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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rarepearl

this was super cool Ankie! u're rite v all love da Mangalpur incident, though it makes us cry everytime but still, dats da only way v get to see our Asad wid his guards all crumbled n shattered, cox he cant take Zoe's pain. u've written an absolutely fantastic part. it's sad to see Asad going all crazy for her. I cud get da whole scene in front of me, it wud hav been hell for him widout Zoe. I hope da dr's save her, warna Zoe k saath Asad is gonna die too. giv a nice ending, just like v all want in QH.love,

Nimra.


How i love Mangalpur, and how i love going back there 🤣 Thanks sweets, hope it was worth it 😳

Originally posted by: anoo67

do you have to ask so many questions at the end of the first part?now i will have to sit down and figure it all out right now or i will go crazy.or wait till your next update which will be soon i hope.btw, bahut mazaa aaya.


Ahaha! Intelligent! Yuppies wait for the next part thats all i can say 🤣

Originally posted by: loveQH

Loved it Ankie di!!! Aaj kuch zyaada hi mood mein ho!!! Its just Awesome!!! But cliffy!!! Chalo koi nahi, but you have to update fast! Thanks for the pm!!!


Nahii yaarro, i am always in mood. i just feel lazzie. 🤣

Originally posted by: bindasss

Aalsldkfadfkja! Please update sooonnn!!! Loved ittt! 😊


Thanks sweets, hopefully it was worth your time. 😳

Originally posted by: veenisha

nice :D
do continue soon


Sure keep stalking meanwhile 🤣


Thanks sweets 😳


Thank you! 😳

Originally posted by: pinkks

I want next part fast fast fast😭


Keep stalking! You soon may be gifted a new part 🤣 Thank you! 😊

Originally posted by: Asya6

Ankie didi if you don't continue this I'll either haunt you in your dreams or come and injure you (I won't kill you cause then who'll make us laugh and give us gutter memes and posts?).
So yes I want to you to continue this.
And please don't kill Zoe. I know you won't!
I'm sure this is your conspiracy as you've been planning it since a long time. Well you are lucky as you will get to meet Asad if you've planned it ;)


Ahhaha! Already you guys are still haunting me for my incomplete SS 😭 🤣
YEa yea yea it is all mine 🤣 ahhaha! Yeaa right i want him to kill me, he already has killed me, buss apne uss sexy sexy hatthon se ke baar afsdghagetyijagah, mujhe woh bhi Qubool hai! ☺️

Originally posted by: ASYA.INSHI

Ok yeah so I thought Id get there and be on page one..

Wrrank
Dammit stupid Netball training!😡
Awesome TS!!!! oh and remember what you commented on my FF Kambhakat Zindagi??
That you hate me for Cliffys!! 😆
Well at the moment, In my ff and your Ts, Zoya is in hospital, Asad is crying and shouting. Tanveer is a b***h... 🤣🤣🤣
Nice going!!!
And remember I will not update mine till you Update YOURSZ!
so keep Pming!!!
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE yours... 😆


This is known as Emotional attyachar 🥱
Update urs first cause i started a new one! 🤣

And we all love doing this isnt it? 😉
🤗

Originally posted by: -Shruti.M-

ankie's mangalpur tadka is back🤣
awesome..plz continue😃


I so so sosososososooso love Mangalpur abb sabko pata hai! 🤣 Thanks sweets 😳 Hope you had a great bday 😳

Originally posted by: aditi061

I should have expected this only! You only know how to torture people!
Tell me one thing! Will the world crash down if you stop giving those cliff hangers?
Why are you hell bent to make me a heart patient at this tender age?
But no, all the highness cares about is torturing her readers!
Yeh galat baat hai!😭😭😭 jao mai ni comment karungi! pehle give me second part fir i will think of commenting!


All the time i get to hear. 'Ankie i love you, you know how to make people smile'
Trust me! 🤣 'Ankie go die' 'Ankie you are soo bad' 🤣 Now these comments make me feel soo good! ahahahah! this is what i am 🤣 Ahhaha, okay okay princess, i soon will update it just for your lengthy wala comment 🤗 😳

Originally posted by: shreya11mehra

u knq wat allah miyan ki kasam muje us magalpur k dahaad wale post k baad se yakeen th..paka wala k CVs jb track bnaege...pta nh...par Ankie to jaldi ye track bna degi...


bakhuda mere yakeen ki izzat rk li...

vaise very nice post...

ab yh end mat krna...varns huggy k jagah jutte chapple faikugi...

verrryyy nice update...

biggy hug darling🤗


🤗 Ehehehe, Ankie is soo predictable nay?! 🤣

Originally posted by: life4me

Hi Ankie I just love you for this. Beautiful piece of writing it touched my heart. You are an amazing writer.

