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Posted: 13 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: basket_101

Heyy!
You updatedd! =D

I was soo excited when I opened the pm!! =P
Anyway... reading the part felt veryy nice!
I lovee Rimar soo much and this is the only FF that I'm reading where they're the main characters
So this is definitely a special FF for me <3
I loved the hesitancy between them because that's what would actually happen if this were to take place in D3
They haven't interacted that much as of yet to be sharing/ talking with each other freely
Therefore the tiny, minuscule interactions they have are what makes them so special!
Loved how Rinni felt guilty for being so rude
That was so sweet!
I've always loved her a lot from the beginning because she's so sweet and cute! I remember how after the Shivam thing happened and they were going to Goa, she was the one who gave Sharon her blanket <3
That was such a sweet gesture of her... And I got reminded of that again while reading this part!
You've done a great job!
And I totally understand why you updated late..
I myself am like you... I have written the beginning of 4 OS' but haven't finished them because my inspiration's gone... So they're just hanging in mid-air right now 😆

But anyway... Really loved the part!!
Do continue whenever you can (=
I'll be waiting! 😳
Tc <3

I feel like all the couples have a lot of potential which the cvs arent exploring so here's my attempt at that.
So glad you liked it, I love Rimar too. Rinni is just too sweet.
Thanks for reading and commenting.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: surbhimathur

Thank you so much for the pm!! 😊

for the first part---It is soo nycc sumone making an FF on rimar...soo sweet they are now i realize!
their love story is soo cutee...nd just hidden sumwhere...its lovely to read an ff on dem! 😳
and i really lykd how you differentiated dem a bit on the D3 characters! the rehearsal hall part was cutee!! 😃

second part--LOL vicky nd neha!! literally comical mahn!! madhuri dixit ya sridevi lol..!! 😆😆
i really lykd it wen amar said--i wud pick madhuri dixit anyday over sridevi!! awww..such a cute guy! 😳

waiting for d next one 😊

I love Rimar and the cvs havent really built very strong characterisations for them so i thought i would be able to get away with giving them characters that i wanted to without offending anyone.
I think Viha too could be explored more on the show now that the divide is back, they dont only need to show swaron fighting, there's alot of scope in the script otherwise also. Like contrasting Viha's reaction with swaron's and every couple's reaction can be analysed separately.
Thanks for reading and commenting.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#33

Rimar 3

Hello guys, here's a short update, just cause I felt like it. I could've added more in the end, but the way it finished, it just felt like the update was complete. Atleast to me.

The story is inching forward, hope you enjoy it…

PART 3

"Seriously, Vicky? Seriously?" Rinni said, exasperated.

"I'm really sorry, Rinni. But I have no other option, I need to do this." Vicky said solemnly, looking Rinni right in the eye.

"How is refusing to perform with me your only option? Since when has that even been an option?" she exclaimed.

"I don't expect you to understand, I just want you to accept my decision."

"Just listen to what you're saying. You sound completely irrational, you sound nothing like the Vicky I know." she paused, took a deep breath to compose herself and then continued. "Look, I know you're in a relationship now and that in a relationship one needs to make compromises sometimes but this is completely unnecessary! Just talk to Neha and try to make her understand, I'm sure she'll get it."

"Rinni, I have made my decision. Can't you just accept it?" Vicky pleaded.

Rinni sank into the couch, defeated. She cradled her head in her hands and tried to make sense of the situation. So we won't have a couple dance performance. Big deal! It's not the end of the world. The silver lining is that I have more time to study for the upcoming assignments, she consoled herself.

"Listen, don't get so upset. You know it's nothing personal." he sat down besides Rinni and put his arm around her shoulder. "It's just me. You'll understand my position once you fall in love."

"Why do you keep saying that?" She cried.

"Because love changes you, Rinni. It changes you in ways you don't realize, it just mellows you down." Vicky replied calmly, his eyes smiling.

"It makes you back-out of a dance performance just because it isn't with your beloved." she added sarcastically.

"It really isn't like that, Rinni. After the rehearsal yesterday, I tried to convince Neha and ended up teaching her a bit of salsa. It was the first time we danced together and it was magical!" he said wistfully, his eyes shining with the memory. "And I know this might sound strange to your ears but I had an epiphany of sorts. When I was dancing with her, it just felt right. I knew I belonged in her arms and she in mine. After having danced with her, I don't want to dance with anyone else ever again. And I don't think I'd be able to, even if I tried. Dance needs to come from a very honest place, Rinni. I don't think I'll be able to do justice to our performance anymore. I'm sorry, I really hope you can forgive me."

"It's fine if you don't want to do salsa, it really is. But what about later, Vicky? When you'll be competing against Neha in competitions. When it would be dazzlers versus weaklings." she said.

"That's different Rinni, we both understand that we are in different dance teams and will have to compete against each other. We knew this before we got into a relationship and both of us know that our loyalties lie with our respective teams. But this is a couple dance, Rinni. I just don't think I'll be able to give it the honesty it requires. And it's not because I'm not in love with my partner, but because even when I would be dancing with you, I'll just be imagining her inside my head. Don't you think a huge dance troupe would be able tell?"

