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First of all guys, I am extremely sorry for the delay and will try to update more frequently now. and I am sorry if the chapter is boring,but this was necessary for building the base of the story.

Chapter-1

And The Destruction Begins!

(written by lost_in_love aka indu)


France(Bourges): 8:49p.m.

It was a stormy night with lightning now and then. The wind howled fiercely, indicating the approaching destruction that would soon engulf everything in its viscinity,leaving nothing!

The shadow of a tall steel like figure was standing beside the big oak tree. Though the darkness veiled most of his features but as the lightning hit, his cold fearless eyes blazed,that had witnessed innumerable pain since 350yrs of his cursed existence,which seemed like an eternity. He stood there motionless,like a crafted stone,as he always did at the end of his every mission.


COTTAGE : (LOVE NEST)

9:30p.m.

Lisa was crying miserably since she had received the legal notice. She still couldn't believe,how on earth could martin,her martin do this to her?? Was she dreaming? If yes,then it's a horrible nightmare,she could ever imagine. It felt just like yesterday,that she n martin were madly and irrevocably in love with each other and there was nothing in this world that could separate them.

Martin was the only son,of his father, a rich buisness tycoon. Lisa was a waitress in a small bar come restaurant. Though extremly beautiful,she belonged to a poor family with none to call her own, until he came,her martin,with his exceeding charm n unbounding love.

And it was true! Martin loved her more than his life. But when martin proposed her,lisa had denied,she tried to reason with him, as she knew his whole family was against this marriage,which was logical too! But martin didn't listen,he was adamant on marrying her and said,he can't ever imagine living without her. And after facing much obstacles they married and managed to have a happy life. Yes,there was alaways the money issue but with their unbounding love,they endured every difficulty with ease.

Lisa looked at her 10yrs old son,who was lying on the bed, in an emaciated condition,and looking at his pale face,tears rolled down her rosy cheeks,thinking how could he do this to her,to his'their only son? And that too when he was fighting for his life??!! His son who was more than anything else to him in this world!! Why?? Yes,she was at fault but then the circumstances were so..first his son's illness and then martin keeping secrets, all this left her mentally weak n emotionally tormented. The day she put a question on martin's love,she knew she did wrong..she never wanted to'it wasn't that she didn't trust him, but the anger, pain inside made her blind and she could no more hold it back. That day martin did not utter a single word and lisa could see his eyes losing color,reflecting pain on being doubting in his love. Lisa too felt guilty n tried to bring things back to normal. But still things weren't so bad,until that..that.. thunderstorm that hit two days back! Yes,she remembers it very well!! No.. the thunder had nothing to do with all of this but it marked the day when her world crushed down to pieces!!

and who doesn't? Every married couple do fight at some point or the other, but does that mean this? This divorce papers?? What will n what should she do now? should she try to save her marriage or her son, who was lying on his death bed?? What would she do now?? Where would she go? N to whom? She had none n yet she needs money..yes..a lot of money to save her son! She still couldn't figure out what went wrong?how on earth could martin abandon his son,specially at this time when he needed his dad most??!!

Lisa silently cried in apprehension for the dreadful future that lay ahead of her'!!


The wind blew violently but the figure stood still,unperturbed,the way in which it was a few moments before,waiting for the result!


Atlast, the moment he had been waiting for had arrived. And the figure muttered in his steel voice- 'Mission Accomplished!'.. 'Time to leave!'

Just then it started'started inside his head,making his very existence a biggest curse that one could ever imagine,as if thousands of explosives were about to explode!! No..he couldn't feel! Neither he was allowed,nor he was expected to! But'but this same Unbearable'feeling of'of'what?? Pleasure??!! Was it Pleasure?? Yes! That's what they call it! And that's what he gets rewarded with, each time he succeed!! The more pain he inflicts,the double he gets rewarded with! But if it's pleasure then why..why..is it so unbearable??..so unwanted??..!!!

His features remained unchanged,his eyes beared the same coldness,only the feeling..pleasure or whatever it was,he didn't knew had reached its extremity and he knew only one thing that he had to leave!!


Paris:

Hotel de Ville-

10:39p.m.

The same tall figure that had witnessed the death of humanity n was responsible for it,now stood with his lifeless eyes fixed onto the fireplace,trying to control the inexplicable feeling..yes feeling!!..as being suffered for so long ,he no more knew what feelings were! He had long forgotten what was pain n what was pleasure! He kept looking at the fire with his steel eyes,as if the fire would somehow prevent the destruction that was going inside him!


Just then a fairly handsome boy with blonde hair appered at the door. His green eyes found the figure standing at far end of the dimly lit room,infront of the fireplace. Although the figure didn't show any movement and stood still. He observed his new master with his intelligent but inexperienced eyes and the same thoughts came into his mind those were bothering him,since he had joined this new job. He paused and his mind wondered with the same questions' "why is he so mysterious??!! And why is he like this? He is a complete puzzle! This man,standing infront that fireplace was his master and his saviour,both! Yes,it's only because of him,that Rick was still breathing. But who would say that he was the same man?? Nobody who had seen him would believe!! This man confuses him everytime!", Thought Rick. "It seems as if nothing mattered to him! The surroundings, people, smile, hope, happiness,day,night,Love..No..Nothing!!! Pain? No!! not even pain! He havn't witnessed any of these emotions on his perfect features! Never!! How Strange!!". The more he thought,the more he felt disturbed. Unable to think more,finally he prepared to speak,knowing well that it was nt a good time to bother him,but that's what he was appointed for,so he has to! So Without thinking further,he parted his lips and called,Sir!...but there was no reply,so he called again,a bit louder this time..Sir!! this time the figure stirred a little and Rick knew it was the permission! So he continued' "Everything has been arranged sir! I have booked the flight tickets for America, and we have to check out within one and a half hour'so.."but before he could say more,the figure moved,Rick took the hint and coming straight to the point hurriedly spoke' "Um..ya..the car will arrive by half an hour sir!so.." he stopped,as his master raised his hand slightly,that means "ENOUGH!!!' his master never spoke much,atleast he havn't seen and in this few days,residing with him,rick knew and could well understand his gestures ,where to stop n where to speak. Rick was about to leave but stopped again and looked back at his master. He knew he should leave now but..due to some unknown reason he felt pity for this Man! He felt sir was nt well,there was something wrong! So he gathered his courage and said in a low voice.. "Sir..you dnt look well,so is there something that I can do?i can call a doctor if you'",but he didn't dare to speak further as the figure moved his face to the right slightly, and rick nodded.. 'sorry sir..i wnt disturb..i'm leaving'..

