Phoenix.Xeelan - 12 years ago

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Mandy

@BeyondHorizon

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#804

Last part of my OS updated on page 116 🤗 PMs will be sent later 😳

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megha sharma

@MS-meghasharma

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#805

simply amazing update

it was too thrilling to read.

i felt as if it's a hollywood movie running here!

sid had indeed lost everything...how can he think of hurting his brother that way...glad abhay killed him for once and for all!!!

i really thought augustus has died but m happy he was able to survive and got rid of that mark finally.

loved the relationship b/w augustus and pia...they both were indeed true friends not caring for themselves when it comes to the other one.

finally abhiya are together and w/o any worries...luvd their convo in the last part.

awsum ss!!!!

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Kakoli

@MistiAbhiya

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#806

wowww lovely end...enjoy every action like I watch that action...thank god Augutus save...& love it happy ending🤗

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..juhi..

@..juhi..

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#807

comment edited on pg 116

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didlr

@didlr

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#808

I'm sure mandy that u were not in ur sences when u wrote the starting para, stating the update was not it.

it was just amazing. The entire action sequence was very well written. I'm happy marus's dead n sid too.

so finally we have a happy ending for all:)

N abhiya tog forever n ever:)

Loved it

Thanks fr pm indu:)

Edited by didlr - 12 years ago

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arwakantawala

@arwakantawala

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#809

Loved every bit of the last part and action seems to the point when sid bite pia I think abhiya will be destroyed but you mold it so well loved your writing and please update your other SS and FF also I waiting for it also. And Thank you so much for updating