FF: It's My Journey-Updated-pt 6-pg21-3/11

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Posted: 13 years ago
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part 2 --- page 4
part 3 --- page 9
part 4 ---- page 14
part 5 ---- page 18
part 6 --- page 21




Characters:

Modis:

Baa: Just as in serial...like the first baa '.sensible,sweet
Chirag - shrewed business man similar to SNS
Hetal - Same javadena and loving and caring,...
Parag - Retired Director of the Central Bureau of Investigation (CBI)... was a DGP of South Mumbai, later on selected as a Director for CBI (for the last 5 years of his career) now joined modi business as a CFO ... and very good friend to Aadarsh Mehta...
Kokila- sweet and kind hearted with no egoism...
Ahem - MBA from Harvard, very intelligent, fun-loving and speaks a lot with people of his age...and very reserved with elders...
Jigar - MBA, similar to the serial...fun loving guy
Kinjal - studying law...very cute and fun loving girl... helps mom and kaki... always compares with Ahem and Jigar

Mehtas:

Adarsh Mehta: Rich but not ultra rich like the modis...Aadarsh Mehta is a financial analyst in a huge investment company...His clients vary from small firms, to some private banks. Aadarsh true to his name, very decent and clean guy in business, very fun loving and dots and loves his daughter who is a pari (fairy) to him and is her daughter's best friend
Gayathri Mehta: Very devoted to lord krishna , kind-hearted, loving, caring loves her husband and daughter to bits...but is a bit strict as a mom..because she feels gopi's dad is spoiling her...so she acts to be stern to gopi but in a loving way,
Gopi Mehta: Very bubbly, very cute and fun loving girl...loves her parents and her dad is her best friend...she has best friends in smitha and payal...studying economics...


Shahs: The shahs are ultra rich...just like the modis

Jeethu bhai shah - owns a construction company and real estate business.
Urmila ben shah - party goer and socialite
daughter Rashi shah - doing her Engineering final year... in computer sciences... outright sweet, loving and caring person...
Son Dhaval shah - joined his dad's business

location: Mumbai (i personally never been to Mumbai... but felt the need for future incidents the story need to be set-up here... will research the place as and when requied)

more characters are introduced as the story moves forward

now the story...

Mehta house:

It's a 3 bed room duplex apartment in suburb Mumbai, the alarm goes off... the girl snoozes it and goes back to sleep, she keeps snoozing it, she repeats the prcess for almost half an hour...now ' Gayatri screams "Gopiii wake up it's already 7 am don't u want to go to college...come on wake up,,,,fast..." Adarsh say "leave her alone Gayathri ,let her sleep ' Gopi beta...no need to wake up... no need to go to college " Gopi from her room "thanks dad 'you are the best dad in the world" '..Gayathri says"ji...what is this, you are just spoiling her, tomorrow how will she manage at her in-laws place" Gopi wakes up and comes out "i don't want to get married...i don't want to leave my dad" and smiles and hugs her dad..."no gayathri, i won't send my daughter any where" says dad winking at his daughter... '"u too are impossible... gopi get ready, go to college and come back soon" "why maa" says gopi while going into her room... mom says "you forgot gopi, we have to go to koki aunty's house, Ahem is returning to India after 5 years... we have to go and meet him in the evening" Gopi comes to a sudden stop holding the door to her room "ok maa" and smiles with raised eyebrows and big brown eyes...and mutters s "Ahem after 5 years" and she goes to get ready...

In Modi Mansion:

"kokila make it fast, we have to do lot of work before Ahem comes", says hetal...koki says,."ji bhabhi, still we have to make gulab jamun and kheer as well", " aah haaa..you guys are making so much for bhai and i just beg you guys everyday to make my favorite food and you don't make " saying so kinjal enters the kitchen and tries to take a ladoo... but hetal just slightly hits her wrist and says..."no, don't touch them, they are for prasad" kinjal pouts and goes into the living and sits with baa...Jigar, Parag and Chirag come down for breakfast...

In Mehta's house:

"Gopi have this breakfast, trust me you not leaving without your breakfast"..."no maa...please maa... i can't eat this early in the morning... dad please tell mom, i don't want to have breakfast" dad says "leave it gayathri...she does'nt want to have her breakfast, why do you force her... but atleast drink some milk beta" "milkkk ewww yukkk please dad, i can't have milk" gopi starts making faces looking at the milk glass... dad whispers in gopi's ears "if you don't drink milk you are not coming to koki aunty's house" with that gopi gulps down the glass of milk and drinks water to erase the after taste and wipes her lips... Mom shocked and confused"Jii what did you tell her that she drank the whole milk " Dad and Gopi says at the same time "it's a secret" and starts laughing and leave to office and college leaving behind a confused mom at home...

In Modi Mansion:

"Meethiii come fast get the poori everyone is waiting" says kokila... Meethi runs out with pooris... modis are all excited and talk about Ahem coming back... "ji did you check the fight status " koki asks parag... parag takes out his blackberry to check the flight status..."koki, the flight is on right time, it will land at 12:00 noon,. we can go by 2:30 to pick him up, as it takes time for the immigration and baggage"... after this...they say jai shree krishna to the ladies'.chirag, parag and jigar left for the office...


contd...

please leave your comments and let me know if i need to continue the story forward...or not...please can you all give me suggestions to the title as well... it's a story of Gopi more than anything

p.s : nothing related to bond series...my first ever FF ...



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Posted: 13 years ago
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RESERVED!👏

*EDITED*

yaaay im the first one!😎

Munny,Your first FF!😃

Seems interesting,Can't wait to read more!🥳

Please PM me when you update!
Edited by CHIKA784 - 13 years ago
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Good start. What is Gopi's character?
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Gd start pm me when u update
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I'm really interested Munni!!!!
Can't wait to read more!! Love the relationship between Gopi and her dad!!! It's beautiful!!!!
Parag actually has a career!!! Ex CBI and everything!!!
I need more!!!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice start munni. Do continue soon 😃
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fantastic start munni...love how ur laying out the scene and the characters...please do continue and update soon...
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Good Start...👏
can't wait to read more...

Add me too in ur PM list...


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Munni this is a great start to your story.

You have the scene and given a good introduction of the characters.
Looking forward to an Ahem after 5 years. What will he return with? What will be seeking to keep him entertained from now onwards?
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Amazing start Cant wait to read the next part pleas pm me when you Update

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