Kal: A PV Story (Chapter VI, Page 23)

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Maham

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: -ZsterMG-

Ahhh .. let me add to this list my dear friend.

GC with grey hair at the temples and glasses.

*THUD* 🤢

Z

Hahaaa I totally third these sentiments! In my imagination GC looks absolutely smoldering with a few grey hair, in fact I am not averse to salt and pepper hair either 😍! The maturity that will bring to his face will be something to behold 😉😆

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Sadie

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Posted: 13 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: Samanalyse

@Sadie ji: I was telling you not to laugh at my baby steps in PMing, which you did quite a lot of in your initial reaction. 😆

Anyway, thank you very much for liking the story so much, and after all the encouragement I got for this part, I have decided to continue the story and see where things go! So look out for updates and I will try to follow your lead and be more ruthless with my PMing. 😉

PS: I think GC would look hot with grey hair! ☺️ Like not all over, but just a little bit at the temples.

What?!!! 🤣 Okay I send you crazy crazy mad maddening PMs But they're nothing to follow on! 🤣

Let's see how ruthless you are with your PMing😆 waaaiiittt...I'M RUTHLESS with my PMing?!!! 😲 okay I'll ignore that cuz I just realized what you meant! 🤣

Oh, well a little grey is *Faints* good [I just imagined that 😆]...but too grey..

Umm...why Don't you describe him in this story?😳 Will make things easier for my Chotu dil😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

#43

You have a gift Samana. You should really think about pursuing writing some time. I don't think anyone would be able to determine the Palak and Ansh future relationship better than you did. So close in age so there is always going to be rivalry but they are also going to become really close out of it. So cool Ansh wants to be lawyer. Plz tell us about Palak's ambitions in the next part if decide to write it.

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Samanalyse

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Posted: 13 years ago

#44

@DivineDrashti: Thanks! I have decided to continue this story so add me to your buddy list for PMs.

@Saf: Thanks!

@Sunrio80: Thanks a lot. I have something very special planned for Payal. I think she is going to take everyone by surprise! Or at least, I hope so!

@Z: Thanks pal! You are making me blush, and not just because I am imagining GC with grey hair at his temples, and glasses. ☺️😆 And yeah, I felt safe starting with Palak's perspective because I feel like she is so much like me. I have decided to continue, because essentially I can't resist the temptation to write Ansh. He is going to be lots of fun, as you can probably imagine, but also face some very big issues at this turning point in his life.

@Inkpen: Thank you! I think the definition of Ansh and Palak is that they are each others' arch rivals, but they are also best friends. It would be impossible for them to be as close to anyone else because only they understand each other this well.

@Maham: Thanks so much for your response! I know it couldn't have been easy for you to type it out and I was more than content with your like, so quadruple thanks and a big hug for the comment! 🤗 I am glad the lawyer thing is working for most people. I had my doubts about that one, but there is no doubt that Ansh would be a natural! The story will be here, so you can come back and do a scene by scene when you are all better (thought you were getting off the hook? Think again)! Hopefully by that time there will be more scenes too.

@Sonika: Thank you! Yes, you will learn about Palak's ambitions in the next part.

@Freya: Thanks!

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Samanalyse

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Posted: 13 years ago

#45

~ II ~

Ansh leaned lazily against the main gate, with his hands in his pockets, as he waited for Palak. Unbeknownst to him, his face wore a vague smile as he mentally rehearsed his official gloating speech for the third time, and thought about which ice cream he should order to prolong his rights. Today was a double celebration. There was, of course, the usual elation at coming first, but also a significant sense of relief; Palak, having beaten him in two consecutive sets of exams, had been poised on a hat-trick, a feat that neither of them had actually managed to achieve till date. Had it not been for her marks in math, Ansh knew she would have had him this time, but there was no way he was going to let her know that! He let his thoughts slip back to ice cream and rubbing it in.