Zoya has to survive because of her jahpana. Cant wait for more please update soon.


Thank you soo much sweets, it means lot to me, no i am not at all a good writer. i need to improve. nevertheless thank you soo much 🤗


Sure keep stalking 🤣

Originally posted by: risingsea101

You left me hanging...

Continue I wanna read more!
Beautiful TS
Guess what?
I loved loved loved loved loved loved(and so on) it🤗
Thanks for the PM Ankie and continue woman!
😆hehe,thanks

.

Far! Seriously? You did?! and why there's only one post from you today? I so want that chocolate wala icecream, givmeee!! 🤣

Originally posted by: s120

Your love for the Mangalpuri Asad is totally reflected in this story 😆 Jokes apart, you've portrayed the emotions very well and its nicely written 👍🏼 But why a cliffhanger

Continue soon


Thanks sweets, i love emotions right. 😳 Thanks once again, Mangalpur is my fav track, i always trace back to it no matter what 🤣 Yupp keep stalking 🤣

Originally posted by: shonajain

Ankiee first of all standing ovation to ur writing and dear I LOVE YOU for dis seriously
it was stupendo fantabulously fantastic TS:):*:*

and yaar plzzz update kardo, sat-sun are already torture and den no updates is another...plzzz update kar do...meri puppy jaise face par rehem khao...:D;);)


Partner, where were u all these days? I missed u, and app mujhe ek shayari nahi sunaigi?! thank yo usoo much, aur meri bhaddi si writing ki itni tareef karne ke liye another tight wali hugy 🤗 😆

Originally posted by: pkaps

Good one... though i could not figure out when they got married


I would say, keep calm and read on, cause there's more to come 😆

Originally posted by: asya143

Luv u luv u luv u!!

It was so wonderful..👏
But I hate u for being such a cliif hanger😡
Continue it soon else I will die of Imagination only😉


LOL thanks sweets 😆

Originally posted by: amruta04

nice story Ankie
loved it
pl do continue soon


Thank you, keep stalking 🤣

Originally posted by: Nukti

great story👏👏


Thank you sweets [:$]

Originally posted by: _Tintin_

its a gr8 stry!! but 1ques wat is TS??


Thanks Tintin. TS stands for Two shots, or sometimes even three shots 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
#92
Hmmm mujhe achha nahi laga... mujhe bhot bhot bhot acchha laga dear... I could visualize every word u wrote... amazing and update soon... would be great if you pm me
thanks in advance... lol
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Posted: 12 years ago
#93
Awww anku dear i also missed you very much bt partner i am busy wid colg stuff nowdays...bt whenevr i get tym i switch to i.f and nvr forget to read ur lovely posts
and dnt dare to call ur writing bhaddi otherwise u ll get in return mere ghar ki radddiii...i just loved what u have written

arz kia hai

jitni asad zoya ki love story hai intense
jitni asad zoya ki love story hai intense
utne hi emotions apki story mai bhe hain dense
hum sochte hain aage kya hoga, which makes us all d more tense

thanxx 4 bearing mah gatiya shayari:)
:D:D:D

now dis ones specially 4 u

aap ki yeh story padh kar hum ho gaye hai speechless ankie
aap ki yeh story padh kar hum ho gaye hain speechless ankie
ab kya kahe aage
coz ankhon se bhe behene lagi hai paani ki tankiee...:):D
bt seriously d wat u potrayed asads emotions i cried literally:(
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Posted: 12 years ago
#94
Awesome work Ankie, it was too good and too great and I just loved. I have missed earlier parts so first read that and then this. Brilliant work girl
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Posted: 12 years ago
#95
dost sorruy for being late 🤢
i know tumi onk post send korso amake
bt i m sick tai reply dite parini..😭
ater dichchi...
nizeo kono post korsi na..😭
doya koro for me..
back to ur post it ws treat while reading for me...
bhalo theko..hoping i can back in this r=forum very soon.. 😕
love u always❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
#96

