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Posted: 16 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: anasrashid_fan

wow saima di...........U have left me completely speechless............it was superb yaar..........One thing I like in ur updates is that the way u write every emotion is awesome👏👏..........whether its romantic moments or emotional moments u show it very superbly👏👏..........muahhhhhh muahhhhh to u didijaan😆😳😳.......



Thanks Kalyani Bena, your words mean a lot to me am so happy that you are enjoying the story. I hope that i can continue to make you all happy😳😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: veersherafan1

Wow👏.Wonderful update.Prithvi is caring husbend ,brother and also friend .U put emotion it in the story very good way.Very good written.Keep it up.



Thanks Rakhi means a lot coming from another writter😊 Hope you continue to enjoy it😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: mehraan

i wud jus say saima wat i love in ur update is ur writg skill yaar...u kno the way u write is completely diff..i did say tis couple of times n i aggain state...im readg n visualizing thru ur eyes...the description of each charcater or the feelg tat each person is goin thru is so well penned....small small minute stuff is given importance..b it the color of eyes, the feelings ,the thoughts, actions...so nicley written...tats wat mkes completely unique...ur adding color or a life 2 a still picture...i dunno how 2 frame my words...its tat each n every dialogue has a meang 2 it......very beautiful...pls continue!



Mehr thank you so much for your words you don't know how happy it made me to read this line ur adding color or a life 2 a still picture. because that is what i have been hoping to do as the characters have become very much a part of my life so it makes me really happy to know that i am writing in a way that brings them to life for others aswell.
Thank you for taking the time to read the story and for doing your wonderful feedback😊😊😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Okay Gals i have done another update as i was really frustrated after work 😡😡😡and needed to relax so i was just making notes which somehow turned into Chapter 5😆😳😉. I hope you all enjoy it😊

Precap: Pratha and Samar Singh introduced. Prithvi realising that his sister has grown up and decided to get her married to Samar😊

