SS:-Kadva Karelas and Jhakkas Jalebis(Pg 25 Note) - Page 4

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Posted: 13 years ago
#31

He spoke to himself. "She walks...she trips...bangs her head...and finally prays to her Devi Maiyya!" -🤣 Love your little dialogues!! How sweet of him to memorise her routine!!...Great update! Thanks for the PM!...

P.S - I could kill shyam for thinking so low! But hey we always need atleast one evil 'character deelaa'! 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: cute_gurl

Awesome update vandu!!🤗

So Arnav already feels a little something something for khushi huh😉
Keep em coming!!❤️


Mhm. Well I don't want the story to run the way it is on the telly. Too much hate going there maaan! And thank you 😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweet_girl234

loved it!

euurggh wat is shyam thinking!?
one night of pleasure from khushi! force?!
nooo!!
hope arnav helps khushi!!
and beats him up!
yes shyam is going to go in two parts!
loved the update!
thanks for the pm


Maybe you might just have an idea of what gonna be coming up! And thank you for reading my lovely! ⭐️
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: FebruaryFlower

Loved it darling!!!

I love the way Arnav was watching her secretly from near his car, and then when she came into work. He even knows her routine in the morning!!
Thank you for minimal Shyam and Khushi interaction...😆
Thanks for the PM!!
Looking forward to the next part...😊


LOL I knew people would hate the Shyam- Khushi scenes. As if we don't get enough on the telly that I have to add them here! Thanks for reading 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Yazzy91

He spoke to himself. "She walks...she trips...bangs her head...and finally prays to her Devi Maiyya!" -🤣 Love your little dialogues!! How sweet of him to memorise her routine!!...Great update! Thanks for the PM!...

P.S - I could kill shyam for thinking so low! But hey we always need atleast one evil 'character deelaa'! 😆


LOOOL! 😆 Why thank you thank you. My brain is a wondrous creation. Muaha! Oh trust me I wouldn't kill him. I'd torture him. Chuck him to some crocodiles in Australia then let the vultures have the leftovers! Thanks for reading. Will update soon 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: StarryEyedGyal


Maybe you might just have an idea of what gonna be coming up! And thank you for reading my lovely! ⭐️


haha ooh if that is coming up in the next update i cant wait for the next!!
aww what do u mean thank you!
i love to read other peoples work!!
thank you for writing!
😃 ❤️
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Posted: 13 years ago
#37
it was a such a sweet update like jalebi..u worked like cvs..i thought that may shyam exposed this time.as both go to his office..it was v goood one.the good thing is that he felt abt her..waiting for nxt oone..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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And here is the third update. A bit too much action going on here and hopefully you'll like it! So enjoy ma lovely peeps. Will update soon as I am now out :)


Part Three

After another day of incredibly hard work of attempting to avoid Arnav Singh Raizada she left the office. It was raining and with that she plonked out her broken and dishevelled umbrella with pom-poms on it all the way from Lucknow. The wind was strong but Khushi Kumari Gupta wasn't one to be defeated! Eventually after trekking a few yards she managed to track down an auto and it took her home. As the rickshaw's front wheels fell into the potholes and back out again, she jumped up and down in unison. She loved it. This was the true India.

Bumbling around in her bag she eventually managed to get her keys out. She fed the key into the lock twisted it and for some awkward reason it was all dark. Candles were lit everywhere and in the middle stood Shyam staring at her. Shooting daggers through those pesky eyes of his.

"Aaj toh mein tumhe paakar hi rahoonga Khushi. Aaj mein sab kuch karoonga'sab kuch." He mumbled quietly.

"Shyam-ji. Yeh sab kya hain. Itni saari candles! Kiske liye! Kitni sundar lag rahi hai! Haina?" she smiled with glee.

"Acchi lagi na Khushi. Yeh humne sirf aapke liye kiya. Humari aakhri raat hain yahan par. Kuch pal aapke saath akele bitana chahate te hum." Shyam said and with that he took footsteps towards her.

Khushi felt a bit creeped out. All the joy she was experiencing this morning had just left her with a jolt. She advanced backwards as he advanced forwards. She hit the wall and suddenly he grabbed her hand and pulled her towards the bedroom!

