I'm here!! And I'm mega sorry about the delay, I can't get anywhere on time these days I swear man.
Okay so let's get down to business, 'true love starts somewhere' so true! š First of all I gotta say awesome work, totally enthralled by your choice of words, extremely detailed and everything you need when you don't have a clue about the story or it's characters. š
When I read something I usually go into somewhat of a trance you could say, provided that the story itself is written so well that my imagination is bound to it's surroundings given in the description, which you totally nailed! Fantastic hun! You're good, and you know what I'm pretty sure you know it too! š
But you know what the downfall is, that I still don't know what the hell Aditya and Pinky look like, when I type in Geet - Kareena comes up lol.
Anyways, back to commenting...
The fear from Maan Singh Khurana is captured well within the actions of Adi throughout the OS , and I liked the ease that was gradually released as I scrolled down to read further, subtle humour between Adi's conversation with Pinky was cute. It moved on swiftly, without forgetting the seriousness of the situation, well handled babe!
The sweetest thing about this one shot was how Adi's attitude makes changes for his potential love - I'm assuming. From totally caring about the way things should be done for better impression to stay on the good side of his boss, he was by the end of it all willing to sacrifice a well earned position in the space of a single heartbeat, that's just too sweet hun, and the best part of it was the basic circumstances it derived from, no overly-sentimental outbreak to blame his possibly irrational decision on, if his 'talk' failed.
Overall it was a pleasant read, your ability to move the story ahead is applauded to the max, it's clear you're much more than talented then you make out š, and I'm glad to have finally read something you've written!
Luv you loads, and sorry for the delay, š³.
Tink
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Edited by tinkerbe11 - 13 years ago
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