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Posted: 12 years ago

MY Rply to u all

Thanks a lot to evry one for such wonderful comment

@ anila: thanks jani… I was laughing at ur "I mean" so much of that in comment shows ur level of felings u got from this update and that was exactly I wish u all have so thanks a lot dear

@ shaffy: thanks dear… ya past a glimpse came at as shocker… there will be huge one whn in a go I will tell evrything

@ deepa: thanks dear… pls never say so much of sorry to me… its oky .. I m glad u think its getting more n more grip on u as a reader

@ jaya.. u shocked me with the length of ur comment.. I think this change has cum with the wirter born in u…lol…( jis k pm ab se mjhy milna chaiy) ab pata chala kasa lagta hai tu read those cimments n each n evry word mean whole word … and im so gald to see ur in depth analysis of the ff and so much of apprecitiaion … I m sum how now a bit relax abt the fact that u all have understood them so well thanku so much dear

@ vinan: im sorry asa kasay hogay.. im really sorry…. Thanks a lot

@ diviya: woh aay humaray thread per khuda ki rehmat hai..lolz..thanks dear

@ mehak.. yaar I m being lazy and not being to much in to writing lately… I just wasn't able to.. plus to a crtain extend I donot want myself to be out of these characters I donot want to mess them up…. So I sticked to it… personally I was busy though I m too yet now I have got the old grip to sum extend back.. and all credits to Anila these two rapid chapters are because of her

@ kheya… not very consciously as a gesture of proposal yet yes consciously as gesture of asking her to explore he has asked her to give her hand

@ faru thanks jani

And all of u whom comment thanku so much

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A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world.
Oscar Wilde

Chapter: 14

He was thinking from quite a few time to say it… he has to..

Nupur: wht.. just surge

He smiled more widely..

Nupur: from past 20 mins ur trying to say sumthing.. its seems like I m the husband and my wife is trying to say she is pregnant

Mayank: u gross.. this was the most pathetic example… wht the hell u cant cum up with good one for me..

Nupur: oh really.. give me sumthing good.. to add u there..be a man… say it..

Mayank: nupur… will you go with me on a dinner…

Nupur: she laughed… Mr Sharma.. why r u asking..

The mocking in her tone , yes it was for herself but made him angry to much of tht…why n how many time do he have to tell her… to get out of the fact….

Mayank: u know that is the problem..that is exactly wht the problem is… fine let me go straight at it… I am not asking the person I have bought for month… I know your thinking tht.. u always does think tht way…. I am asking you.. and you have all the way out from it…

She sigh .. she didn't want to make him angry …. Ans she knew he is out of this but than she always remind herself about this not wanting to let herself go

Nupur: its not that… its.. are u sure mayank.. u can make urself in trouble…

Mayank: nupur stop thinking.. its escape na… so stop thinking… stop thinking ab wht whn n how

Nupur: yes…

He smiled widely

Mayank: yes

Nupur: she join the ear to ear smile club… yes….

Mayank: lets go than… I hope that u will have great time…

Nupur: u better make sure this Mr Sharma.. I m pretty specific about my date….

Mayank: aha… so u think it's a date… really..

Nupur: no I just said like that.. she said sheepishly…

Mayank: very well than… let see… be ready in the evening … I will see u than.. he lean on to her.. and I like to see my date a bit exclusive today let see wht u have in store for me… pecking her … he left to think wht he should plan…

..

She was excited .. dam excited.. it was her first date and she want it to be so beautiful so so beautiful.. sumhwere the thing tht he is here .. just for her is now sinking inside her… she is getting a feel… it might have sum future.. it can… if they make it happen.. if she can be slightly reason able with him… it can go far… and she want it to go till the end… she really hope n now has adding sumthing she lost far before.. she has started to pray.. tht it remind till the end…

Sarah: ma'am ur lunch…

Nupur turned to Sarah and sarah look at the pile of cloths.. and than at the pout at nupur's face..

Sarah: may I help ma'am.

