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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: basicquestion1


Aww thank you...I didn't think this fan fic will go this far and people will love it cuz its my first time writign anything about devil or in this Shetan Maan 😆😆
ahhaah well I have to follow EST sicne i live in USA...so the time confusion happens😆😆
Godo thing my boss is not here yet so I am able to update😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: basicquestion1

Savitri: I know you will be. (she holds his shoulder) Promise me you will always take care of her
wait...nooo...so r u teasing me with sad imaginations of how maan may not have been there for her sis , whn she needed him the most.
can i give maan a hug?

Why you need to hear it from me when you got your answers already.
Oh my God...does that mean that...in the past nobody evr believed his word...may b whn he was telling his life's truth to someone, he met with rejection 😒
also this sentence emits his longing ...for someone to care for his words and feelings instead of just collecting the facts.❤️😍
seems like some1 in the past was just running behind an incident's facts without caring if they were true or false or without caring if maan wud agree with them or not)

don't hate me for over analyzing u'r work.😒
it'snot entirely my fault that u'r story has kept me captivated.🤗



Not saying anything but good analozy hehehee
Why would I hate you for analzying my work 😆
I actually like it cuz I get to know your POV of what you think so far of the story..btu don't worry the truth will be out after this part which I am going to update like right now😆😆
I would love to know what you think after the truth😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
Okay guys,

Here is the update...thank you being patient ie. Pushpi, Basicquestions1 😳and the rest of the clad😆...hopefully it was worth the wait.😳 umm lets see do I have to say anything? hmmm *thinking* I guess thats it...

Enjoy!

Ohh yeah one more thing before I forget...I know many of you guys will ask me for another part...sorry but I will update that 2marow...(U.S. EST)😆😆 I need to start writing HAHK part before I get jhootis and chapals thrown at me 😆😆
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😈 SHETAN KA GHAR😈
Chapter 16

Maan: mama I am going to name my sister Pari (Savitri smiles as Maan rubs her belly. He puts his head on her belly to listen to the baby's movement. She strokes his head)

Savitri: I like the name.

Maan (looks at her) You know I have everything planned. I will be the best big brother.

Savitri: I know you will be. (she holds his shoulder) Promise me you will always take care of her

Maan: of course. (Maan looks at her face. He frowns) What happened to your face mom? How did you hurt yourself? (just then his dad comes in. He stops after hearing Maan. He looks at both of them with anger...)

Savitri (looks down) ohh umm nothing (She looks up to see her husband, Ranjvir, standing there looking at both. She turns to Pammi who was busy cleaning the kitchen table...) Pammi take Maan upstairs.

Pammi: Sure...(she smiles and takes Maan's hand) Maan baba come lets go upstairs

Maan: No I want to stay here with Pari.

Pammi: Maan your mom says for you to go. Come lets go.

Maan: No...(He shouts)

Ranjvir (comes and holds Maan's arm tightly) Listen to what Pammi is saying. (Maan gets angry seeing him and pushes him off. Savitri slaps Maan)

Savitri: Is this how you behave with your father.

Maan: I want to stay with Pari. LET GO!!!

Savitri: Pammi just take him away please.

Maan: No I don't want to go!!!! (he tires to remove his arm from Pammi's hold but was unsuccessful.) Let me go!

Maan wakes up in a jerk sweating..he looks to his side and saw Geet sleeping peacefully. He closes his eyes remembering what he did to Geet in anger. He gets off the bed, putting his clothes on and goes to the bathroom. He washes his face and looks in the mirror. He sees his father's face angering him more. He punches the mirror in anger. He punches everything and anything that showed his reflection. He sits on the bathtub floor turning against the bathtub wall closing his eyes in pain. He lets the blood drip slowly on the floor.

Geet sits on the bed feeling pain in her lower area. She looks around the room..everything was messy. She sighs in relief when she didn't see Maan next to her. She hugs her knees and starts crying remembering last night events. She didn't want the things to turn out that way. She was trying to change and accept him but he turned everything around. Why was he angry? Why? What is his past that made him that way? If he considers her as his wife then don't she have any right on asking him? Why is she even here then? She immediately looks up when she hears a noise of something being broken from the bathroom. She immediately gets up, wrapping a sheet around her, when the noise was getting louder and louder. She falls back on the bed due to pain but ignoring the pain she makes her way toward the bathroom.