Chapter 5

As Prithvi and Samar arrived in the palace gardens, prithvi stopped to admire the view. Aside from the bedroom he shared with his wife and daughter this was his favourite place in the palace because he found a piece of his wife everywhere he looked.
He could see her in the fountain that they had created to celebrate the birth of their angel, smell her in the fragrance of the roses she had lovingly planted and felt her touch everytime he sat on the swing he had designed for her on their wedding aniversary.
Samar turned to speak to Prithvi but saw from the smile on his face and the faraway look in his eyes that his friends was once again lost in thoughts of his wife. Samar wondered if he had the same smile and look in his eyes when he thought about Pratha, as his thoughts once again returned to her Samar decided to let Prithvi enjoy his moments so that he could find the one responsible for his own joy.
Turning to speak to his friend Prithvi realised that he had been abandoned, and wondered if he had offended Samar with his lack of attention, and then laughed as he realised that maybe his friend understood more than he thought and had decided to find the woman responsible for his own day dreaming rather than waiting for Prithvi. Taking a last look up at his bedroom window Prithvi went off to find his daughter.
'Nan-da-ni' 'Nan-da-ni' Pratha watched proudly as her lovely little neice wearing a blindfold raced around the garden fearlossly secure in the knowledge that those around her would never let anything bad happen to her.
'Pukaleya Taathaa' Nandani cried in happiness as Sunjum stopped long enough to be caught by her. Pratha watched on as Nandani ran to her other chaacha's pulling Sunjum along with her.
Stopping at the fountain to get some water for her neice, Pratha admired the angel design etched around the side of the fountain and knew it represented her Brother and his family, but what made her even happier was that her brother and sister in law had added an angel for each member of the family even those who had been and were still against their relationship. Taking the water Pratha turned around and automatically dropped the water.
'BHAIYA' Pratha shouted as she ran over to her brothers who was throwing Nandani up into the air and taking it in turns to catch her again in their arms.
'Kiya Hai Pratha Behna, Chand asked innocently as Pratha lifted Nandani on to her hip.
'Kiya Hai, Humko pooch rahe hai, Bhabi ko baatha?' Pratha replied finding it hard to stay cross, when he lifted his hands to hold both his ears.
'Nandani, ne humko ' Chand started to say but was interupted bu Pratha
'Aacha tho ab Nandani thuj par raj karthi hai' Pratha replied
'Nay' Chand started again but was once again interputted
'Ha, sub ko malum hai ke is mehel mein prithviraj chauhan ki raj Nandani Chauhan sey booth cum hai' Samar answered as he joined the group and handed Pratha some water for Nandani.
She was going to be a great mother Samar thought as he watched Pratha lay Nandani down in her arms to help her drink the water while absently brushing her hair.
'Such kaha tum ney' Bhaiya nei such much issie ko laadli bana diya' Pratha answered as she kissed her neice and set her down on the grass.
'Aacha, tho aap laadli nahi ti' Samar asked
'Ti or ab be hai' Pratha answered honestly and then blushed when she realised what she had said.
Before he could answer Samar's attention was caught by the little girl hugging his knees
'Thaatha' she cried pulling on his legs.
Bending down so he was eye to eye with her Samar said
'Thaatha nahi, Ch-aacha Kaho'
'Thaatha nahi, Th-aatha kaho' nandani repeated sweetly making the group laugh
Samar tried again 'Cha-Cha' again Nandani repeated it back to him ' Tha-tha'.
Looking at the smile on her face Samar said with a laugh ' Aacha Baba, aaj se hum Thaatha ban gaye' as he picked her up and carried her over to the baby swing.
Reaching the group Prithvi watched in happiness as his friends and family took it in turns pushing his princess on the swing that they had all built together specially for her when she had nearly fallen off the swing he had presented to her mother. It was at moments like this that Prithvi was thankful for the things he had in life and knew that inspite of all the bad thing he wouldn't change anything about his life because he knew that both the joys and sorrows in his life had helped make him into the man he was today.
Seeing her father Nandani lifted her arms up to Chand who helped her down and they watched as he ran over to Prithvi who lifted her up onto his shoulders. Once she had grown bored of playing with her fathers hair while he talked with his friends she leaned forward to put her little hands under Prithvi's chin so she look in his eyes and then spoke.
'Papa Gori' she asked him wearing a mini replica of his Sanyo's smile and which Prithvi knew meant that he would give her anything she wanted.
So without worrying or caring where he was or who might be watching Delhi's Maharaj Prithviraj Chauhan made sure his daughter was holding on tight and then got down on all fours and started crawling across the grass, the only important thing for him was the sound of his daughters laughter as she urged him to go faster.
'Maharaj' Prithvi looked up from the pair of feet infront of him and saw one of his soliders standing there.
'Kya baath hai' Prithvi asked even as he started to stand making sure his daughter was secure around his neck.
'Maharaj Jaichand nai sandesh beaga'
As soon as he heard his name Prithvi felt his muscles tighten and his heart rate increase, the joy that he had felt moments ago evaporated.
Lifting his daughter down from his shoulders, Prithvi held her in his arms needing to have that physical contact with her to assure himself she was okay,
'Tum Jo.' Prithvi said to the solider and then realising he had taken his frustration out on the solider made an effort to even his voice and continued on ' Hum a rahe hai'
Waiting until the solider had left Prithvi looked at his daughter and felt his heart catch when she smiled and then leaned forward and kissed him on the forehead the same way that he had been doing to her since the day she had been placed into his arms. Tightening his arms around her Prithvi held her close and sent up a silent pray to heaven that she should always be this happy and innocent.
'Nandani' Challo app Sunjum gori hai, aacha; Prithvi told her
'Aacha, papa' his daughter answered as Sunjum stepped forward to take her into his arms.
'Meri Pyari Nandani' Prithvi said playfully pinching her cheek to see her smile again.
As he turned to leave he shared a look with Sunjum and knew that his friend had understood when he nodded and said ' Sub Kuch Teek Tak ho ga', feeling reassured Prithvi turned to follow the solider.
Feeling uneasy and unable to leave without a final look to make sure that she was okay Prithvi turned around again and saw that everything was how it should have been Nandani was happily sitting on Sunjum's back directing him,Samar and Pratha were on the swing together,and Chand, Arjun and Pundir were all practising, feeling reassured Prithvi turned to head back inside the Mehel, but as he reached the entrance to the Palace he heard shouting and turned just in time to see the arrow hit Sunjum.