Nupur: she smiled… I donot have anything good to wear…

Sarah: she smile more… pardon ma'am to b personal… but I believe sir will like u in anything u wear…

She blushed a bit… it was strange.. he like her with more cloths than off of them…

Nupur: even than I want to look best…

Sarah: we can go shop if u want…

Nupur: great idea…I should I actually…. wht color but…black..

Sarah: no… its dark.. it's the color of disguise …

Nupur: hmm than… I want to b in sumthing

Sarah: sumthing.. expressive…. ur wht ur…

Nupur: ya… she said surprisingly… this house is wired everyone gets to know u…wht about red…

Sarah: can be perfect… its about u feel wht u want to be in….

Nupur: oky ask the driver I need to rush to shop..

She checked her purse… and find her card there .. she isn't going to use his money…not at all.. its isn't professional date.. tht she will be using his money to make him feel good… this she has removed between then far away… this about them… it for him from her..

Roaming around the mall she just not couldn't make her self to buy anything… red was never her color and whn saraah asked her to have it.. it must have to do sumthing with mayank for sure… but she isn't liking any one of these.. she so wished she would have asked Sarah to join thm

Just when she thought she is not gona have any good dress to wear her eyes droped on gown that made her claps her hand dreamingly…

Nupur: she smiled widely… screw red… its perfect.. its wht I want to be……

..

Mayank was happy with everything he has done .. now the thought was to get back to home.. and bring nupur here.. he doesn't know this childish thing he has done.. why he has done this… he is thirty and he is behaving as if he is not even 20.. but than it was for her not for him.. its for her happiness.. its about her fantasy .. its about her.. the fact that he was wrong about his thoughts about her.. the fact that he was wrong about he cant take her past.. al was wrong.. he cant take anything from her.. he just want her.. thts it.. he wants her… nothing is more important than her being there..

He isn't seeking pleasure for sum days in her… he is seeking a permanent happiness in her.. and he has found tht .. the only thing tht is left is to make her understand.. how gloomy how messd how wht so ever she is he is ready to take all .. all of her…

But the fact that he doesn't knew is, planning believing is different and facing the reality is far more different that anything else… wht u think ur prepared for …still at times surprise u hard way …….

……..

As he reach home and rung the bell… nupur was standing in front of the mirror.. and giving the final touch to her hairs with the help of sarrah..she pouted and saraah assure her ..

Saraah: I will look ma'am

And she sigh in relief ..thank God mayank didn't listen to her to make Sarah go away…. Else today all the help and support she has gotton from this woman wont be there…. she can now place the final pin in her hair making them look as perfect as she wanted .. she giggle like a little girl looking at herself in the mirror.. she was looking like her dream princes.. just the way she its is in dreams… slipping her feet in her heels she started to walk towards him… sacred nervous.. maybe he will not like the childish act of her.. and he may not even notice wht she has done to herself.. he is grown up mature person.. but whtever no negative thoughts in her mind … no negativity around them..

Saraah: sir she will be there in a min..

Mayank: thanks saraah.. u can leave to ur home.. we wil mange..

Saraah: sure sir…

Waiting for her was panicking, he donot remember when was the last time he was tht nervous.. he even cant remember when was the last time he did sutmhing this foolish… or sumthing so fantasizing … he took a deep breath trying to make his heart let the feeling sink in.. the perfection he wants in this evening will cum… wht he has done she should read… wht if she doesn't… shreks ..why he did tht.. he shouldn't. have.. his shouldn't have disappear in thin air as he saw her walking down the aisle cuming towards him…

He laughed at his luck… this isn't a coincidence this cant be a coincidence…. Lord wants to tell them He is with them.. they just need to believe that… else why she will dress up like this…

Dress in a light gown with her tied from the front and flowing on the back, graced with a slightest jewelry and the best no necklaces.. she was making him go into heaven.. she leads him to heaven..

His intense gaze and his dumbflod expressions were not giving any help to her.. she cant guess he is looking at her like stupid.. or beauty..

She came in front of him stood.. waiting from him to speak

Nupur: mayank..

