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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

Alright! Here it is! I hope you all enjoy! Just so you guys don't get lost, here's some stuff.

Firstly, my Hindi is atrocious! Therefore, if any mistakes, don't mind. That's why I made Aisha NRI-ish. But anyways, I am going to India in a couple weeks so hopefully I will polish my skills.

Secondly, this FF is called Evoloution because of the changes Vidya will be going through. Think of it as the new and improved Vidya. The charactar of Aisha is like a guardian angel or 'Hanuman' for all of Vidya's obstacles and 'Ravans' (hint hint Sindura!😆😉)

Finally, this is not a totally romantic fic however i will try. Even I am not immune to the cuteness of SV.

Enjoy!

W/luvv
Gaurie

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

Episode One- -Meeting Aisha

Vidya searched and searched but could not find it at all.

Vidya: Maine kahan pe rakdeeya? Chinu came in.

Chinu: Aap kya doond rahe ho bhabhi?

Vidya: Woh. Uski jo divai hain. Voh mughe mil nahin ra.

Vidya looked at the cuboard again.

Chinu: Ji voh, Jijaji ne kaha tha ki voh sari divai katam ho chukka hai aur naye lena hai. Mein abi Bharat ko school se lekare jaraha hoon. Agar aapne chaha to mein aapko le sakta hoon.

Vidya: Haan. Vahi theek hoga.

She hurried off with Chinu. Sitting in the car, Vidya stared out the window, resting her head slightly. Even though she would never admit it, she did feel a little tired.

Chinu: Kya hua bhabhi? Chinu was obviously worried.

Vidya: Ji? Ney. Kuch nahin, mein bas thakgayi.

Chinu: Kyun nahin, aap jitna kaam jo karti ho.

Vidya smiled and rested her head again. She stood beside Chinu while they waited for Bharat. She watched as children ran into their parents arms and her heart ached a bit. Was it fair for her to ask for a child? She always loved children. Now that he was getting slightly better... No. She shook her head. When Shambunath thought it was the right time, it would be. Vidya saw a mandir off to the side.

Vidya: Bhaiya, mein bas vampe jo mandir jake aati hoon.

Chinu: Theeke bhabhi. Mein aapko ghari men milti hoon.

She walked into the mandir. An idol of Ganeshji stood, as well as a young girl.

Girl: Mein yeh kaise karu? Hmmm... hello? Nahin nahin, namaste?

Vidya smiled as she watched the girl.

Girl: okay, don't be nervous Ash, this is, like, God! Theeke. To, mere paas kuch shikait (is that how??) hai. Pehle...

Vidya: Aap theeke ho?

The girl spun around so quickly that she slightly scared Vidya.

Vidya: Aap theeke to ho naa?

Girl: Ji. Haan. Aap kaun?

Vidya: Meri naam hai Vidya. Aur aapki?

Girl: Aisha. Aap mere –uhh- madat karogi?

Vidya, stunned at the sudden friendship was taken aback but then agreed.

Aisha: Mein yaan pe nayi aayee hoon aur, -umm... Aap yahanki ho na?

Vidya: Ji haan.

Aisha: Please, no ji-vi aap what ever.

Vidya looked at her puzzled then the girl quickly replied.

Aisha: Ji, meri matlab, aap mujhe aap mat pukaro.

Vidya nodded and smiled again. Aisha looked about 15ish but by the way she talked and how she was so confident, she could pass for 18. Her hindi was a bit off as well. Something about her made Vidya smile.

Vidya: To mein kya karsakti hoon?

Aisha: Mein iss school mein kaam karti hoon, ek English teacher ke nate. Hum ek Nautanki teacher mein talaash hain. Jo Ramayan ko jaante hain. Aap aise shakse ko jaante hain? Ya...

Aisha peered at Vidya.

Vidya: Kya hua?

Aisha: Kya aap mujhe bata sakti ho ke suhaag raat pe, Ramji Sitama se kya kaha?

Vidya: Ramji ne Sitama se kaha tha ki...

Vidya recited the words she had heard so many times and had etched in her heart. Those words of fidelity, words of truth, words of loyalty. 'You, and only you'. Upon finishing, Aisha had a huge grin on her face and applauded.

Aisha: Excellent! Vidyaji... Didi, kya aap iss school ki nautanki teacher banogi?

END

A/N :: I know its short but it's just a preview. Please review and criticize at will!

Edited by Gaurie - 18 years ago

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Nabihah

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Posted: 18 years ago

What can i say? speechless!!!! u r sooo talented!!! awesome! cant wait for more! i am going to love vidyas change 😉 😆 any ways..luv it soo far..pleasee cont.. 😃

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Shazia

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Posted: 18 years ago

Wow Gaurie, it was adoarble! I'm locing the already budding relationship between Vidya and Aisha 😳 Lol and if it makes you feel any better, my hindi sucks too 😳 😆 I mean i understand it all and i can even say it, but writing it is another story 😆 And your's is fine, i could understand everything completely 😊 Good job, hope you continue soon! 😳 👏 👏

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

Oh my!!! you guys do not understand your compliments make me smile! Thanks! I'm working on Episode two right now so yeah...

-Gaurie

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Ammu

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Posted: 18 years ago

Areyyy it's so cute..!! Really liked the way you added a new character, adds some different flavour to the story. 😛 Nice job, keep writing !!