As Rick went away the figure moved towards the window and looked over at the night city..the city of love,..and whispered in a deep steel voice,only two words.. 'Target America!!'.., and amidst the dark,his eyes,as cold as death, blazed!!...ready for his next mission!!!...


Guys here I end this chapter. Abhay's character will unfold with each update,so plz just b patient.😊

plzz hit the like button if you like and plz give your precious comments,as your comments mean a lot to us..😳

thank you.😊

Edited by lost_in_love - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
great start indu!!!👏
the way u described abhay was just fantastic...the power,the intimidating feeling,the fact that he does not feel at all was very well conveyed..hats off..👏
hmmm..i wonder whether risa and martin,specially has any connection to abhay...risa has to choose to save either her son or her marriage??what can have happened between her and ,martin?😕
so abhay's next 'target' is in america...but he is cold and unattached about it...
the start sure was interesting..great job once more⭐️
Edited by ..tora.tangled. - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Superb beginning Indu..👏

it was not boring at all..
I feel bad for Liza...I agree she shouldn't have lost her temper and doubted Martin's love..but how can someone leave his family when he is needed the most...
Abhay's part was brilliantly described..😳
waiting 2 see what America has in store for Abhay and Rick..
Edited by _Sonu_ - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
N u say this is not nice 😡
This is for u
I totally loved it Indu
It was brilliantly written Abhay surely is a mystery here 😕 Very intriguing n this is the reason I completely loved it. The scene with Rick in particular was brilliantly written. The way u described his state of mind was outstanding 👏⭐️
I feel so sorry for Lisa 😭 How could Martin do this to her? Agreed he felt hurt when Lisa doubted his love for her but thats no reason for him to turn his back on his dying son 😡
Now u surely have entrusted me with a bigger task . I wonder how I'll be able to match with your writing skills in our joint FF.
Again superbly written n as for criticism I can only ever think of a very minute detail that can very well be ignored even. A couple of extremely minor grammatical mistakes(mind u minor ones). Other than that it was perfect 👍🏼
There I have been honest as well 😃
Edited by mandy1024 - 13 years ago
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waiting 4 it yar
update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: lost_in_love

thanks mansa! 😊
yes,abhay is human bt he is 25yrs old! Since 350yrs he is leading a cursed existence by taking birth again n again! Bt yes u'r ryt evn 350yrs ago he ws also a human! u see its lyk he taks birth nd thn being a human dies nly to tak birth again! Dis whole thng goes on in a cycle lyk nevr endng! And wat maks it evn mre worse is his memory ,whch is intact lettng him nevr forget hs past lyf nd the curse he was bearing n hs bck!!
I hope m able to mak u undrstnd! Actualy d whole thng is kinda complicatd! So if u hav any mre quieries or doubts plz ask me! K?
And thanks again! 😳

Oh ok, so it has more to do with reincarnations? And are Abhiya bonded by some kinda karma that will entwine their fates? Its bcoz of a curse he is taking birth again n again? 😭
WOW am already excited 😃 Indu plz yaar get started on this when ur exams end please Embarrassed This is a never before seen concept n am sure u will rock 👍🏼
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Originally posted by: mandy1024


Oh ok, so it has more to do with reincarnations? And are Abhiya bonded by some kinda karma that will entwine their fates? Its bcoz of a curse he is taking birth again n again? 😭
WOW am already excited 😃 Indu plz yaar get started on this when ur exams end please 😳 This is a never before seen concept n am sure u will rock 👍🏼

umm..u can call it reincarnation but its nt exactly so! Its sumthng strange!! No they are nt bonded by karma. But its a war of good and evil na ,so they had to meet! it had to happn! 😊
abt curse..you see wen a persn does wrng he or she had to bear its fruit sumtym or d other..so its sum kinda same wth abhay! No mre hints..bohot bol diya!😛
thanks yaar..😳 but i wil rock or shock ye pata nahi..😆
but on serious note i will try to give the first update as soon as my xms get over.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: lost_in_love

umm..u can call it reincarnation but its nt exactly so! Its sumthng strange!! No they are nt bonded by karma. But its a war of good and evil na ,so they had to meet! it had to happn! 😊
abt curse..you see wen a persn does wrng he or she had to bear its fruit sumtym or d other..so its sum kinda same wth abhay! No mre hints..bohot bol diya!😛
thanks yaar..😳 but i wil rock or shock ye pata nahi..😆
but on serious note i will try to give the first update as soon as my xms get over.😊

Hmm seems intriguing for sure Embarrassed Now I am even more enthusiastic 😃 Will wait for the 1st chappy Embarrassed Dont worry, u'll rock 👏
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waiting yar update soon plss
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Posted: 13 years ago
Note: I am extremly sorry guys for not being able to update!! but my xms were goin on,but as its over now , so i will definately try to update within this sunday!! once again sorry everyone!

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