My contribution to Kunal's diary :)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey ppl,

I penned this poem ages ago, thought of sharing it as part of kunal's diary. here it goes,

I've tired, god knows i've tired so much,
to close my eyes, to forget your touch,
to erase your smile, to turn off your charms,
to make blank the time spent in your arms.

Call halt to passion, to stop my heart,
don't hear it beating when we part,
stay cold to ardor, to bid it go
shut off my feelings, to tell them no.

But all's in vain, it just won't do,
i can't control my love for you.
instead of dwindling, it just grows
where will it lead to? heaven knows!!

But I've decided there's no way,
to curb its fervor, let it stay
you must believe me when i say,
i just can't help it, the love won't go away.

PS: purvi my creative cells are still at the bottom of the ocean ๐Ÿ˜‰ ๐Ÿ˜†, but i was encouraged enough to go through my rusty diary, n found this decent enough to share it. thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š for making me remember that i could write something else besides reports n memos ๐Ÿ˜†





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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey realy good written...i realy loved last 4 lines ... they r too good...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hi u write really well.๐Ÿ‘
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks Chitra, rupa n su0612 (don't knw your name )

๐Ÿ˜ƒ ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 13 years ago
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simply superb...๐Ÿ‘ loved it...๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I've tired, god knows i've tired so much,
to close my eyes, to forget your touch,
to erase your smile, to turn off your charms,
to make blank the time spent in your arms.


But I've decided there's no way,
to curb its fervor, let it stay
you must believe me when i say,
i just can't help it, the love won't go away.

Awesome Ramya.. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
I liked the above 8 lines very much, not that other 8 were not good.. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
So after all , Titanic 3D and climbing 1000 stairs did have some effect?? ๐Ÿ˜‰
If you attempt to climb to the top, i guess more rustic diaries probably would be uncovered from the bottom ...๐Ÿ˜‰

PS: purvi my creative cells are still at the bottom of the ocean ๐Ÿ˜‰ ๐Ÿ˜†, but i was encouraged enough to go through my rusty diary, n found this decent enough to share it. thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š for making me remember that i could write something else besides reports n memos ๐Ÿ˜†

Purvi, are you reading this??
Do you need any more proof of your inspirational abilities??
๐Ÿ˜‰.. First Riddhi, then Shobhit and now Ramya... We forumwalas are lucky to get online kavi sammelan...

Edited by shamrish - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sepiasunshine

hey ppl,


I penned this poem ages ago, thought of sharing it as part of kunal's diary. here it goes,

I've tired, god knows i've tired so much,
to close my eyes, to forget your touch,
to erase your smile, to turn off your charms,
to make blank the time spent in your arms.

Call halt to passion, to stop my heart,
don't hear it beating when we part,
stay cold to ardor, to bid it go
shut off my feelings, to tell them no.

But all's in vain, it just won't do,
i can't control my love for you.
instead of dwindling, it just grows
where will it lead to? heaven knows!!

But I've decided there's no way,
to curb its fervor, let it stay
you must believe me when i say,
i just can't help it, the love won't go away.

PS: purvi my creative cells are still at the bottom of the ocean ๐Ÿ˜‰ ๐Ÿ˜†, but i was encouraged enough to go through my rusty diary, n found this decent enough to share it. thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š for making me remember that i could write something else besides reports n memos ๐Ÿ˜†






Wow!!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘..too good Ramya...I knew, the minute you mentioned Titanic...It had to be classic๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†..one of its kind...see I guess I keep repeating myself...human is indeed talented, a little push and they can spread the colours everywhere..after reading this, I can vouch by the fact that indeed your Titannic was at the bottom of the ocean but its definitely not rusted!!...please do come up with more of these poems..infact I should say, eagerly waiting for the next one!!๐Ÿ˜Š

@Amrish-after reading this poem, you will definitely have to change your views about my poems...this is a real talent..!! it is perfect..Ramya deserves the maha kaviyetri title rather than me...as far as inspiration goes, I have done nothing..talent will emerge sooner or later...sooner the better though๐Ÿ˜‰. thats why I keep forcing you to equally contribute to this kavi sammelan!!๐Ÿ˜‰
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: shamrish

I've tired, god knows i've tired so much,

to close my eyes, to forget your touch,
to erase your smile, to turn off your charms,
to make blank the time spent in your arms.