Guys thats it. I hope you enjoy the update
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Posted: 16 years ago
#65


Chapter 5

As Prithvi and Samar arrived in the palace gardens, prithvi stopped to admire the view. Aside from the bedroom he shared with his wife and daughter this was his favourite place in the palace because he found a piece of his wife everywhere he looked.
He could see her in the fountain that they had created to celebrate the birth of their angel, smell her in the fragrance of the roses she had lovingly planted and felt her touch everytime he sat on the swing he had designed for her on their wedding aniversary.
saima 2 gud😃.. prcs utmost luv 4 sanyo is so well described...he cud feel n sense her everywhere even shes not wid him....prcs dedication 2wards her...dunno the xact words as 2 how 2 put his luv 4ward bbt i wud call it pure dedication ...
Samar turned to speak to Prithvi but saw from the smile on his face and the faraway look in his eyes that his friends was once again lost in thoughts of his wife. Samar wondered if he had the same smile and look in his eyes when he thought about Pratha, as his thoughts once again returned to her Samar decided to let Prithvi enjoy his moments so that he could find the one responsible for his own joy.
Turning to speak to his friend Prithvi realised that he had been abandoned, and wondered if he had offended Samar with his lack of attention, and then laughed as he realised that maybe his friend understood more than he thought and had decided to find the woman responsible for his own day dreaming rather than waiting for Prithvi. Taking a last look up at his bedroom window Prithvi went off to find his daughter.
his feelings n unspoken thoughts arent hidden from his frends...so swwet!
'Nan-da-ni' 'Nan-da-ni' Pratha watched proudly as her lovely little neice wearing a blindfold raced around the garden fearlossly secure in the knowledge that those around her would never let anything bad happen to her.
'Pukaleya Taathaa' Nandani cried in happiness as Sunjum stopped long enough to be caught by her. Pratha watched on as Nandani ran to her other chaacha's pulling Sunjum along with her.
Stopping at the fountain to get some water for her neice, Pratha admired the angel design etched around the side of the fountain and knew it represented her Brother and his family, but what made her even happier was that her brother and sister in law had added an angel for each member of the family even those who had been and were still against their relationship. Taking the water Pratha turned around and automatically dropped the water.
wow ......wow...i liked it saima...its a depiction of his love!
'BHAIYA' Pratha shouted as she ran over to her brothers who was throwing Nandani up into the air and taking it in turns to catch her again in their arms.
'Kiya Hai Pratha Behna, Chand asked innocently as Pratha lifted Nandani on to her hip.
'Kiya Hai, Humko pooch rahe hai, Bhabi ko baatha?' Pratha replied finding it hard to stay cross, when he lifted his hands to hold both his ears.
'Nandani, ne humko ' Chand started to say but was interupted bu Pratha
'Aacha tho ab Nandani thuj par raj karthi hai' Pratha replied
'Nay' Chand started again but was once again interputted
'Ha, sub ko malum hai ke is mehel mein prithviraj chauhan ki raj Nandani Chauhan sey booth cum hai' Samar answered as he joined the group and handed Pratha some water for Nandani.
She was going to be a great mother Samar thought as he watched Pratha lay Nandani down in her arms to help her drink the water while absently brushing her hair.
'Such kaha tum ney' Bhaiya nei such much issie ko laadli bana diya' Pratha answered as she kissed her neice and set her down on the grass.
'Aacha, tho aap laadli nahi ti' Samar asked
'Ti or ab be hai' Pratha answered honestly and then blushed when she realised what she had said.
Before he could answer Samar's attention was caught by the little girl hugging his knees
'Thaatha' she cried pulling on his legs.
Bending down so he was eye to eye with her Samar said
'Thaatha nahi, Ch-aacha Kaho'
'Thaatha nahi, Th-aatha kaho' nandani repeated sweetly making the group laugh
while im readg i had a faint smile bt aftr tis i was almost laughng out...how sweetly put in saima... so well written abt the cute gal...ur very specific tats wat i like!!
Samar tried again 'Cha-Cha' again Nandani repeated it back to him ' Tha-tha'.
Looking at the smile on her face Samar said with a laugh ' Aacha Baba, aaj se hum Thaatha ban gaye' as he picked her up and carried her over to the baby swing.
Reaching the group Prithvi watched in happiness as his friends and family took it in turns pushing his princess on the swing that they had all built together specially for her when she had nearly fallen off the swing he had presented to her mother.
It was at moments like this that Prithvi was thankful for the things he had in life and knew that inspite of all the bad thing he wouldn't change anything about his life because he knew that both the joys and sorrows in his life had helped make him into the man he was today.
wat lines saima...truly a masterpiece.. i must say...u hve summed up prcs life in 1 sentence...truly i love tis lines a lot...so much meang n dept in it!!!! hes seen so much in life,.overcome all troubles n still fear 2 face so mre n the joys tat he derives happiness out of it,the beautiful memories n cherish them forever... so beautifully described the thoughts n feelings....wah wah ...2gud dear👏

