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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: shafyyy

Awesome Part..

awesome...
Loved it Fiza Di..!!!


Beautifully potrayed their feelings ..their emotions ..
their happiness for each other..
everything was just mind blowing..!!!

Mayank is behaving like a sweet little around 20 yr old boy making plans for his date ...
awesome..!!!

you know i liked he was behaving it..
awesome..
he was panicking to wait for her...not the traits of a mature man..but still in every mature man has a immature child in it and it was necesaary for this date..!!!


I must agree Sarah has a good taste.she suggested red colour for thier date...
For the first time Nupur was getting nervous...for getting ready like this..
I liked it...
Unki aise situtaion per to
ek song banta hain...

Pehla nasha pehla khumar
naya pyaar hain naya intezaar..
kar loon mein kya apna haal
aye-dil-bekarar
mere - dil-e-bekrar..
tu hi bata...


usne baat ki kuch aise dhang se..
sapne de gaya vo hazaro rang..!!

reh jaaon jese mein haar k..
aur chume vo pyar se...

Awesome Part Di...!!!

Gunjan liked Nupur this is a good sign..!!!
Loved the part..
The Gunjan-Mayank convo was so good..!!!

I am happy that Nupur didn't felt any low in presence of her rather Gunjan made her feel special and also hugged her...
This is actually a very ggod move..
Now i am desperately wating for their Date...
Do update soon




thanks alot dear
glad u liked it
yes he is doing all that...
i wont say anything abt being red the colour for date... i have simiar views abt it like nupur of muhabbat yun😆... ambulance k danger wala color
thanks alot
i hope u do enjoy the date as much as u r waiting for it

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: kheya-mayur

anodr fantastic update fiza.
so lovd it.
lovd d way love is blossoming n dey r just flowing.

i was so scard when gunjan came but gosh she knows everything n likd nupur n appreciated deir love.dats realy nice.

n ye kya ending tha!its unfair.m so eager to know what mayank have done.

waiting for next





thanku so much dear... im glad ur liking it n can feel wht they are feeling

why u all forgot that gunjan was the person who ask mayank to go back to nupur.. knowing evrything than why she will make a fuz...

lol.. tht is actually fair... not to worry i think almost 4 updates next are gonna end like this


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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: mayuloveu

wow amazing. beautiful




thanks alot dear

Originally posted by: -Meri-

it was an amazing part
very cute and lovely



Originally posted by: clustersofstar

they are living in dream world

loveely update




yes they are ... u wont they to wake up
thanku

Originally posted by: -SupriyaluvsMN-

wts dat jaw dropping surprise??
eager... anxious ... excited!🤪
jaldi update karo ji!😛




than alot
but now i m nervous so nervous



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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Dalia.

excellent update
loved mayur a lot




thanls alot dear



[QUOTE=tasnim.]one of the best updates of this ff
API it was fabulous
loved it
[/QUOTE

thanku so much...
glad u liked it


[QUOTE=Ayan-]awesome



thanku



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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Faria.

Cascade- OMG itna beautiful pdate wo bhi itnaaa jaldi
By GOD manaa parega tujhsi best ho jani
GOSH mayur were in date.
and finally nupur ne apnitaraf se , apni he marji se , apni he khushi k liye - maaynk k liye saza. she went for shaooping just to make herself special to mayank.
iloved the way she was sooo much excited abt their date.
loved the way she was preparing herself for maaynk ..
hahahaha both of them were damn nervous as if they r teenager who used to go on date by without any knowledge fof their parents...LOL LOL

vaise tere plan kya hai??
mayank ne kaisa date ki arange ki yaar
uff tu bhi naa- alwz ended update at crucial point.
ab tou main yehi sochti reh janugi kya ho sakta hai, kya hone wale hai etc
errr i wanna kill u- jaldi update kar- kamini
anyway i also loved gnjan-mayu- nupur scene
very niceupdate jani
awesomeee

do update next part soon
take care
MAY ALLAH BLESS u
]




thanks alot dear
glad u like it
yes finally she is opening up
she has taken in things...
they are nervous cause for one it is hard to belive wht he wants.. and for him he doesn tknow wht imprees her
n i m so sorry tuny itny baar pocha n for the frst time i didnt told u anything abt the date
reason was i want to see ur experssion our words on this
as im nervous as mayank
hope u like it

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: --Ruchi--

Nice update di..love the date..LOL Enjoyed reading this part...

