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Posted: 13 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: flora212

Well done, laxmi! I have went through ur all updater.it was wonderfull. Pm me next time.and is this abhiya lovestory!


thanks for liking it
, actually my name is NEHA.
ya its abhiya only

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Posted: 13 years ago
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lovely update..haha all are feeling J that misha knws abhay..waiting for abhiya nw..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow great story plz update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Amazing story. Loved ur concept. Pls continue soon and add me in ur pm list.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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HEY EVERY ONE
thanks for liking it and commenting
i hope u would this one, here it goes-

chapter 5 -

abhay-"ya,,, so as u..'
misha-"i was expecting u only when one of friend gave the desciption of new student. glad u r here... "
abhay-"thanks, by the way , nice college!!!"
misha-"thanks"
and they were smiling to each other
every one still in trauma with open mouth. To them , it seems like misha and that boy know each other very well. pia was not in her senses and was numb and could concentrate on what topic they talking, she was just staring at that boy analizing if he was actually present or like misha said she was day dreaming.
misha-"oh let me introduce to my friends.(pointing towards her gang)he is kabir...kabir singh rathore,he is shanker,he is angad, she is ruhi or u can call her tracker,as she keeps track of every guy and finally my sis cum best-friend pia... and guys he is abhay... abhay riachand. he is new in town and came yesterday only from london with his family"
every one greet him and shook hand with him. for kabir and shanker it was bit difficult but still they manage to welcome him with smile on their face.
while every one was still staring him. but when he brought his hand to shake with pia (even though he was uncomfortable but to avoid curious eyes he played it calmly), she does not respond to it ,,. which made every one stare her.
misha(clicking her fingers in front of her face)-"hey pia where lost, just shake hand, he is still waiting for ur gesture,... (to abhay) dude... i tell u my sis has became day dreamer. so don't mind"
abhay moved his hand back and smile. he thought thank god,... she did not respond.
pia(coming back to earth and glaring)-"mish, will u stop saying that other wise i will kill u right now with my bare nails...(to abhay)by the way nice too meet u abhay(smile)"
abhay(half smile)"me too"
just than sid arrive from back addressing to abhay
sid-(looking towards abhay without seeing with whom he was standing)-"so little brother, already started with out me , thats not fair"
abhay-"its nothing like that ... ok meet my new friends- misha and her gang"
sid-" ohhh she is that yum...(abhay glares) i mean airport girl, right ??"
abhay(rolling his eyes)-"yes bhai... and this is her gang- he is kabir, then shanker.angad.ruhi and that's pia ,misha's sister"
sid gasped looking at pia and it made him jump on his place and his eyes were like it would come out of his socket.
sid(abruptly)-"oh freak...how is this possible(looks towards abhay, who was calm atleast pretending to be calm and then he realizes what he has done and but still was confused with what he saw and abhay reaction,so decided
to talk about it later and began to cover up)..."
pia gasped at his comment and at the same time she was angry,furious,ready to punch him for his comment. evy one was confused.
pia(rudely)-" what u mean by that.. do i look like freak??/"(glaring sid with narrow eyes, ready to pounce)
misha-"hey dude..i know she is some time wierd but ...mind it she is my sis , no body dares to speak to her like this.get it straight in ur head"
abhay-"bhai why did u that...??/... i m sorry misha .. i m sorry pia on behalf of my brother"

