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Posted: 13 years ago
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superb ud. Whenever I read this OS I feel lost in it.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey tanzie
sorry for the super late reply, but was really busy u know wid ramadaan, eid, assignments n plus we are shifting to a new place. u have no idea how hell tired i am😆
really like ur concept👍🏼 metz is such a biatch, but i stil like her. that's crazy i know😆 and the way u described was really good n hot, altho i hate her for betraying abhay n she's still obsessing over him...
hmm jeh n his selfish reasons!! he wants pia for himself, n god his main aim is to kill abhay n metz😲 now is he cunning or what?
i liked metz-abhay conversation in the 2nd part. it was good👍🏼 i hope to see something like that in the show someday, mayb more intense, especially from abhay's side.
i loved that little abhiya moment. was really touching😳
i really enjoyed metz reaction when she discovered abhay's double crossing her😛😆
really looking forward to the next part😊
u know im so sick n tired of this running around in circles game between these 2 in the show. the last time we saw them all happy n in love was 4 months ago🤢 n i wont be surprised if we're heading for a 5th altho im grateful that atleast we can see them together in the same frame...
but yeah, thank god for all the wonder ffs n os from brilliant ppl like u otherwise i would've gave up a long time ago
sorry for the rant😆 but am sure u can understand
thanks so much for the pmz dear
take care 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow, this is really awesome and fantastic
abhay-maithili convo was interesting and so was abhiya part too...so maithili came to know abhay lied to her...really want to know what's gonna happen 😃
plz update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Amazing Tanzie.. I know I'm late to comment..
Your OS is really fast.. you have only one part left?? really.. So i hope next will be long one!! Please update soon.. I want to know what is gonna happen!!👍🏼

Thanks for the PM dear!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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fabulous update🤗..🤗...luv the way abhay was trying 2 save piya...awww😍😍.it was chooo sweet...
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Sorry for double posting...see below 😕
Edited by princess_xeelan - 13 years ago
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Last Part (Make me wanna die)


PART A

Sun arrived at the sky of Dehradun like any other day. Nevertheless, it meant strictly significant to four people in Dehradun whose life could be change today.. forever. Piya looked at the beautiful sky from her window, Today I will finally collect the missing puzzle piece of my life.. I will get my answers and maybe my life back as well..ABHAY!!

Maithli looked at the sun and cursed it for glowing today, she hates sunlight. I always get what I want and today I will get what was always mine.

Abhay started his morning before the sunshine arrived in the sky. His car was running at super speed through the highway of Dehradun. I would die before letting anyone hurt you Piya. This is for you. I have to do it. Whatever happens, I will always choose you.

Jeh looked at Piya's photo in his hands. This is for you Piya. I promise I would kill the b**** before she even touch you. But I can't let my family suffer for my love. Between revenge and love I choose revenge first. I'm sorry Piya.. I love you!!


Piya entered the college with around 2pm. She was content that Abhay called her in the early morning to make sure she was ok and remind her not to go anywhere outside the college. As much as she was happy that Abhay didn't have a 360 degree turn of mood once again but she was worried inside about the unknown enemy who would hurt her. Her impatience, anxiousness and uncertainty kept her silent and ignorant of the world around her. She purposely went to old part of the library which is usually abandoned by students. She started looking for European History books for doing an assignment. After a few minutes, she found what she was looking for and pulled an old book but the books were all stacked together so 3 other books fell from the bookshelf as well. 'Shit" She muttered and sat down to picked it up when she saw the title of the first book. "History of Pandher." The name Pandher immediately clicked on her mind, the same name.. Princess Maithli and the place where she was burnt. She went to that place few days ago but Abhay distracted her. She stood up and started reading patiently without even bothering to sit on a chair. The history of Pandher and Princess Maithli started playing games with her mind as she could see an old palace and an old man telling her the same story that was written in the book. She could remember she went there. Maithli.. Maithli...Maithli.. the name was buzzing inside her head giving her headaches. She went through the pages to find a photo of the princess. She was having a weird feeling with name Maithli. She could feel an unknown, undesirable connection with restlessness. And finally she stopped at a page, shocked, making her knees trembling to see her own hand-painted photo in some vintage gown captioned: Rajkumari Gayteri Singhi Shivranjini Maithli Pandher.

