Ek Boond Ishq Fan Fiction: Chahoon Main Yaa Naa: Episode 6 Updated

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Hello Friends!!
I am here with my first FF on Ek Boond Ishq.
To be honest, I had written the story for IPKKND and had posted a few epis there, but due to some situations, could never finish this,
But here I am, writing the story with some modifications adapted to EBI, with Tara and Mrityunjay!
Pardon me for the dialogues written in Hindi but I felt that Hindi dialogues have a feel with them
Do let me know if you have trouble understanding, I will try to add translation in brackets
So lets begin...
it if you Like it 😊
PROLOGUE

Bubbly, chirpy and always spreading joy. That's Tara for you guys. Her life was always for others, for those whom she loved.
She's the apple of the eye of her mother Aradhana, her sister Nandini adores her and she has just bought her dream house for her family on bank loan? And today was the best day of her life. She was getting Nandini married to Aditya.
The fragrance of love, perfect understanding and everything else a girl seeks for in her partner was in Aditya. Handsome, intelligent, caring, an undisputed perfect bachelor in every sense, a girl couldn't ask for more. But was this all??
Tara
After her father, she was the breadwinner of the house. She gave up her studies and never went to college so that her elder sister Nandini could finish her studies and do her MBA.
Her life has always been for her family and getting her sister well settled is the sole motive of her life. She has always found a great support in her school friend Neel.
She is now ready to get Nandini married to the love of her life Aditya.
But is this what God has planned for her???
Mrityunjay
He is a sweet and helpful guy who easily mixes with others unlike his family members who do help people but as if it were a favour done. He hates studying and loved to do gardening. His grand mother Kalavati arranges for funds and wants him to go to Bhopal's best college to do MBA. But he sends his gardener's daughter Radha instead as she wanted to study and did not have enough money.
What happens that such a sweet guy goes mad all of a sudden and his family locks him up in a room instead of getting him treated???
Neel
He is Tara's best friend on whom she can rely at any time. He is an orphan and belongs to Govindpur which is Mriyunjay's village as well.
He lost his parents at an early age and come to Bhopal to earn a living.
Radha
Radha is a studious and ambitious girl who wants to do something big. She is always helped by Mrityunjay who gives all his books and resources to her as he hates studying himself. She goes to Bhopal to do an MBA with Mrityunjay's help.
Why does she come back all of a sudden? Kalavati hates her and considers her the reason for Mrityunjay's miseries. Is she really responsible?
Kalavati
She is the head of the family of the Shekhawat clan. The Shekhawat honor is of utmost priority to her which she cannot let be tarnished at any cost. She is proud of her elder grandson Ranvijay and is equally scared that Mrityunjay's madness will spoil it and prefers to keep him under wraps. But is Mrityunjay's madness all she is trying to hide?
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Posted: 12 years ago
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EPISODE 1

The doorkeeper at the marriage hall entrance greets me with sprinkles of rose water and sweet gestures as we enter the ceremony and almost all the who's who of Bhopal is present, not because Aradhana Devi is a super-rich lady, but because Tara was the super-girl of Bhopal. Anyone in trouble could count on Tara and hence almost the entire colony was present to celebrate the big day of her life when Tara was finally getting her elder sister Nandini married to the love of her life Aditya.

"
Baarat aa gayi" a shrill voice exclaimed and it sounded like a high alert siren was blown. And the next thing we see is a Tara, dressed in a cute yellow suit, run up the stairs, barely panting for breath rush up to the bride's room to inform Nandini. In her room, Nandini's staring loving at her photograph with Aditya and Tara enters screaming, "Nandu!! Ye time hai is tasveer ko ghoorne ka? Saari umar to tere saath rehna hai Aditya ko, ab to choddh de aur chal"
And in a desperate attempt to snatch the frame from Nandini, Tara accidentally ends up smashing it. "Ye Kya kia Tara bacchoo, tu na bas..." Nandini exclaims irritatingly. Just then Aradhana enters and makes a shocked expression "Ye bhi aaj hi hona tha?" and gets worried.
Tara moves to her to console but gets distracted by the noise that comes from outside.

