OS: Beautiful Girl - Page 19

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

WHAT? at the end of the story 😲...but that's so so so so far away 😭...i suggest a dream sequence when maaneet KISS...😳😳😳

one dream sequence coming up...sans the kiss

all written up...errr..i mean half way written up

*Z enters this thread with a heavy heart because she has no idea what she's about to type/ramble/rant about* 😭😡

Originally posted by: NANDY_BRU

awesome

i didn't expect a sad ending

its late night and i m gonna sleep after reading this if i get any terrible dreams of maneet i ll not spare u dear

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

😆 You and I naturally write sad pieces cause we are defected that way...war or no war...but our aashu on the other hand is a happily ever afters girl...😳

but i shall try never to write sad OSs again...wait wait...not write them for revenge...but simply cause that's how my stupid brain works 😆

Originally posted by: angili

this story omg 😭

i had a chock like i did in kal ho na ho when shahrukh was pictured with his diseace

Originally posted by: maangeetcrazy

why do u love to make us cry?😭😭
😭I HATE YOU
Beautiful OS👏
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Originally posted by: jnawaz

<font color="#9900ff">omg...KHNH was so sad...when he was running down the streets of NY (dramatic as it was)...it was killer...him loving her but knowing that he could never have her 😭😭...great OS idea no? Maan making Geet marry someone else because he has no time left 😲
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Originally posted by: Mk.Gh

*Z enters this thread with a heavy heart because she has no idea what she's about to type/ramble/rant about* 😭😡 eeps!! me so excited!! i came home and saw this...and i was SOOO happy...got some family drama...(who doesnt) so i totally needed this!! 😃

Ok so where do I start? Honestly by the time I ended it I was like paralyzed with shock .. really not knowing what to feel .. what to think .. what to say .. but ofcourse my first reaction was anger .. no not anger at YOU (well sorta 😆) but anger because I just feel angry that sometimes the most perfect people with the most perfect stories .. and the best life partners .. end up getting the worst punishment nature could give them .. and it's no fault of theirs .. it's like such a fairytale and then BAM it's all taken away from you because that's what God wants and that's what's going to happen .. no matter how hard you try to change the circumstances. its so sad isnt it...i mean...i always wonder...about all these married couples...especially the older couples that have been married all their lives...what do they do when death takes one of them away...how do they cope...you spend night and night going to sleep next to someone...you spend morning after morning waking up next to them...how do you get past that kind of loss!! it scares me for myself...and im not even married!! 😭😭😭 And before I comment on your OS I'd just like to say Jaz that no matter how much we say you're sadistic or that you love killing either Maan or Geet off in your writings (😆) .. that even though you do all that .. you're actually showing the reality some people have to face.. it's exactly like this.. one day your life is so perfect you don't know how much better it can get and in the next instant it takes a 360 degree turn and you wonder what went wrong So I actually THANK you for showing us harsh realities of life .. and who knows .. God forbid I ever have to witness such situations .. I'll actually have a better time dealing with such situations just because I've read your work and have gone through attachment and detachment for a character all in one go .. thank you!! 😳😳 i dont do these killings (for lack of a better word) for the heck of it...or cuz i enjoy it (errm...i sort of do cuz it tortures you guys) but...what i mean is that this is life...its isnt always all happy and perfect...there is so much pain out there...and people have so many stories that we dont know by looking at them 😭😭😭...pain is so much more powerful than happiness...a happy moment you remember forever...but a painful moment...you FEEL that forever...time may heal wounds...but they never disappear

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Coming to this yet another brilliant piece of work from you .. idk where you get your ideas or how your brain works .. but whatever is going on in your head up there .. it's working wonders for us! 😆 lol...i dont know where they come from either!! 😛 they just pop up...any song i listen to or if i hear something powerful...my mind automatically starts thinking how i can use it in a story and make it my own 😳