And it's oky about the Hindi, everything is understandable 😉

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

So i forgot to add something in the begining...
I started the idea a while ago, around the time where they were trying to get shalu and chinu married but when i did, i didn't even realize they'd actually marry!!! 😕 😳 so, don't wierded out if there is romance scenes (cute, but kinda romantic) between chinu and aisha. like i said, i didn't know 😳

besides, i think some pplz will like it cuz i still cant see it with shalu and chinu!

-Gaurie

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

Here's episode two! i made the tormentor in Aisha's life a chachi as well just to show the link between vid and ash. Enjoy!

Episode Two- -Ab Chachiji se milo

Vidya: Kya?

Aisha repeated herself, but soon realized that this wasn't why Vidya was so puzzled.

Aisha: Meri matlab, aap yahan pe nautanki sika sakti ho?

Vidya was shocked at this request. She thought it over. She loved kids and working with them would be a dream come true. And, she was already used to teaching children about the Ramayan and other stories. Then again, she already had so many responsibilities, taking care of him, the house. And what of Sindura Didi? She would surely disagree. Then she looked at the majestic Ganesh that stood behind Aisha. It seemed to smile at her and reassure her that all will be well.

Chinu: Bhabhi? Aap abitak yahan pe ho? Me aur Bharat kitne der kiliye intezar karete.

Bharat: Haan. Kya hua Maami? Oh, hi Aisha Didi!

Aisha: Hey Bharat!

Chinu looked back and forth from Aisha and Bharat then asked.

Chinu: Tum dono ek doosre ko jaante ho?

Bharat: Haan, yeh meri english teacher hai.

Chinu grinned at this. He complimented Aisha for how well she was teaching Bharat. At this, Aisha blushed, but soon faced Vidya again.

Aisha: To, kya kehti ho? Karogi?

Chinu: Kya?

Aisha explained everything to Chinu, to which he agreed. He said how he thought it was a great idea and would really be a great experiance for her. Vidya then expressed her concerns, and whether or not the rest of the family would accept it or not. At this, Chinu picked up the hint about Sindura.

Chinu: Hmm... shayad... Aisha, aap humare ghar dinner kilye agao. Shayad aap Sin- I mean, pariwaar ko mena sakte ho.

Chinu, looked rather hopeful. So did Bharat. He was very fond of this teacher, who insisted everyone call her didi instead of miss. She was more like a sister teaching them than all the other strict teachers. Vidya, was blushing at the arrangements being made, just for her. Aisha, however, looked troubled.

Aisha: Umm... Mein phir, abhi, uhh, ghar jaake-

At that moment, a very large woman entered.

Aisha and Bharat: Oh no!

Chinu: Kya-

Woman: Hey! Tum sab log yahan pe kyun ho? Tum log parne nahin aata, kya? Saaf saaf door pe likha hai ki school ke baad yeh mandir baand hota hai! Aur tum, Aisha, tum to yeh maloom hai, to inlog kaise aye huh?

Chinu frowned at the rude lady. He was about to protest when Aisha put her hand up to stop him.

Aisha: Ek minute Chachiji. Yeh ek mandir hai, shayad aap nahin maloom. Yahan pe koi bee aa sakte hain. Yeh koi dukaan nahin hai jo kulta hai aur bande hota hai.

Aisha added 'moti' under her breath, mostly directed to Cinu, Bharat and Vidya. At this, Chinu and Bharat snorted.

Chachiji: Moti kaun? Aur tum kaun banti ho haan? Bas, mummy-daddy timko chorgaye to aap iss school ki rani bangayi? Hah! Ek baat samjo Aisha, yeh school meri hai. Aur ek baat aur, tumahri mummy-daddy kabhi vaapas nahin ayengi.

By this time, Aisha's eyes had welled with tears and she ran outside.

Vidya: Dekhiye, mein aap log ko itne aache nahin jaanti par aap aise nahin karna chiyeta.

Chachiji: Ab tum mereko sikhaigi? Ab jao. Hai Ram, ab sare saaf mughe hi karna parega!

Vidya frowned at her and ran outside to look for Aisha. Chinu and Bharat followed. They found her out on the bench staring at the now setting sun, tears streaming down her face.

Vidya: Aisha? Dekhiye, aap ro maat. Voh bas. Bura mat mano.

Aisha just laughed with mirth.

Aisha: Hah! Bura maano? Kabhi nahin! Sorry, lekhan voh bas aisi hai. Ghar me bhi voh aisi hai. Lekhan... Kuch nahin. Haan to hum chale? Hum jo bhi kare, par hum aapko iss school ki nautanki teacher hi banwayenge.

Edited by Gaurie - 18 years ago

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Kritika (kidii)

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Posted: 18 years ago

The Hindi is okay...I can understand everything! 😃 You can write very welll!!!!!!!Keep it goin' and I love that you added a new charachter.... 😊

Kritu

p.s. update soon!!!!! Varna my *belan* will cum out!😆

Edited by Kritika. - 18 years ago

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#10

Originally posted by: Kritika.
The Hindi is okay...I can understand everything! 😃 You can write very welll!!!!!!!Keep it goin' and I love that you added a new charachter.... 😊

Kritu

p.s. update soon!!!!! Varna my *belan* will cum out!😆

Uh oh! Don't worry, im working on Episode 3 right now!!! 😆

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