MN scenes are cute..and the way Nupur teases Mayank is really funny and I can imagine Mayank's expressions after that..LOL

Do cont soon.




thanks alot dear
glad u like it
lol.. glad u enjoyed it so much




thanksa lot

Originally posted by: vinan2050

Awsm update Fiza

Loved the bond between maynak and Gunjan
thanks to u for writing wonderful FF's itzz because of ur and other's Amazing FF's due to which we are steal living MJHT



thanks alot
glad u liked it so much
thank u for reading them and encouraging us for writing more
thanku


Originally posted by: THIS-IS-LIFE



lol... thats great ... and its more great tht people who always use to cmment in less words.. are made to elabrate by this ff...

thanku so much



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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gopi06

amazing updts fiza
loved gunur interaction...waiting for mayur date
cont soon
thanks for the pm




thanks alot dear
glad u like it
will cont son

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Posted: 12 years ago

Have rplyd to u all

N I will be needing ur comments at this one… as I m as nervous as mayank…

This one is surely for the birthday girls… Shaffy and my sweet heart AnU




Happy Birthday to u ANu...


Edited by drfizaahmed - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

You close the door, u lock it tight... u made a sigh n hang it .. mark it with words " no entry, no one resides"... love will cum, move in and will smile .. saying i was born to break the rules


Chapter: 15

She chuckled .. She giggled and without thinking once she moved inside..no she ran,.. she twirl around and laughed.. and he smiled widely looking at her like this… this is one thing he knew he will never get over from … her free laughter.. her smile…

The whole area was decor just the way it was done in beauty n the beast… the library part… flowing curtains..so many shelves.. .. the same wooden floor..same golden ambiance… the same huge windows… floor having the center pieces beautifully made and she was coincidentally was dressed as Bell ….she just cant stop her giggles she just cant stop…

Ita fairytale ..its her fairytale… and she right there in the middle of the biggest moment of the story … the twisty and the beautiful.. she giggle more and she stop twirling her head was spinning yet her laughter was not at all stopping.. she was appearing like a kid.. who has suddenly viewed the best of dream…

He lean to the entrance and looked at her… he could just smile with his heart warming with the joy appearing on her face… she was looking beautiful more because of this care free laughter, her childish giggles… her complete forgetfulness of what she is doing… just getting in this moment… Now he knew what evr he do might be childish yet its worth evry effort he has put in it.. and he knew he can do anything to see her like this… anything… he will do this again n again n again… not because wht she feels about his because he feels heaven around himself

She looked at him and he was smiling at her with all his heart.. with his hands in pocket… he was there as the perfect prince charming…. Can she ask anything better ot worse…. She has nevr asked anyone.. anyone.. but there he is patiently waiting for her look…. To get acknowledged for wht he has brought for her….

She run to him and hugged him tight.. he has to hold her to maintain the balance.. but he cant hold his chuckles…. This was the happiest moment of his life.. he has never seen her like this… this was the most amzing moment … he slowly placed her back on the floor.. but she was still cuddling to him tightly.. never wanting to let him go..never ever wanted to let him go.. if this a dream she wants to sleep forevr.. if its myth she will take it as God's words just for her…. He was holding her tight letting her time to believe this all hers

Mayank: looks like my prince liked it…

Nupur: its … its just.. I donot know… its..

He pecked her

Mayank: I can see wht I wanted to see.. shall we…

He asked her hand making sum space between them…. She placed with a smile that was enchanting his heart ….

Tale as old as time

As the reach the center of the hall… he press sumthing from his pocket.. she was just looking at him with an excited all around now whts changing now wht is cuming up .. she was just now looking forward to wht he is going … she just cant guess… he is upto mesmerizing her…as soon as the button was press.. she felt sum light spreading the hall..

It was indeed night and there was no chance of sun.. yet the curtains started to move up and the light poke in.. making this whole area gloom in fake sun light.. Brightening all that was there..