First off let me tell you just how amazingly adorable it was that Maan continuously called Geet "beautiful angel girl" 😳 .. gosh he was in such a trance .. he just couldn't stop staring/ogling/admiring Geet .. this is called falling "head over heels" for someone! 😆 Hayeee I was just smiling and smiling at the way a boy could fall for a girl at first sight .. he gave it a whole new dimension .. I mean it's as if they both knew from the beginning that they'd be together someday (well at least Maan did cuz Geet was really just giving him the ignore for a while 😛) munda was totally fida over the kudi (as tanu calls them 😆) ...he was gone the first time he saw her...there was no going back...as for his name for her...it was a hint for what was to come...😉 Geet turning into his angel 😛

I love how you set up the atmosphere .. I could picture it all .. the university life .. aspiring law students and all .. I could connect to it since I'm in uni at the moment! i miss it!! im ready to go back for my masters...im such a NERD!! 🤓 i actually miss my senior thesis class!! 😆Ahh I loved the ladder fall moment .. reminded me of the show 😳 .. at first I thought you were going to make Geet's best friend Pinky as normal people do but Nandini!? Why why why!? You know all I could picture was the show's Nando 😵 Gaah! LOL I tried so hard to just picture her as Pinky or Meera or something lol...sana had a fit when she saw Nandu...ha ha..i used her for the nickname more than anything else...pinky and meera are so over done...by me at least...so i thought i'd shake it up 😉 .. ok now that my cribbing about name choice is over 😆 .. I like Nandini .. Yea at some points she was being a bit overprotective of Geet but I guess their long-term friendship and sister-relationship made her so caring and protective of Geet and vice versa .. loved their bond! yup...friends gotta look out for each other...i'd do the same for my girls too...the guys in their lives have to pass my check list before anything can happen...i also have a + and - tracking game...no kidding (ask guli)...they get plus points and minus points depending on what they do 😆😆 im the saali from hell im telling you 😈

OMG I was loving the way Maan was trying to coax Nandini into giving up information on Geet and the tables turned on him instead 😆 .. his reactions at his plan not working out were so cute 😆 But I guess we can thank Adi for sending Maan to the library that day or else he would've never known about the book! 😃 Adi was our original cupid in this story...usse kya pata ke Maan library jayega aur khallas hojayega 😉...of course Yash had a small hand...it was his card the girls stole and used 😆😆😆

You know first when Nandini started talking about how Geet is into studies and is a very traditional girl I got scared for a second because I thought it'd go the route of You&I .. how Geet put stress over her studies first.. relations second .. but *phew* it didn't go that way -- instead it went a totally different route 😭 he he...your relief was short lived 🤣 sorry...but yes...studies are important for her...but no You & I type complication cuz Maan himself is in school...vaise hi men run from shaadi...😕

LOL I love how absolutely straightforward Maan was with Geet... it's as if Geet knew he liked her because she didn't say no right away .. she took it pretty normally 😛 Geet remembers him from the library...she was slightly take with him then too...not head over heels...but...enough for a second glance 😉

Wow their first date .. aww Maan being all romantic and gentleman-like 😳 .. Geet got the wrong impression awww .. Maan must've been really confused .. but I knew that as soon as she saw the grand decorations and extra expensive things she would've been turned off .. Munda didn't know this isn't what she wants poor guy 🤣 when i first read through this part... thought that she wanted a POOR GUY...i was like tauba...when did she say that 😲...then i re-read...ha ha...but yes...his heart was in the right place...sadly...that doesnt always work out...God knows i've experienced that on different levels...😕

And Nandini blames it all on him 😆.. hayee girls are complicated this way how is he supposed to know all this 😳 but I love how they all planned it out so that he could face her again and ask her .. they're all pitching in to help 😳 how could Nandu not be mad...her bff told her off for setting her up with the rich boy who throws his money around...bechari Nandu beech mein phas gayi 😆😆😆

