Abhiya SS:My Beautiful Disaster(Note pg143) - Page 46

Created

Last reply

Replies

1k

Views

129.7k

Users

111

Likes

2.3k

Frequent Posters

luv_vivian_luv thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
TOTALLY BRILL UPDATE SOOO ..AMAZING ...
.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: mandy1024

Tanzie dear ur a mindblowing writer 👏 Ur superb when it comes to bringing out a person's inner turmoil. I love all ur works but this is my fav among them even though its nothing supernatural. The way its written, the characterisation everything about it is FANTASTIC 👏 Kudos to u n Heena once again ⭐️ We got to see an entirely different side to Abhay in this update n the budding feelings Abhiya have for each other 😳 Brilliantly written 👏 When will their love story kick off? Man there was so much sexual tension between them n u have portrayed it so well. So will we get to see some nice romantic moments between them? 😃 Looking forward to that. Please dont wind this SS up with their union 😊 Would love to see them as a couple in love. Will we get that? But u said only 6 updates left Abhi toh lots more left I guess. Aww thank you soo much Manasa 🤗 This is my current fav too... i love writing it and honestly I have never felt so emotional while writing anything.. maybe that's why the result came out pretty well...i wont wind this when they will be together... will surely see them as a couple..thats the plan...and no... it will go more then 6 updates 😃

BTW if there are only 6 updates left n u guys dont wanna continue it then retain it as an SS. But if u wanna write more(I'll be more than happy for it 🤗) then make it into an FF.


Originally posted by: lost_in_love

Ress--
---edited---
Beautiful update tanzie!!! Just marvellous!!! 👏 thanks a lot dear

"thts bcz u dnt knw him...do I myself knw him.." surely pia dsnt knw abhay(the abhay who hd to face unfortunate events in lyf) but she knws d imprtant part...the part tht matters the most...his "Heart/Soul" !!! 😳
"tak it as paybck. Does it sound good to u nw." i lyk dis pia...to hs evry denial she hs gt a positive reply!! 😳 she has a fire within her and surely fire can control Abhay. the positivity in her life has returned now...
"I'm knwn as the 'killing Machine'...machine hs died. Let the world think I hv died"...so does tht mean there's a ray of hope of them having a peaceful/happy lyf togethr??
Bt dis very line "my history tells me I wnt evr...to live my lyf in peace. My past will haunt me..." suggests d xct opposite ending..an uncertain future!! Or nt so happy ending!! Mayb?? Abhay's part will surely haunt him. i donno about the ending now dear.. will see what happens and make them happy always..
"she told me to b a gud boy?! She hs lost hr mind!!" Ya..she hs lost hr mind long bck whn she came bck running to hm aftr he freed her...or ...long bck...whn she saw hs handsome face/blue eyes for the first tym!!! Actually Its diffclt to decide whn xctly she lost herself !!! 😳 evn abhay freed hs victim fr d 1st tym ignoring d consequencs..whch itslf ws mre strange!!!
"there's a saline stand...want me to use it as a pole?" haha..tht ws class frm pia!! 😉
"thank god,its my summer break running..." evry action is well justifid wthout leaving any place to complain!! 👍🏼 I love how you notice all the lines 😆
"...thy wud hv killd me pia..do u wnt me dead?"..does tht mean abhay ws ordered to kill innocnt ppl bt he didnt cz of pia (as she left a deep imprint on hs mind) and tht's y thy were orderd to erase hm??
"...she lukd at me lyk she hs found some lost treasure" undoubtedly!!!
"hw did u brought me here?" its coz he isnt aware of pia's will power yet or bettr say the power of 'Love' !!! 😳
"she tuk my name lyk an angel frm heavn" hm..angel!! So true!! 😍
"she hs cared...a vicious killer lyk a human..."lovd dis line!! It hs such depth!! Its simple yet so meaningful!! 😊 Glad tht u usd the word 'human' instead of sumthng else! It speaks volumes nd is mre impactful!! It further Deciphers abhay hsnt been treated lyk a human nd hs hmslf forgottn hs true identity!! Abhay has lost his humanity in tiny bits since his mother has left... his painful past is not ended.. next update i will write how n why he killed his father... Pia has cared a person who longed for love too much n the viceversa... they r remedy for each other..
"I cud smell hr flowery smelld curls on my shoulder...touch of hr milky porcelain skin...i ws washd wth an unknwn feeling..." dis entire part ws beaauutiful and mesmerising...😍 😳it cudn't hv been mre better!!! And considering abhay's dreadful past, strong feelings as such isnt tht easy to describe bt you did!! Nd tht too beautifuly!! You'r cmpletly successful in potraying hm..belev me tanzie..the 'abhay' in ur works perfctly matches the 'abhay' in d show!!wethr its "til d end" or "the beautiful strngr" or dis one!! Whenever I read them i find d xct abhay,who isnt just a creation(charactr) bt himself!! And tht's d reason your ff's r so close to my heart!!! ❤️ 😳
"I just lost evrythng I gained" hope he dsnt.!! Hope she will surely undrstnd...though its difclt..might tak tym..bt she will!!she's the 1aftral! If she dsnt ,who will !! Thanks a lot Indu... i love writing about Abhay. Its certainly not easy and really glad u liked how i portray him. its no fun writing a plain character rather deciphering someone complex into something beautiful. overall, i love to write this SS 😳
Nw cuming to ur questn...do u feel anywhere in dis long cmment tht i feel bored!?? Offcourse nt!! Their luv story isnt easy here(mre diffcult than supernatrl one) so it will defintly need tym to progress n besids d charctrs needs to b potryd cmpltly so tht it cn create the perfct ground fr the story tht u bth want it to b!!
And Abt the ff..its upto bth of u...bt yes i wud b defintly happy if it turns into ff!! 😊
luking forward to the nxt part eagerly...continue soon...thnx fr d pm..😊 do tk..cre.. 🤗
p.s. Hope your health is bettr nw? Thank you dear...im good now. and their love story is indeed very intense and complicated here... lets see where it is headed. will extend it... for sure 🤗