sid(covering up)-"actually i mean... i never saw such a beautiful lady in my whole existence. u r very gorgeous ,i like ur...(pia glares) ur attitude...!!(sid smiles) i just got overflowed"
pia-"its ok... but next time ...mind it before u speak"
abhay-" i m sorry for that ...bhai is a bit flirt...so..."
sid(abruptly)-"hey lttle brother...that not fair...i m 100% big flirt...24/7 hrs ready to be with girls.."
abhay(rolling his eyes)_"ya ...ya . i know."
pia(to abhay)-"so u know my sis... thats great... i didn't knew my sis has secret and special friend that she didn't tell me(looking towards misha)
abhay-"its nothing to tell or hide ., we just met once that to by accident. its not much more than that. and by the way . misha is just my buddy(looks towards misha and smiles)...right misha?"
misha-"yo mann..."
pia nods her head with smile
sid-"sorry for ur coochiee coo...i mean chit-chat but we have to ...so little brother lets go!!."
abhay-"ya sure ... guys...meet u in class...bye all of u"
misha-pia-"bye"
every one stare at pia-misha.and sid-abhay left for principal office
pia-misha-"whattt???"
kabir-"nothing lets go...to class"
ruhi-"he is so hot ... his dimple... ohhh i can't breathe properly. his name...abhayyy riachand...how influential na .!!!!!!!!!!!!"
angad-"babyeee.. stop thinking about him...lets go..."
pia while moving towards class was lost in her own world visualizing abhay- his eyes, dimple,perfect face, features and repeating his name and giggling to herself
misha notices this
misha-"oh god piaaa... not u too yar...i know he is dammm... hot and handsome but u can't fall for him yarr.. i didn;t expect this from u??/"
pia(glaring her)-"why?? why not??...i mean what's the harm... do you like him??"
misha(abruptly)-"no way... don't u think so .. he is just my friend"
pia-"so why r u saying so??...he seems to be single.. and . so whats a big deal to think about him and hang out with him...even i like him very much..i hope that we would be together . we would look good together""
misha-" oh please stop day dreaming.. this is not gonna happen ...can't u see he is avoiding u??...and by the way till now i am sure about one thing that he is not into girls..."
pia(shocked)-"what??? what did u said ?how can u say that??... u ..u mean he is into mennn..."
misha(rolling her eyes)-'dumbo...not like that... i mean he is one with straight head but is not ready to mingle with any girl"
pia(with pride)-" i m not any girl ... i m pia...pia doberial...one an extra-ordinary piece in this whole world"
misha(nodding her head)-"yayay ...i know.."
pia-"u wanna challenge me...ok then challenge accepted , with in a month i will make him fall for me and he will accept it in front of whole college"
misha-" ok then get ready to lose... this time i will rub it on ur face and by the way no cheating, no forcing, only with his full will and consciousness and no need to tell it to any one not even abhay about bet .. its between us only...get it??"
pia-"ya ya...and we will see whose gonna loose on the same day next month"
misha-"ya ya alright.. "
shanker-"what r u waiting for ..let go now"
pia-misha-"ya sure"
and they all head towards class
and pia has already started to act on her plan-
pia(to herself)-"abhay riachand... get ready to fall for pia doberial. here i comes(smiles)"