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Thank you soo much friends! I never thought that this crazied ramblings of mine would be soo much liked by you all! Thank you soo much 🤗


What else a writer wants apart from her the audience to be entertained? Thank you soo much! 🤗

Edited by MisHumptyDumpty - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Mera reswa update se bhi pehle 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
#98
Disclaimer : Suspense or Thriller isn't my cup of Coffee. Tried my hand out for the first time. Please honest reviews PLEASE. 😃 😆


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Asad clasped his fingers tight in a silent prayer. He had full faith on his Allah that his Zoya would be fine. Nothing would ever happen to her.

'Nothing would ever happen Zoya. Just be brave as you are. Brave which you are. I trust you. Trust you more than I trust myself. I know you would never break my trust. Prove them wrong Zoya. I know you will. I just know. Nothing would happen.' Asad kept on telling himself as a continuous prayer. Nothing would happen to her, he just knew.

'Tanveer-' Dilshad's sudden voice broke Asad's trance.

Asad clenched his jaws as he looked at his mother.

'Khala! Asad! Ye hum kya sun rahe hai?! Zoya ko kya hogaya?!' Tanveer asked as she huffed.

Asad stood up slowly. His fist curled into a ball. His veins plunged out of his skin.

'Tum kahan thi Tanveer? Zoya toh tumahare saath thi naa?!' Dilshad asked Tanveer, worry written all over her face.

'Haan Khala hum Zoya ke saath hi thay, magar-'

'Haan Tannu, magar?' Asad's inner lion roared.

'M-m-magar wo-woh Z-zoya' Tanveer stammered as she feared the worst.

'Haan Tannu main sun raha hoon! Zoya toh tumhare saath thi na?!' Asad advanced his steps towards her, gritting his jaw.

Tanveer swallowed and continued. 'Usske kisi dost ka call aya tha ki usske saath woh milna chahta hai, aur woh hame Caf mein wait karne ko boli. Kya naam tha uska? Haan Rabbert!'

'Rabbert?!' Asad questioned.
Ayaan swallowed hard.

'Haan Jaammy hum sacch keh rahe hai!'

'Sach keh rahi ho toh itna kaap kyun rahi ho?!'

'Wo-wo-'

'Tumhe pata hai Rabart kaun hai?!' Asad advanced towards her a few more steps as Tanveer hit the wall behind her.

'Rabert AYAAN HAI!!!'

'Wo-Jaammmy hamara yakeen maniyee!-' Tanveer was trapped in her own words.

'Sach sach batao tumne aisa kyun kiya! TUMNE AISA KYUN KIYA TANVEER ??? TUMNE AISA KYUN KIYAA??' Asad pinned Taveer to the wall as he roared in the highest possible decibel ever.

'H-h-hamne-ha-hamne-k-k-kuch-chh-na-hhii kiyaa-aa Jaammyy! Haa-haa-maa-raa yakeen-nn maa-nee-yee! Hum-m-m hu-um-umm kyun-nnn Zo-ooyaa ko mar-rr-naa-chahengey?!' Tanveer stammered.

'YEA TOH MAIN BHI POOCH RAHA HOON KI TUM KYUN USS BICHARARIEE KO MARNA CHAHOGI??! USSNE TOH APNE SAPNE MEIN BHI TUMHE! TUMHE TOH CHORO HI, KISI KA BHI BURA SOCHNE KA BHI SOCHA TAK NAHI HOGA!! KYUN KIYA TUMNE AISA TANVEER??! KYUN??! JABKI TUMHE PATA THA KI MAIN USSE BAKHUDA PYAAR KARTA HOON! WOH MERI ZINDAGI HAI MERA SABKUCH HAI! KYUN KYA AISA??? ZOYA KE SAATH?? KYUNN?? I BLOODY WANT AN ANSWER!!' Asad screamed as he took Tanveer by her arms and shook her violently.
Dilshad was shocked to hear those words from her son. She didn't know what do, either to clam her manic son down, or to rejoice that her son was finally in love. Ayaan protectively hugged her and pleaded for her to be clam.

'ASAAD!! Tum apna aapa kho rahe ho! Tumhe pata bhi hai kya keh rahe ho?!' Dilshad screamed.

