Kal: A PV Story (Chapter VI, Page 23)

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~ K a l ~

Inspired by the current track, I was lamenting the fact that we would never get to see how the PV kids turned out in the future, and it got me to thinking: what would they be like, and what would their relationships be with each other and their parents? And so I wrote this little piece that began the story I then decided to keep writing. I hope you enjoy it as it unfolds!

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Index
I...Page 1
II...Page 6

III...Page 10
IV...Page15
V...Page 19
VI...Page 23

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~ I ~

Palak waited for the furour to die down near the school bulletin board. She was more or less sure of what she was going to see there and didn't fall prey to sense of the urgency that seemed to consume her classmates. When the crowd around the newly posted rank sheet thinned, she walked up and without bothering to search for her roll number, or name, glanced at the top of the list and read:

Class Ten: Second Mock Examination

Scindia, Ansh Y.
Percentage: 94.5
Rank: One

Palak heaved a resigned sigh and read on:

Scindia, Palak Y.
Percentage: 94.2
Rank: Two

No, it was too cruel! She followed her finger in a horizontal line across sheet for their individual subject marks and indulged herself a moment of righteous anger as she found she had beat Ansh in almost every subject and violently cursed the one subject that had dragged her average down, mathematics 88.0%. Oh, and he would gloat, about getting first rank, even if it was by 0.3 marks, about girls being weak in math, even when she had beat him by 4 marks the previous exam! He was insufferable!

As her rage at the impending injustice simmered, her finger, perhaps exerting more pressure on the thin marksheet than was strictly necessary, leaving a dent in its wake, stopped short when she saw Ansh's marks in English, 90.5%. "Not bad, Nangu," she thought to herself, "not bad!" Her mind immediately went to the innumerable nights her mother had sat up, trying to explain to Ansh that there was beauty and meaning in poetry, when all he could see was incorrect syntax and a convoluted use of words. "Why does he use so many words when he could say it in one?" was Ansh's constant, whiny refrain to which Aarti had patiently explained again and again, that it didn't just matter what you said, but how you said it, an important lesson for Ansh, considering it was his dream to be a lawyer.

Aarti was right, of course...about the poetry, but Palak knew better; Ansh didn't need poetry, or maths or any of the other subjects they studied to become a lawyer. He was a natural. If there was anyone that could make a jury believe that the sun rose in the west, it was definitely Ansh. Palak smiled indulgently at the thought of her brother's gift of gab, a gift she had resented bitterly and admired fervently by turns. Her smile widened as her mind wandered further back to the first time they had competed, how he had taunted her about her stage fright, how she had hated him, how it had all seemed so important! She chuckled softly at the memory as she caught sight of her friend, Dhriti, whose concerned expression was swiftly replaced by a grin mirroring Palak's.

"Someone looks awfully happy. I knew it. How much did you beat him by?"

Palak was disoriented for a second. She had almost forgotten where her thoughts had started, the marks sheet.

"Oh, I didn't," she said with a shrug, "He got me this time. Bloody maths. It's okay though. We still have the final exam to go, right? How'd you do?"

Palak looked up saw Dhriti's expression go from bewildered, to confused to downright furious.

"WHAT DO YOU MEAN, IT'S OKAY?!" bellowed Dhriti. "Palak, you kept me up ALL NIGHT with your calls and texts, agonising over the possibility that Ansh beat you, going over every exam paper in your head for the hundredth time, wondering if it cost you marks that you failed to mention the significance of clothing imagery in King Lear or drew that pie chart wrong or didn't justify well enough why the arms race was one of the main causes for World War I...and'oh, I don't know! And now you're saying IT'S OKAY?!"

Palak smiled sheepishly at her friend, who hadn't even begun to describe the minute anxiety Palak had felt and amply expressed, "Yeah, it's not like it's the final exam right?"

"That's what I said LAST NIGHT, but NO...YOU SAID that the mocks decide how you are going to do on your boards and if you didn't beat Ansh, you would DIE, or worse, quit school and let your dadi-bua teach you how to become a trophy wife, because that's all you'd be worth!"

