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Kankshita,
I made it back to I-F! One of the reasons I was itching to return was this OS titled with my future moniker...hehe. I jest, as I cry into my cupcake!
"I hope you enjoy reading it. I liked writing it." Truly this is how I have always written words: to please myself. I think you remain truer to yourself in this way, though maybe a little selfish in that you disregard your readers' feelings and whims. However I think deep down we might hope to find that we aren't so much different than others even if we go the long way around in perceiving things.
"Their kindred unsocial spirits had bonded them together" I breathed the deepest sigh of happiness reading these words. It's been too long since I had the pleasure. I know you think I flatter you, for many reasons mostly connotations that will always be associated to me, but you have a way with words that would make most authors envious. Me, I just eat them up! This line was so full of whimsy being seemingly at odds with itself. Finely done!
"It got nasty when she was contradicted." Hehe. I bet it does! "Also he knew that hearts like marshmallows do not dwell on hatred." Again, so uniquely wonderful. Just beautifully done. It seems like such an absurd simile but then you push us into that gooey mess of connotations and inferences until I too can clearly see that indeed they don't dwell!
"The weather had nearly summoned a change." Eloquent opening. "But she never did give in to nuisances such as the pleasance of weather. " Again that subtle accentuation of words through their contrasting nuances. Finely done.
""Dude, ouch." She screeched." Hehe, I loved this wonderful way you develop character whilst moving the plot along. Here the choice of words help to remind us of her regard for him. " he reckoned she wasn't thinking. She was upset" Again subtle yet significant. You inform us of his intimate knowledge of her whilst also implying anger with rashness. Excellently done.
From here on in it was just masterful. The change in pace, the culmination then the short sharp dialogues in the aftermath. Wondrous. ""I figured if I needed it to be perfect I'd have to kiss you."..."She grinned broadly." You and me both! Beautiful line, exceptionally perfect for the characterizations that you comprehensively described in less than half a page. That's an awesome gift!
Thank you so much for sharing. I can't tell you how much better I feel. With love Sabah
I made it back to I-F! One of the reasons I was itching to return was this OS titled with my future moniker...hehe. I jest, as I cry into my cupcake!
"I hope you enjoy reading it. I liked writing it." Truly this is how I have always written words: to please myself. I think you remain truer to yourself in this way, though maybe a little selfish in that you disregard your readers' feelings and whims. However I think deep down we might hope to find that we aren't so much different than others even if we go the long way around in perceiving things.
"Their kindred unsocial spirits had bonded them together" I breathed the deepest sigh of happiness reading these words. It's been too long since I had the pleasure. I know you think I flatter you, for many reasons mostly connotations that will always be associated to me, but you have a way with words that would make most authors envious. Me, I just eat them up! This line was so full of whimsy being seemingly at odds with itself. Finely done!
"It got nasty when she was contradicted." Hehe. I bet it does! "Also he knew that hearts like marshmallows do not dwell on hatred." Again, so uniquely wonderful. Just beautifully done. It seems like such an absurd simile but then you push us into that gooey mess of connotations and inferences until I too can clearly see that indeed they don't dwell!
"The weather had nearly summoned a change." Eloquent opening. "But she never did give in to nuisances such as the pleasance of weather. " Again that subtle accentuation of words through their contrasting nuances. Finely done.
""Dude, ouch." She screeched." Hehe, I loved this wonderful way you develop character whilst moving the plot along. Here the choice of words help to remind us of her regard for him. " he reckoned she wasn't thinking. She was upset" Again subtle yet significant. You inform us of his intimate knowledge of her whilst also implying anger with rashness. Excellently done.
From here on in it was just masterful. The change in pace, the culmination then the short sharp dialogues in the aftermath. Wondrous. ""I figured if I needed it to be perfect I'd have to kiss you."..."She grinned broadly." You and me both! Beautiful line, exceptionally perfect for the characterizations that you comprehensively described in less than half a page. That's an awesome gift!
Thank you so much for sharing. I can't tell you how much better I feel. With love Sabah
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