And I totally loved their second date! So homely .. how he takes her to his favourite place .. something close to his heart that he holds dear and that just showed how much he loved her .. to take her to a place that means so much to him and holds so much importance .. thats all geet wanted...to get to know Maan...not MSK...she wanted to see the person he was...not to see what he could buy...and...the second first date was exactly what she wanted in the first place 😛

and this is where I had my first tingling of a doubt that not all is going to be right .. I swear Jaz as soon as you mentioned Maan's story about his mother not surviving cancer and that he can't bare to see someone her LOVES dying in front of him .. or losing someone so close to him .. and how Geet reassures him that she hopes he doesn't have to go through all that again .. I just had the biggest doubt that Geet might just end up having cancer BOY was I right! 😭 he he...GOOD!! 👏👏 you picked up on the foreshadowing...some did...some didnt...but my usual and loyal readers did...they know how my mind works 😉..thats why there HAD to be that second date...that set the outcome of Geet's future diagnosis into cement...😉

Anyways .. so their relationship really kickstarted from there .. they always spent time together at uni and also at Yash's home .. loved that 😊 yup...i was torn between adding more to develop their story over the time leap...but if i did that...this OS would turn into a FF 😲

Loved all of it .. the whole spending all their school life .. all the years together .. they really were each other's support systems .. and I loved seeing how they evolved as not just girlfriend-boyfriend but as friends and companions .. that whole scene at the law office was sooo awesome .. I was smiling at the way he could hear her yet didn't know if she was really there 😆 and she comes bursting in yelling with excitement .. for the first time ever she was so so so happy .. and she got to share it with the most amazing man in the world! Loved their intimate moment after sharing the news about her acceptance .. and the intimate moment being interrupted by the staff 😆 .. aww they were so happy ❤️ aur kya hota...saab ke samne they are making out and feeling each other up...they are in the Khurana Law Offices...i had to stop myself from making Adi yell "Get a room!" 😆😆 im like no...Adi is more mature than that...haan, Romeo hota toh baath kuch aur thi...but Romeo as a lawyer 🤣and yes...her news about med school...that is what put her "on top of the world" as the song says 😉

And then their anniversary .. honestly these are really hard decisions to make .. you can really never get the perfect gift can you! But I loved the conversation Maan, Adi and their friend had.. I totally fell in love with Maan after his answer to the dude about waiting because their relationship is much more than just getting into bed with each other! Ahhh ... what a true MAN .. there just aren't enough like him in the world now .. all they want is to knock up chick after chick 🥱 but Maan's answer to the guy .. hope he shut him up for his conceptions about what relationships are all about .. (why do I feel Geet overheard this conversation? Or what happened that night a result of her pain at finding out the news about her cancer?) i think gifts are so much harder for men to get their girls...guys...a shirt, a watch or perfume...you're good to go...but girls...phew...good luck!! 😆😆 bechare mard log 😉...men like Maan are few and far between for sure...sadly...they probably dont what to knock UP every chick...but definitely knock boots 🤢🤢...tauba...like i said...besharam mard log 😡...as for Geet hearing...she didnt...her change in heart was over her diagnosis...it was a coincidence 😭

But the timing couldn't have been more coincidental! The way Geet just came and got all emotional and broke down in front of him like that.. I was so scared because I just didn't know what could be wrong .. because she'd been acting really different and even Maan couldn't decipher why she was so down and silent all of a sudden .. I had the cancer doubts playing in my mind .. but after she said she was ready to go to the next level I'd thought .. maybe she overheard the conversation that day .. and heard what Maan had to say about it .. and felt she should tell him how she feels ? this situation came up cuz of a friend...not cuz she had cancer...thank God...but she was dating a guy...friends for a year before becoming bf and gf...everything was fine when one day he decided to take it to the next level...unlike Maan...he was the opposite...telling my friend if she loved him she'd do it...😲😲😲 my friend is traditional desi girl...she'd never do that until after shaadi...she said no...they broke up...and...she was not even hurt over it...it surprised her how much she didnt care... she says what did it was the fact that he thought so little of her...men!! 😡😡😡...but if Geet had given in for that reason...could you blame her? that's the best answer ever!! 😳😳😳 Well I was taking a wild guess .. but that moment is probably something Maan would cherish for the rest of his life because that's the last time he saw her 😭🥺 .. uff Jaz you don't want to know how heartbroken I am to know that this was their last meeting .. after all they'd been through .. poor Geet had to leave him hanging after this ...she didn't know what to do or say to him .. she felt leaving him for good would be the best way to say goodbye .. and ofcourse the letter didn't make it any better ... it wasnt just a memory for Maan but for herself as well...she finally surrendered all that she was to the man that she loved...she had that memory of being his and only his for the rest of her short life 😭😭...she couldnt tell Maan about her situation...just couldnt...she couldnt see her Maan suffer her loss...not after the pain of his mothers death still such a big part of his life...typical geet...Maan ke chinta pehle 👏