A few minutes later, he shifted his weight and ran his fingers through his hair, wondering what was taking Palak so long, when he heard a collective sigh, and some furtive whispering from which he picked up snatches like, "greek god," "beauty with brains" and something about "...have his babies?" Out of the corner of his eye, he spotted the usual suspects, a gaggle of Payal's more vacuous classmates, who didn't do a very good job of hiding that they were madly, passionately and devotedly in love with Ansh Scindia. As a general rule, he ignored them and pretended to be annoyed because he knew that if Palak, or even Payal, caught on to the fact that he secretly enjoyed the attention, they would never let him hear the end of it. He shuddered when he thought back to the aftermath of the one time Palak had caught him talking to them, a conversation in which Ansh had liberally embellished the facts about his "workout schedule." She had called him nothing but "stud-muffin" for a week, resulting in some quizzical looks from the family, rehearsed, "casual" questions from his mother, in which the effort to seem non-judgmental and mask her obvious concerns was all too evident, and one very awkward conversation with his father in which Yash had winked at Ansh, given him a resounding slap on the back, and told him that he was a chip off the old block.

It was a mistake Ansh had never repeated since, but he was in a very good mood today and Palak was nowhere to be seen, so he decided to indulge himself. In a calculated gesture, he turned his gaze slowly to face the group of girls, presently sitting on the steps of the school, shot them the smallest hint of a smile and jerked his head upward to give them a cocky nod. An instantly gratifying move. He felt his chest swell rapidly as the sighs and whispers gave way to shrieks and giggles and the girls whipped out their phones, their fingers flying deliriously over the keys, to inform the unfortunate absentees, of the momentous event they had just missed.

"Don't waste your time," came a deliberately husky tone.

Ansh stiffened as warm breath grazed his cheek, and the sickly-sweet excess of artificial strawberry filled his nostrils. He took a step away from the overwhelming scent, set his face with a determined indifference and turned to face Vandana Sisodia.

"Hello Vandana," he said cordially, in a voice pitched just too high, "How'd you do on the mocks? How are your parents?" The words came out of his mouth faster than he had intended.

Vandana gave Ansh a knowing, sidelong glance that made him simultaneously shiver and break into a sweat. He didn't know what it was that made him feel ashamed, as though he was doing something he wasn't supposed to, just by looking at her. She was dressed in her school uniform, like all the other girls, but something about her stance, the way she looked at him and her little gestures, twirling her impossibly silky hair around her finger, playing with the neckline of her shirt, made him eager to look away or better yet, get as far from her as he possibly could, but he was no coward to run from the battlefield. Instead he gulped, took a deep breath and raised his chin, allowing her coquettish gaze to meet his defiant one. Vandana raised her eyebrows interestedly and continued, ignoring Ansh's pleasantries:

"Like I was saying," she said, resuming her low, cloying tone and inching towards Ansh, "Don't waste your time on those silly, little girls. I know what you really need..."

By this time, the tip of her index finger lay gently, audaciously on Ansh's chest. It took every last inch of his willpower to maintain the emotionless facade and not betray his fervent desire to violently push her away; he couldn't, because even though he didn't quite understand why, that would somehow mean that Vandana had won. He stood still as a statue, his whole body tense with resistance, as she went on:

"You need someone mature, an experienced woman," she said, lowering her voice further, "and I think I kn---"

"--I don't think having to repeat tenth standard...twice from the looks of it, qualifies as maturity, though I'll concede the experience."

The wry, matter-of-fact interruption from a familiar voice nearly caused Ansh to dissolve into tears of relief, so he laughed out loud instead. Surely Palak was an angel sent for his ultimate deliverance! Her timely entry and a clipped, witty remark had effortlessly broken the spell that Vandana was trying to cast and suddenly, Vandana looked like nothing more than a very angry bird whose feathers had been thoroughly ruffled. The intimidating force from seconds before had disappeared and Ansh breathed easy as his world fell back into place and the angry bird stalked off, throwing him a ridiculous pout over her shoulder.

Ansh looked away in disgust, shaking his head, caught Palak's sharp eye and completely lost it. It wasn't a few seconds before both of them were doubled over in uncontrollable laughter, holding their stomachs and gasping for breath, tears streaming down their faces. Ansh was the first to gather himself and stand up straight:

"Oh, Behenji, what would I do without you?" he asked, pulling Palak into a bear hug, thoroughly mussing the little curls at her temple, which were standing up on end by the time she resurfaced.

