My first attempt at Fanfic

"Mujhe badi fikar ho raho hai, beta, yeh sab kaise hoga? Ek to itna lamba safar, aur upar se Punjabi shaadi! Hamain unki reeton ke bare main khuch bhi pata nahin….kuch bhool ho gai to?", a women was telling his son. Worry was evident from her words as well from the wrinkles of her face.

"Aap bevajah fiker kar rahin hain Ammi, Kapoortala se unke koi parivaar se koi yahaan aane vale hain, hamein sab kuch samjha denge, aur saari taiyarion main madad bhi karenge….", a tall boy sat by the lady's knees, eyeing a jhoomka in the great spread of jewellery and garments around him.

"…vaise bhi aapne to is hi ghar mein chaar-chaar shaadiyan karvayi hai. Is baar to sirf barat le ke jaana hai!", said the boy reaching out to the jhoomka.

"Arre, dekho bhaijaan, aap hum auraton ki kaam main dakhal na do! Vaise bhi, hamari bhabhi ko chod ke aapki choice badi kharab hai….." one of the seven girls said…making all of them giggle.

"Yaad hai Ammi, aapa ki shaadi main bhaiyaa ne mujhe hare ghagre ke saath kala dupatta pasand karvaya tha….", said the youngest looking one, smiling.

"Bhaijaan, aur unke raang…..hara ya kala ya fir bhoora…..sara samay apni fauj ki baatein…..aur kuch aata bhi hai kya unko??", said another, still giggling!

The boy oblivious to all this mazak masti, was staring at the golden jhoomka, with red beeds…….thinking of his beloved, his love……his would-be-wife…..

"Maine agar tere saath freashers ball main aane se inkaar kar diya, to tu mujhe mana nahin sakta tha??"

"Hum bhi kamre main yahi soch rahe the…."

"Par tune aaj miss bahut kuch kiya, sabne itna maza kaiya, itna naache…."

"Aap kise bevkoof bana rahin hain? Yeh hum bhi jante hain aur aap bhi, ke aape to ball main kiya w o h dance nahin tha!"

"To kya tu sikhayega mujhe dance karana……?"

The look in his eyes said it all. He, who had never danced, never beheld a girl other than his sisters, never gone so close to anyone, never felt love……took her hand and lead her to the deserted dancefloor!! And they dance, for what seemed like hours…..without any music with perfect harmony!

"Captain Ali Begh!!", called a voice from the courtyard!

Ali shot up and rushed to the door….the voice sounded weirdly familier, but Ali couldn't recongnise it…..

"SURIJI…..aap!!', yelled Ali

"Badi changi gal hai puttar, tu evahi Pooja se biyah kar lega aur hamein batayega bhi nahin?? Par meri beti apne Suriji ko nahin bhooli, to maine usse kaha….ke pahele us gadhe ki khabar leta hoon, fir teri baraat main naachta aaunga!", smiled Suriji. "Waie puutarji, sachhi gal e hai, ki main ithhe Kanpur vich apne bhanje de ghar aaya si, aur vahan yeh tere vaalidsaab mil gaye."

"Hamein to vishvaas hi nahin ho raha hai…..Ammi, apa….ye dekhiye Suriji, aaye hain, Academy se! Main inke bare main aapko apni chitthion main likhta tha na?",Ali explained!

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Hey,
Do tell me the how u like it.............

cheers,
jiv

Nice...
Very Nice in fact!

Too Good... Please continue!
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Is it abt d wedding of Ali-Pooja, BTW it is awesome plz continue and don't mind letters ko bold mat karo plz, parne me asuvidha hoti hai, thankz for dat fanfic.... 👏

wow i simply loved it my ali pooja wedding.

hey that's agreat part jivs... 😳 😳
ali and pooja are getting married?? ... 😳
would love to see them together.. 😊 😊

continue soon! 😊

"Parjaai, laddu motichur ke hi mangvana, shaadi main unke bina ji nazza nahin aata!"

"Nahin bua, mujhe to kheer khaani hai."

"O puttar, tujhe kya maloom? Saare Kapurthala vich koi byah motichor de bagair hua hai?!"

"Nahi……….mujhe kheeeeeeeeer!"

A boy of about four and an old woman were arguing, sitting in the varandah of a mension-like house surrounded by trees. A Sardar enters with three other men and pulled a stool near the jhoola on which the woman was sitting.

"Dono mangva lenge puttarji, koi gal nahin! Jo bhi hamare chotu ko pasand hai, wohi banega didi ki shaadi vich!"

"Tu bhi Surender, bigaad baitha hai in bachhon ko!", said the old woman wth a smile.

"Inhise to hamari jind vich rang bhar aate hain, biji! Oye sunlo, o khotyo, saadi kudi di shaadi main koi bhi kami nahin rehni chahiye…..O biji, apni jhalli sahelion de naal bazaar gai si, vaapas kab aayegi?"

