New FF Kuch toh log kahenge end pt 14 updated pg 8

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Hi friends this is my first ff. Please offer me suggestions and tips for improvement. I will use the response to judge my skill and then decide whether I should continue to write or am I committing a crime against humanity.


Kuch toh log kahenge
Nalin was standing near the school gate waiting for Yash. Yash came out after a few mins and was happy to see that his father was there to pick him up. Since it was a Saturday, Nalin had a holiday whereas his son didn't. Yash asked Nalin to give him money to buy pani puri from a roadside vendor but Nalin refused and said that his mom has made something delicious for him to eat, so they must hurry home. Even though Banashankari was quite near to Jayanagar the traffic was moving very slowly. Nalin said "God ! what is happening to Bangalore?". They reached home after an hour. Yash's dadi asked them to wash their hands and then she'll serve them lunch. Nalin asked -"Ma where is Gopi?"
Ma said beta she has gone to Padma's house to help her in making arrangements for the pooja.
Nalin smiled to himself and thought that she has a gem of a wife. She was an under educated girl when he married her and now not only has she adapted herself to a different state but won appreciation from her neighbours too. Ma is proud of her, she loves her dedication to the family. Gopi can now read and write English, she has picked up some Kannada too.
While she learnt English due to his help, he learnt how to live from her. He was shattered when his first wife Rati died in an accident, he lived a meaningless life for two years before Ma got him remarried. He was initially reluctant to re-marry but his mom was finally able to convince him and told him that the girl was recommended by Hetal aunty so she can't really be so bad.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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great start😊 hope you continue soon
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Nice start feviewer
no Ahemji here .?
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Originally posted by: sweetsugar

Nice start feviewer
no Ahemji here .?

He is there...will post an update today
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Part 2

7 years back
Rashi was successful in driving a wedge between Hetal and Koki. Now Hetal became assertive. An irritated Kokila used Gopi as her punching bag. Hetal was always hurt on seeing Gopi being illtreated. Earlier she used to plead with Kokila and ask her not to punish Gopi for small mistakes, but now things have changed, Hetal decided to take the matters into her own hands. She knew that Gopi's marriage to Ahem was a farce and she needed to bring her life back on track. Hetal had talked to Ahem about it but he gave evasive replies. It broke Hetal's heart that such a thing is happening in the house in her presence.

Hetal took a deep breath and went to the mandir, there she prayed to Kanhaji to give her the strength to help Gopi. She created her profile on all matrimonial websites and started a secret groom hunting. Things weren't easy, even though a lot of people knew that Gopi was a very good person, the fact that she was married before became a taint on her.

One afternoon her phone rang. Hetal answered it. It was her friend Lalitha from Bangalore. She knew Lalitha for the past twenty years, she was her neighbour back then. Modi's lived in a modest house and Lalitha's husband who worked in a bank took the neighbouring house on rent. Hetal liked Lalitha whereas Koki despised her. Lalitha stayed in Rajkot for 6 years before her husband was transferred elsewhere.
Lalitha had called Hetal for advice, she asked Hetal how to make her son regain his happiness. Hetal knew the cause of Nalin's unhappiness. Lalitha told that she wants to get her son re-married and was looking for a bride, caste no bar. She told Hetal that she wants a sanskari bahu and it doesn't matter where she comes from.

Hetal sensed an opportunity and told her Gopi's story. Lalitha asked for a photo so that she could show it to her son. Hetal asked Jigar to post a photo of Gopi on facebook. Jigar does that even though he isn't sure why.

That evening Lalitha asked Nalin to log into facebook and do as she said. Nalin agreed and they eventually saw Gopi's photo. She looked beautiful in a baby pink salwar-kameez[ After Hetal decided to protect her ,she made Chirag declare that they have adopted Gopi, Ahem was irritated but Hetal asked Gopi to dress like an unmarried girl henceforth. Gopi agreed to it for her elder's happiness. She knew tha her marriage is decaying and its stench is unbearable].

Hetal and Chirag took Gopi to Bangalore and made her meet Nalin. Gopi was nervous but she knew that she can't stay in MM forever, if Koki gets Ahem re-married then she will feel awkward in the house. She knew that she can never be Ahem's love. Nalin and Gopi spoke in Hindi as he knew that she didn't know English. Nalin found her to be a nice person and since his mother liked her a lot and she needs company at home, he agreed to the alliance.

Gopi liked Nalin's nature. He respected elders, he was soft spoken and above all he was Hetal's choice. Lalitha and Hetal consulted a Pandit and decided to get them married after two weeks. The wedding was to be a simple affair in the town of Tirupathi [ Neither Gujarati nor coastal-Karnataka rituals were to be followed, all they wanted was God's blessings].

That day they shopped for loads of silk saree for Gopi's trousseau. Gopi was apprehensive about her impending wedding but didn't show it. On their return to MM Rashi jumped at the bags in Hetal's hands but Hetal shook her away and told her that those were for Gopi. Rashi made a face and asked can't she have even one of them? Hetal said -"No , I don't have the time to shop for new sarees as Gopi's wedding is after two weeks". All at MM where shocked, Kokila shouted at Hetal but she remained firm and told her that Gopi isn't Koki's bahu anymore, she is her daughter now. Koki didn't know how to react to this and wondered whether she should inform Ahem or not? If she does then he will come back for sure and create more confusion in Gopi's life. Ahem was in Nigeria for the past 2 months in order to oversee a construction project and if he leaves Abuja then the project would be in jeopardy. Kokila finally decides not to tell Ahem
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Part3
7 years back contd...