Mayank: wht.. still in daze expression

Nupur: why ur looking at me like that..

Mayank: like wht..

Nupur: like u have seen a ghost

Mayank: correction .. I m just seeing princes from the heaven..

Her cheeks blotched as he said exactly she wished to hear… and she bitted her lower lip to hold herself from smiling ear to ear..

Nupur: are u planning to spend the rest of evening here handsome…

Mayank: I have lost the track of everything nupur… I have just now lost it…

He said that still in a waoo expression and found her smiling and her eyes glittering so much with happiness.. that he wants to press the pause and hold it right there..

Nupur: stop flirting and shall we move.. she was about to moved when he jerk her back to the place.. and kissed her softly.. letting her know wht he is actually feeling can't be defined in words… he wants to convey everything his heart is feeling … and she can actually read it making her more nervous than evr

Settling in his limo.. they started their journey towards the destination that is gonna blew her mind away..

Mayank: cum here…

He asked a way she has never heard.. and she slowly slided herself to cum near him.. god knows why she was feeling so much flutters and shivery ..she was feeling so new around him.. as if it was her first time she is nearing a man..

Mayank: turn around…

Nupur: wht

Mayank: turn around..

She turned facing her back towards him… and he slided a chain embedded with diamonds with a pendent having rubies in it… as his fingers feathered along her neck.. she felt her strange and unable to take it she closed her eyes… just than she felt a kiss planted on her shoulder…

He will make her crazy for sure today she is not gonna survive his charm..his compassion… his passion.. . she knew it.. already he is making her to just turn around and kiss him letting him knew wht actually he is doing to her.. and she knew its just the beginning…

Mayank: u didn't like the gift or the gifter….

Nupur: wht..

She opened her eyes and looked at him who has a smirk on his face as if he is slowly achieving wht he really want to.. she is losing herself.. or rather past tense will be better…

He tell her to look at her gift with his eyes and that's when she realize he was making her wearing sumthing… she looked at it and spread her hands dreamingly on it..

Nupur: its beautiful….

Mayank: really..

Nupur: ya.. still now her voice were cuming out as whisper.. and just now looking at how expensive it must be she panic a bit.. mayank but

Mayank: shh,.. donot u dare break this moment.. no…

He said strictly.. and she smiled..

Nupur: thanku..

It was just not for the necklaces it was for the feelings he is arousing inside her.. it was the heaven he is building around her.. it was for the girl he is waking up..or woke up in her….

The car stoped and he placed her hand around her arms and walk inside the hotel… a person was already there to escort them.. after all he is mayank Sharma.. and whne he asked for sumthing it should b there.. right there…

Mayank stoped him to cum with them to the top floor… and he nodded and guided them to the elevator wch will lead them there..

Nupur: mr Sharma doesn't want anyone around.. why..

Ahh she is back with her wits and he love this

Mayank: cause of exactly the same reason ur mind is cuming up gorgeous..

Nupur: ahh so should I be worried…

Mayank: that demands… if ur scared of losing ur lost to be..

Nupur: I am never scared of that… I am scared of gaining myself with u….

Gunjan: OMG.. she almost run towards the elevator … and stood infornt of the couple…

Who were lost in each others eyes… her words he want to confirm and found the same honesty in her eyes..

Mayank: he groan.. ur making me crazy u know tht..

Nupur: stop it mayank.. this time she giggled and blushed furiously

Gunjan: exactly… hola… look around u…

Mayank: kidoo… he was dam surprised to see her right there it was pleasant surprise….

Gunjan: wala… finally u saw me.. not fair..u almost put my repo on stack u know tht..

Nupur shuddered a bit and mayank was taken a back…wht she actually mean that no she cant

Gunjan: wht … u think Gunjan shout man name in mid of corridors… and tht man doesn't even look back to her… I know u have a beautiful lady beside u but that doesn't give u right to ignore me..

