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Shahnaz

@ShenzK

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Shahnaz

@ShenzK

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

Author's Note:

Well i am sure not all may be knowing how crowded our Mumbai locals are.. then let me tell you its something where a person with rational mind won't think of entering one.. Yes, you heard me right, especially during the peak hours people like us, stand on the foot-board and hang outside the door. People sticking to each-other, their sweats mingled and the moment they are out they stink.. horribly stinky..

And how did I think of writing something like this?

well That's simple again.. I was just travelling by one on a normal weekday along with the group of friends and suddenly such a thing clicked me.. Now you call me insane, well not a problem, I am hearing things like those since many a days.. nothing new.

Anyways people of Mumbai definitely would have experienced a Mumbai Local, impossible to stay away from one if you stay in Mumbai.. And Indians would at least have an idea of, if not, then at least from the Bollywood movies, Abhi bhi if you don't know how a Local is.. Refer to the picture below.. And you will get to know how horrible it is..

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Shahnaz

@ShenzK

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

INDEX

It's Local

Casual Encounter

Strip to Trip

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fanista

@fanista

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

awesome yaa !!! 👏
gosh you are a killer !😳

you know nowadays OS's are reducing , like really reducing in number and we fans get bored sometimes ..🥱.

hence thanks for initiating happiness into our minds

and making our thoughts pleasant

please write more and pm me when you do 😃

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Regina.Phalange

@Regina.Phalange

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

Damn !! This is such amazing OS 😲

Very different concept ,must say .😊

Loved it and great job 👍🏼

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

it was awesome!! and differentloved itand yeah i know how crowded the local trains in mumbai are..

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medha

@ToujoursPur

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

okay---apicture is worth a thousand words---and the words in the os showed me a full movie, shenz.

and hee hee the middle aged man.

loved their teasing each other---and you made that tunnel long enough.

oh--and i positive thing i got about mumbai locals----they can be really hot, with young lover's passion---and love blooms anywhere huh? romanticism in hell.

fantastically written.

love--medha.

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Deepika

@_Deepika_

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

Hey Swthrt...

Finally i am here to edit my comment...sorry for the delay..i am not at all active here..coming to the OS...i dont know where to start...will start from the start...the concept was different...yet it kept the basic essence of a love story intact...it was sensuous yet emotional...loved the honesty in their feelings towards each other you portrayed in the first few lines..the 2nd portion was sensuous ...i have to give the brownie points to u for not making it appealing yet the language and execution made it classy...the touch of reality was nice..loved the tunnel kiss and the middle aged man ...

You have a signature style of writing..loved the flow in story and execution of the concept...keep writing😳..u are an amazing writer

Love
Deepika

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nidhi

@nidhi1998

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

i understand the mumbai locals

i have travelled in them

and had so much fun

i have to agree

a rational mind would not enter it

but, but, but...

our swaron did

and bloody hell

they had the guts to

do so much harkat.

babe, you have

amazing brain to

think about it in

this way

loved it

its local!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

dont have word right now

to compliment it much

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Destiny_015

@Destiny_015

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

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Shehnaz dude! This is one helluva OS. And I completely loved the way its written. Your writing style is very nice. First of all the plot. Very innovative. Mumbai Locals k baare mein kisne nahi suna. :P Romance there completely rocked. My favorite bit portion was when Sharon said She had to meet to him and then the whirlpool of emotions that Swayam went through. That was hearttouching. Their light talks was lovely. And the tunnel kiss. This was a romancilious and lovely work. Loved it to the core. And this OS is my personal experience. And I have been that middle-aged man. Ek bar nahi 5-6 bar I have fallen in this situation. Couples ko train ka bhid bus ho to bhi chalega. Romance blooms kahin bhi. :P Unka romance shuru hojata hai. Nd I give those expressions - Get a room guys. But kaun sune hamari? 🤣

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