Raizada and Sons - Thread 4

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

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"You can fool some of the people all of the time, and all of the people some of the time, but you cannot fool all of the people all of the time." ~ Abraham Lincoln~

Raizada and Sons

This story showcases two areas of my interest, Politics and the serial IPKKND on Star Plus. The story bears some similarity to the serial and the due credit is extended, the rest I own, the content, premise and writing style.

I would love to read your comments and suggestions, I would not promise to include all in my writing and would like to add, constructive criticism is always welcome; it would greatly help the story and my effort to stay true to the concept. I am relatively new to writing and though I enjoy it immensely, my ability at writing regular updates is limited. The update soon comments, honestly cannot be honored as I mentioned earlier, cannot type that fast.

I request you not to copy/duplicate this work, it's petty to plagiarize and sincerely hope you enjoy my work, like and comment. In case you do find my work interesting enough to recommend to others, please direct them to this page. I strictly prohibit unauthorized use of this fan fiction in parts or whole.

Thank you for reading, please do hit the like and leave a comment if you found the update/story interesting enough. I do send out PMs to those who do so, as I would not want to flood anybody's inbox if they are not interested in reading or receiving PMs for this story. Alternatively, you can also block my name if you don't wish to receive PMs from me, I would not mind. I would want you to enjoy my writing and not like it to be forced.

Once again, thank you for reading

- Kalyaani

Thread One - Chapter 1 to 23

Thread Two - Chapter 24 to 37

Thread Three - Chapter 38 - 49

Thread Four

Chapter 50 - Punishment / Chapter 51 - Strong Bonds / Chapter 52 - Mirror test

Chapter 53 - Mother's love / Chapter 54 - Unworthy / Chapter 55 - Unconditional

Chapter 56 - Changed / Chapter 57 - Shift of Power / Chapter 58- Skeletons in the closet

Chapter 59- False enthusiasm / Chapter 60 - New beginnings

PLEASE DO NOT COPY UPDATES TO OTHER SITES, THIS UPDATE IS MEANT EXCLUSIVELY FOR INDIA FORUM MEMBERS.

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arnavbarun

@arnavbarun

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

Yipee me first again for an absolutely amazing update !!!!

Such an awesome piece of writing..

Even after they confessed their love I always felt that something was amiss!

The sense of total submission was not their from Khushi's side..but the revelation of the truth changed that! the passion was always their but the new found devotion fulfilled everything!!!

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dilectus

@dilectus

Navigator

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Posted: 12 years ago

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how would i ever tell you how much i love your writing??

i am in love with this one and POL...so much that i have read both of them 5 times each..and m reading POL for 6th time this week!!! even wen my end sem exams are goin on with full blow!!

everytym i find myself realizing new things about the thoughts, the thinking, the situaton, what could have been done, what could have been said, what could have happened...what not!!!

plzz dont ever stop writing

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vgedin

@vgedin

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Wow! Okay Arnav has some stamina! Jesus :D

I read the whole thing several times - and now I see the beauty in that complete devotion that Khushi now feels for Arnav. She has surrendered to her love, not submitted herself to Arnav.

There is something so raw in the way you write - you write as the narrator, and the narration is precise, and to the point - no ambiguity, no innuendos, no metaphors. I don't even remember you using terms like "mounds" for breasts, for example. But the narrator's voice is passive, so honest yet dispassionate - it does not betray anything, it does not tell us what to feel or make of it in the end. I think that is wonderful, it allows every reader to form his/her own opinion, makes that process very independent and unbiased.

That you thought of writing this chapter - a physical expression of an emotion so deep and passionate, is brilliant Kalyaani. And you've really done justice to it. The whole pain-pleasure thing kind of mirrors Khushi's state of being pained with guilt yet blissfully in love at the same time. Khushi's confession that she enjoyed it as much as he did was important, because otherwise it would mean she has become submissive, and that would mean Khushi has lost a part of herself - never a good thing.

I enjoyed this chapter every time I read it - gets better each time. Very well written Kalyaani, and it is not easy to write something like this. Several people write about a couple in love having sex, but to write about souls mating like this is very difficult, and this update was flawless.

Edited by vgedin - 12 years ago