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Posted: 13 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: CHIKA784

RESERVED!👏


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yaaay im the first one!😎

Munny,Your first FF!😃

Seems interesting,Can't wait to read more!🥳

Please PM me when you update!



chikaaa !!!!!!! dear...yipee u r the first one...thank you dear...hope u continue to like it...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: Xarina

Good start. What is Gopi's character?


thank you xarina...Gopi is very cute ...bubbly...fun loving...yet shy ...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: AdaaNazArshi

Gd start pm me when u update
Fabulas


thanks adaa...will pm u


Originally posted by: NazmaJ

I'm really interested Munni!!!!

Can't wait to read more!! Love the relationship between Gopi and her dad!!! It's beautiful!!!!
Parag actually has a career!!! Ex CBI and everything!!!
I need more!!!!



nazmaa thanks dear ... glad u liked the intro... yes parag has a career and very important role in this... and yeah gopi and her dad ...very fabulous relation

Originally posted by: maddy311

Nice start munni. Do continue soon 😃


thanks maddy

Originally posted by: varshu27

fantastic start munni...love how ur laying out the scene and the characters...please do continue and update soon...


thank you varshu... glad u like it😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: amalaziz

Good Start...👏
can't wait to read more...


Add me too in ur PM list...



thank you amalaziz.. will pm u

Originally posted by: swasthi

Munni this is a great start to your story.

You have the scene and given a good introduction of the characters.
Looking forward to an Ahem after 5 years. What will he return with? What will be seeking to keep him entertained from now onwards?


thanks you swasthi...appreciate it... yep u will see him in next update😃


Originally posted by: X.Sisi94

Amazing start Cant wait to read the next part pleas pm me when you Update


thanks siham...will pm u dear

Originally posted by: sbp1971

Great start Munni, love the intro. Can't wait to read more.


thank you shilpa...😃





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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nihira-fan

great start!!!i really like your concept!!please continue!

thank you nihira...


thanks


Originally posted by: arista_pooh

hey gr8 start...⭐️

i guess gopi has alwaz been in luv wid ahem huh?❤️??????????????//


but i just hope he does not bring anita or someone else as his grlfrnd .,😡,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,orrr


ouch gopi's hrt will break,😭💔


thank you😃 ... yeah your guess may be true...lets see


Originally posted by: Justlikethat1

Was that a question to ask? Please continue and the start was Fantastic👏 😃


hehehe thank you harini😆


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: feviewer

hi...A good one munni...please add me to the pm list..please include tejas in the story too😉


thank you...will pm u... tejas as of now has no place😃 lets see if he fits in somewhere

Originally posted by: shruts18

Nice Munni, how could you concentrate on writing it after so much going on in SNS😆...keep it going n plz continue 😃



hahaha shruti thank you dear... yeah i am not liking the Ahemji going thru so much so thought of writing this😆

Originally posted by: sks21

munni great story dear...love it😃
gopi and her dad loved their relationship...looking forward for ahem's arrival
and gohem meeting...
update soon dear...


kavya ...thank you dear... i am glad..u liked it... best part is gopi and her dad's relation😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: hanaGoHem

love it munni continue pm me please welldone


thank you dear will pm u😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: tangam

yippie new FF pl keep me posted Munni


thanks tangam...will keep posted you
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Posted: 13 years ago
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precap...

"Meethiii come fast get the poori everyone is waiting" says kokila... Meethi runs out with pooris... modis are all excited and talk about Ahem coming back... "ji did you check the fight status " koki asks parag... parag takes out his blackberry to check the flight status..."koki, the flight is on right time, will land at 12:00 noon,. we can go by 2:30 to pick him up, as it takes time for the immigration and baggage"... saying jai shree krishna to baa '.chirag, parag and jigar left for the office...

Part-2

tring tring...tring tring...tring tring... "i will take the call mota bhabhi" ...koki goes to take the call "hello, gayathri how are you?" "we are good and how are you kokila and when is Ahem coming, can we come in the evening to meet him ?" "Gayathri what is this...i don't want to talk to you, since when did you start this new trend... do you ever need to call us... before coming over here..why are you talking like that ...as if you are talking to strangers" "ok ok sorry kokila...now please don't be upset... just wanted to know by what time Ahem will come home" '"by 3:30p.m. he should be home gayathri".. "ok then we will come in the evening" "theek che gayathri" "bye kokila" and they hang up the phone...

tring tring... tring...tring... "hello" "jaan what are you doing" "ji what is this... behave properly it's been so many years since we are married and still...it does not look good...now our daughter is at the marriageable age" says Gayathri..."so what...i am calling my wife...and not somebody else's wife" says Aadarsh laughing out loudly... "and did you talk to kokila bhabhi at what time is Ahem coming?" asks Aadasrh to which Gayathri says "Ji Ahem should be coming home bye 3:30p.m. we will go there by 6:30...after gopi comes from college" "ok then see you in the evening jaan" saying so both of them hang up...


