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Posted: 18 years ago
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Ritu's behaviour, raj's manner and her collong him colonel five years after marriage shows the distances in the couple.....it shows that after soo many years of aquaitance they have not gone further than "dr.ritu" and "captin/colonel".............it shows how dull, lifeless, dry their marriage is...........

and do u really want me to say whoz the reason????? 😆 😆 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Its about 1930hrs, Colonel Rajveer Singh Shekhavat is standing by the window leaning on the wall, his hands folded in a tight knot, deep in thought. The knot keeps gatting tighter, his expressions become more and more unreadable every minute.

Is it sorrow? Pain? Peace? Laugh? Shame? Or Love?…..noone can tell!

……………"Sirji, kudi dil di badi changi hai…..aur sabse zyaada aap pe bharosa karti hai"…….

----FLASH----

"I know everything….tum usse bhoole hi nahin……bhool na hi nahin chahte…."

"Ritu! PLEASE! Sach to yeh hai ki tum mujhe kabhi kuch bhool ne hi nahin deti!"

----FLASH-----

"Sir, yeh main bhi janti hoon aur aap bhi, ke w o h ladki badi hi lucky hogi!", an innocent face smiled at him. He gave a smile…though a fril and painful one…as if he was regretting….regretting something……

"Kaun hai who lucky ladki sir?", she asked her again…..

-----FLASH-----

"Take me out of this safely, Captain…..and she will come to no harm……", his face strained again….

-----FLASH-----

"Sir…w o h….main…..mujhe pata hi nahin chala…..main kab…..sir….aap….appse….pya….", the girl in army uniform looked nervous, at a loss of words, but her eyes said it all….even befor she had started…..he found herself enveloped in a hug……and there was no space for words…. "Main samaj gaya…………..tumhare dil ki baat tumhe mujhe kehne ki zaroorat nahin……main……tum to janti ho….hameshase….tumse……", and nothing else was said and they stood there, holding each other, as if to their hearts….for ever and ever…..her smile….her eyes….her words……

-----FLASH-----

"So Captain, what do u have to say? Her life, her trust, her faith, her future, her career…..uski har ek saans aapke hath main hai…..", he felt himself go numb, by mere thought of it. He wouldn't let that happen..…again…...what should he do?

-----FLASH-----

"Hai ek pagli, tun jaanti ho usse….", he had once told her, and she had smiled….her smile, expression he had failed to wipe out from his mind! And the two had laughed …..as she had behaved as if she was a stranger…..she dinno who he was talking about…. "Achha sir, kaun?"

-----FLASH-----

Major Bhargav's hysterical laugh, Major Nair's deceitful glare, Ritu's blank but cruel expression………her silence, Aalekh's glare, Naveen's face…………his helplessness was killing him every second……he had to loose……on both sides…….

Tears flooded, and to hide them……he closed his eyes……

'Knok-knok"…….knok at the door, and Colonel Shekhavat was back again.

"Come-in"

"Colonel, a message from General Singh, he is likely to call you for an urgent business withing 2minutes", conveyed Orderly.

"Hmm…"

He walks around the room for about a minute when,

'RING-RING'

"Colonel Rajveer….."

"Ahh…Yes. Gen.Singh speaking. Colonel, over last week there has been some tension on the Punjab border, and the intelligence has informed that there is to be some kind of disrupt by the terrorists…….unfortunately, some people have successfully entered out territory."

"We can send some officials…."

"No, I don't want people to panic. This will alert them….I want them to continue with their activities and catch them red-handed", explained General

"Orders for me, Sir!"

"I have a special job for you, Rajveer. You are my best officer and I think I can trust you with the job."

"Yessire"

"Well, Colonel, there is a wedding in interior Punjab near Amritsar. A baraat will be reaching there within three days from Kanpur. Son of our retired Subedar is getting married, he himself is a Captain. I want you to go to the wedding under disguise, and keep a track of the happenings, silently, and report back. I will explain and instruct the Subedar and Captain with reason."

"…Sire!"

"I will send you the details of the wedding and your confidinates, by 2300hrs."

"Yessir!", and the call was disconnected. Raj was happy….he had something to occupy his thoughts….he tried in vain to push everything out of his mind…..he had his duties….and engrossed himself in other thoughts……

He wanted to leave…..work, fight……….go on the mission as soon as possible….Ritu's presence in his life was like a mirror that was around him all the time, which reminded him of her all the time….which took him back always…….

'Khana tabke par hai! I will be late.', read a note on the fridge. He pulled it….and had a glass of water….

'Beep-Beep', his palmtop yelled.

He opened the mail from the General. As he read it, his face grew more and more stern….shadows of pain and sorrow passed his face….

'…..I have spoken to them, the groom was silent as I spoke, I think he is undergoing a forced wedding….however they say it's a love marriage….Anyways, I have informed them about your mission and Subedar has promised to help…..Subedar Begh and Captain Ali Begh will be your hosts for the mission. All the best….'

………………. and as he shut and threw thw machine on the sofa, tears rolled from his eyes…. "Why me?"

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Posted: 18 years ago
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i didnt get it why you wrote groom undergoing forced wedding.... ali loves pooja so he must be happy to marry pooja n same for pooja.... please dont create tense moments between pooja n ali let them enjoy their wedding..please i am waiting when ali sees pooja in wedding outfit....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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i didnt get it why you wrote groom undergoing forced wedding.... ali loves pooja so he must be happy to marry pooja n same for pooja.... please dont create tense moments between pooja n ali let them enjoy their wedding..please i am waiting when ali sees pooja in wedding outfit....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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he he.....i thought u all would gt it rite....ok....lemme explain....all the kmaiites hate raj....and by hearing his name....as someone coming for his wedding....dont u expect ali to behave negatively....but since its his duty.....he obeyed!

its a perfectly cute wedding...do not worry....!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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ok now i get it thanks for explanation .... pls continue as soon as you can .... i am loving your fanfic especially ali pooja part....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: jivora

Ritu's behaviour, raj's manner and her collong him colonel five years after marriage shows the distances in the couple.....it shows that after soo many years of aquaitance they have not gone further than "dr.ritu" and "captin/colonel".............it shows how dull, lifeless, dry their marriage is...........

and do u really want me to say whoz the reason????? 😆 😆 😆


nope.... u dont hav to.... i guess we all know 😉😉😉

but just tell me.... why did Raj say "Im sorry Navin"????😕😕😕

luv
kanak
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Posted: 18 years ago
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dat was amazing jivora! 👏 like kanak alredy sed, ur damn fast! 👏 so.... i dun think i need 2 say PLZ POST ASAP since u r gonna post it soon 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
#29
sure. i will be glad if u all can tell me what u want in the story and ys, what you dont want to happen.....

u would like raj-naina/huda-naina tog?.....etc.....etc....
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: jivora

sure. i will be glad if u all can tell me what u want in the story and ys, what you dont want to happen.....

u would like raj-naina/huda-naina tog?.....etc.....etc....



me wud luvvvvv it if it was RN😊

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