Her hands were shaking so much that the book fell down. Her head was throbbing but she could remember many things now. ..a flash of another photo she once saw but in that Abhay was also present... Abhay's Maithli!! Flash changes.. A lady in red gown walking towards her, hissing she would be the Queen once she suck Piya dry.. and a man was holding her.. Siddhartha!! They both have fangs.. vampires!! They were all vampires!! Piya could feel her head bursting in pain and she shouted ABHAYYY and started to fall down. Her head hit a bookshelf and blood started to pour from the cut on her forehead...Piya lost her consciousness.

Abhay was running the car fast. He needs to get back to Dehradun fast. All the arrangements for moving Piya out of the town has been done but he was feeling very restless, like something bad is gonna happen. Maithli has given him 2 days time then why he was feeling Piya's in danger. He increased the speed of the wheels.

Deep in the woods, Maithli was all set for displaying the dark magic she learnt from the black witch. She has given Maithli her blood and power so that Maithli can perform some focus-pocus too. She has no intention to wipe out Piya's memory again. Jeh gets her or not is not her concern. She's gonna wipe out Piya's memory from Abhay's mind!! Then she will make Abhay kill her.. that would be her revenge for killing her most precious and loyal supporter Siddarth. She never loved Siddarth but this was to show her gratefulness to Sid for giving her a new life. Before that she would kill the dog who was bringing Piya here. She lit the fire and started saying incantations, Jeh would be in trouble the moment he will arrive. After 1 is down, she will wait for her ultimate player.. Abhay!! "Abhayendra.. tum ayoge.. zaroor ayoge tumahri Piya ko bachane" and Maithli started laughing.

Jeh was lucky to find Piya unconscious in the library and Piya literally spared Jeh from feeding her some lies. Jeh informed his mother to stay in the jungle undercover with other werewolves. He doesn't trust Maithli from any angle.

Abhay sensed Piya is in danger and he was running at his super sonic speed to be there, leaving the car behind. His legs are faster then the wheels!! He tried to connect with Piya with his telepath powers but he was unable to do so, making him more desperate to save his beloved. She must be in trouble. It's all because of me, I should never have left her alone even for a day.


(PART B... next page please)

Edited by princess_xeelan - 13 years ago
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(Part B)

The moment Jeh walked deep inside the jungle within 10 fts of the fire Maithli has created he felt his muscles are becoming stiff. He was unable to understand what's happening to him. He ran fast and put Piya near the fire and saw Maithli didn't even bother to break her eye-connect with fire. With Maithali's every words, Jeh felt his body was fired with pain.That b**** is doing some focus-pocus on me.

He jumped on Maithli with all his strengths shouting, "I knew it you traitor. What are you doing with me?" Maithali's connection broke with the fire and the spells stop working on Jeh. She's not a witch afterall, she just grabbed some powers from a black witch so Metz wasn't that competent. Jeh was stronger then Metz but her fangs instantly came out and her eyes changed color. Metz threw Jeh in the air from her with all her strength. Jeh transformed into his wolf form within seconds and attacked on her. Metz fell on the ground with Jeh on top of her and tried to stop the wolf Jeh from sinking his teeth into her and she was trying to bite the wolf as well. When Abhay reached the spot, he saw one wolf and another woman in black rolling from one sided to another with super-speed which was almost impossible to see who was attacking whom. Both hit a tree and the tree fell and the figures went on fighting. Abhay saw Piya lying on the ground and quickly took her in his arms. He saw blood on her forehead but it was no time to investigate it right now. He ran away from the place faster than wind and hide Piya near a huge bush when he heard wolf howls.. not one but many. "Shit Jeh has got backup."