@MM:

time 3:30 p,m...door bell rings... "Meethiii open the door"...says koki while coming from the mandir with aarti ki thaal in her hands... all the family members assemble in the hall ...meethi opens the door...everyone sees Ahem with a broad smile... standing there at the entrance, in a tanned Cargos and a white casual short-sleeve shirt...along, with other modi men... koki comes with aarti ki thaali... does Ahem's aarti .. and lets him in...


once inside...he takes blessing of all elders...kinjal runs and hugs him... jigar and ahem have brotherly hug...everyone sits down and Ahem says "Mom " the whole house bursts into laughter...Ahem and koki give a confused with a not again look '. they all laughed because when Ahem is at home, he says mom..mom...mom..mom.. mom... mom ..and the saga continues... and when they are done with laughter Ahem stands up and was about to say "Mo.." he stops and says "i will go and freshen up and take some rest"


"Kokila give lunch to Ahem...it's way past lunch time...he might be starving. ...kyun Ahem" says Baa..."Nahi baa...i had my lunch in the flight just before landing but mom can you send my green tea to my room".says Ahem while going up the stairs... "Ahem dikra go and rest for a while. .. we will wake you up in 3 hours.."... "why mom", ahem asks still going up the stairs..."woh, i forgot to tell Gayathri aunty, Aadarsh uncle are coming to meet you" and "oohh wow great then.. woh parrot, is she also coming" asks Ahem..."what parrot...what is that Ahem dikra" '."nothing mom" says Ahem biting his lip...//.parrot is gopi's nick name given by Ahem, Jigar and kinjal when they were kids... as gopi is keeps on saying pappa...pappa like a parrot... pappa's chamchi...always sides her pappa... no matter what...just as Ahem says mom...mom..mom... gopi keeps on saying pappa...pappa...pappa...pappa all day. (in hindi it is called thotha sound better than parrot)..//


@college:

"As we are lagging behind in economics syllabus..I will be taking an extra class for you...from 6-9 for this whole week...that way at least we can complete some chapters... call your parents and inform them." saying so the professor leaves the class room..."ohh nooo smitha i can't attend this class" "but gopi, this is the most important class, you can't miss this one as some percentage of marks are also tied up to this class" "but i have to go in the evening...woh Ahem " gopi bites her lower lip... "kyaa Ahem came back...when...how..you did not even tell me..." says smitha... " today...of course in the flight" says gopi making a blushing face..." "ohhh that's the reason,, you have been checking time almost 5 times a minute" and smitha giggles saying so...payal also breaks into a giggle... and gopi bends her head down blushing and smiling...


"pappa... when are you going to koki aunty's house", gopi called her pappa... "maybe by 6:30 we will be there beta.. why beta and when are you coming from college"..."pappa actually i have a class from 6-9 ..i can't afford to leave the class pappa" both are silent for a moment..."ok beta if the class is that important... do attend the class ...we will pick you while coming back" "ok pappa...bye pappa.. love u pappa" "bye beta" they hang up...//gopi is much close to her pappa than her mom... she just trusts and depends on him beyond anything ' they both are a team...share secrets and talk in code languages... which infuriates Gayathri in a lovely way ..//


@MM...evening door bell... meethi runs to open the door before anyone shouts for her...Gayathri and Aadarsh come in.. modis and mehtas meet (they catch up almost every weekend for the last 30 years) and talk .. ..15 mins later Ahem comes down in a track pant and a t-shirt (this is how he dresses at home)... sees Gayathri and Aadarsh ...takes their blessings... and looks around..."how are you Ahem? how was the journey? beta" asks Aadarsh...still looking around towards the entrance Ahem answers" ji uncle i am fine... journey was ok" and is still looking at the door without looking at Aadarsh "Gopi has extra class today" says Aadarsh... Ahem just says "ohh" and looks at Aadarsh uncle...smiles and relaxes..


.they all continue talking, drinking tea... having snacks...At dinner time ...everyone has dinner and koki packs some food for Gopi and asks meethi to leave the bag in Mehtas car... it's almost time to go and pick gopi from college... the Mehtas take the leave from Modis and leave '.


Gopi's college ...during the break..."Gopi please come yaar...it will fun..see we won't get these days again..let's have fun... go-carting is real fun Gopi..." "no no no...i can't come '. i have some important assignment to work on during the weekend" says Gopi raising both her hand near her shoulders..."Saturday and important assignment" both Smitha and Payal break into a laughter...Gopi justs pouts and folds her arms and says "why are you both laughing ...i swear i have work" "oh yeah we know your work .you look so desperate to meet him... its written all over your face" says Smitha winking at Gopi '.Gopi gives her broad smile with a blush on her cheeks and bends her head down...Payal starts..."Now we will not get Gopiji during the weekends...all her weekends are reserved for only ...'." gopi screams "oh noo" "now what" "break time is over" saying so Gopi rushes to the class to escape from her friends '.followed by both her best friends to the class room... ..