But I've decided there's no way,
to curb its fervor, let it stay
you must believe me when i say,
i just can't help it, the love won't go away.

Awesome Ramya.. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
I liked the above 8 lines very much, not that other 8 were not good.. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
So after all , Titanic 3D and climbing 1000 stairs did have some effect?? ๐Ÿ˜‰
If you attempt to climb to the top, i guess more rustic diaries probably would be uncovered from the bottom ...๐Ÿ˜‰

PS: purvi my creative cells are still at the bottom of the ocean ๐Ÿ˜‰ ๐Ÿ˜†, but i was encouraged enough to go through my rusty diary, n found this decent enough to share it. thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š for making me remember that i could write something else besides reports n memos ๐Ÿ˜†

Purvi, are you reading this??
Do you need any more proof of your inspirational abilities??
๐Ÿ˜‰.. First Riddhi, then Shobhit and now Ramya... We forumwalas are lucky to get online kavi sammelan...


thank you Shamrish for appreciating my humble poem ๐Ÿ˜› ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: purvimehta


Wow!!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘..too good Ramya...I knew, the minute you mentioned Titanic...It had to be classic๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†..one of its kind...see I guess I keep repeating myself...human is indeed talented, a little push and they can spread the colours everywhere..after reading this, I can vouch by the fact that indeed your Titannic was at the bottom of the ocean but its definitely not rusted!!...please do come up with more of these poems..infact I should say, eagerly waiting for the next one!!๐Ÿ˜Š

@Amrish-after reading this poem, you will definitely have to change your views about my poems...this is a real talent..!! it is perfect..Ramya deserves the maha kaviyetri title rather than me...as far as inspiration goes, I have done nothing..talent will emerge sooner or later...sooner the better though๐Ÿ˜‰. thats why I keep forcing you to equally contribute to this kavi sammelan!!๐Ÿ˜‰


thank you so much purvi ๐Ÿ˜ƒ like i said earlier i wrote this ages ago, i was full enthu n had great muses to inspire me not to forget plenty of time ๐Ÿ˜‰

am a very slow writer...can't quick think like you ๐Ÿ˜› by the time i finish pondering over what to write n end up with it...it will be couple of weeks at least ๐Ÿ˜› so don't keep up ur hopes...and plz don't compare my armature writing to the classic titanic, titanic is incomparable to anything ๐Ÿ˜‰
also don't embarrass me saying that i deserve maha kaviyetri title ๐Ÿ˜ณ you are the un-dispute title holder of that ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sepiasunshine


thank you so much purvi ๐Ÿ˜ƒ like i said earlier i wrote this ages ago, i was full enthu n had great muses to inspire me not to forget plenty of time ๐Ÿ˜‰

am a very slow writer...can't quick think like you ๐Ÿ˜› by the time i finish pondering over what to write n end up with it...it will be couple of weeks at least ๐Ÿ˜› so don't keep up ur hopes...and plz don't compare my armature writing to the classic titanic, titanic is incomparable to anything ๐Ÿ˜‰
also don't embarrass me saying that i deserve maha kaviyetri title ๐Ÿ˜ณ you are the un-dispute title holder of that ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

you know...I am very stubborn..this is a negative quality, but I never give up either...(a positive one๐Ÿ˜‰) I have all the time in the world to wait for your next poem. I am sure you would have a diary full of these...even if they are from your hay days!! I would really appreciate if you could share them...dont call yourself an amateur...you words speak ample ...and I can read them well๐Ÿ˜‰. I know what an amateur poem is.. please keep writing...think of it, it can work as a source of inspiration for me. as far as the title goes, I can gladly share my so called maha kaviyetri title with you..๐Ÿ˜†

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