Seeing her father Nandani lifted her arms up to Chand who helped her down and they watched as he ran over to Prithvi who lifted her up onto his shoulders. Once she had grown bored of playing with her fathers hair while he talked with his friends she leaned forward to put her little hands under Prithvi's chin so she look in his eyes and then spoke.
'Papa Gori' she asked him wearing a mini replica of his Sanyo's smile
aww....sanyogita is so much in2 prc.... and which Prithvi knew meant that he would give her anything she wanted.
So without worrying or caring where he was or who might be watching Delhi's Maharaj Prithviraj Chauhan made sure his daughter was holding on tight and then got down on all fours and started crawling across the grass, the only important thing for him was the sound of his daughters laughter as she urged him to go faster.
'Maharaj' Prithvi looked up from the pair of feet infront of him and saw one of his soliders standing there.
'Kya baath hai' Prithvi asked even as he started to stand making sure his daughter was secure around his neck.
'Maharaj Jaichand nai sandesh beaga'
As soon as he heard his name Prithvi felt his muscles tighten and his heart rate increase, the joy that he had felt moments ago evaporated.
Lifting his daughter down from his shoulders, Prithvi held her in his arms needing to have that physical contact with her to assure himself she was okay,
he is troubled yet he wudnt let his daughter go away...basically his actions ...holdg of his daughter r mre of his assurance tat everythg is ok...everythg is alrite...tis line is also well described!!!
'Tum Jo.' Prithvi said to the solider and then realising he had taken his frustration out on the solider made an effort to even his voice and continued on ' Hum a rahe hai'
Waiting until the solider had left Prithvi looked at his daughter and felt his heart catch when she smiled and then leaned forward and kissed him on the forehead the same way that he had been doing to her since the day she had been placed into his arms. Tightening his arms around her Prithvi held her close and sent up a silent pray to heaven that she should always be this happy and innocent.
'Nandani' Challo app Sunjum gori hai, aacha; Prithvi told her
'Aacha, papa' his daughter answered as Sunjum stepped forward to take her into his arms.
'Meri Pyari Nandani' Prithvi said playfully pinching her cheek to see her smile again.
As he turned to leave he shared a look with Sunjum and knew that his friend had understood when he nodded and said ' Sub Kuch Teek Tak ho ga', feeling reassured Prithvi turned to follow the solider.
Feeling uneasy and unable to leave without a final look to make sure that she was okay Prithvi turned around again and saw that everything was how it should have been Nandani was happily sitting on Sunjum's back directing him,Samar and Pratha were on the swing together,and Chand, Arjun and Pundir were all practising, feeling reassured Prithvi turned to head back inside the Mehel, but as he reached the entrance to the Palace he heard shouting and turned just in time to see the arrow hit Sunjum.

Guys thats it. I hope you enjoy the update
i loved it saima..hats off 2 u ...4 writg such a chapter...always u cme mre out than my xpectations...everytime smethg new...n very sensitive...ur ff hve striked a chord wid me...im lovng it...pls do continue!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow saima di.............u really leave me completely speechless after every update yaar👏👏...........it was superb as usual👏👏😳...........n I liked the way all ppl. pamper the little princess.........awww its so cute😳😳............n PRC is a very doting n caring dad.........luv him 4 this n ofcourse luv u 4 such a beautiful update😳👏...........n its cute when Nandidni calls 'thataa😆😆😳..........will wait 4 the next one.😳 ...........but m worried abt. sanjam😭
Edited by anasrashid_fan - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#67

Originally posted by: SandstarQueen



Thanks Kalyani Bena, your words mean a lot to me am so happy that you are enjoying the story. I hope that i can continue to make you all happy😳😊

ur always welcome di..........yes we all r enjoying ur story very much........luv ya😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wow👏, it's brilliant update.U written every emotion very good👏.post next part soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#69
i loved this update, the love that father and a daughter share, I saw that in your update. it was just sooooooooooo emotional and beautiful!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: SandstarQueen

Okay girls i know that i said i would only post 1 update a week but what can i say you guys have inspired me that my head is full of so many ideas, its hard to keep track😆😉. This is a short update for you all i hope you like it😊.