Gopi couldn't sleep so she decided to walk around in the house as she'll be leaving it soon. She went downstairs and clung to every pillar and felt every little piece of furniture. After two hours she climbs upstairs and walks into Ahem's room. It was the room which she thought would be her's one day...alas,that day never came. She looked at the bed and thought about their wedding night, all her dreams had crashed that day. She opened the cupboard and couldn't resist taking out Ahem's shirt and feeling it. Her tear drops wet the fabric, she touched it as if she were touching him and then finally put in inside.

Time flew so fast and Gopi had to leave MM next day. Hetal had decided that Urmi wouldn't be invited, Hetal, Chirag, Jigar,Rashi and Jeetu Bhai were to attend the wedding. Parag opted not to come as his heart was very heavy, he felt bad that he couldn't do anything to protect Gopi against Koki's wrath. Koki had taunted Gopi on hearing about her rishta by telling " Even the things used by my Ahem seem to have good resale value".

The next morning Parag saw them off at the airport. He was very upset and on returning home he switched on his PC and updated his poetry blog. He wrote a poignant poem about the situation.
That day Ahem didn't go to work as there was some unrest there so he decided to check out his father's blog. He read his latest post, Ahem liked it but he failed to understand the thoughts his father wanted to convey. Parag's poems always had layers of meaning.

A day passed and Ahem was haunted by a feeling that he was about to lose something. He didn't know what it was. He checked all the locks and went through all the files and folders, everything was there. He dismissed his feeling and tried to call Jigar as he hadn't talked to him for weeks, relationship between them cooled down after Ahem's marriage broke down. Jigar didn't pick up the phone even after Ahem called him repeatedly. Ahem was oblivious to the fact that Jigar was in no state to pick his call. Gopi's bidaai was over and Hetal was crying, Jigar got upset when he saw Ahem's call.

Gopi went to Bangalore with Nalin to start her life afresh as Mrs.Gopi Nalin Shetty. Hetal called Lalitha daily to know how Gopi is dealing with things...Lalitha assured that she is very happy and Nalin has taken her on a trip to Nandi hills. Nalin and Jigar knew each other very well and became friends on facebook too but since he was privacy conscious he didn't post his family pics on net, so the remote possibility of Ahem chancing upon them was also ruled out.


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Posted: 13 years ago
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story is picking up...there are so many questions...who is yash? who are his parents? where is Ahem now & how did he react when the news was broken to him ...pls continue !!!
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Part-4

Gopi's life changed for the better soon after Nalin came into her life. He made an effort to understand her and put her at ease. Lalitha doted on Gopi and was like a mother Gopi never had. Gopi soon adjusted herself to her new family, Nalin taught her English everyday after coming home from work. Once he saw her looking curiously at his laptop and Nalin took it upon him to teach her about computers. Little did he know that the laptop brought back memories of Ahem in her mind. Gopi restrained herself.

Gopi and Nalin shared a bed but they had decided to consummate their marriage only after knowing each other better. They would talk before going to sleep and today she had plenty of things to tell Nalin. She recounted the funny incidents that occurred because she didn't know the local language. She had learnt quite a few words today. Nalin slept before she could doze off, Gopi stared in the darkness and started wondering how Nalin had made inroads into her heart, she felt so good to talk to him and his presence made the room comfortable. Nalin's curly hair tempted her to touch them but she controlled herself.

The day she would succumb to the temptation was a month away. Ma took her to her home town Udupi. The town is famous for religious institutions dedicated to Sri Krishna. Gopi was delighted to do darshan of her Kanhaji. She smiled a lot and her enthusiasm was shared by Nalin.

That evening they went to a beach , Gopi got busy collecting sea shells. She would run to show Nalin whenever she found a good one. Nalin smiled at her child-like act.
That night Gopi discovered that the cot given to them was smaller than the normal size, she felt slightly awkward as now their bodies might touch. Finally she mustered courage and slept in it. The room was filled with the sweet fragrance of Jasmine, they came from a string of wet jasmine buds placed on a Krishna idol.

It started to rain at midnight, Gopi woke on hearing the thunder and clung to Nalin. He switched on the light and comforted her, they came closer in the process. Gopi was oblivious to the fact that her pallu had fallen down and that now she was tempting Nalin. They got closer and closer and ended up making love. The next morning she woke up in his arms.

Their relationship went from strength to strength and after a year they were blessed with a son Yash . Yash had sister after three more years. Little Prachi was showered with affection by her parents. Gopi was amused to see that Yash was already protective of his little sister. Gopi had big dreams for her daughter, she wanted her to be a doctor...or an engineer like her Dad when she grows up.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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So Gopi moved on in her life & happy with her family & Children 😉
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Originally posted by: navyab

So Gopi moved on in her life & happy with her family & Children 😉


Yes...the next part will show Ahem's reaction...we will see who will win Ahem or Nalin?

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