-Indu

.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: visufansona

awsme..tanju &heenadi...bt kay ye chotu tha na...well nce update..so nw abhy know ..pia knows evrything...master is moon uncle...expecting this...abhy ne pia ko...u write very well...his stiches..hw strong he yar..v know na...

u r writing awesm...v wil wait for 6 chap for abhiya...jst udate soon.k.

thank u both...story moving right.waiting for nxt chap.


Thanks dear. u think 4000 words update is small? 😲 wow...ok next time will make it even bigger 😆 will update tomorrow... 😳

Originally posted by: bookworm-ALS--

Oh Gosh what a terrible ending. But it was a lovely chapter! All those things Pia did for him were so sweet... But I hope she doesn't kick him out!
And yes if changing it into a FF means more chapters...then definitely go ahead!


She wont but Abhay will be adamant not to live with her anymore. maybe wont change it into FF. but i dropped the idea of shortening my ideas into smaller ones. will defo extend it now. 😊

Originally posted by: Rmuk

Superb
Mindblowing
Awesome chapter. Abhiya moments were so beautiful. Piya scolding abhay and abhay's intense gaze on her uff! Superb. Last part was sad one but waiting for piya's reaction. Plz plz plz continue soon. And u can change it into ff becoz I love to read this ss. I will more than happy. Thanks a million times for the pm and pls do it next time too.



Thanks Romi. Will write more and wont end it soon... hope u will like the chapters further as well 😳


--sonali-- thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 13 years ago
its awesm & tanju...heena di when wil u both r gng to update...?
updte soon na...thnx.
.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: visufansona

its awesm & tanju...heena di when wil u both r gng to update...?
updte soon na...thnx.


Heena is having exms so she wont be updating until its 13th. I will update tomorrow...
.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Neetsandhu

This update is just out of world...so amazing...
Abhiya moments r so nice...
Waiting 4 nxt part..
Thnxxx 4 pm


Thanks Neetu. Will update tomorrow I hope.

Originally posted by: neha_dubey1709

wow... Both the parts r awesome... Sorry for not commenting bfore... Bit busy so thts y... So sorry dear... nevertheless its reallyyy amazing parts.


Thanks a lot Neha. no problem.. Im happy you liked it and commented 😊

Originally posted by: kuttu

I don't mind the pace you choose to write and move on with the story but the meotional turmoil of both the people are well depicted. Looks like Pia is Chand's (Master) daughter and that is the reason he is on the hunt for her. God help her then.

Abhay seems to be treading over murky waters. He himself is not sure of what he sees in Pia. And the reformed Pia has him all the more confused looks like. So will the killing of his father have an impact on their relationship waitng to see that.


Glad u dont find it too slow. well, we will see who's daughter she is. Abhay is insecure and unsure but he will be sure soon he loves Pia. he is fond of her and rest he doesnt know..

Originally posted by: TISA07

that was an awesome update.just loved abhiya interactions.waiting for piya's reaction.


Thanks Tisa.. glad u liked it

Originally posted by: MS-meghasharma

wonderful update

just lvd each and every part in it.abhay pia maoments were sweet.
jus lvd hw pia scolded himand he agreed to each and everything she said.
just lvd both of them
i think u should make it a ff:)))
thanks for pm


Thanks Megha. will extend it but wont make it a FF 😳

Originally posted by: Gals_11

awesome update dear..
eagerly waiting for d next part..
carry on..
thanxx for d pm.


Thank you so much 😳
.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: PurpleFairy

See, Tanzie, it is true that this story is slow but it is most definitely NOT boring. At least not for me. The kind of depth and detail and complexity and intensity you both are wanting AbhIya to possess in this SS requires this kind of a pace to create that kind of a graph and for a proper insight into the two characters. Any kind of rush, and that quality will be lost. It is upto you whether you want to extend this into a FF or not but my only request is to PLEASE give AbhIya a happy ending. Considering how ridiculously attached I still am to them, I'll be depressed for days if you end them tragically, I'm telling you Thank you so much Neethz. glad u understood. I cant write Abhay n Pia fell in love within a blink. Their story is molded with Pain so need time to get into a proper relationship. and i will try my best to give happy ending... everyone is emotionally blackmailing me 😛

You know, I generally skim through the older parts of the story for 5-10 minutes before I start reading any chapter since it helps me keep up with the story but as this SS is progressing, I am getting more and more confused about the prologue. its about abhay's parents. haseena and bill and it will be clear once Abhay will narrate the same thing to Pia... atfirst when I wrote it it was abt Abhiya but then I cudnt throw them into so much pain when they r already in pain... so changed the story a bit..

