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Originally posted by: DMGFan-2b-not2b
lovely FF! just started to read it and could not move away... I know what you mean about Arnav falling in love with her later but I somehow feel very sorry for Khushi - to have loved a man, and not have him reciprocate it, to have continued to love the man while he continued to fight with her, and to have your feelings handed to him on a platter when he suddenly discovers that he loves her!
The character that you created for Khushi, I was disappointed that she still wore her heart on her sleeve, so much so that it took one moment, on look from Arnav for her to let him be privy to her feelings..I only registered the dates of the last two updates, I hope the next update is much sooner! :-)Really enjoyed the writing style
Thanks so much for the feedback! I hope the story will keep you interested as we move forward :)
About the criticism about the character of Khushi...just to play the devil's advocate, is it not the case that we all fall weak in that one moment when something we may have wanted for so very long but which had always been impossible to achieve suddenly comes within grasping range? For Khushi, seeing something similar to what she feels flicker in Arnav's eyes was that one moment which made her weak enough for him to read her feelings (feelings which he was already aware of btw even if just from the past) but once that moment's initial shock has gone, she does at least attempt to close her eyes and her thoughts to him, doesnt she?
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