Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 7

Originally posted by: AngelDark

Apsey yeh nivedan karti hoon mein iss kahani ko likney key liye hudh ko apna galam key liye atma samarpan kar ley!😆😳

Pfft! 😆 I don't know what I said is correct so let me say it in English: Please surrender yourself to your pen to write this story!

BTW: Lovely story and would love to read more about the character traits of Aayu.

PS: Thanks for the PM! Otherwise I would have not found this story!😳

Gosh Angel you are so cute with that sweet sweet hindi...Thank you thank you!! 🤗
Three major errors in that beautifully constructed sentence...1. It should be "karta hoon" for you and not 'karti hoon", 2. "khudh" and not "hudh", and 3. "kalam" and not galam.

Dhanyawaad bandhu mere...Main aapki tamanna zaroor poora karoongi, aur khud ke dar ko apne kalam ke aage samarpan kar iss kahani ko sahi aakaar dene ki koshish karoongi. Yeh mera waada hai!!😳

Translated this says: Thank you my friend...I shall certainly heed your request, and after surrendering my fear in front of my pen I shall try to give a proper shape to this story. That's my promise!!

Aayu won't be around much at first. I plan to get the kids back after some chapters have gone. I just wanted to give life to Aayu in this one...The little kid is quite special to us PVians.

Originally posted by: salvatore-nina

Continue, please continue!

I loved every word of it! It was absolutely beautiful and it has piqued my curiosity. I can't believe you came up with something so soon after Sparsh but I'm excited to see where this new journey takes us. I love the title and I want to know the story behind it.

Thank you so much for the PM Indu!

Looking forward to the next update!

Thanks Nina...Frankly, I was in no frame of mind to pen down another emotional story so soon after Sparsh...but Que sera, sera! I am a lot more apprehensive at the beginning of this journey. What I have in mind seems an uphill task to put into words...Let's see how far I succeed.😳

good start indu 😉

Originally posted by: smileymj10

YIPEEE!!!
Indu is back with another OS!!!! Am so, so happy!!!! 🤗
And hey, do you need to ask us whether to continue??
You're such a good writer my friend, how can we say no...

I love the beginning of this, very new to my taste...
Samarpan?! What a word!!! I don't even know the meaning of it, but you bring it with a good explanation through Yash.
With the book about Aarti and Yash life!!! I'm loving it already..
And oh, Can't believe Aayu is in the house, you really loved him, do you? And Payal being the outspoken one!!!
Can't wait for Aarti to come out, and her past, very intriguing ha..
So, they meet when she was born, soulmate indeed!!!
Looking forward for the next hun, waiting for the next pm.. 😳

Thank you for the vote of confidence Barbie Doll...I'll try not to disappoint your trust.

In my last two stories, I had Ansh and Palak...so decided for Payal and Aayu this time. Yup...you're right...I do have a soft spot for Aayu. 😳

Samarpan will be all about Yash and Aarti's solo journey through the beliefs borne out of their personal experiences till their paths meet, when they realize their own worth as they look at their selves through the other's eyes.

Originally posted by: ashGC_arja

OMG!!!! Di you came up with another beautiful story😃...

Wowww... It was simply superb. Ok, this time it involves AarYa and their lovely kids.

The interactions between the father-son-daughter was beautiful😳😳.

I am looking forward to "Samarpan"...

Loved it!!!!🤗

Thanks Ash...This time it'll involve Yash and Aarti mostly...I shall get the kids back much later.😊

Originally posted by: 1HappyGrl

Indu! 🤗 You're back with a new story (potential story).

So this is a future, older Yash and Aarti with their kids. Very cool. Looking at their love story through their children's "eyes", so to speak, is a beautiful concept. In fact, you've already vividly introduced the children's adoration of both Yash (their interaction with him in the prologue is so adorable) and Aarti (they clearly admire and love her so much; I especially liked Aayu's recall of Aarti protecting him from a bully on the school bus). I'm already enjoying their family dynamic. 😃

You gave us some lovely glimpses of who 16 year old Palak and 10 year old Aayu are as individual characters and their sibling bond. Aayu teasing her was so cute. 😆

I'm also very intrigued by the reasons for Aarti's silence and her journey to becoming the chatty mother the kids know. Some paragraphs before Payal (or Palak) asked if Aarti's silence happened during her childhood, Yash told them her silence was to the point of muteness. Fascinating background story in the making. And the retracing Yash and Aarti's love story in this fic starts off with a nice twist:

"When did you first meet mumma?"

"On the day she was born."

As usual, Indu, you've got me hooked. Definitely continue, as long as you think you have the time to do it. 😃

Hi Jac...thank you so much for having so much belief in me.

Gosh pal...with such outpouring of support my sense of responsibility has suddenly quadrupled. I met someone last weekend and it triggered of a chain of thoughts where I saw Yash and Aarti and their coming together after surrendering their respective negativities. As had happened with Sparsh, this too came out of nowhere and planted itself firmly in my head till I wrote it down. I was so sure that I wouldn't write before at least a month is up ...and then this happened. It was either ignore the bug or let it bite you...I chose the latter for whatever it will be worth.

I may be slower in updates...at least till I find my way around the storyline, which at the moment is very hazy in my mind.😳

Originally posted by: Shashi1984

Hey! It's a really amazing piece of writing. All their children in their teens and they are having a friendly talk with their father. It's sound interesting and there is a growing curiosity as I read it.

You should continue it. It's amazing.

Thanks Shashi.😊

Originally posted by: InduG64

Hey Gini (OK if I call you that?)...SS is short for "Short Story." Yes, I plan to write one.

Don't you go by others' opinions here...They are the friends I love like mad and who will jump with me into the well of words of my creation if I ask them to. Tell you what... I shall give you the link of the story I finished a fortnight back. How you find it will give you some idea as to how I write...😳

Here it is: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3308447

OMG YOU ARE BACK AND I'M LOVING THIS NEW SS👏
WOW Yash with the kids talking about Aarti was special
hope you update sooon
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