'AMMII!!! ISSNE!!! ISSNE MERI ZOYA KO MARNA KI KOSHISH KI!! ISSNE!! ISSNEE!! AAMII ISSNEE!!' Asad shouted at his mother as he pointed at Tanveer if she were a terrible contagious virus.
' TANVEER SACH SACH BATAO, NAHI TOH MUJHSE BURA KOI NAHI HOGA!!!' Asad continued giving Tanveer his murderous glare, scaring the hell out of everyone present.

'Hum-hum-humne kuch nahi kiya Jamm-'

'MAT PUKAROO MUJHE USS GHATIYA NAAM SE!!'

Tanveer gulped quickly. She very well now knew her plans had flopped, and very soon she would be fed to the figs if she didn't tell the truth, as Asad knew better.

'Kambakat Zoya marti bhi nahi!' Tanveer cursed under her breath.

'Kya kaha tumhe abhi?!' Asad's ears didn't fail to hear those words in the same voice again; he heard them right as well as recognized them correctly, the same words, the same voice, which echoed all through that panic call of Zoya's. Asad was more than sure now.

'Asad app-'

'Tum kahan thi inte deir?'

'Caf mein!'

'Zoya kitne baje Rabart se milne gayi thi?'

'11:30 baje'

'Ayaan tum kahan thay 11:30 baje?'

'Apke saath apke office mein Bhaijan!'

Asad looked at the Inspector giving him a quick stare. The Inspector nodded his head.

Asad took out his phone and pressed a button.

*Kabamkat Zoya! '

Tan-vvveerr mujh-ee- --

Che Che Che Bechariee Zoya! Aj toh apko iss sheher toh kya, iss mulkse hi, mulkse bhi nahi, aaj toh apko iss duniya ko chorke jana hoga! Kamabakat ZOOO-YAAA!

Taanuu, tummm??! Chorroo-Aaa-Choorroo mujhhee !!

Zoya-Kambakat Zoya! Aj toh apko marna hi hoga! Nahi toh Asad Ahmed Khan jaisa maaldar bakra mera Shauhar kaise ban payega?! AJJ TOH TUJHE MARNA HI HOGA ZOYAA FAARROOQQQIII!! Gudiya Karkhana mein phir ek aur raaz liye dafan ho jayegaa! TUJHE TOH MARNA HI HOGAA!!!'

Aaa--aassaadd-*

The conversation made Dilshad's legs go tremble, Ayaan held her tight before she fell on to the floor. Asad looked at Tanveer who sweated profoundly. She gulped hard. Asad advanced towards her, crushing the phone in between his fingers, gritting his jaws, grinding his teeth in anger. The Inspector came in between stopped Asad, before he could murder the culprit.

'Mr Khan ! That is an important evidence.' The inspector pointed out towards the phone which was nearly about to be broken.

Asad handed his phone quickly to the inspector and looked at Tanveer as he narrowed his eyes.

'Tanveer? Tum aisa kyun karna chaho gi?!!' Dilshad questioned in disbelief.

