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Meena

@chotidesi

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#891

I really like how you've made this story realistic. I especially like how instead of Arnav immediately realizing he's in love with Khushi, you went through the fallout that usually happens in real life- instead of the romantic comedy version of everyone reciprocating everyone's feelings and life working out. Real life is messy, and that's what you've shown beautifully. Great job!

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DMGFan-2b-not2b

@DMGFan-2b-not2b

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#892

lovely FF! just started to read it and could not move away... I know what you mean about Arnav falling in love with her later but I somehow feel very sorry for Khushi - to have loved a man, and not have him reciprocate it, to have continued to love the man while he continued to fight with her, and to have your feelings handed to him on a platter when he suddenly discovers that he loves her!

The character that you created for Khushi, I was disappointed that she still wore her heart on her sleeve, so much so that it took one moment, on look from Arnav for her to let him be privy to her feelings..

I only registered the dates of the last two updates, I hope the next update is much sooner! :-)

Really enjoyed the writing style

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Anupama

@Anupama.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#893

The update was very layered , giving a much more clear insight and was pleasant to read..

Though I do agree with guggu here, on some level.. I had read her comment earlier and I felt that it would have been effective had it been alongwith part A. Now I don't know if you had broken the parts due to time constraints..then its understandable..but if you had intended it this way then combining both would have been better. For me, it felt a repitition of what a few readers had already worked out and posted as comments on part A.

Nevertheless, a superb narration again Fiery!!

Edited by Anupama. - 11 years ago

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Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#894

Waiting for the next part!! 😃

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pmpm1

@pmpm1

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#895

Funny and filmy... just the way I like it. Yet to finish reading thoughl

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FieryPhoenix

@FieryPhoenix

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#896

Originally posted by: Crazy4Sobti
FPji,

Aap bahut shaitaan ho... pehle aap update nahi dete, phir, status main chapters ke status dikhakaar humhe chedathe ho, phir humse spamming karvate ho. Humne socha comment jaldi naa dekar hum aapko chedenge lekin itna emotional update padne ke baad comment kare bina bahi raha jata.

I think expressing oneself and giving words to emotions is one of the hardest things to do for we humans and I think it's a challenge even for writers who need to think like characters and put their emotions in words. You not only do a brilliant job of that but also peel the layers to the emotions. That's what this chapter was, you literally touched each and every fiber of Arnav's emotions.

So, true one can only realize that they have fallen in love but can never pin point the exact date, time or moment. The realization needs to come within and it has happened to Arnav. For past 8 years Arnav is confused around Khushi and he never understood why she behaves the way she behaves and how much pain she endured and continuing. But now he will start seeing things from her perspective. And I think it is only going to hurt him, to know how much he hurt Khushi.

Arnav has work cut out for him; he literally needs to starts from 8 years back and travel all those years along with Khushi.

I think it is understood that Arnav has strong feelings for Lavanya. That is the only reason he was sure he wanted to be with her and chose her and let her fill in Khushi's place.

Now, he is sure about his love for Khushi and he is no more the teenage who was confused. I can't wait to see how he pursues Khushi.

Thanks so much for your such kind words, even with the leg pulling that you have engaged in in the beginning :p :D

I was very nervous about this chapter and not at all sure whether it would be appreciated at all because on the face of it, there is no forward movement in this chapter. It is devoid of any action too but for me it worked personally because Arnav needed this chapter so as to make his own feelings clear not only to himself but also to the readers and reading your comment makes me think that I may have come close to achieving the goal of this chapter :)

The journey of Arnav Architect and Khushi Architect has just begun! But knowing them both, it should be a crazy ride filled with all sort of weirdness or so I hope. Hopefully whatever it may entail, it will live up to the expectations you have with the story. :)

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FieryPhoenix

@FieryPhoenix

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#897

Originally posted by: Sanaya.Barun
Lol the heart attack was epic! 😆
Oh and i love this Arnav <3 go get your girl ASR! 😎
The way he realized his feelings is amazingly written! Hats off Fieryji!

Thanks for the feedback! :D

That part was my favourite too here - Arnav and Khushi being strange! ;) :D

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FieryPhoenix

@FieryPhoenix

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#898

Originally posted by: yeshyeshna
lovely update
so arnav finally realised his love for khushi😊
waiting for next part

Thanks so much! :D

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FieryPhoenix

@FieryPhoenix

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#899

Originally posted by: guggu
It was a beautiful chapter, I loved your narration. The only thing is that it feels incomplete. I would have preferred the entire chapter 12 to get that sense of completeness that comes with a chapter. It is a much more better experience as a reader. Rest is up to you. :)

Update soon.

Thanks so much for the feedback! :)

About the criticism, first up thanks for your views because many a times the writer and readers feel differently over an issue and it is always nice and beneficial to know the other side. I take your point but I would like to present my view as well - this chapter is an extension of the last chapter yet could not be clubbed with it because the last chapter had them meeting in a situation eerily similar to one which tore them apart a long time ago and the changed feelings regarding that situation - depicting the fact that both were now aware of what that situation entailed not just in itself but also how it affected their lives later along with Arnav's realization that he may have more than just feelings of friendship for Khushi.

While this chapter starts off with Arnav's realization but stems into a more of self reflection over his feelings as they have changed and the hows and whys of it. He comes to terms with this realization and with the past that he has had and the future he would like to.

Hence the two chapters needed to have a separate space for themselves while still being connected (hence both are Chapter 12) or so I feel but I take your criticism too :)