The Baarat is at the entrance, Aditya looks like The Prince Charming, straight out of fairy tales. All the young girls give jealous comments on how lucky Nandini was.
"Huh... Kis baat ki Lucky? Wahan Aditya aa gaye hain aur yahan hume Maa ne kamre mein band kar rakha hai ki Mandap mein hi unko dekh sakte hain" Nandini cribs to Tara on overhearing the comments as she's giving last touch-ups to the looks of The Girl of The Day.
"Ye sab kya keh rahi hai, abhi photo frame toota hai uska to Maa ne quota poora kiya nahi, teri ye saari batein sunengi to ho jaayega Raam Naam Satya" Tara says in a tone of warning.
"Raam naam Satya? Koi Maiyyat mein aaye ho aap? Are shaadi hai meri shaadi..." Nandini has a sense of pride in her declarations but her conversation is interrupted by a sound...

A Loud sound makes her stop speaking, Both are shell-shocked. Nandini's about to get up but Tara stops her and moves to the window herself. But then? She herself trances into a speechless silence on seeing the view. Nandini calls out to her a number of times but, when Tara's shock refuses to allow her to respond, she herself moves to the window to see and she sees...

Aditya, who was some minutes before the star-attraction, was on the ground lying in a pool of blood. He had been shot. And then, Tara sees a jeep blaring away into oblivion. Some baarat-companions were trying in vain to chase the jeep while others were calling up the police. Utter confusion spread in the marriage hall and the whole scenario change.

Nandini rushed downstairs and upon reaching the spot she stopped. Shocked and shaken to the core, nothing uttered from her lips, even tears were afraid ask permission to move out of her ears. Hushed silence prevailed as she walked slowly towards Aditya's body. Nobody had the guts to console her against the shock she had received. She sat beside the body, began shaking it frantically to find minute signs of life in it addressing him repeatedly to wake up.
Aradhana was at the door with the aarti and the entire sequence flashed before her as if a thunder bolt had struck her. The plate dropped off her hand and she collapses at the door

Tara was absolutely blank on what to do. On one side was a stoned Nandini simply staring at Aditya's corpse and on the other hand was Aradhana who had fainted. Gathering courage
to put herself to terms with the situation she her head hear and there asking everyone around how did all this happen? No one had an answer on who did this, "Do ladke aaye the, kaala mask pehne the, achanak Aditya ka collar pakadkar use ghodi se gira diya aur goli chala di,
humne koshish ki unhe pakadne ki, tabhi ek jeep aayi, kuch log utare aur humse maar peet karke unhe le gaye, Par hume number likh liya hai jeep ka
" Some people tried explaining to her what had happened.

"Aapne unhe jaane kaise diya? Roka kyun nahi? Kaise hone diya ye sab?" Tara's questions were innumerable.

Police arrived and moved everyone from the spot and started investigating. Everyone is made to move away from the dead body.
Tara has a tough time moving Nandini away from the spot and make her stand up while wiping off her own uncontrollable tears. She takes her in and makes her sit on the sofa. Meanwhile an ambulance arrives to hospitalize a fainted Aradhana.
Tara asks her most trusted friend Neel to accompany Aradhana "Is waqt Nandini ko mere zaroorat hai. Maa ke saath jaao aur unka khayal rakhna". Neel's eyes are filled with tears of consolation as he gets into the ambulance. They look into each other's eyes and Neel blinks them with a look of affection and consolation that she need not worry. And the door of the ambulance shuts down and it departs off as Tara continues to stare at it with blank eyes, seeing it get lost into oblivion.
"TARA!!!" A shrill cry from inside pulls her back to consciousness and she rushes in, only to find that Nandini lying on the ground in a pool of blood.
"Chatth se kab kood gayi pata hi nahi chala, abhi to yahi baithi this" Chaos is all the more intensified at the location.
Police already there has a new case to attend to. The forensic doctor with them declares "She is dead". Police adds, "Open and shut case of suicide, take both the bodies for post mortem"
This was too much for Tara to let her keep standing on her feet. She sits down on her knees staring at Nandini's deformed body. Her eyes had a fuming uncontrollable rage for revenge. A relative comes to her was trying to calm her down. "Kanoon ke haath bahut lambe hain beta, wo log nahi bachenge!!!"
Tara looks back! "Nahi Mausi, koi police nahi, koi kaanoon nahi, unko to main khud sazaa dungi, gunehgaar wo mera hain" and she made her intentions clear.

