my next story @ pg 4: Duo ki Dosti - Page 5

hey SAKSHI yaar tum toh kamak ho

yaar no words to explain just want to say gr8 job

Originally posted by: dayakhtar

hey SAKSHI DEAR...😊

hope u ll b doin' well...😊

4 being LATE

⭐️d IDEA u hv cum up wid is⭐️

👏IMPROVEMENT as COMPARED 2 ur PREVIOUS EFFORT is👏

😃d way u hv HIGHLITED d DUO BOND is sooo😃

⭐️at CHARATERISATION n SCRIPTING⭐️

👏so u DESERVE👏

TRY 2 AVOID d ABRUPT ENDING

u need an IMPROVEMENT at STORY WRAPUP

(plz dnt mind)

HUGS

😊4 u😊

😛a small TREAT😛

😛a small token of affection😛

take care😊

gud luk😊

keep smilin'😊

regards😊

Originally posted by: AmanDeep24

hey SHAKSHI

hmmm to PUNJABI😉

jini SOHNI KUDI tu hai uni hi SOHNI story likhi hai..

hr scene nu bhut vadhia dhang naal eleborate kita hai

DUO di DOSTI nu bhut vadhiya treeke nal pash kita

i loved it...

DUO COMPANIONSHIP story di jaan hai

teri story dia kuch lines menu bhut jyada changia lgiya😛

Abhi: yr itna formally qun baat kar rahe ho? Tumhe pata hai na mein tumhare bina reh nai sakta. Ab aise baat karoge tou..

Daya(smiles secretely): tou.

Abhi: tou yr kuch nai mein tujhe chodunga nai.. tum dekhna..

Daya: dekhlunga..

Abhi: daya key bache.. bhot shaitan ho gaya aj kal' acha yr vaise tumne mujhe maaf kiya ya nahi.. me tum par bewajah ukhad gaya tha'

Daya: yr tum to meri jaan ho tou tumse naraj reh sakta hun kya?'

ina lines ne DIl KHUSH kr dita😃

keep it up👏👏

Originally posted by: Soonaali

hey DD yaar tum toh kamak ho

yaar no words to explain just want to say gr8 job

for u

DD please keep one thing in mind that when u are writting emotional scence in CID be care full it may go out

in this story u hadle it welly

Originally posted by: shreela

sooo sweet!! very well-written Sakshi!😊