"Honestly, I don't even know how to respond to all of that." Rinni said, a little confused by his confession, not able to decide between being appalled by it or congratulating him for his new found maturity.

"How about you respond by letting me take you to college in my car today? Just like old times." he asked.

"Sure. Just give me a minute." she hurried up the stairs and into her room to quickly get ready for college.

***

Amar went over all the things he had to get done today in his mind, hoping that he'd be able to finish the entire backlog that he had accumulated in the last few days due to dancing. He had taken over the choreography of the Bollywood piece and had been working on it non-stop recently. And now that it was done, he had to get back to studies, rather start studying. Something he hadn't done in quite a while.

He parked his bike in the parking lot and adjusted the strap of his bag. Putting the keys in his pocket, he turned around to make his way towards the college building when he saw Vicky and Rinni emerge out of Vicky's car. His heartbeat quickened on its own accord, she looked so simple yet beautiful. She was dressed in a simple red top and black capris with flip flops at her feet. The wind caressing her hair and framing them around her face, which held a soft smile that turned into a laugh at something Vicky said. He watched them as they hugged and walked in separate directions, Vicky towards the sports complex and Rinni towards the college building.

Amar's heart ached after witnessing the sight despite knowing that any fear in his mind regarding Vicky would be irrational and unfounded. Yet, he felt as if someone had pushed his heart under a rock. He was saddened when he realized he wanted the same level of comfort with Rinni, he wanted to see the same ease with which she conducted herself in front of others to be projected towards him. He didn't want her to walk on egg shells whenever she was with him. He was tired of the distance they always seemed to maintain, he was sick of being the acquaintance. He wanted more than that, much more. He wanted to really get to know her, things about her besides her eating practices as his uncanny knowledge of her food habits was starting to make him feel like a psychotic stalker with a food fetish.

He wanted friendship and maybe even more. But was Rinni willing to give him a shot?!

With that question plaguing him, Amar made a resolve to stop holding himself back when it came to her. He could face rejection if he had to but he couldn't hold himself back anymore due to its fear.

***

Let me know in the comments how you felt about it.

*Fingerscrossed* 😳

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey the first thing that comes to my mind after reading the update is that how cooly you write bookfreak.👏 Though in d3 i never thought that Rimar has got so much intensity more or less their affection is so bubbly and sweet. maybe coz rinni is shown a bit dumb in the show.🤔 But in your FF they share a unique kind of charm and intensity. Both of them are aware of eachother but fails to open up and dear let me tell i never thought that i would like an ff other that swarons, but you had me mesmerized by you awesome penning of words. Really very cool and the best. Thanks and jaldi update the next chapter plz.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Suku_SwaRon

Hey the first thing that comes to my mind after reading the update is that how cooly you write bookfreak.👏 Though in d3 i never thought that Rimar has got so much intensity more or less their affection is so bubbly and sweet. maybe coz rinni is shown a bit dumb in the show.🤔 But in your FF they share a unique kind of charm and intensity. Both of them are aware of eachother but fails to open up and dear let me tell i never thought that i would like an ff other that swarons, but you had me mesmerized by you awesome penning of words. Really very cool and the best. Thanks and jaldi update the next chapter plz.

My biggest fear when i started writing this was that ppl wouldnt want to read cause its rimar, not the more popular couple Swaron or kriyansh. I'm glad that you guys have begun accepting my characters, it really means alot to me. thanks soo soo much.
Hope you enjoy what i have lined up ahead.
Thanks for reading and commenting😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#36
heyy nice update..😊
somply awsome, i can't think k do shant character jo kabhi kabhi bolte he unke bich bhi itna romentic sa kych likh pa rahe ho aap...it's all somply mind bhowing...
& keep it up & plz send me next PM...
for u👍🏼😊😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Awesome os
I really liked that u show their character more mature unlike in show
Vicky n rinni convo was really good
Waiting for next part
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Okay first of all, sorry for not commenting on your last update. I know I had been begging you to update, but i somhow i just missed out on your PM. Really sorry.

The update's are beautiful.! You make me like RiMar more, woman.! And i really liked the dialogues you gave for Vicky in this update. They actually made sense. Unlike on the show, where all Vicky and Neha do is create "melodrama". :P

And i really like the angle you are giving RiMar.

Thank you for the PM

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Posted: 13 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: Srishti_SwaRon

Okay first of all, sorry for not commenting on your last update. I know I had been begging you to update, but i somhow i just missed out on your PM. Really sorry.

The update's are beautiful.! You make me like RiMar more, woman.! And i really liked the dialogues you gave for Vicky in this update. They actually made sense. Unlike on the show, where all Vicky and Neha do is create "melodrama". :P

And i really like the angle you are giving RiMar.

Thank you for the PM

No problem, you commented now and thats enough for me 😊
And thank you for pushing me to write, thats one of the reasons why i could write1 and a half updates in such a shot span.
Thanks for reading and commenting and also for appreciating Rimar, the concept i am working on is very close to my heart...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Awesome...loved the entire update...every part of it..from the mature conversation between Vicky and Neha to Amar's thoughts about his equation with Rinni..It's good to know that now Amar is going to take an initiative to take their 'relationship' to another stage..I am really eagerly waiting for the next update!!

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