The Unnatural: Rise of the Army Against the Si-ah - Page 32

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Will be back soon. PROMISE!

Manal <3

Edited my Post on Page Forty-Four. Hope you forgive me for being inactive on this Series! And keep PMing me. Will catch up soon on the other parts! 😳

awesome concept...tnx for da pm

Awesome update!!

Originally posted by: KaSh-Maneet-Fan

Hiii...Awesome update...Loved it...Can't wait 4 more...Con soon...Thanks 4 da pm

Originally posted by: NocturnalBeing

A Reserved Post. 'Sorry' catching up from Chapter Four. Recently been out-dated on this Series. Sorry! 😳

*Edited*

So, firstly Zeejay I am really sorry for being horribly inactive at your current updates!

I had been coming online but couldn't find time to catch up on this Fan Fiction as also my examinations were on and numerous un-explainable reasons! 😕

It's okie hun :) You have been writing too! It would be very selfish of me to ask for regular reviews plus i know how it is, i myself have failed to read others work alongside writing! I am Not a multi-tasker myself and studies come first! So yeah i understand :)

I could only catch up till Chapter Seven, so my analysis on them first, later I will read mostly by tomorrow! 😃

Lets go to the prev chapters then :D

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Well. Coming to Chapter Four, I had half-read it earlier when I had received the PM but I don't know how, didn't bother / forgot to reserve a comment! 😳

Hope the apologies are accepted! 😳 Sure, they are :)

Hm. Chapter Four was outstanding. Thanks!

Really could relate to the real life along with the Sci-Fi unexplored factors of the Series! 😆

The way people would bicker when a new, rich and handsome person comes in town / college! 😉 IKR Everyone talks about the new kid in class, to the new kid they seem like sharks in the gigantic sea but Barun is different.

Stupendous efforts on that part and it proved to be very convincing.

I am glad you liked the play of events :)

In general I don't remember the chapter, but I really liked the way Sanaya was getting the parchments from her friends Karan and Nia.

Typical Student Life! 🤣

Yeah i used to write at the back of my book 😆

Which reminds me, the new characters' entry was very well developed and caught immediate attention! 👏

The happy-go-lucky group 😳

Then comes Abhinav. Boy! He seems to be a mysterious and effective man!

The way he controlled the fight / quarrel between the old students and Sobti!👏

And also the scene in the Head Master's Cabin. Money Speaks Loud Apparently! 😉

Abhinav gets work done. That's him.

He is there, he is in charge.

Money does, how else would Barun be allowed admission mid-year ;)

Commendable. You have been working very hard on developing the characters yet keeping their mysterious aspect alive! 👏 🤗

Thank You, I love them too and i never had any doubts regarding who will be the face of my Sanaya(the one in the series), I did juggle between Abhinav-Madhura-Barun.

For Abhinav i thought Arjun, Madhura i was considering Shilpa A. and for Barun i thought Mohit.

Arjun and Mohit bagged other characters which befitted them more. Shilpa didn't fit at all as the plot thickened, and Barun bagged the role coz of many small reasons. i have been in two minds on what to reveal and what not, so far am quite satisfied regarding my decisions, let's hope the same continues :)

Then comes the Madhura and Akshay sequence, loved the way you expressed her emotions at being caught by the headmaster! 😳

Yeah 😆 Wanted to prove that Madhura is not the keener straight A type student.

Shows your sensibility and presence of sense of emotions at sequences and scenes when you write! 😎

And also, Akshay and Sanaya seem to be having a very nice Friendship! 😉

The way they met in college [introduction sequence], the tying of laces and the blessings! 😉

Thank You, you are very kind. Akshay-Sanaya are like bro-sis pair. Really..

Then comes, the outburst of Sobti!

Wow! Man, changes surely get him hooked up! 🤢

Totally! *nods grimly*

The way you expressed his pissing off-ness and the way he saw Abhinav even from a distance, truly signs of an AUTHOR! 👏

I loved the way you disentangled the truth without letting out the main mystery when Abhinav confronted Sobti.

Yeah it was Barun's place to shine, it was his side of story. His struggle 😳

And that reminds me, Mohit!

So, finally he comes in to the picture , though invisibly! 🤣

I also liked the way you are unfolding the characters but not letting out their real identity.. 👏

You know, only the partial truth as they say! 😉

He does, yes i wanted to introduce his powers first. They have a lot to do with his character, so you see his powers introduced him ;)

You know the partial truth has a lot to do with that touch of reality i always like to bring in.

When we first meet a person we don't learn much do we, it is as we go deeper in bonding that we realize the true person within. On a more basic level, not always does the face tell what the soul has been through.

Then, the breakfast sequence in Chapter Seven, I can imagine the sarcasms in Sobti's voice!

You are dealing with Barun very maturely and as per the story-line.

Barun is good to write as well, He comes very easily to me. Thank You, again you are very kind.

He seems to be confused and in sheer pain. And maybe that is the part of the change.

Yes it most definitely is. Barun is not like that, he is going through a phase.

I haven't really read further, so I am going to take some time off and catch-up again! 🤓

I am fine with that, take your time...just do come back, i thought i had lost you. I am glad to know i didn't 😳

Sorry for being extremely late in my comment, and I hope the length makes up!

Oh it so does!

Thank you for PMing me all the time 😳 and sorry for not acknowledging it!

I have edited my buddy list, i shamelessly continue to bug those who are still there 🤣

Keep me in cause this Series, I definitely want to read!

Awwwhh Thank You! As i said i really thought i had lost you! Should have written to you *shakes her head in regret*

Zeejay! You are a marvel, or as in your Fiction's words, a Charmer like Barun and his Audi R8! :P

Eeep! :D Now really you are an absolute sweetheart to say that 😳 Thank You.

I am pretty excited to read further down till Chapter Eleven 👍🏼 and maybe Dhrasti, Vaishnavi Ma'am and the others come soon! 😉

Oh am afraid they won't be coming in Series I. Check the list on page 1 to know whose joining and whose not 😳

Till then all I can say is, keep up your good work! 😃

Means much, thank you 🤗

Much Love, Nivriti <3

Hugs and Kisses on your way <33

P.S: One thing I would like to mention, you have a very fluent English and also Writing Skills. I love the way you frame your words without losing your essence and that is your USP!

Well all credit to my teachers n the books i have read i guess 😳

Reading does wonders to one's english. That's the key.

Keep it going Girl! You catch Attention with your updates and keep going like this! 😃

I have been enjoying myself, Thank You for making the ride all the more amazing by being a part of it ! 🤗

Sorry i messed up with the PM's, some ppl myt have gotten it twice :/ :P

Awsome Zeejay. Loved It. Conti Soon.