Ayaan& Humeira Stories (Update Pg. 7. Ch. 1: To You, With Love) - Page 2

Nice 😃i

Omg! Why haven't I seen this before?!

Pretension - I loved the way you've depicted Humeira's thoughts. In some way, Rajni has always been a part of Humeira. She's more like an alter ego, her unconscious rather than a different personality. It makes so much sense that Humeira would use Rajni just to know what it would feel like for someone to love you like that.

Jealousy - I like how you switched from Humeira's POV to Ayaan's. And I love how you described her form his perspective. Everything from her hair to her sari and him missing her stealing glances at him.

Promises - Oh the irony! Whenever I imagine Humeira and Ayaan in a younger version, I always think of him as someone protecting a little Humeira from bullies. But alas, the one person who he couldn't save her from was he himself.

You write so well! And you capture a character's thoughts so well! I hope you continue to write and if you get the time, you write short stories and fan fics too! It would be so awesome!

I've read your work on Fanfiction net, and I was super impressed.

Holding Tight

"What's wrong, my little Jaan?" Humeira questioned her thirteen year old daughter who had taken a seat on Humeira's bed. Her daughter stared at her fingers, while using her other hand to tuck her unruly curls behind her ears.

Humeira knew it was a definite indication that something was bothering her daughter, Janaan.

"Ammi, How can you tell if someone likes you?" Janaan bit her lips not quite looking at her mom, as she voiced her question.

Humeira smiled softly at her daughters innocent query.

"Ja--"

"Naan Baaji, its very easy." Humeira's eight year old interrupted as he jumped on to his mothers bed.

"Zayn, what have I told you about jumping on the bed?" Humeira scolded her son.

"That its good for me?" Zayn looked at his mother and shrugged, earning him a tight tug on his ears.

"Really?" Humeira shook her head. Her son seemed to have taken after his father in matters of mischief.

"Ouch, Ammi. Okay Im sorry. I wont do it again." Zayn pulled away and rubbed his ears as soon as his mother let go.

Humeira knew that it would most probably happen again, but she let the matter go. She had a more important matter to consider. Considering Janaan hadn't complained about Zayn calling her 'naan' meant that theproblem was serious.

"If I tell you how, will you tell me who it is that you're worried about?" Humeira nudged her daugther questioningly.

"Hmm...maybe." Janaan answered with hesitation.

"Baaji, I told you its very easy to tell. It's how a person holds on to you." Zayn interjected.

"I mean, how can you really tell? Could you tell when Abbu liked you?" Janaan ignored Zayn and looked up at Humeira.

"She was clueless. I had to chase after her, declaring my love for her a million times before she finally accepted." Humeira's husband walked in, just arriving back from work. He shrugged off his black jacket on a nearby chair.

"Abbu!" Zayn bounded from the bed into his fathers arms.

"Zayn! I swear you have spring attached to your foot." Humeira shook her head before turning her attention to her husband. "I wasn't the clueless one, Mr. Ayaan." She looked at Janaan, wrapping her arm around her daughter's shoulders. "Your Abbu was terrible when it came to matters of the heart."

"Really?" Janaan looked at her mother curiously. "So did you like Abbu first or was it the other way round? What did you do? How did you tell him? How did it all happen?"

"Whoa, slow down there." Ayaan turned Zayn around before taking a seat on the other side of his daughter, pulling Zayn onto his lap. "Why are you so curious? Is there something I should know about? Is there a boy I need to beat up?"

"Abbu!" Janaan found her fingers interesting again.

Ayaan glanced at Humeira, raising his eyebrows in question. Humeira shrugged, then blinked once to indicate that she'd handle it.

"As you know, your Abbu and I grew up together. I don't quite remember when I started liking him but he was always teasing me, but also always looking after me."

"Yeah, I was her superhero." Ayaan looked smug.

Humeira poked Ayaan in his ribs, as Zayn looked at his father with renewed interest.

"Did you have a cape too, Abbu?" Zayn asked.

"I wish he had one so I could choke him with it." Humeira replied. "He was so troublesome sometimes. He was also quite a flirt, so I used to get frustrated often."

"Hey it wasnt my fault, that girls found me charming."

Humeira shook her head. "It was hard, and there were times I couldn't tell if your Abbu liked me or not. I couldn't tell whether we were just friends or something more."

"So what did you do then?" Janaan looked at her mom.

"You should have asked Abbu to hug you, Ammi." Zayn offered.

Humeira smiled remembering when she'd done exactly that.