Ok, coming to the update, I think this Master Chand is Pia's biological father.
Argh!! That STUPID Rob, I'm glad he's dead😡
Oh, man, you people never fail to leave me enchanted with the way AbhIya are being portrayed in this SS. Each and every movement by them touches my heart. You really know how to tug the right chords. I love how Pia deals with Abhay and his incredulous reactions to her guts is hilarious to read in this otherwise gloomy and tragic tale.
But Abhay killing his father was a twist I had not expected and the last sentence scares me. I hope Pia can control her reflexes 'coz one impulsive reaction and Abhay might just lose all his hope once again, not to mention, this will lead to Pia being pushed back into the darkness as well First Pia will be shocked just as she sud and then it will hurt Abhay beyond hurts. but they will amend their wounds by themselves. I know if any1 of them looses the other...their future might be worse then the past. and thanku soo much for liking how I portray it. Its currently my fav thing to write.. I just love writing it. it has never happened to me tht i feel like crying while writing something but when I wrote the sequence where Abhay and Pia were separated after kidnapping and they keep searching for each other. while editing it... i repeatedly read it.. it made me cry almost

Update soon, guys! You both are just amazing🤗 Thanks sooo much 🤗

.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Chinky-

I am so sorry for being late and not commenting on the previous update. Well I know you understand me more than abhay understands piya🤣 🤣 Well I do understand you as much as I understand the intentions of Panchi Dobriyal . so cant expect anything better from you.. 🤣 thanks for showing up 😛

Fantastic to say the least ! the emotions,fears,feelings,.everything has been described so beautifully ! Loved it. Why does the master want to kill abhay 😡
The lake scene was so cute and romantic 😍
I am wondering how is piya going to react after hearing the bitter truth 😭 Pia's reaction will be very disheartening at first and then something will happen to Abhay which will make her realize she is in love with him..

Waiting for the update 🤗
And yes..do turn it into a ff if you can. I dont want it to end 😆 will extend it... love u 🤗

.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago
The following 53 member(s) liked the above post:
mgarg75, SheIsTheOne, himanshu1990, sukusnavnit, Neetsandhu, arunsunita_gm, abc123chiti, purple_shadoz, abhiya0006, TISA07, minibsp2007, m-g19, pallavisarkar, visufansona, hema_rawat, CleviveDsouza, innocentgal90, anjali0111, PurpleFairy, -Sonia-, mandy1024, Alicia2001, Gals_11, -Chinky-, love-piya-abhay, shivanirajput, bookworm-ALS--, rashi.rose, lost_in_love, cccppp, abhiyan_soni, bellaaa, Jiya_tariq, luckdiya, Pari-Gupta, Sivaranjani, MyAngelAbhay, MS-meghasharma, zoozoo123, ANTARA-2244, Riasa, .rumki., .Shiva., heena_mehta, priya.1, DonIsback, snitchseeker, abhiora, Akshi0019, shivanipandit29, strawberryrashu, abhayfan_dishu, anjali.K,


Thank you so much people for reading and commenting. It means a lot to us. Heena is having exams so she is unavailable till 13th april. Until she is here, I will update. I'm very busy and my mom is very sick. so I'm running on my toes actually. couldn't reply all. don't have so much time. will be updating tomorrow night InshAllah... 🤗
.SmokeySilence. thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 13 years ago


THIS IS A "MEMBERS ONLY" POST
The Author of this post have chosen to restrict the content of this Post to members only.


Related Topics

Pyaar Kii Ye Ek Kahaani Thumbnail

Posted by: Fearless_Lover

6 months ago

Abhiya AT #345 "Mushkilen hal hai tumhi se ya Tum hi Ho mushkile"

Jab tak Hriti wapis aa kar new AT Thread nhi banate tab tak yahi chat karo

Expand ▼
Pyaar Kii Ye Ek Kahaani Thumbnail

Posted by: White-Lilac

12 months ago

Abhiya AT #344 ~ Hum Dheere Dheere Dheere Pagal Ho Rahe Hai

Welcome to Enigmatic AbhIya AT #344 Welcome to Enigmatic AbhIya AT, heaven/home for AbhIya lovers..come relive the memories, share, shower your...

Expand ▼
Pyaar Kii Ye Ek Kahaani Thumbnail

Posted by: simply.meghana

1 years ago

| Abhiya SS - And They Were Roommates | Ch 5 Pg 7

Hello folks! My writer's block is gone for now so writing an SS with the following writing prompt You are a vampire hunter. Your roommate is a...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".