Mayank: guilty and charged…

Gunjan: that u are… hi nupur.. I m gunjan…

Now it was Nupur turn to get shocked… who she is n how she knew her… she has a bit panic inside her as today she doesn't want anyone to remind her wht she is not even herself

Gunjan: donot get shocked.. I know u are the car he went behind.. she winked.. and nupur was just looking in wht…

Mayank: gunjannn

Nupur: wht…

Mayank: she is samrat's finance

Gunjan: why ur clarifying thinks… han han… BTW why ur were so lost that ur hearing power suddenly fly away…wala

She was in full teasing mood and nupur couldn't help tp blush n giggled as mayank's expressions were dam cute

Mayank: Ms shergil

Gunjan: wht I am just asking…she said innocently…. .nw I get to know.. why ur brother keep saying … bhai is being so busy in Seattle he even not attending my call ..and even in NIGHT… now I need to inform him its bad manners u see..

This made both of them blush and smile..

Mayank: bye gunjan.. have fun..

Gunjan: oky I get it..I was not supposedly was taking ur much time but than if u want … hahah.. enjoy.. I leaving u in the name of lady… she move forward and hugged nupur… nupur was taken a back yet she reciprocated…

Gunjan: I m so gald I meet u… keep the fun up.. she wink and wao timing my floor…

Mayank: mayank hugged her… bye dear… take care… BTW why ur here

Gunjan: a frnds wedding..

Nupur: do join us sumtime ..

Gunjan: really bro shuld i…

Mayank: u cn anytime

Gunjan: so nice of u nupur.. but I will be leaving tonite… almost in 1/2 hrs.. plane is waiting ..esle I would have loved to spoil my sweet brothers romantic vactions u see….

I know I have done enough … bye u both..

Mayank: ye sweet heart

Gunjan cant believe she will see this.. maaynk here with nupur.. she need to get to her fianc he didn't told her.. he is dead.. but one thing was amzing they are so much in love. One look at the way they were lost in each others eyes … tell her all that she wants to know and she cant ask anything better than that for mayank.. he deserved it..and sumwhere the why she found nupur today she knw one thing.. she deserve this more than anyone in this world..…

Nupur: she knew me..

Mayank more than I belve I know u… ya I told her all.. and she was hell angry on me ..

Nupur: she should be her so loved brother is going out with pro***

Mayank: to ur surprise she wasn't angry on me because of that.. she was angry on me because I was letting go the car and not was going after it…

Nupur: all sharmas are such

Mayank: no… she is the only good thing Samrat has ever done…

Nupur: very bad mayank… Samrat must have earn her… so u cant take away his credit out

Mayank: sigh.. tht is ture… are we discussing sharma's legacy on our date

Nupur: pitty yet still nothing like a datey has happen…

Mayank: tht is because still u haven't reached ur date venue..

Nupur: I m just wondering why we are going up n up n up

Mayank: cause that was the only place they agreed to make wht I want to make..

Nupur: oky..

Mayank: curious

Nupur: I am… more than that I m excited…

Mayank: that is great.. as we are here

As the elevator open nupur frown a bit.. and as soon as she step inside the huge area… her jaw dropped and to control her scream she placed her hand on her mouth.. her eyes were wide and this was exactly the reaction he did all this for.. this was exactly he can do anything for…


Edited by drfizaahmed - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
😲😲😲
leee...yeha kyun End kiya!!!! kyun!! kyunnn!!!!!!!!
ab main ageka kese parhungi
ase crucial point par kyun rok liya mujhe!!!!
ab main hostel ja kar kese parhungi??? sare mujhe lab mein dekh kar hasenge jab main next update waha parhungi woh bhi with a huge grin while blushing! sab kahenge pagal ho gayi hain yeh ladki
chalo koi nhi...waise bhi yeh toh normal hain akhir ghar par bhi sab yehi toh kehte hain 😆

ek pal ke liye toh laga ke sab garbar ho jayega!
i mean jab Gunjan ayi i was like!!! Areyyy Gunjannn ufff
kya timing hain...😛😆🤣
bt then Thank God! ke yeh gunji bhi Parichey ki Gunji ki tarha nikli pehle toh galat waqt par tapak parti hain then sahi se chali bhi jati hain 😆