on the other side same time .sid-abhay went to principal office and had a meeting related to abhay classes , courses, interest in extra curricular activities which took so long that abhay has missed his first lecture, though he knew every thing what gonna teacher teach in class but still for others he has to show off and needs to get notes.
after the meeting they came out in corridor while talking to each other and not seeing on their way while walking and as a result sid collided with a girl and all her papers and she herself fell on the floor losing her balance .
girl(while getting up)-"what the hell , can't u see... u blind moron "
sid(smirk)-"even i can say so..humpty-dumpty"
abhay was just an audience
girl(with anger)-"u stupid, idiot, dumbo, fool,... u don't know how to behave and talk to a girl and instead of saying sorry u r calling me humpty-dumpty... u ..."
abhay inter wining seeing situation is getting out of control
abhay-"i m really sorry... what my brother said... he is just..."
while the class was over and misha-pia were passing by and heard all the conversation
misha-"what is it with u .. and urrr brother...(to sid) he always pass sarcastic comments and u on behalf of him always say sorry... don't he has mouth to say sorry on his own "
sid-"hey its not my fault... she collided with me and what i say is always true whether u like it or not"
pia-"u just keep ur filthy mouth shut ok ... u don't know how to talk and behave with girls. "
abhay(with little bit anger towards pia)-" hey u mind too... no body dares to speak to my brother like that not even my friends or me... and...i said sorry on behalf of him so chill out ok its not that big to create such drama"
pia(to abhay)-"uuu..."
girl-"okkk okk its fine chill out every one no need fight , its not that big so pia calm down. and by the way (to sid) i don't mind what random people say"
sid(looking from top-to- bottom)-"i can see that"
abhay-"bhai .. stop it now"
sid -'okkk"(raising his hands up in air)
abhay(to girl)-" i m really sorry please don't mind it "
girl(smiles)-"its ok kkk... by the way u seems to new in this college...new student"
abhay-"ya ... (forward his hand to shake) hiii... i m abhay...abhay riachand... and he is my big brother sid...siddartha raichand.,we r sons of chand riachand"
girl-"nice to meet u abhay...i heard about u all a lot. by the way i m panchi... panchi doberial"
sid-"so u r sister of abhay's friend...aaa... haaa(recalling her name).. misha...right"
panchi-"yes right.. elder sister"
sid-"i can see that... so how many more sisters do u doberials have??"
pia was glaring at sid and was annoyed with abhay for his behavior towards her and kept on staring him which doesn't go unnoticed by everyone.
misha-"heyyy ... we are only three... and its enough.. i can't bear any more(pia and panchi hit her simultaneously)..oouhh... what ?? i said truth"
sid(laugh)-"i know what happens when we speak truth... (to misha) we r in same boat(look towards abhay)"
abhay(rolls his eyes)-"kabhi nahi sudhroge gayyy bhai..."
sid-'as u know... so lot of drama is done and is enough for today... i should go now before some one kill me.(look at pia-misha) and by the way nice to meet u all ... especially u humpty... i mean panchi(laugh)"
panchi-"whatever"
abhay-"okkk ... u should leave now ... let me leave u till gate... bye guys and bye panchi.. it was nice to meet u"
panchi-"same here...hope we meet soon"
sid-"ya sure...what about coffee??"
panchi-"no thanks"
misha(to sid)-"u were right ... u r Casanova"
sid-"thanks for complement. bye ..."
abhay-"bhai ..lets go "
abhay give a quick glance to pia and leave with sid
pia sees this and small smile came on her face but could not understand what his eyes or face expression says to her. she was really very confused but thought to let it be . what she has to do with it??. she has her own plan set to act upon it and the she smiles mischievously.
after that every one leaves for next class and as panchi because she has to collect her document from pricipal's office so that she can apply for her job.its not that doberials r poor or some thing like that but panchi wants to be an independent women , stands on her own feet in this men-powering world.