He pulled her close to him and placing his one hand on waist.. and hold firmly her one hand in his.. and threw are away twirl her making her giggle and than pulled her back to rest in his arms..

Tale as old as time
True as it can be
Barely even friends
Then somebody bends
Unexpectedly

It was so true, it was all that she was feeling.. it seems to be that they are in center of a fairytales.. she has just went sumwhere out of the world she has been in.. smwhere from the stars he has just descend down to make her life like a dream… she cant think of anything write now.. nothing… she just want to move the way he is moving her.. she just want to feel wht he is has been trying to make her feel since always … she just want to drown in his eyes…

Just a little change
Small, to say the least
Both a little scared
Neither one prepared
Beauty and the Beast

Yes he has succeeded he has succeeded into.. making his way inside her .. he has slowly penetrate in her now he very comfortably residing inside her.. so deeply that it shock her when with all her tries n affords he made this much effect..

Yes she was scared she is still scared.. it isn't little change..its her life up side down… prepared..are u kidding me.. she never even knew anything such any thngs so soulful anything so spiritual exist in this world.. any such thing she can feel.. she thought she is deprived of this.. she has given herself in this…. She has given herself to him

But the last line of the song made her shiver so much… as he turned her and made her back rest against his chest..

He didn't know wht she is thinking but the way she is looking at her was making his nerves shiver… she was looking at him with so much love, intensity and praise.. as if he is God and she is worshiping ..its scary he is God he is a very weak human… sumwhere it seems she was making sumthing in her mind about him… he want to capture her close into his arms.. and he hugged her from back to make her close.. not to make her think more and make her flow with him without much thought..

He wants heart to take the charge now, it has been to much of the mind game… her sent was toxicfying ….. he wants to take in all… he nuzzle inside her hairs and she clutches to his hand.. he is doing ever possible thing to shut her mind and she knew she cant do anything not to make it awake.. nor she want to…


Ever just the same
Ever a surprise
Ever as before
Ever just as sure
As the sun will rise

She felt his lips make patterns on her skin.. from her ears down to her neck.. he stoped at her shoulder… placing a wet kiss… caressing her skin with his chin… she ruffled his hairs trying to hold herself… making him more crazy..

She doesn't knew wht he is thinking about her.. she doesn't know wht he has thought about them as together.. she doesn't know where she stand in his life after this month.. but one things is she is sure of .. he is the beauty in her life.. and she is the beast.. and before the flower dies… she want to live with him as much as she can.. she will take everything out of these days… she will do whtevr he want her to do to make it happen.. to make it forever.. can they..she turn to find the answer in his eyes



Tale as old as time
Tune as old as song
Bittersweet and strange
Finding you can change
Learning you were wrong


He look at her as if asking wht… she wish he can read she want him now.. she wants him all over her… she want him that is all… everything that she carry with her and always will carry can he forget and can they make it…she cant change wht she is... he was right he just wanted her.. and he has successfully got her .. but now she is more afraid.. she want to ask him not to leave her… this time he has made her fragile…


Certain as the sun
Rising in the east
Tale as old as time
Song as old as rhyme
Beauty and the beast.

Not knowing why her eyes her shining with apprehension.. he want her to be sure.. to be sure of him.. to be sure.. there is nothing to be scared nothing to be afraid of… he still don't know wht he can do to make her feel he is there.. he just move forward and kissed her forhead…. She closed her eyes and smiled… he answered her yet again.. making her know he there to stay..

As he moved away and look at her with a smile.. and affection, she moved a bit more close earning surprised expression for him… placing her hand on his neck.. she slowly move towards him and soflty kissed him.. placing soft pecks on his lips … she almost made him groan… she made him surprised .. it was shuddering as it was making him feel her love her affection…

He let her have her way, he let her do whtevr she wants to do, he let her molest him.. she was kissing him so softly as if she was trying to capture evry bit of it in her heart in her soul… as if she was imprinting it on her… she was exploring as she wanted slowly… evry part… evry corner… she was taken in evry effect it holds…

And he was letting her have her way, it was the first time she took initiative, it was the first time her desires came on the surface.. it was the first time he was been loved by her…

Mayank: nupur …he whispered

Nupur: hmm

Mayank: that is teasing ..

