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Hello Pyaar Ka Dard Deewana and Deewani's! 😆 😳
I am back with another SS I've been on the writing role so I thought I would write this too! 😆 😃 Basically this is a short SS maybe of 2/3 parts. Because I like to write in detail an OS didnt really work! 😆 The first part is all PaYa and the second part will be as well but with family! Please guys I want tonnes of comments! All writers are trying to increase activity so if you have time just leave them a comment! I am not begging its just we want this forum to rock like the show! 😃 Do it for PaYa! 😉 So enough of my chatter patter please leave your honest comment/critisisms once you have read! 😃

SS: Nana's Birthday

Pankhuri and Aditya decided that they would both wake up at 5am and try and get all the main things sorted out for Nana's birthday. Pankhuri woke up on time and rushed to get herself dressed in a simple salwar for the morning. "Pata nahin Adi uth gaya honga ya nahin?" she quickly brushed her hair placed her bindi on her forehead and slowly sneaked out of her room. She looked left, right and centre to make sure that no one was there in the corridor. She looked over and could see Adi's room on the other side. She walked quickly and was outside his room. She knocked on the door gently but there was no answer. She knocked again but the same. She looked around anxiously making sure no one was around. She knocked again but he just wouldn't open. "What do I do?" she whispered. She slowly opened the door and tried to stop the creek from happening. She opened it and her eyes fell on the bed no one was there. She wondered where he was. "Adi...!" she whispered gently. No answer. She stepped in and saw no one. Just then the bathroom door creaked open and Adi came out topless and his hair and body wet. All he had on was a pair of trousers. Pankhuri turned around and was completly shocked. She put her hand over her mouth and turned around and closed her eyes. "Pankhuri tum!" Adi was shocked and Pankhuri was trying to close her eyes and not look. She was embarrassed. "Woh Adi... me toh aapko... me check karne aaya tha ke tum uth gaye ho ke nahin!" Pankhuri's cheeks were burning red. "Pankhuri its okay... dont worry about it dont be scared were friends right!" Adi wasn't too bothered as he was wiping his body and ruffling his hair. Panhkuri didnt move. He walked in front of her and held her hand. She opened her eyes and jumped, she saw Adi with his wet body. She was infact speechless but still overly embaarassed. Adi grabbed a T Shirt and wore it. As he was going to get his perfume and aftershave his hand pricked a nail that was pointing out of the dresser. "Ouch... Damn it!" Pankhuri turned around to see what happened. "Adi kya hua?" Pankhuri was deeply concerned she rushed to him and grabbed his hand. There was a big cut down his hand and he closed his eyes in pain. "Adi come and sit down!" she sat him down and she was so scared. There was a fear in her eyes. She opened the first aid box and Adi had his eyes on her. He wasn't worried about his wound anymore. He watched her concern and felt weird vibes in his heart. Pankhuri slowly applied the ointment on him. She looked at him as she was gently rubbing and her eyes were teary. "Adi why weren't you careful? What if something worse had of happened?" her heart was racing. Pyaar Ka Dard played. "Sorry!" Adi pulled an innocent face and she just looked at his blue eyes and fell in love. "Aaa!" Adi closed his eyes and Pankhuri got even tenser. "Im sorry Adi!" she slowly blew on his hand and he slowly opened one eye to see what she was doing. He smiled as she was blowing his hand like a petal. Thoda thoda chain bhi hai, thodi thodi bekarari... Thoda thoda chain bhi hai... thodi thodi bekarari... aur bhi ho pyaar jawan... aarzoo hai... yeh hamari ... yeh milan ho Dubara... Pyaar Ka Dard Hai Meetha Meetha... Pyaara Pyaara. They looked into each other's eyes and then there was a knock on Adi's door. Pankhuri was scared. She stood up and tried to hide somewhere. Adi held her hand and took her behind the door. He pinned her to the wall behind the door and Pankhuri was shocked. He was in front of her. The knocks continued. Adi had a firm grip on her hands. "Shhhushhh!" he put his finger on her lips. He slowly went to open his door. It was Avantika."Yeah mom!" he yawned and scruffled his hair so it looked like he had just woken up. "Mom why you here so early?" she looked around the room because she was suspicious. "Kuch nahin Adi go to sleep!" Adi was holding the door and the other were connected to Pankhuri. He closed the door and blew a sigh of relief. He looked at Pankhuri and laughed at her expressions. "It's okay Pankhu!" he giggled and she blushed a little and a small smile crept on her lips he guided her out of the door.

After a couple of hours passed Pankhuri and Aditya had got all of the decorations, food and entertainment set. "Were done Pankhuri! He had a big smile on his face. They decorated the whole hall with flowers and a light blue combination of curtains and also perfectly lined tables. Everyone came down and were shocked. "Adi what is this?" Avantika shouted. Adi was shocked. Preeti, Mami, Mama and Avantika all walked down together. "Mom just come down and I will explain, Nana is out!" Avantika knew it was Nana's birthday and so did the rest of them. "Mom we have decided to give Nana a surprise birthday!" Avantika smiled a bit and Preeti was ecstatic. "Adi baby this is a wonderful surprise!" Preeti was really happy. Adi explained to them the whole plan.