By this point Palak's eyes were dancing with mirth, looking at the exasperated face in front of her; she made a heroic effort to control her laughter. Eight years later and she was all too used to this. Nobody really understood the way her and Ansh worked. To put it plainly, they were inseparable...most of the time. They studied together, helping each other, each filling in as a de facto tutor when the other needed it, only relying on others when they hit a roadblock that neither of them could solve (like Ansh and his aversion to poetry!). The family seemed to have learned over time that it was better not to interfere in their study sessions unless solicited, knowing that when they were done, the duo would come out on their own to fill the house with their special brand of laughter and chaos. Ansh would start with his dramatic retelling of mundane events at school, and Palak would interject with her dry, caustic one-liners and soon the whole family would be in gales of laughter. Ansh and Palak, Palak and Ansh: they completed each other's sentences and read each others' thoughts.

But all the camaraderie, the friendship and the kinship stopped completely, twice a year: exam time. From the day before their exams started, the two would start studying separately, being secretive about their schedules and refused to help each other with anything. The family had long learned the hard way that it was futile to try and make peace during this time. When forced into a conversation with each other, the two would snap and mock relentlessly, and before anyone realised what was happening, there would be a full-blown turf war on their hands, and so the Scindia house remained sombre and for the most part, deathly quiet during this time every year, their sister Payal being the only one who remained carefree and unaffected by the tension mounting between her fiercely competitive siblings.

The friction would abate only slightly after the examinations as Palak and Ansh awaited their results, each swearing some dire consequence if they didn't come first, torturing their friends and relatives alike, until the tension rose to a head the night before the results. But miraculously, as some would call it, they would snap back the moment the results were out, once again the best of friends, once again inseparable. They met at the main gate after school on these days, the second rank would buy the first ice cream and the latter was allowed to gloat precisely as long as the ice cream lasted. It was tradition.

Palak sighed. "You want to come for ice cream?" she asked Dhriti, "My treat." She saw her friend give her a look of complete bewilderment, throw up her hands and walk away. Poor Dhriti, she was new to the school this semester, and hadn't learnt the way most of Ansh and Palak's friends had that they were not to be taken seriously during exam time, but Palak liked her and hoped she hadn't scared her away forever. She shook her head and made her way to the main gate where Ansh would be waiting---or gloating rather. "Better get this over with," she thought with a determined smile.

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AngeloScuro thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I'm going to borrow my reactions from the DC thread and past it here. 😃

That is kind of the first serious fan fiction you've written barring the one you did with that phone call between Prashant and Yash.
I loved it as it reads like a novel. It reminded me of some of the young adult novels.👏

Now I'm wondering where Payal was all this time. Does she go to dance classes and is she into fashion and creative stuff? I'm curious to know where she was the whole time this story was taking place!😆😆

One more question will Ansh be fighting with Palak for Dhristi's attention?😈

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Originally posted by: AngelDark

I'm going to borrow my reactions from the DC thread and past it here. 😃

That is kind of the first serious fan fiction you've written barring the one you did with that phone call between Prashant and Yash.
I loved it as it reads like a novel. It reminded me of some of the young adult novels.👏

Yes, it is the first FF I have written (I don't count that P/Y silliness, that was just a bad mood channeled into a creative outlet). Thanks! That is high praise indeed! 😳

Now I'm wondering where Payal was all this time. Does she go to dance classes and is she into fashion and creative stuff? I'm curious to know where she was the whole time this story was taking place!😆😆

Trust me, Payal has her own thing going. She is not as much of a burdened soul as Ansh and Palak are, with their big dreams and their desperation for academic excellence.Your idea about her being creative is just what I was thinking...