"Why is that, Zayn?" Ayaan asked Zayn before exchanging a glance with Humeira.

"It's like I said before. You can tell if someone likes you by the way they hold you. If they hold you really tight then they really love you."

"Like this?" Ayaan tightened his arms around his son.

Zayn laughed. "That's too tight, Abbu."

Humeira found herself shaking her head again at her husband and sons antics. She looked back to Janaan. "I mustered up my courage to tell him how I felt. We had fought a few times and I decided I had to know how he felt about me."

"But what if he doesn't like me". Janaan voiced, biting her lips. "I mean I don't dress the way some of the other girls do, and my curls are so unruly, not like those other girls with their straight hair."

"Then--"

"Then he's an idiot. Ayaan interrupted Humeira. You're more beautiful than any girl I know, after all you have your mom's pretty features," He winked at Humeira before continuing, "and what's wrong with your curls. I remember that it was my curls that attracted your Ammi to me. She loved running her fingers through them."

"Ayaan!" Humeira sent a glare in her husands direction while blushing.

"Is that why Ammi keeps ruffling my hair too, when she scolds me?" Zayn asked his father.

Ayaan laughed, "Yeah, shes completely jealous of our curly hair." He ruffled his sons hair before turning his attention back to Janaan. "You're beautiful, Janaan. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise. Besides if someone hurts you, you just have to let me know. Zayn and I'll take care of him, wont we Zayn?"

"Yes we will." Zayn held his hands out making fists with it and punching the air.

"Abbu!" Janaan exclaimed embarassed, but a small smile lit her lips.

"I'm serious. Sometimes guys can be a little slow. I know I almost lost a chance to be with your Ammi, till I realized how much I loved her, then I didn't want to let her go. Ayaan squeezed his daughters shoulders. So if someone really likes you then they hold on to you. They hold you tight in their hearts."

"See I told you." Zayn said smiling.

Janaan smiled, "Thank You, Ammi! Thank You, Abbu!" She hugged both her parents.

"Hey what about me?" Zayn asked.

"Thank you, my dear Zaynie!"

"You're welcome, Naan!"

"You're a brat!"

"And you're mean!" Zayn stuck his tongue out at his sister.

Janaan tried to grab Zayn but he jumped out of reach and ran out of the room. Janaan followed him, chasing after him.

"Janaan! Zayn!" Humeira rose from the bed calling out after the kids but was stopped by Ayaan.

"Where are you going?" Ayaan wrapped his arms around Humeira's waist.

"Ayaan! The kids are bickering again."

"They are always bickering." Ayaan rested his head against Humeira's

"What are you doing?" Humeira tried to pull away from Ayaan.

"Can't you tell, Humeira Begum?" Ayaan pulled his wife close. "I'm holding on to you."

Humeira smiled. "I dont feel very loved."

Ayaan tightened his arms around Humeira.

Originally posted by: Aishah8

Omg i have been looking for ayra one shots or ff for ages these two pieces were mindblowing and felt so realistic ,I hope you write more os based on ayra I would love an oneshot of them being a proper family like ayra as parents that would be adorable but anyway thanks for sharing your work !

This is so cute.

Originally posted by: paridhiadhikari

This is so cute.

I love this domestic scene with Ayaan and Humeira as parents.

Absolutely adorable and you never fail to impress with your writing :)))

Just a suggestion though, maybe you should update the thread title to let people know you've posted a new OS.

Will you please write a wedding or a holiday themed one, if you have time?

Thanks heaps, and keep writing <3333

Originally posted by: Sanami

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The thread title. :) Thanks for the suggestion. Did you have something specific in mind regarding the holiday or wedding theme? I will definitely try to write one if I can.

Originally posted by: paridhiadhikari

Surprise me? Hahaha I don't know! I love anything and everything you write!

I'll take whatever you come up with :)))) Just not too much angst please! Something sweet like this last OS, please.

I'm so excited to read it!

Also it's really bothering me that your work is not getting as many views/likes/comments as it should. It's so unfair, because your writing is truly one of the best on the forum.

It's such a shame that your work is going unnoticed!

Hopefully people will make an effort to actually leave you some comments in the future, because you really do deserve it.

Will you send me a PM please, when you update? Just in case, because I don't want to miss out!

TC,

Paridhi :)))

i am absolutely LOVING THIS!!!
especially loved jealousy-what i love about ayra is the subtlety and undercurrents of their relationship
can you write one from ayaan's pov from the show where he says he loves her after humaira leaves in anger? 😊

btw, pm please?😳