She stood there shocked seeing the mess. Mirrors, glass everything was broken into tiny million pieces. She bends on the floor when she sees something red. She touches it and realizes its blood. She frantically looks around and saw Maan sitting under the shower with blood dripping from his hand. She sits near Maan and looks at his hand and the floor. It was filled with blood. She holds his hand and holds it on her face while crying.

Geet: Why are you doing this? WHY?! ANSWER ME!! (She shakes him...Maan opens his eyes and looks at her. He removes his hand from hers and gets up. Geet looks at him in disbelief. He picks her up after seeing mirror pieces on the floor. Geet's arms were on the side dangling while Maan carried her. He puts her down on the bed. She holds his hand and looks at it. Maan turns around to look at her. She gets off the bed.) What kind of punishment are you giving yourself? (Maan looks at his hand...)

Maan: Let it bleed...(He was about to walk away when Geet stops him again. She jerks him)

Geet: I have had enough...you have to tell me the truth...TELL ME! (Maan looks at her with anger...) I DON'T CARE ANYMORE ABOUT YOUR ANGER! I WANT ANSWERS! (Maan jerks her near him...he puts his arm around her waist..)

Maan: You got the answers in my diary. (She looks at him..) You want to know right how I knew? I had kept my diary closed on the desk. When I came back it was open. (He holds her hair...) Why you need to hear it from me when you got your answers already.

Geet: No. I didn't get my answers! I want to hear it from you.

Maan: I have nothing to say. (he lets go of her..but Geet holds his shirt collar..Maan looks at her hands on his shirt and then at her)

Geet: You said that you don't want to cause me any pain in your diary...(she has tears in her eyes) Then why are you giving me pain? You said that I am your wife. What rights do I have as your wife? Why am I here then?

She falls on the floor hugging his leg...Maan closes his fists in pain. Few drops of his blood falls on her shoulder. She looks at his bloody hand. She gets up and drags him on the bed. She makes him sit while she grabs a first aid box. She grabs an alcohol wipe and begins cleaning his wound. Maan jerks her closer..she falls on top of him on the bed, both their feet were dangling off the bed. Maan turns her around so that he was lying on top. He holds her hand with one hand while he caresses her face with the other. She closes her eyes feeling him. He kisses her on her lips and lets go of her.

Maan: You can go to your parents house. (She opens her eyes and looks at him shocked. He gets off of her and begins walking away. She gets up in anger and turns him around in anger. She slaps him on the face. Maan looks at her with shock...)

Precap: The truth of Maan's past

Update tomorrow!

By the way I don't mind updating this daily Monday-Thursday maybe on Fridays as well (excluding the weekends) depending on the amount of comments I get😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
so maan was brought up in abusive household 😒

i was sad that savitri slapped maan but then again she actually saved him from dad's wrath. if savitri wudn't have done so then may b dad wud have painted him blacknblue for his rudeness :(

this pammi lady..i'm a bit skeptical about my judgement for her.
she surely does take care of maan but seems more powerful than an ordinary house maid.

geet is one amazing gal. very forgiving and extremely selfless. it's beyond me how she is only thinking about maan on every step of the way. he was so barberic with her and she was still in pain after the awkward union n yet his pain was the only thing she talked about 🤗

luvd how she told maan that she doesn't care about what she read, it needed to come from him. 👏

their unplanned kiss was jaaanuuu
but oh no
He kisses her on her lips and lets go of her.

was he doing the farewell kiss ??????????? he wants to give her freedom back? so she can runaway from this undisclosed monster 😒
Geet slapped him...yup waiting for her to do so over n over.
idiot...how can he think of letting her go away if he has a claim on her heart😍
Edited by basicquestion1 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

amazing update...

hmm so maan thinks he is like his father..
omg now he lets her go when she wants to know more about and wants to stay 😭..
cant wait for tomorrow to know about the past
Edited by MsMovielover - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
ossum dear
superb part
so she slapped him
great !
and waiting for his past dear
i loved it

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Posted: 13 years ago
it was good
so finally maan will reveal his past to geet
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Posted: 13 years ago
OMG i missed the last part,wow both were amazing dear,awesome writte up,liked the slap!
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Posted: 13 years ago
By the way I don't mind updating this daily Monday-Thursday maybe on Fridays as well (excluding the weekends) depending on the amount of comments I get😳

awww subah subah kitni pyaari baatain kerti ho. May God keep u happy forever .
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesome
Finally she gave him the rite answer
Feel bad for Maan
As i said before pammi has some role to play in this absuive past.
Cont soon
Luv
Tc
Atiffa

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