AsYa OS : Tired Of Being Sorry - Page 7

It was so beautiful!!!

Originally posted by: -Devanshi-

Hey!

This is probably the first OS of yours that I read(Yeah, I am kind of new here)

But obviously this is not your first one!😃 It was fabulous and I loved how you have the described their thoughts and their surroundings.

Asad finally realizing that how much he hurts Zoya and expressing it to her is very heartwarming indeed!(especially for me when I really don't like his character a lot😉 ) . So yeah, you did a great job on that one for sure! Zoya's dialogues and thoughts make me smile involuntarily at her wit 😆

Also, if you are good at taking criticism, then may I suggest you to not use abbreviations in your story? Just by reading this one OS, I could judge that you are an excellent writer and I would actually love to read more of your work too. But while reading this OS, when I saw the use of 'M' instead of I am or I'm or 'n' being used instead of 'and', I did feel bad. Now I do get the fact that you had written this in a hurry and hence forgot. I also get the fact that I am making a fuss over a 'and' and 'I am'. But if you share same enthusiam as I do for English, then I hope you have not felt bad.

Hope you do not misunderstand me!😊

Your new fan,

Devanshi

Originally posted by: blueflames

Hey devanshi

Welcome to the forums,

Thank you for reading the OS and giving such a wonderful comment.

Seriously I often write m n instead of full words, apologies for my lazy ass typo.

I love that you voiced your opinions, as reader opinion does matter to me.

this OS was an instant one so didn't even proof read it.

I hope you catch up on my other works too.

Regards

Bluey

P.s- I am on a break from forums till June ends, but I made an exception just to reply to you. I hope you read this 😉