'HAIN MAIN! HAAN HAAN HUMNE USSE MARA AUR WOH MARR BHI JAYEGII!AHAHAHAHHAA!! Usse humne eek baar nahi, kinti baar marne ki koshish ki hai Khala kitni baar! Magar Kamabakat Zoya marti hi nahi!
Pata hai Asad? Pehele Khala ki gas leak karwai, phir bhi kismet toh dekho, bacch gai! Nahii ' Nahii!! Humne bachaya, kyunki iss Asad ne mujhe rok liya tha! Aur app Asad, koi aur hota, use toh app udhar hi zinda gard dete! Magar uss kambakat ki kismet toh dekho, BACCH GAAII!!
Dusri baar, Asad ke khane mein jan booch kar peanuts itne dalwaye ki Khala ki use ghar se toh kya, iss mulk se nikal deti, magar, Khala ap toh kamal ki hai, Zoya Bichariee ko toh pata hi nahi tha! Bach gai phir se woh Kambakat! Kyunki ussne Asad ki jaan jo bachali thi!!
Teesri baar VISA letter ko hi change kar diya, magar kya huya? Ashiq Asad ke jadoo ne unn officers per aisa jadoo kiya, ki Zoya ko extension phir milgaya! Wah Asad Wah! Ap hi toh chahte thay ki Zoya apki zindagi se chali jaye aur jab humne use apki zindagi se nikalne mein apki maddad ki app mere upar chillah rahe thay?! Yea kahan kii insaffi hai?! Thik hai koi nahi hota hai! Toh hum bhi harne walon mein se nahi thay Khala!
Usske pehle juice humne sleeping pills milaye, raste mein jate jate woh soo gayii. Aur kitna accha mauka ho sakta hai tha Asad? Gudiya Factory bus ek kilometer door thi. 17 saal pehele ek raaz lekar woh karkhana Khala ki Zindagi toh tabah kar ke bandh hogaya tha! Aaj phir aur ek baar ek raaz le kar dafan hone wala tha. Magar iss baar hamari Zindagi bana kar!
Pata hai Asad humne use 5 baar sir pe rod se mara, magar woh Asad aur Asad chillahti rahi! Waah kya pyaar hai usska! Dhamki de rahi thi hame!!HAME!! Hame uss halat mein ki Asad hume nahi chorne wala! Ahahaha! Dekho, aj Khuda bhi chahena usske bacha nahi payega! AUR ASAD AHMED KHAN KO HAMARA HONA SE KOI ROK BHI NAHI PAYEGAA! Ahahahaha!'
Tanveer screamed. The very next thing she knew was her left cheek burning up in pain as she fell against the window beside the wall. It registered everyone, Asad had slapped her. (a/n : I know you guys would love me soo so so much for this 😉 🤣)
'TUMNE AISA KAISE SOOCH BHI LIYA???!' Asad went near Tanveer taking her into his suffocating grip.
'MAIN SIRF AUR SIRF ZOYA KA HOON! ZOYA SIRF MERI HAI MERI! GET THAT IN YOUR F*CKED UP BRAIN' Asad screamed into her ears.
He literary strangled Tanveer up in his grip but the Inspector released them.

'Mr Khan, the Law will take care of her! I will make sure that Miss Farooqqi would get full justice to this!' The inspector handcuffed a reluctant Tanveer, as Ayaan held his brother in his grip hard before he would kill her.

'AGAR TUM MERI DOST NAHI HOTI TANVEER, MAIN TUMHE USS FACTORY MEIN KHUD ZINDA GADD DETA!!!' Asad shouted at the top of his voice before the police went away with her.

The whole world rotated in front of Dilshad. She didn't know what to do. She just prayed at the moment, for her Zoya to be fine. Asad's world crashed down, as he fell down to his knees. The friend who was his only, had tried to kill his life, not only his life but all of theirs, and all he did was to blame the angel who had actually saved them. The very next thing he heard was a hurt animal's mirror cracking wail. It broke his heart. Unfortunately, it was no one's but his.
All the incidents played in front of his eyes as he walked up to the main window of the corridor. How he had blamed her, screamed at her, and how she had been a savior. He regretted each and every single of it. His fingers lingered on the table full of instruments beside, and laced around a sharp instrument. He let his pain out through letting all the force, go though the instrument clenched tightly in his fists.
The wall and his trousers were stained with blood.
His Blood.
He let himself bleed, until and unless he heard the doctor calling his.
Twice.
He had news.
Good one?

'She's sinking Mr Khan!'


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Previous chapters :

Part 1 and Last Part 😃


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Yayayyayayaya! Cliffy issey kehte hai! 🤣 😉

Okay kill me! I mean yea go ahead kill me! 🤣
Its soo much fun to end at cliffys you know?! 🤣 Jeez soo much 🤣 🤣
Did you like it? Apart from the cliffy??! Bolo bolo tell tell! Pleaseee! 😳
Wrote the whole thing in Type 😆 !
Was it nicoo?! Like really 😳?! Did it come to your standards and your expectations?

p.s. : Last part, aj hi milega if you guys are generous enough! 😃 😆 🤣

🤣 Ankie


p.s. : Its a mere work of fiction. not to be taken personally. 😊

For More Works of Fictions Do Have A Look At My Index 😳
Edited by MisHumptyDumpty - 11 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Unres.

Okay, first of all, THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR UPDATING 😊

Second, it was an awesome update, again. 👏

And third, I'm gonna kill you for another cliffy. 🤢 🤣
Edited by Manpreet23 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
That was quick update Ankie... Loved it... Running out of words so bear
Edited by BlessedSoul - 12 years ago

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