One more question will Ansh be fighting with Palak for Dhristi's attention?😈

I don't know about fighting...😉

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I m also going to borrow my reactions from DC to here 😆😳
Thats some awesome piece of script writing Samana👏👏👏...if CVs r stalking ,I wont b surprised if this is lifted up and we actually get to see an exam track of Ansh and Palak 😆😆...I feel the scenario u presented applies for all siblings and not just the ones caught in a remarriage scenario ... Most of the siblings who r of same age hv a tendency to compete among each other and prove to b the superior one especially in competitions or exams 🤔..as long as the competition looks healthy and is taken in a sporting spirit by both the siblings , I feel its natural and fine but when this same competition starts affecting them from a psychological POV ,thats when issues take place ... In case of Ansh and Palak , they r not yet hving that sporting competitive spirit , so if one wins and other looses , it affects them badly ...they r yet to share that brother-sister bonding with each other and this is where Aarti-Yash needs to come together and develop that bonding between both ...
In all this I would definitely want to see Payal's involvement too ..mayb as the peacemaker or catalyst types between both siblings 🤔
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@Samana: I just loved it...I can't even begin to describe how articulately lucid and expressive this piece is.👏 The eloquence of the word weave in this snippet gave one a peek into the past and a dim glimpse into the future of the sibling relationship...the flow was so smooth...the storyline so engrossing...*Sigh* Just two characters, yet the entire family flew by in a visual imagery.. In fact this makes me, as reader, want to know more...No, I am not saying this is not a complete piece in itself; it is a stand-alone narrative by all means. I do mean though that the piece sprouts little wings of imagination and rather than let mine take flight, I'd rather ride your thought waves. So, go ahead, my friend, weave some more thoughts and expand this onto the beautiful canvas that it promises.👍🏼
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Superlative imagination.

Just a few thoughts/questions/comments...

1. What does Palak want to be when she got older? Ansh wanting to be a lawyer is an interesting choice of profession.

2. Whether he wants to be or not, I see Ansh as having leadership qualities more suited to running businesses ethically and that are socially responsible. Some green technology business, for instance. He's straightforward and a straight shooter, perhaps strongly influenced by Yash here. He'd be influenced by Aarti in taking people along on the journey, motivating them etc. where his sense of righteousness combined with the gift of the gab would make him successful.

3. Nangu as a pet-name - Great touch!


More questions might follow later...Great job!

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Samana 🤗

That was really beautifully written. It is always a pleasure to read what you write. So hope you will carry this forward to become an FF. Then this will be the first PV FF that i will read.

You have brought out the Ansh Palak dynamics 8 years later very nicely. the anger, competition and the giving in, excellent.

It would be fun to read an FF with your sensibilities and these characters. Do continue.

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@Jyo: Thanks! That is exactly what I wanted to show, that Palak and Ansh will never stop competing with each other, but the way they do it can become so different. I have a feeling when these two sort things out they really will be the best of friends, most of the time. 😉😆

@Indu: Wow! Thank you! You have no idea how much your words mean! 🤗 After reading your response, I am more tempted than ever to just take the plunge and continue with the story, tackling the complicated off-canon issues as they come up. Like you said, there were only two known characters in this bit and I am dying to go more in depth with all of them, keeping these two as the central protagonists. The last few episodes of the show, especially yesterday's have inspired me more than usual, to look at Aarti and Yash through the kids' eyes, and this story will ideally be an extrapolation of that perspective. Fingers crossed.
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Wow brilliant 😉 very well written gurl 😃
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Originally posted by: redeye2012

Superlative imagination.

Thankee! 😃

1. What does Palak want to be when she got older? Ansh wanting to be a lawyer is an interesting choice of profession.

Since I have decided to continue with the story, I am not going to answer this question right now. You will find out in the next chapter and I can only hope it is not too predictable. I thought long and hard about her and then the answer seemed so obvious...that I went, .

2. Whether he wants to be or not, I see Ansh as having leadership qualities more suited to running businesses ethically and that are socially responsible. Some green technology business, for instance. He's straightforward and a straight shooter, perhaps strongly influenced by Yash here. He'd be influenced by Aarti in taking people along on the journey, motivating them etc. where his sense of righteousness combined with the gift of the gab would make him successful.

I thought a lot about this too, and business was actually the first option that occurred to me, but then it just came and went and didn't stick. The reason he wants to be a lawyer, in my head a this point in time, is that he is growing up and just now waking up to all the injustice he and his mom had to face, and how hard she worked to shield him from it. He has all this anger all of a sudden, towards things and he can't actually do anything about because they happened all those years ago, so he translates that into fighting for the concept of justice and hit upon the most literal profession: law. Also, he is an excellent debater and is gonging through a Law and Order phase right now. 😆

3. Nangu as a pet-name - Great touch!

Wait till you hear Palak's pet name! 😉

More questions might follow later...Great job!

Thanks again, and sure, bring them on!

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