Mausi got scared and said, "
Bakwaas band kar tu apni, yahan itna kuch ho gaya tu aur kya karna chahti hai. Apni Maa ke baare mein to soch, unka khayaal kar aur ye sab apne dil se nikaal de"

Someone from inside calls mausi in. She rushes in but Tara's still standing there staring as police takes the bodies away. Then, she notices something in Aditya's hand which drops down in the bushes as the body is taken away.
Saving the eyes of the police, she picks it up.

Its a chain with a locket in it of an unusual design. Tara hides it secretly and makes up her mind, "Jin logo ne meri zindagi ke sabse khoobsoorat din ko barbaad kiya, unhe main nahi chodungi, Police se pehle un tak pahuch kar un sab ko sazaa dungi"
Edited by nikkie - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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That's an interesting track.. So should we envision Vify as Neil?
Keep it coming..

Good write pal.👏

Regards
Sia

Edited by sankalp_prapti - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Very interesting start, made me excited to know what happens next 😉
Well done and do continue 👍🏼
Edited by sabaSpeaks - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hai , Its very nice ff. Continue soon...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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beautiful FF
i was waiting when will someone
write a FF as iFF always makes bad mood to
turn good 😳

waiting for next part
update soon :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanks for the responses guys, second epi may come up tomorrow.
Trying to add a bit of suspense to this and hoping you will like it.
This FF is open to all suggestions in plot changes and I would love to have them from you
Saba! I am still waiting for your comment 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hello Guys!!

While all of you are getting butterflies due to being in anticipation mode that will the Mriara interaction on Monday will allow them to see each other's faces, I am presenting Episode 2 of the FF.
Hoping it satisfies the Mirara hunger on the weekend.
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EPISODE 2
Her entire world being shattered in seconds, Tara was staring at the Locket with bloodshot eyes full of revenge when her phone ringing broke her trance. It was Neel and he called her to the hospital immediately.

Reaching the hospital, the doctor informs everyone that Aradhana was in a critical state as she had suffered from a post-traumatic stroke and needed to be operated soon.
Already plied with debt because of home loan and wedding expenses, arranging finances was going to be a tedious task for Tara. The only priced possession she had was their house. But what'd happen to their state of accommodation if they sold it off as well.
"Tara, tumne kaise socha ki mere hote hue tumhe paison ki fikr karni hogi?" Neel said placing a comforting had on Tara's shoulder. She hugged him and broke down into incessant tears. This solace was very much needed for her.

The doctor arrives and asks them to arrange the money as says he'll begin the initial processes, but can't proceed without the payment. Suddenly priorities change and the focus of the duo is entirely on arranging finances.
"Par ghar bechne ke alawa koi aur rasta nahi hai Neel! Mujhe pata hai, Tumhari haalat bhi zyaada acchi nahi hai, gaon ki zameen ko lekar jo court mein case hai usme tumhare saare paise chale gaye, haan case jeet gaye ho par tumhari mehnat ko is operation ke liye main barbaad nahi hone de sakti "
Neel: "Par Tara, Dost kis din ke liye hote hain"
Tara: "Bas bahut ho gaya, ye ghar to abhi aaya hai, koi khaas lagaav nahi hai isse. Maa thik ho jaaye to doosra ban jayega"
She tried to fake a detached expression. Neel gave up before her and the decision's made. They proceed with the formalities of the sale. Tara takes one last stroll in the house reminiscing old memories and finally locks the door. After paying for the operation they're waiting eagerly for the outcomes.