Abhay called Piya again and again pleading, touching her facing lovingly, "Piya...Piya.. are you alright? Please open your eyes Piya. I swear I will never leave you alone from now. But please open your eyes and tell me you are ok..please Piya."

Piya slowly muttered, with closed eyes, "Abhay, I can remember everything."

Abhay was shocked to hear that, "What?"

But for now the shock gone to pause as he heard a wolf growling just behind them!! He looked behind and another wolf was growling at them, all ready to attack. Without wasting a moment Abhay covered Piya behind him and came into his vampire form. The she-wolf and Abhay jumped at each other almost at the same time. She was strong and all ready to rip Abhay's neck but not enough to take Abhay down. Abhay tried to bite her but she jumped at the last moment. Abhay's fangs brushed her hairy shoulders. She growled higher and set her target again: Piya. Piya was watching the fight with apprehension, dreading something would happen to Abhay. The wolf once again tried to attack on Piya but this time Abhay screamed, NOOO and threw her far away. The wolf hit a tree and a fell down, coming back to her human form and Abhay saw it was Dipannita. He quickly concentrated on Piya, "Piya, you need to get out of here. Right now. You are not safe here."

Piya jerked his hands from her shoulders, "Absolutely not Abhay. I'm not going anywhere leaving you in danger. You and I have a lot of sort out. How dare you lied to me last night yet again. You have to answer why you played with my memories. As much as I love you, I can't forgive you for erasing my memories. You gotta answer that to me."

Abhay felt helpless, he never thought this day would come to his life and unable to answer he desperately said, "Piya, Maithli is here. I'm leaving Dehradun with her. I don't love you anymore."

Piya slapped Abhay hard on his face, leaving him stunned. Her eyes tear stricken, "Again you are lying? You said you would never leave me just minutes ago when I was half conscious. I heard that. Abhay Raichand, Don't you dare play your heart games with me anymore. I swear if you even try to leave me I will kill myself."

Knowing Piya for long Abhay knew, she could easily take this attempt and right now, the ball was in her court and he was in no situation for further negotiation. He wiped her tears gently with his hands and said, "I promise I would never leave you Piya but don't ever say that you would kill yourself. Do you know what that would do to me?"

Piya started melting with his lovedrunk voice, his gentle touch on her cheek, "Say that you love me Abhay and you would never leave me..again?"

"Woww...Woww..wowww!! Miss unwanted woke up finally ha and my darling Abhayendra, bolona how much do you LOVE her?" said Maithli in gritted teeth. Piya hugged Abhay tighter, scared to see a fang dangling, blue eyed Maithli.. her cloths ripped here and there, and beautiful silky hair looking like a hay-stack. Signs of attending a vicious fight were visible all over her body. Abhay protectively put his arms around Piya, snarling at Maithli, "Don't you even dare touch her Maithli. Let her go. I will do whatever you say."

Piya shouted, "No Abhay. I won't let you go with her."

Maithli laughed, "Abhayendra is mine. You can't take my place you human. You can have the wolf... your another admirer Jeh, if he is alive."

Piya shouted again, 'what Jeh? Wolf?"

Maithli laughed harder, "You are one unique piece. 1st vampire then werewolf, Next it should be someone from Mars, you stupid girl."

Abhay shouted, "Shut up Maithli. You betrayed me. What are the wolves doing here? You and Jeh are working together? How could you?"

"Really? Like you didn't? You planned to move Piya from here so that you can deal with me? And that dog Jeh betrayed me as well; I didn't know there would be other wolves. Good he's dead probably."