It was evening and everyone came down ready. Pankhuri came down in a white sequin Anarkali, her hair was straight as usual but there were little curls at the ends of her hair. She looked like a fairy. Adi was matching her for their performance, he was in a grey suit with white shirt. Their eyes met and they were lost in each other's eyes. Pyaar Ka Dard Hai Meetha Meetha Pyaara Pyaara, yeh hasin dard hi,do dilo ka hai sahara, roj hame mil key bhi, milane ke aas rahe, roj mite pyas koye pyas rahe, dil divana pukara. "Adi babu!" Shanky diverted his attention but when walking he still looked back at her and saw her blushing.

Precap: Nana is sat down and Adi and Pankhuri on the stage. Adi is doing a solo performance and then a joint performance with Pankhuri. Spotlight on Adi as he is about to sing.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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amazing ,,,,,,,

nice writing,,,,
w8ing for nxt part,,lolz..:-)
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YAAAY! AN SS!! I'm so excited! I will read right now and return with commentsss! 😃

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OMG!!!!!! I alternated between wide eyed, mouth open to biting my lips to goosebumps!! That sceeenee, with PaYa, Pankuri seeing Adi come out of the shower all wet.. mmm I had both goosebumps and I was biting my lips grinning at the same time!!! I could just imagine him in a towel and wet all clean, just out of the shower... Sorryyy.. Getting off subject..

The scene where she was taking care of his wound, and him watching her.. Beautiful.. So serene.. and I could imagine the song too! You know, in the show one of my FAVORITE PaYA parts is where they are both hiding behind the door, and they are so close while he holds her hand.. you recreated that moment again.. I LOVED IT! I cannot wait for you to continue.. Pleaaase continue soon!!

Fabulous.. seriously..
~Sharna
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Nice1 Sonia

Plz continue😊
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Fabulous SS Sonia. 👏 👏You write so well that I can easily visualize the scenes in front of my eyes. PaYa scenes were so superbly described and they really sizzle in your SS. 👏 👏 Waiting eagerly for next part and anticipating some more of such romantic and sensuous PaYa scenes. ⭐️ ⭐️
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Originally posted by: sudipta1988

amazing ,,,,,,,


nice writing,,,,
w8ing for nxt part,,lolz..:-)

Thanks soo much for reading! Gad you enjoyed it! 😃 Will update in a couple of days! 😃
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Originally posted by: sharna2k6

YAAAY! AN SS!! I'm so excited! I will read right now and return with commentsss! 😃

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OMG!!!!!! I alternated between wide eyed, mouth open to biting my lips to goosebumps!! That sceeenee, with PaYa, Pankuri seeing Adi come out of the shower all wet.. mmm I had both goosebumps and I was biting my lips grinning at the same time!!! I could just imagine him in a towel and wet all clean, just out of the shower... Sorryyy.. Getting off subject..

The scene where she was taking care of his wound, and him watching her.. Beautiful.. So serene.. and I could imagine the song too! You know, in the show one of my FAVORITE PaYA parts is where they are both hiding behind the door, and they are so close while he holds her hand.. you recreated that moment again.. I LOVED IT! I cannot wait for you to continue.. Pleaaase continue soon!!

Fabulous.. seriously..
~Sharna

Thank youuu for the big long comment! Enjoyed reading it! 😆 😳 Glad you liked the bathroom scene! I was going crazy just writing about it! 🤪😉 Hahaha we all go crazy over Adi I understand!! 😆 😉 Glad you loved that prts and yeah I am a big fan of the song its on my phone, my MP3 everywhere! I listen to it all the time so that's why it is incorporated! It's my signature touch! 😉 ❤️ Yeah that scene was used in the show but I tweeked it a little! 😉 Thanks a lot again and I will update once I am free! 😃
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Originally posted by: anusha.cochin

Nice1 Sonia

Plz continue😊

Thanks for reading! 😃 I will continue in a couple of days! 😃
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Originally posted by: SAIBALROUTH

Fabulous SS Sonia. 👏 👏You write so well that I can easily visualize the scenes in front of my eyes. PaYa scenes were so superbly described and they really sizzle in your SS. 👏 👏 Waiting eagerly for next part and anticipating some more of such romantic and sensuous PaYa scenes. ⭐️ ⭐️

Thank you sooo much bro for your lovely words! 😳 I'm glad you liked sizzling PaYa they were very romantic! 😳 Yeah I will try and update in a couple of days need to update my other FF's for DABH and Navya! 😃
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more i ahve no words to say about your ss

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