The doctor comes out and declares, "I am sorry, case bahut critical tha, Aradhana ji coma mein chali gayi hain"

This enraged her further, adding fuel to the fire of revenge within her. Instead of breaking into tears, she wiped them off and made a determined expression to get back at every ill-treatment meted out to her. She moves to the pedestal at the end of the hospital corridor where an idol of goddess Durga was placed and she bursts out, "Kya galti thi meri? Jo itni saari sazaayein ek saath de di aapne? Un logon ko aise kaise jaane de sakti hain aap? Agar meri takleef mein zaraa si bhi sacchayi hai, to un sab se badla lene ka raasta aap hi mujhe dikhayengi"

The next morning comes and Neel and Tara prepare for their Aditya and Nandini's last rites. They visit the hospital where the doctor instructs that Aradhana should stay at the hospital only on life-support and not get discharged right now.
Neel gets a call from his village to reach there urgently. He asks Tara to come with him but she is the least interested and wants to stay back to look for those who were responsible for her misfortune.
While packing Tara chances upon the locket she had found beside Aditya's dead body. She lifts it up and stared at it and simultaneously at a Durga idol in her room which was right before her eyes.
Suddenly Neel notices her and calls out to her from behind asking "Are ye locket kahan se aaya tumhare paas? Kya tum Shekhawat parivar ko jaanti ho?"
Tara was stunned to hear that. She puts her hand down turns back towards Neel asking "Kaun Shekhawat?"
and then she stopped her words from revealing further and she awaited Neel's answer.
He narrates, "Humare gaon, ka sabse ameer aur izzatdar parivaar hai Shekhawat parivar. Kisi zamaane mein royal family hua karti thi. Ab to khair Bharat mein democracy hai, raaj-paat to raha nahi, par gaon waale ab bhi unki bahut izzat karte hai.
Tumhe pata hai, jo mere zameen ko lekar problem chal rahi thi, inhone hi to solve karaayi thi. Sabki madad karte hain wo.
Apne niyam aur usoolon ke ye itne pakke hain ki unke aage aur kisi cheez ya insaan ki koi keemat nahi inke liye. Koi bhi galat ho sakta hai par inke baare mein kabhi koi baat nahi galat ho sakti. Ghar ke har sadasya ke gale mein unke pushtaini (ancestral) nishaan ka locket hota hai. Jo locket abhi tumhare paas hai na, kuch waisa hi. Par tumhe ye kahan se mila?
"

The last question breaks Tara's trance, she decides to change the topic and not reveal her plan, "Are ye unka kaise ho sakta hai? Koi ittefaq hoga. Ye to hume humari ek dost ne gift diya tha ka..."
Even Neel continues, "Hoga ittefaq hi waisa hi, chodo na isko!"

He tries to keep it back but Tara stops him, "Nahi Neel, ye to kaafi interesting hai. Kitni mazedar baat hai na ki mera locket un logo ke pushtaini nishan jaisa hai, jinhone tumhari itni madad ki"
Neel notices this is lightening her mood, she isn't sad anymore and lets her keep it while Tara continues, "Unhi ki to wajah se meri zindagi badal gayi" satire creeps into her voice and Neel isn't able to understand why she said that. He queries, "Matlab" and Tara smartly covers-up, "Matlab, unki wajah se hi to tumari zindagi badal gayi, tumhari problem solve hui, tabhi to tumhare gaon rehne jaa rahe hain hum, nahi to bina ghar ke yahan Bhopal mein kahan jaate" her answer satisfies Neel and he leaves the room to resume the departure proceeding while Tara has a monologue "Keemat to ab main unhe bataungi, kisi ki zindagi ki, meri Nandu ki zindagi ki, un mein se jinhone Aditya ki jaan li hai, unhe to uska badla apni jaan se hi dena hoga"

They catch the train from Bhopal to Govindnagar, which was Neel's village. On their way Tara puts forward a seemingly innocent query, "Kuch aur batao na Shekhawats ke baare mein"
Neel: "Kya batayein, itne acche log to humne aaj tak nahi dekhe, kitni madad karte hain sabki aur ..."