Awesome part API
i sooo love u for Everything
i mean meri wajah se apko itni jaldi update karna para n apne kiya bhi so Thank u sooo much
love u to d coreee
it was sooo Beautiful
i m speechless!!! accha hasna mat ke itna sab bol kar keh rahi hain speechless 😆
bt srsly!!!!!!!!! i sooo damn loved it
B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L...
the way Nupur agreed was really cute n then the way she putted effort was so awesome
i loved it!!!
n m sure she must hv looked sooo pretty
waise even i was shock for a sec ke apki Nupur n date par red 😲 jyada tar toh White hi hota hain na 😉😆😳
bt awww...she was behaving like a teenage girl n it was so nice to see her behaving like that.
loved it...
n loved Mayank alwaysss
n OMG!!!!!!!!
that locket wala part was sooo damnnn Romantic han...
Sigh!!!!!!!!!!!!
it was awesomsttt
n i loved every single thing abt this part n this ff
loved it to BITS!!!
loved it to d coreee
will wait eagerly for that Date...😉
n han Blush thora kam karana mujhe bt han it had to be Damnnn Romantic😉 😆 ☺️
loved it sooo much..😳
will miss commenting like this n taking the 1st place whc is mine!!!!!!!! 😳 always!!!!
bt will try to cmnt on every part for sureee
loved it to Bits
love u lodsss API...🤗🤗🤗
Take care...May ALLAH bless u forever...Ameen.
Edited by -Anila- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
ab kya tha yeh bhi likh deti.. agle 2-3 dinon tak sar pakadkar baiththi toh nahin ...

Waise I loved the way, Gunjan showered warmth on Nupur.. and MN scenes are always a pleasure to read...

Beautifully written.. 😊

P.S... itni khushi dikhao mat.. Only God knows, when I'll disappear again 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
rres


omg i cant tell u how mch i love this part but now eagerly waiting for the next one..
ls pls update sonn.

nmy gosh mayank did this for her


lovely

i love gunjan and mayank convo how sweet of them ...
Edited by drmaha - 12 years ago
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Awesome Part..
awesome...
Loved it Fiza Di..!!!


Beautifully potrayed their feelings ..their emotions ..
their happiness for each other..
everything was just mind blowing..!!!

Mayank is behaving like a sweet little around 20 yr old boy making plans for his date ...
awesome..!!!

you know i liked he was behaving it..
awesome..
he was panicking to wait for her...not the traits of a mature man..but still in every mature man has a immature child in it and it was necesaary for this date..!!!


I must agree Sarah has a good taste.she suggested red colour for thier date...
For the first time Nupur was getting nervous...for getting ready like this..
I liked it...
Unki aise situtaion per to
ek song banta hain...

Pehla nasha pehla khumar
naya pyaar hain naya intezaar..
kar loon mein kya apna haal
aye-dil-bekarar
mere - dil-e-bekrar..
tu hi bata...


usne baat ki kuch aise dhang se..
sapne de gaya vo hazaro rang..!!

reh jaaon jese mein haar k..
aur chume vo pyar se...

Awesome Part Di...!!!

Gunjan liked Nupur this is a good sign..!!!
Loved the part..
The Gunjan-Mayank convo was so good..!!!

I am happy that Nupur didn't felt any low in presence of her rather Gunjan made her feel special and also hugged her...
This is actually a very ggod move..
Now i am desperately wating for their Date...
Do update soon

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Posted: 12 years ago
anodr fantastic update fiza.
so lovd it.
lovd d way love is blossoming n dey r just flowing.

i was so scard when gunjan came but gosh she knows everything n likd nupur n appreciated deir love.dats realy nice.

n ye kya ending tha!its unfair.m so eager to know what mayank have done.

waiting for next
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Posted: 12 years ago
wts dat jaw dropping surprise??
eager... anxious ... excited!🤪
jaldi update karo ji!😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
they are living in dream world
loveely update
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it was an amazing part
very cute and lovely

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