Precap: Prithvi and Sanyo romantic moments😳😉
Chapter 4
'Bhaiya' Pratha shouted as she came breathlessly to a stop in the middle of the bedroom that her brother, his lovely wife and her gorgeous neice shared.
As her brother stopped stroking his wifes hair while she laid asleep in his arms, to raise a finger to his lips to indicate the need for quiteness, Pratha completly forgot the reason that had braught her to his room.
She watched as her brother tenderly lifted Sanyo out of his arms to place her on the bed and after making sure she was covered bent his head to tenderly place a soft kiss on her forehead. As she continued to watch she saw her Sanyo Bhabi smile even in her sleep when her Prithvi kissed her and then felt like a introder when she watched her bother pick up his wifes hand and kiss it before placing it against her heart.
Watching the simply moments like these between Prithvi and Sanyogita always made Pratha happy but also envious and her one wish was that she would find someone who would love her the same way that her brother loved his wife above and beyond anythiny else. As she was thinking this, a face popped into her mind.
Turning away from his wifes side to talk to his siter Prithvi wondered what had brought the smile to her lips and the colour to her cheeks.
'Kiya baatha hain' Prithvi asked bringing Pratha out of her dream world. As he watched his sweet little sisters cheeks turned even darker in colour, having been caught day dreaming, he continued and asked 'Meri Pyari Behna Ki Khusi Ka Karan Kone Hain' he asked.
'Koi Nahi Bhaiya, Hum sirf tum ko batane.. she stammered but before she could finish she was interupted
'Prithvi' Hearing his name Prithvi turned and with a shocked but happy laugh went to greet the newcomer.
'Samar Singh, tum yaha. Chittoragh mein sub teek tho hain' he asked automatically putting duty ahead of friendship.
'Sub teek hain, humko Delhi ki yaad aiye tho hum chaale aiy' answered his friend as they hugged, but Prithvi had noticed that Samar's gaze had moved to Pratha as he spoke.
As he watched his sister and friend communicate without communicating using their eyes, the way that him and his Sanyo did even in a crowded room, Prithvi realised that somewhere along the years his siter had grown into a beautiful young woman just like his wife, and that the little girl who had followed him around and begged him to let her stay with him, might be ready to leave him. Continuing to watch his sister he thought about the man that had just greeted him.
This man who against all odds had gone from being an worthy opponent to a valued ally and who was know as dear to him as his childhood friends, and Prithvi thought about how maybe it was time that he gave him a new much more valuable title and wondered how Samar Singh would like Brother in Law.
While Prithvi was lost in his thoughts, Samar had gotten equally lost looking into Prathas eyes. Golden Brown eyes, set in face that when framed by her long wavy hair stood out against her lovely tanned skin and made her cheeks look liky rosy apples when she blushed.
She knew that she was blushing and that her cheeks were flushed, she knew that her brother was in the room and she should look away from him but it had always been like this between them, starting from the first time they had met four years ago when he had come home with her brother and his wife.
She could still remember seeing him walking into the Mehel behind Prithvi and Sanyogita, with Chand, Sanjum, Arjun and Pundir, his arm in a sling a testemont to the help he had provided her brother in bringing his new wife safely home. No it had been the look in his honey coloured eyes which had first stolen a piece of her heart.
His eyes had glowed like warm honey so that a stranger would have been forgiven for thinking that it was he who had been fighting for the one he loved. In his eyes she saw someone who belived in and was willing to risk everything for love.
'Aach huwa tum aagaye hai, tum hamare saath humari pyari behan ki jaanem din ki kushi mein shamal hona' Prithvi said cheerfully while sadly thinking that this could be the last time his precious sister celebrated her birthday in Delhi if his mother agreed with his propsal and of cause he would have to ask his Junglee Billie he thought with a smile becuase if she thought an injustice was being done to her younger sister she would do worse than just calling him Bigdaa Rahees.
Hearing her brother voice Pratha rememebered where she was and quickly mumbled 'Hum Nandani ko dekh aithi' and hurried out of the room with one last look at her Samar.
Seeing the smile on her face as she left Samar knew that he had made the right decision in coming to Delhi, his heart felt lighter and for the first time in months, in fact since the last time he saw her Samar was truely happy.
As he watched the smile form on his friends face Prithvi felt sure that the decision he had made was the right one and as much as his heart ached with the thought of letting his sister go he was just as happy in the knowledge that she would be happy and most importantly loved.
'Chaalo' Prithvi said as he patted Samar on the back on the way out of the room, but not before stopping to make sure that his Billie was still sleeping.
Hope you all enjoyed the update😊

Thanks Sandy...for the update buddy...😳😃 Lovely awesome keep up the good work..👏⭐️ hmmmm Samar & pratha!😳😆

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