"Haan haan pata hai, Tumhari zameen dilane mein bhi unhone madad ki thi, pata hai" Tara interrupts in a disinterested tone "Ye batao ki unke pariwaar mein hai kaun kaun?"

Then Neel explains, "Ghar ke mukhiya Rudra Pratap Shekhawat aur unke do bete hain Ranvijay aur Mrityunjay.
Ghar ki saari zimmedari unki Daadi Kalavati Devi sambhalti hain. Badi sakht mizaaj ki hain wo, koi galti bardasht nahi hoti unse.
"

Tara's hunger for introspection isn't satisfied yet, "Par Neel ye to batao ki ye sab log kaise hain, matlab Daadi ka to samajh gaye aur baaki?"

Neel: "Ranvijay ka kya batayein, choti umar se apne pita ki kaam mein madad karta hai to uska bartav kaafi gusse waala hai ho gaya hai, saara gaon darta hai uske gusse se.
Aur haan, unke maali ki beti bhi rehti hai unke saath, naam hai Radha... Radha ka to kya batau tumhe Tara...
"
We see a sudden glee on Neel's face when he is about to describe but is stopped by Tara
Tara: "Aur???? Unke Pariwaar mein aur koi nahi hai?"
Neel: "Aur kaun? Mrityunjay? uske baare mein jaan kar kya karogi?"
Tara gets alert, seems like a mystery to unfold is awaiting her, and she's near to knowing all she wants as Neel continues, "Kabhi kabhi lagta hai, Bhagwan ne duniya kitni galat banayi hai, par Mrityunjay ko dekh kar ye khayal dimaag se nikal jaata hai. Dil uska jitna saaf hai utna masoom bhi. Har kisi ki madad karta hai,
sab use pyare hai,
muskurata hai to lagta hai din bhar ki thakan pal mein gayab ho gayi aur hazaaron phool khil gaye.
Par wo kehte hain na gulab ke phool ke saath kaante bhi hote hain,
jaane kya ho gaya ki uske gharwalon ne use band kar diya ghar ke ek kamre mein...
"

A calm listener Tara was surprised at the last statement, "Kyun?"
Neel: "Keh rahe the paagal ho gaya hai, usse milne nahi diya gaya kisi bahar waale ko mahino tak, ab to saara gaon taras gaya use dekhne ko..."

The train halts and who gets off the train is a more confused Tara, plied with more questions instead of answers. She spends a sleepless night recollecting what Neel had told her and trying to draw conclusions. The next morning she gets up and takes a walk in the village.
It was pretty early and Tara was strolling in Neel's apple-orchard and there weren't too many people around. Suddenly she heard a tree shake. Turning towards it she advances towards it trying to find out. She stood below the tree and tried to gaze through the branches to find the source of shaking. And then, she spotted that it was a human. A guy had climbed up the tree and was plucking apples. Realizing that, she got alarmed and screamed to raise alarm and call the guard of the orchard "Chor chor chor..."

The thief got scared and let go of the apples, all of which fell on Tara's head like rain. Infuriated she shouted, "kaun hai!!! Abhi ke abhi neeche utaro!!" The thief tried to pay heed, but a branch broke, and he suffered the same fate as the apples, and before they knew it, Tara was lying on the ground with apples all around the guy over her 😆

LINK TO EPISODE 3
Edited by nikkie - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hai, Its fantastic update. Pls post character sketch. Continue soon..

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