"Bachchi, waqt ki badi pakki hai, das baje ka keh har gayi thi, ja dekh le, apne kamre main sahelion ke saath gappe maar rahi hogi……"

"Aaho-ji! Yeh armywale yeh cheez badi changi sikhate hain!

"Captaindidi to kad ki aa gai si…..didi…………………….!!", boy yelled!!

"Oye, Phate dhol, tu phir se chillaya!", a girl of about 24, tall, pretty and bubbly, rushed out with a stick and ran behind the boy!

"Bachchi, tu us Bandar ke piche mat bhaag. Tu ja, apne dostan de naal….", and the girl went in……….

"Beep-beep"

Her cell phone flased "1 Message Received"
Her fingers trembled, she smiled…..she knew who this could be…….clicked, "Read"

"Good MorningJ" it read!

No senders name, but she knew it! It was he, who was the sender of all the incoming messages to her heart……Captain Ali Begh!



"Kiska message hai, Poojadi?" and a group of about fifteen giggling girls entered her room.

"Mujhe to ek hi network se incoming aate hain……", and the girls giggled again!

"Ab to aap pakdi gayi didi, aaj to aapko apni academy waali baatein humain karni hi padegi."

"Haan, didi, aaj hum aapko nahin jaane dene waale"

"Achha? To theek hai, poorane messages padh hi deti hoon! Bolo kya bataun?"

"Aap ke saath jiju wahin the na? Aur kaun kaun the?"

"Hmmmm…..Ali aur main vahi mile the….main kisike saath baat karti hui gir padi aur who mujhse baat karne gaya, par main behosh ho gayee….",Captain Pooja Ghai was all-set to venture into her old memories…..but didn't know where this journey would take her!

"….usse sab 'usool' kehte the, aur mujhe 'panjaban', dono naam jat ne rakhe the…."

"Jat? Kaun jiji?"

"Arre sada Huda, kamal da banda tha. Hamesha hasta, aur aspas sab ko hasata rehta tha….saari kudiyan paagal thi us jhalle de piche!"

The young ones in the group giggled at the mere imagination of him.

"….aur tha Yudi, w o h chote bachche jaisa tha, ekdam stupid! Par dil da bada changa tha. Kudion da department weak tha uska…….hum uski bahut khichai karte the!…", Pooja's eyes were flipping through the pages of Kanchanjunga Military Academy…..

"Aur…………Suriji, humare liye papaji jaise the, kabhi data diya karte the, par saare bachchon ke dil pehchante the, Lolita mam thi, Dr.Shalini thi, w o h teacher kum aur dost uski……sabse khatarnaak, BC tha, usse Huda 'Tau' kehta tha….usko jhelna ek drill poori karne jaisa tha"

"Phir "quaidi" tha, kam bolta tha, par jab bhi bolta sach bolta, theek bolta…..dosti main, aur dushmani main jaan de jaye! Aalekh, kai baar hamein kuch galat karne se roka hai usne….! Admi ko turant hi pehchan jata tha…..bas ek baar hi bhool kar di……", Pooja's voice shivered, and then, "Aur kuch, ya itna bas hua?………….."

"Aur didi, tumhari who best friend, jiske bare main aap ma ko likhti thi….kya naam tha…….haan…..Naina??"

"Naina……?? W o h……………..", her voice died down………………. "Arre, kudiyon, tumhe, saariyaan nahin chunni kya…..meri shaadi main to 'only best dressed allowed", kya?"

The girls giggled and ran away to the next room where all the other ladies were making purchases.

Pooja was left behind….alone…..lost in thoughts……Naina's name baught tears in her eyes….for a second….. "We have to move on…..all of us…..and she too…..", she told herself…..and gathered herdelf back to the present…..

"Pooojeeeeeeee……….."

"Aaayeee, ma!", answered Pooja, and ran to the adjoining room and engrossed herself forcibly into an animated converstion with her sister on whether to wear blue, or yellow for Mahendi ceremony!

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Oh wow Ali and Pooja's marriage......
awesome...

plz continue 👏 👏 👏

and i love the use of punjabi words.... it makes it more ethnic 😃 😃

luv
kanak

Originally posted by: tere_bin

Oh wow Ali and Pooja's marriage......
awesome...

plz continue 👏 👏 👏

and i love the use of punjabi words.... it makes it more ethnic 😃 😃

luv
kanak

agree with kanak its awesome 👏 👏 👏 😉 but i m having a problem in understanding punjabi 😕 😕 😕

Originally posted by: kiran_sherry

agree with kanak its awesome 👏 👏 👏 😉 but i m having a problem in understanding punjabi 😕 😕 😕

try watching some karan johar films! he he