"I don't know what you would do, but I can say with some certainty that your honour would be in serious danger," Palak replied, as she smoothed her hair down in an attempt to reclaim her dignity, "You are too good looking---" she rolled her eyes as Ansh nodded confidently, "and far too naive. It's so easy for people to get under your skin."

"And is that your professional opinion Dr. Scindia?" Ansh, asked seriously.

Palak smiled slightly, "I'll give you my professional opinion as soon as I get my first psychology degree. For now it's just sisterly concern that you so easily fall prey to lesser humans like Vandana Sisodia."

Ansh, not wanting to talk anymore about the unpleasant subject that was Vandana, thumped his hand on his chest dramatically, "Thank you. Thank you for defending my honour. This year I will be sure to tie a special rakhi on your wrist for the guarantee of your continued sisterly saviour services. Dadaji may not take too well to the break from tradition, but I am sure knowledge of your courageous and selfless feats will bring him around."

Palak snorted, wordlessly acknowledging the change in subject, and smacked him lightly on the shoulder as they headed out of the gate, but Ansh wasn't done...

"Oh, and thank god worldly wisdom isn't a subject our education system tests us on, otherwise I might just have missed out on that first rank."

"Smooth."

Ansh grinned complacently, hands in his pockets, as they walked over to the ice cream shop across the street.

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As always, awaiting your responses...

Edited by Samanalyse - 13 years ago

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Telly.Addict

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Posted: 13 years ago

#46

Samana,

I don't know where you went for your live shows, but I'm telling you, you may possibly have been there in body, but your mind was busyily writing this beautiful second part to your story.

It is fantastic. I got a germ.of an idea about Payal. I missed Dhriti greeting Ansh, and her reaction to Palak and Ansh's meeting(I am greedy for more 😳), but other than that, perfect.

Thank you for this. Please please please carry on. As they sing in Oliver!, 'Please, Samana, may I have seconds, thirds, fourths, etc?'

You have to think about writing a book, Sammy. You have such a way with words. I am transported when I read your takes, but this story, it really is out if this world.

Thank for starting the PV Analysis Thread, which drew me into the DC, gave me such generous and insightful friends from across the globe, and now is transporting me go the future in PV. Thank you

Sungum

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Rishma

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Posted: 13 years ago

#47

Oh my god , i loved it! Ansh a chip off the old block!lol. I loved the relationship he shares with Palak. I missed payal though, can't wait to hear about her. I couldn't stop grinning for the entire read, it was that good. It was like i could actually see it. fantastic writing! Update again soon! 👏👏

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Samanalyse

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Posted: 13 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: Telly.Addict
Samana,

I don't know where you went for your live shows, but I'm telling you, you may possibly have been there in body, but your mind was busyily writing this beautiful second part to your story.
It was a long bus ride so there was plenty of time to dwell on the current and future happenings in PV land. 😉

It is fantastic. I got a germ.of an idea about Payal. I missed Dhriti greeting Ansh, and her reaction to Palak and Ansh's meeting(I am greedy for more 😳), but other than that, perfect.
I wanted the first interaction to be just Palak and Ansh because this story is essentially about their sibling bond, but never fear! Dhriti will definitely be introduced to Ansh's line of vision sooner than later. Right now she needed a day to recover from Palak-mania withdrawal. 😆

You have to think about writing a book, Sammy. You have such a way with words. I am transported when I read your takes, but this story, it really is out if this world.
Thank you so much, Sungum! That is such high praise!
I would love to write a book some day, but I haven't found a story yet. 😳

Thank for starting the PV Analysis Thread, which drew me into the DC, gave me such generous and insightful friends from across the globe, and now is transporting me go the future in PV. Thank you
You don't have to thank me so many times! 😆 It is all the magic of forum life! 😃

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Sadie

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Posted: 13 years ago

#49

Woweee 😃 You Updated Yiipppeee!!Res 😎[I might forget this Res and comment again🤣]Sadiie x

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Inkpen4877

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Posted: 13 years ago

#50

ok seriously, their relationship couldn't be more adorable! I love the way you have written both Palak and Ansh and how much they care about each other. I also love how playful they are! It's great!

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