After the letters and Geet saying she's trying to "fight against it" totally confirmed that she had cancer.. 😭 I felt so so bad and sorry and dejected after seeing that Maan was left lonely .. left without someone to talk to about how he's feeling that Geet just.. LEFT like that .. I could totally understand his anger as well .. probably because she didn't even think of telling him about it .. confide in him about her sickness .. nothing .. she gave him the best night of his life and just .. disappeared .. I just don't know what a man would do if that ever happened to him in real .. and I don't know what a girl would do if she found out she had a problem like Geet and have someone she loved more than her life ... what do you do in such situations? They felt so helpless! Maan had Nandini to talk to...did they use the opportunity..sure...why not! 😆😆but you're right...what do the real people in the real world do...main toh kuch bhi likhti hoon...what do the people that suffer such a fate do? my heart goes out to them... and their families...🥺

But I like how you never showed Geet's point of view .. we were able to connect to Geet through Maan and through Maan we were able to feel the pain and sorrow of being left alone .. deserted. . not knowing what to do after being left with just a letter .. we saw Geet thorugh his eyes .. through his thoughts .. we saw his pain more than Geet's .. I guess that created more of an impact .. although I would've died to know what went through the poor girl's mind after leaving him .. I really do .. but I guess to keep the essence you kept it to Maan's POV and we felt the same way he did .. even I felt angry at one point because she didn't confide in someone she said she loved and trusted .. and just left after leaving a mere letter .. yup...this was full on Maan's POV...it was his beautiful girl...his POV was the only one that mattered...his love...his loss...😭😭...actually...i was thinking about that myself...Geet's pov through all this...also someone mentioned a Maan/Nandu update just to see the inside of how their dynamics changed after Geet's loss...what led them to decide to get married...im trying to see if i can make those work w/out taking away the essence of Maan's story itself 😕😕...did that make sense?

but then I also felt sympathy because in such situations you're so helpless that you don't know what decisions are right or wrong.. especially if they include your near, dear, and loved ones .. 😭 UFF .. I was riding high on emotions at that point .. i agree...do you make the decision on whats best for you...or whats best for those around you...its such a confusing time...such a difficult time as it is...but to add all these relationship into the mix...God...i cant even begin to think about it...mere haath pair saab tanda hojate hai 😔

And I felt so bad for Maan .. he falls in love and gains his love and acceptance from Geet .. spends years with her .. weaves dreams about his future with her .. she gives him the best night of their life and she LEAVES .. and he has not possible way to reach her or know if she's ok ..or what's wrong .. he just feels so dejected from the rest of the world ..I would probably go into depression .. i felt really bad leading Maan on...i mean...the second letter gave him some hope...that she was ok...just dealing with some drama...he felt like she'd be back...because she was still in touch with him...thinking about him...little did he know...she lay on her death bed loosing the battle she fought...😭😭