mean while in the parking lot.
sid-"i can't believe on my eyes ...i m too shocked.. is that possible??"
abhay(calmly)-"i know...but u didn't need too react like that"
sid(suspicious eyes)-"u ... u already knew that ... why?? why u didn't tell us not even me????""
abahy-"bhai, relax.. its nothing like important so i thought ...'
sid-"oh hhh... u thought why to tell sid ... he is nobody... "
abhay-"bhai, its not like that, u know it very well.. i have only u to whom i can share any thing so stop this melodrama .. u r behaving like humans. its not a big deal.. okkk... i m fine and no need to worry about me... she is not her...okkk so just relax "
sid(with disbelief)-"u already knew her... u knew that she is here ...in dehradun..in ur college...u stalk her ...when did u come to know about her and when did u stalk her,... we all just came yesterday and u only went out only for 3 hrs...ohhh i get it now... u stalk her yesterday in those 3 hrs where i thought u would be in jungle with ur..."
abhay-"bhai calm down... u r overreacting... yes i knew her that she would be in dehradun but not expecting her to be here in this college... yes ...i also stalk her to know who she was or is she has any connection with her or not but came to conclusion that she is not her so chill. i saw her yesterday at dehradun airport with misha and her family when we were in our car and leaving for our mansion. i too was curious to know her and at the same time happy to see her , i thought she is back , she is back for me as she was keeping her promise... but i was wrong ,...totally wrong...she is not her and can never be her... instead of that i feel restless., uncomfortable when she is in front of me ,. and even i can't read her mind, smell her or feel her around me. i thought she belongs to our world but no she is just a human with coincidentally same face as her .she is just a doppelganger and nothing more than that. and after knowing this i also went to jungle , to her, to meet her and i m trying my best to stay away from her , to avoid her okkk ... so now i told u every thing and satisfied all urs question bank.. so will u forgive me . and close this chapter here only...(making innocent face)"
sid analyzing the whole conversation but still not satisfied and does not believe in such a hilarious coincident . he knows that there is some reason or big indication of what is happening and some big trouble is coming up next. and he has to find out this by any how as it is reated to his little brother which he cannot lose at any cost. he needed to talk to some one and he knows whom???
mean while abhay was waiting for his response but to him it seems like his big brother has gone in some other world.
abhay(clicking his finger in front of his face)-"bhai... where lost . i m waiting for ur reply... i know u r angry with me and i m sorry for that but i didn't want u to give unnecessary tension and upset u and also its not that big to think about it, i m fine so please leave this matter now...please"
sid-"ok ok i forgave u but next if u hide something from me i will ...(whispering in his ear so that only he can hear)...bite u...(laugh)"
abhay(laugh)-"i know very well... and i promise i will not hide any thing from u and please no need to bother mom-dad in this matter. its nothing serious or worth it and i can handle my self and if any trouble comes , then u r there to solve it so please...9smiles)."
sid(assuringhim and smiles back)-"i know.., i understand...ok then i should leave now . .. i m already late to go my new office so i thought to go back home and join office from tomorrow and by the way u r also late for ur class. u already missed one so get go in ...meet u at home... bye(hug him)"
abhay-'ya u r right... i should go ...bye(hugs him back)"
abhay left to go to his class and sid stand there opening door of driver seat of his car.
sid(to himself)-"little brother... u don't know what is going to happen in ur life. its not that simple or easy. now the toughest part of ur life has come,, more than losing maithalli.i don't know how will u react and cope up with the truth which i and dad had been hiding from u for since last 200 years not even mom knows about it. i hope u understand what we did was right at that time and u will forgive us. i promise u that u will never come to know about it because what we did was for ur own benefit, for our family,for our clan and moreover i won't lose u at any cost. but right now i need to talk and sought it out as early as possible before its too late and its seems that danger is not too far , we have to be prepared for it"
thinking this he left for raichand mansion

but to their utter bad luck someone has heard his and abhay conversation

precap-

college fest - abhiya together

note-here in my ff danish is not with panchi.and if needed i would bring him later

hope u will like it

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Rmuk thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
#66
Nice update. I am really curious to know the truth that is sid and chand hiding from Abhay. Pls update soon and thanks for the pm. Next time after updating pm me.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#67
I M SPEECHLESS, I HAVE NO WORDS YAAR., JUS LOVED IT:-):-) Abhay And Sid bonding is GREAT:-):-) Wats the secret?... ITS HILLARIOUS:-):-) YOU ARE AN AMAGING WRITER... Its perfect:-) WAITING 4 THE NEXT CHAPPY...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#68
AMAZING AND SUPERB
UPDATE DEAR
REALLY LOVE IT
sid abhay bonding is too good
love this ff dear u are really goood writter
waiting what the secret behind all this .
excited 4 precap
update soon
and pm me or just pls inform when u update
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Posted: 13 years ago
#69

Originally posted by: Rmuk

Nice update. I am really curious to know the truth that is sid and chand hiding from Abhay. Pls update soon and thanks for the pm. Next time after updating pm me.


thanks
I'll update tomorrow
it would be easy for me to pm if u send me buddy request
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Posted: 13 years ago
#70

Originally posted by: rashi.rose

I M SPEECHLESS, I HAVE NO WORDS YAAR., JUS LOVED IT:-):-) Abhay And Sid bonding is GREAT:-):-) Wats the secret?... ITS HILLARIOUS:-):-) YOU ARE AN AMAGING WRITER... Its perfect:-) WAITING 4 THE NEXT CHAPPY...


thank you very much
secret will be revieled little later
right now u will see more of abhiya and abhisha
u know u r one of my close friends on this forum as after reading ur comments a big smile 😃automatically come on my face and give me confident and inspiration to write atleast for u all.
thank u very very much.
i hope i maintain ur interest always.
next chappy will be tomorrow

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