Mehtas reach the college by 9... Gopi jumps into the car "Pappa...pappa...how is Ahem... did he talk to you,..did you talk to him...did he ask about me... what did he say pappa...how is he looking... did he change in looks...when is he coming to meet me..." ..."Gopiii" says her mom... Gopi is calm and bends her head down '."beta he was looking around for you." and i said "you are in extra class" and all he said was "ohh" '."ohh...that's it pappa" saying so...again bends her head down looking at her mom...they reach home.. her mom feeds the food sent by koki aunty to Gopi '...after dinner... Gopi and her pappa were having coffee in the artificial lawn in the top floor of their duplex apartment talking for some time... and her mom was watching some hindi serials...


@MM

Ahem having jet-lag is not able to sleep... goes to kinjal's room and is shocked to see the scene with all the gifts around the room and some on the bed '.kinjal is just sitting on the bed and counting and organizing these gifts... Ahem smiles and enters..."what is my little sister doing " kinjal looks up at Ahem and jumps from the bed and drags Ahem to the bed... "thank you bhai ..so many gifts ...thank you... thank you... you know what... i will call my friends and show them how many gifts my bhai has got for me..they will be jealous bhai as i have the world's best bhai" kinjal still continues "no no i won't call them home... they all will be eyeing you bhai " and stands there pouting..


.Ahem smiles and places a small kiss on top of her head and says "ok now you go to bed,,..you have to go to college as well and how is the law course going...do you have any idea of the sections of ipc '. do you even know what ipc(indian penal code) stands for" "what bhaiii you know i am the topper in my college" saying so she smiles and hugs him from side..."Good Night little sister" '."Good Night bhai" and Ahem heads towards his room even though he is still not ready to sleep...


Ahem seeing the lights on in Jigar's room '.knocks the door and pushes the door "bhai aap ..please come in why are you standing there" saying so jigar stands up from his office chair near the desk "what are you doing jigar..are you still working... i was just going to my room after meeting kinjal...but when i saw the light in your room is still on...i came to meet you" said Ahem..."sit down bhai.. why are you standing" saying so both brothers sit in the chairs..."so tell me now how is it going." "everything is going great bhai... pappa, kaaka are guiding me and now i am independently leading a couple of projects and you were also helping me from US.."


"Jigar i am not talking about work" jigar's face falls down and all the excitement is gone..."i am talking about your personal life" says Ahem..."Nothing much bhai everything is fine" "Kaki says you are not agreeing for any marriage proposals " "please bhai i don't want to talk about it now" said jigar with red eyes and choked throat..."ok ok jigar... alright now you take care ...we will talk about it later ,...okk...Good Night Jigar" saying so he leaves to his room to get some sleep...


The next 2-3 days are similarly hectic for gopi with her college and economics classes in the evening...and Ahem is just getting out of his jet-lag...the next day is weekend...gopi is all excited about it...


On Saturday morning gopi opens her closet and goes through the dresses after half an hour Gopi screams ..."Maaa can you please come here" Gayathri goes to Gopi's room and is shocked to see the state of her room..." Gopi beta what is all this...what did you make out of your room" gopi literally has almost all her churidhars on the bed and some on the floor...which she has been trying for the last half an hour...Gopi pulls her maa's hands and makes her sit..."maa please help me... i am not able to pick one dress...please maa" "but you can wear any dress you wear everyday " says her maa "but maa we are going to Parag uncles house na ..so..." "so what gopi beta just wear any dress why are you thinking so much in picking a dress and it's not that you are going to parag uncle's family for the first time..we go there very often but you never did so much of mess to pick a dress" said her maa by folding all the churidhaars and placing them on the hangers...


.Gopi dragged her maa towards the door and said "ok maa you go '. i will clear this up and get ready" her maa left ,..Gopi closed her room and said it loud "is she my maa or a question bank...can't she understand a simple thing ...God knows how much pappa had to go through to get her maa into marrying him...even after love marriage she does not understand anything bhuddhu maa '.buddhu maa..." saying so she picks a dark green churidhaar - plain top and printed bottom and a printed dupatta...and gets ready with lot of matching bangles and matching bindi...big long ear rings and hair just clipped ...comes out and screams "maa papaa...i am ready...how am i looking? do i look nice ?" both her parents laugh and say "you look beautiful beta" and his dad winks at her and..Gopi with the excitement of meeting him...and the apprehensions and anticipations... about what he says when he sees her... and with various other mixed feelings in her heart...gets into the car to head to MM...


will they meet today?
what is jigar's past ?

for more stay tuned '.

please click like button and please comment...good or bad...suggestions are most welcome...need to know how am i doing with it...being the first FF more worried about the pace and length of it...

p.s: I am just trying to give the feel of characters...don't think it as a filler...need these scenes to ramp it up...


Edited by munnihyderabad - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Munni you completely have me hooked! I love this gopi! She is so so much better than the onscreen one. What a relief!! Ahem is also tolerable in this! Curious to know jigar s past and waiting eagerly nor rashi s introduction! Do send me pm when you update next.
Edited by vibz88 - 13 years ago

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