AsYa OS : Tired Of Being Sorry

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kiki

@-waitingforyou-

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#51

loved it!
it was really amazing !
i loved the conffession part very much :)

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sardeeeeeep

@saruu.

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Res love, will edit soon <3

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Linsie

@Linsie

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

for the story 🤗

for your note 🤣

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veenisha

@veenisha

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#54

aw this is so sweet 😃

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Rajeshwari

@-Raj-

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#55

This is really awesome!!

Keep up the fantastic work!!

Thanks for the PM,ankie.

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blueflames

@blueflames

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: waitingforyou
loved it!
it was really amazing !
i loved the conffession part very much :)

Thank you dear

M glad it was worth your time😊

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blueflames

@blueflames

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: raj_tanha_fan
This is really awesome!!
Keep up the fantastic work!!
Thanks for the PM,ankie.

Thank you 😊

Glad it was worth your time

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blueflames

@blueflames

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+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: Linsie
for the story 🤗

for your note 🤣

😉😆

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-Devanshi-

@-Devanshi-

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#59

Hey!

This is probably the first OS of yours that I read(Yeah, I am kind of new here)

But obviously this is not your first one!😃 It was fabulous and I loved how you have the described their thoughts and their surroundings.

Asad finally realizing that how much he hurts Zoya and expressing it to her is very heartwarming indeed!(especially for me when I really don't like his character a lot😉 ) . So yeah, you did a great job on that one for sure! Zoya's dialogues and thoughts make me smile involuntarily at her wit 😆

Also, if you are good at taking criticism, then may I suggest you to not use abbreviations in your story? Just by reading this one OS, I could judge that you are an excellent writer and I would actually love to read more of your work too. But while reading this OS, when I saw the use of 'M' instead of I am or I'm or 'n' being used instead of 'and', I did feel bad. Now I do get the fact that you had written this in a hurry and hence forgot. I also get the fact that I am making a fuss over a 'and' and 'I am'. But if you share same enthusiam as I do for English, then I hope you have not felt bad.

Hope you do not misunderstand me!😊

Your new fan,

Devanshi