She smiled on his lips.. and than stop wht was making things so difficult for him… and kissed him with all the passion, praise n desire… he pulled her closed hlding her head firmly… she has provoked all the desires in him… he want to make her all…

Broking away resting her forehead with him , she cant help her self to smile…

Nupur: u don't know how I have start seeing u as..

Mayank: he smile.. I think I m getting it now… n more to that I can see u know wht ur for me…

With that she hugged him tight and he kissed her shoulder assuring her, she was aging appearing vulnerable and this not the way he like her.. she is his knight and he like her just the way it…

He broke away and made her locks back, wch have came out of her hairs as he messed her hairs during the kiss…

He smirk

Mayank: I messed ur hairs..

She chukled..

Nupur: I donot mind…

Mayank: really… u don't seem to mind anything today

Nupur: not at all…

Mayank: are u sure… he pulled her more close she comfortably moved… I can ask anything…

He smirk naughtily

Nupur: she smile… u can have me as wht so evr way u want…

A sigh escape from his mouth… did she really mean wht he think he have heard…. He donot know why but this payed one month has now started to kill him from inside… he jst want to know wht she has about all this… The evening was turning to too dramatic .. and she can too see the vulnerability that is appearing in both of them..

Nupur: mayankk

Mayank: hmm

Nupur: she pouted… I haven't eaten anything since morning…. I am hungry

He laughed.. and pecked her…

Mayank: oky than we have to move down from her.e

She pouted

Nupur: no..

Mayank: aray.. but I didn't want anyone to be here.. so didn't arranged anything here….

Nupur: so what.. I want to have dinner here..i am not gona move from here… she almost winced

Mayank: but

Nupur: she crossed her hands around his neck… common ur mayank Sharma.. cant u do such … she said with a smirk..

Mayank: aha..its like that…. She nooded in yes… give me min..

He called reception and asked them to arrange food here… and by the time he roam around with her ..to look all this more closely

Nupur: how u did it all.. its seems so real… she touched the windows and he stoped her to do so

Mayank: donot it will be hot… it isn't sun so u can't touch it… and as u said I m Mayank Sharma.. dear.. its nothing.. just ask sum people to make it..and they did…

Nupur: thanku.. I wish there got be sumthing more than thanks I could say to u…

Mayank: u know initially I thought I had dine sumthing really stupid.. he confees sheepishly.. and she chukled… but than looking at u like this … waoo..

Sir ur dinner is been served..

Mayank: thanks… shall we princes..

Having there dinner in so much inside both of them.. more over feeling that they have finally started sumthing with eachother was making them feel goosibump…

Moving away from the place.. she hold him and than.. again looked at the place.. she certainly donot want to move away from there..

He chukled more…

Mayank: sweet heart… chalein ya ap ko yahin rehna hai

Nupur: she pouted and look at him… second wala option valid hai kya

He laughed now… and pecked her lips adoring her..

Mayank: u know wht ur a deadly combination of the most innocent and bewitching woman I have ever meet.. now lets move from here.. or I will pick u up ..

Nupur: she smile.. well though I donot mind but than we are at public place n I donot want my picture to be on front page with messed hairs…

Mayank: ur looking perfect …. Lets go.. cum… wht now nupur.. as she stoped him again…

And second time in evening she took him offguard kissing him…

Mayank: why suddenly I am appearing so kissable to u han…

Nupur: thanku it's the best every evening I ever had .. and I might evr have…

Mayank: i m not sure abt the later one…

Moving in elevator holding his arm, he was loving this love showering all over him as she placed her head on his shoulder n he pecked her hairs… he was sumhwere believing they are now moving towards sumthing good…. but than just a few floor below when the door was about to close… a night mare enter it..

Mine mine.. my exy has find a w***re for him..

Edited by drfizaahmed - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it was wowww
i mean mayank did all this for nupur hayei maar jao... its so heaven,y beautiful

lovely fiza..

thanks for ths update but now m eagerly waiting for the nxt chap as i can imagine would be more awsome one 😉


🤗
Edited by drmaha - 12 years ago

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