Another voice screamed in full power, "Abhay Raichand.. this is all because of you. I will kill you. "First Gaurav now my other son." Wounded Dipannita transformed into a wolf and attacked Abhay. Abhay wasn't ready this time, he fell and Piya fell as well and her head hit a stone. Dipannita and Abhay engaged into a nasty fight and Maithli knew this is the right time she would kill Piya. An injured Piya tried to get up and Maithli lurched on her with her fangs. Nevertheless, she was thrown into the air from behind. A blood covered, wounded Jeh shouted, "I told you leech. If you try to harm Piya. I will kill both of you bloodsucker leeches!!" Piya darted her eyes to Abhay and saw he was now fighting with two wolves, "Jeh..Jeh stop the wolves, they will kill Abhay. If you really love me, you will stop this fight. Please Jeh.. I can't live without Abhay." Jeh looked at Piya, hurt.. the physical wounds are much painful then what Piya just said, she choose Abhay!!

Before he could say anything, they heard a heart-trembling scream and saw Abhay has killed both the wolves. Jeh yelled, "Mommm.. Abhay I will kill you." He picked a broken wooden branch to stake Abhay and ran towards him. Abhay was already weak with wolf's attacks but with all his strength he grabbed Jeh's wrist to stop him from staking him with the wooden branch. Jeh was as powerful as he was. He sinks his teeth into Jeh's hand and he screamed like a wild animal. Piya shouted, "Please stop both of you. Please don't kill each other."

Jeh fell on the ground and Abhay quickly moved towards Piya, "you need to go from here. Right now"

Then many things happened at a time, Piya and Abhay both heard a muffled scream and it lasted into, "Abhayendra..."

Abhay looked behind and was shocked to see Jeh was trying to attack him from behind and Maithli came into the way. The wooden stake has gone straight through her heart and she was falling on the ground. As Maithli fell choking to death, Abhay tried to rip Jeh's heart out of the chest but Piya stopped him yet again, "Stop it both of you. Jeh if you ever love me. If you wanna the meaning of love then go from here right now. So that I can have the same respect and feelings intact I have for you. Look what your animosity have done to all of us. If you wanna kill Abhay, then kill me first cause without Abhay I'm as good as dead and Abhay, he just saved me from maithli. She was going to kill me. If you love me then leave him. PLEASE. Abhay..she's dying. Dying, saving you. Come here."

Jeh and Abhay both leave their hands of each other, unwillingly, still shooting daggers through eyes but somehow Piya's words have touched them both. Jeh took Dipannita's deadbody and ran from that place. He might get into the killing spree again if he stays there. Abhay sat beside Maithli, her body was getting blue and chalk like slowly.

Maithli touched Abhay's face with her trembling hand, "see Abhayendra, if I can take lives for you. I can also give-up my life for you. No one can love you more then me. You are mine. Not in this life but some other life maybe. Till then I will give company to Siddarth. He loved me till death. Abhayendra is Maithli's..." and her hand fell from Abhay's cheek.

Abhay was feeling numb. He wanted to get rid of her for sure, but he didn't want her to go like this, while saving her. He never wanted this. Piya sat there, motionless. She never wanted this either. She knews Maithli would have killer her by now but she died valiantly saving and proving her love for once. Abhay touched Maithli's face for one last time and stood up, holding Piya. "Can you walk?" Piya didn't answer but hugged him tightly. They finally surrended into each other's arms not saying a word. They needed it.. The two soul mates finally found each other's way back. Abhay took Piya in his arms and started walking. 'where are we going?" Piya asked Abhay innocently while clinging to him, her head resting on Abhay's shoulder. "Somewhere we should be.." Abhay answered and walked leaving every obstacle of their epic love story behind. Someone has said it right:

"Love is stronger than death even though it can't stop death from happening, but no matter how hard death tries it can't separate people from love. It can't take away our memories either. In the end, life is stronger than death."

Edited by princess_xeelan - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I end this here... It didn't turned out how I wanted to be 🤔 but anyways I wanted Metz dead in the end so I did...

*Final Chapter updated dears 😳*
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Posted: 13 years ago
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ausum tanzie...fab...what an update...my heart wrenched seeing maithili die..i never thought this would happen to me for metz...beautifully written...just loved it...abhiya are 2gether..their love won...the two soulmates will be 2gether forever...gosh!! what an update 👏
Edited by peehu24 - 13 years ago

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