But the worst phone call of his life came from Nandini .. I swear I was so freaked out as to what has happened .. I just thought please don't let Geet die .. please please please .. but .. I guess some things you just can't control 😭 .. life plays cruel games with you and you have to take it in ...I don't even know what to say about what the letter did to me .. I was just... to paralyzed to think clearly that last letter did me in too...especially the part about Nandini...im so close to my girls that i picture us in this position...and it kills me...im there for my girls and they are there for me...the thought of them in pain and me not being there or vice versa...it kills me...i teared up writing the last bit as well... 😭😭.. she's gone .. she's gone for good .. and he never got to say a last goodbye .. never got to see her again .. his Angel .. omgg.. and then the title .. everything. . it all fell into place .. I was bawling with tears .. I just .. you really did an amazing job Jaz at portraying a man's emotions at this point .. what he must feel like when he has to go through such a loss .. the pain.. emotions .. he didn't even break down because of the shock .. oh my Maaneet! 💔 i wanted to add the song in the beginning but i didnt cuz i didnt want people guessing what it was about...cuz the lyrics clearly give it all away...its such a painfully beautiful song...i just love them!! 😭😭 my OS "A New Hope"...the one where Maneet's son dies and they split up...that came from their song as well...they leave me speechless all the time

I swear I'd thought at the very beginning that he was getting ready for his engagement to Geet .. you set the story well by giving such a beginning to the story .. we'd all expected Geet to be the beautiful bride-to-be .. but it all just twisted in such a way that ... he he...i was pretty happy with that particular twist...sure he was getting engaged to a great woman...but that woman wasnt Geet...if you notice...when (at the beginning ) he says "she would love nights like this"...the "she" is in italics...for a reason 😉

Do I feel happy that Maan is marrying Nandini? Yes and No. Yes because at least he'd have a strong companion, if not lover, to be married to and have a support system .. for the emotions he holds for Geet... only she would know how he feels and she wouldn't pressurize him. yup...she understands his emotions...just like he understands her...Geet's loss left a hole in Nandu's life as well...Maan knows that and understands that...while others may not...her death changed Nandini...she's not the same bubbly blackmailing girl she used to be No I'm not happy because a marriage also drives with love. If there is no love then you're missing a large part of the experience of being married to someone .. I know love isn't all there is .. but it's part of the equation .. and if Maan and Nandini are just doing this to satisfy Daadima's wish of seeing Maan married to someone then it's understandable yet at the same time not so fair for them .. it's not fair to Nandini either becasue she knows Maan would never love her like he loved Geet also true...but for Maan...he could never love any one again...for him it was once in a life time kind of deal...Nandu...she's helping out the man her best friend loved...in a way...in her heart...its helping Geet...know what i mean...so for her...the sacrifice is worth it... 😕 .. the picture of Geet on his table solidifies that Geet was, is, and always will be his love 😭 .. so it's more of a compromise but of two friends .. I guess if not lovers they could be friends .. but idk how comfortable they would be in the future.. what if Daadima wants grandkids? For whose sake would the have those kids? Theirs or Daadimas? So you see I'm in two minds about their marriage but I understand because why would either of these two turn down Geet's last wishes? 😭 They love her too much for that! and yes...between Maan and Nandu combined...no two people (minus her parents) loved her more...no one else feels her loss more...as for kids...lets just say Dadi Maa died a year later so she cant ask for them...unless she's ekta style and comes back from the dead 😆😆😆...tauba...mera kuch nahin hosakta...turned a serious tension into utter crap

Jaz, I say to you THANKYOU for such an amazing OS .. it was a rollercoaster ride of emotions .. it was brilliance .. it was sheer torture at having to see someone we adore and love have to face such hardships. . it was torture to see Maan in such a helpless state. . it was emotional .. it was powerful .. it was just BEAUTIFUL! 😳 I loved it. aww...you're too kind luv...i try to get my emotions and thoughts down...glad that i worked on this one...i wanted to make sure i was able to portray maans pain/loss properly...but also his love and respect for his beautiful angel girl...😳😳😳

I hope you liked my lousy attempt at commenting on your OS .. I swear I know my thoughts were all jumbled up and made no sense.. but that's what this OS did to me .. it just did things to my heart and mind that no other person could do with their writing! 😃 best comment yaar!! totally made the 45 pgs worth it...i swear...when i finished with this story...my hands hurt!! i could feel the strain 😲😲...you're kind words totally made my night...that coupled with another piece of good news (to be announced to you all on monday) has just made my saturday the best in a long time!! 🤗

Z