"SHYAMJI! YEH AAP KYA KAR RAHE HAIN?! CHODIYE MUJHE! SHYAMJI''!"

He had covered her mouth with his hand and he was pulling her towards his bed. She didn't know what was going to happen next but whatever it was wasn't going to be a field full of poppies! Suddenly he threw her on the bed and she fell banging her head on the headboard. She screeched but nobody heard. What was she going to do? But more importantly what was Shyam going to do. Suddenly he placed himself on top of her locking their bodies together. She tried to push him off but he was too strong. He was doing something above her head and she couldn't see what. When she tried to move her left arm she couldn't. It was tied with a rope to the headboard. She couldn't move. He then got off her and grabbed one of her legs and quickly tied that too. The next minute he was ripping her clothes off. Khushi screamed and screamed but the windows were shut and Shyam had prepared for this. He'd placed cushions in front of all the windows so as nobody could hear. Suddenly she felt a shiver as she felt his body near hers. She couldn't move. She couldn't even breathe as she realised what he was doing to her. She wriggled as hard as she could but he held her down by her neck and arm. She screamed and screamed wishing for the torture to stop. But it lasted until she fell unconscious into a sleep full of nightmares.

Khushi woke up suddenly in the morning. Her clothes were sprawled all over the place and she was sitting there naked. The sheets were a mess and creased. Glimpses of what happened kept on returning to her but she didn't want to remember what had happened. She sat there, wondering how Shyam could do this to her. What if he was still in the house? Quickly she wrapped a sheet around her and locked the room. Her legs gave way and she sat there crying her eyes out. How she wished her Jiji and Buaji were around. How she wished she'd never met Shyam. How she wished last night had never happened. All these thought went around her head. She was too shocked. Too shocked to speak. Too shocked to get up. Too shocked to do anything except for sit there in the corner shivering and jumping at every movement.

It was 9.30am now. Khushi hadn't arrived and the office had opened an hour ago. He stood there in his glass cabin wondering where she was. For some reason his morning seemed incomplete without seeing her usual walk, stumble, pray routine. He'd give it another hour. If she wasn't here by that time he'd ask the receptionist to call home and then get her to cut that much pay off too. It was her duty to come in on time. Not stop at stalls on the street and stuff her face with jalebis everyday. He sat down and started to work. Time flew by. 10 minutes. 20 minutes. 50 minutes. She still hadn't come. Where was she? Usually she was always giving him lectures about being on time and doing her work to the best she can.

"Khushi ko phone karo aur use poonch lon ke who kaha hain. Keh dena keh mujhe who abhi issi waqt office mein chahiye!" he ordered his receptionist.

Five minutes later he received a call.

"Kya?! Phone nahi lag raha?...Ghar ka phone try kiya?...Kya woh bhi nahi lag raha? Theek hain!" and with that he smashed his receiver. Where could she be? What if something had happened. Knowing how clumsy she was she was probably at home nursing the small cut or whatever she had managed to gain. He'd go and check later. His work was more important. She would be getting quite a mouthful from him later!

Soon ASR began to pack up and he walked out of his office.

"Khushi Kumari Gupta. Aaj toh tum nahi bachne wali. Har waqt mujhe hi meri auqat batati hon toh aaj mein bhi tuumhe sunaoonga ke auqat kay hoti hain!" he murmered whilst driving.

Soon he reached her house. Getting out of his car in the least discreet way possible he climbed the steps to her house and knocked loudly.

"KHUSHI KUMARI GUPTA! DARWAZA KHOLO! RIGHT NOW!" he screamed

Inside Khushi quivered with fear. She heard the loud noise and feared it would be Shyam again. Her legs would not carry her and she crawled underneath her bed as quietly as she could.

"KHUSHI! KHUSHI! DARWAZA KHOLO!" Arnav shouted.

He decided to ring her but nobody picked up. He went around the house. He was sure she was in there. He could sense her. As usual. He walked round to the back of the house. All the windows were boarded up. Why? He tried to peek through the window cracks when suddenly he saw a small crack in one of the windows. He peered through and the room looked absolutely grubby and unkempt. Suddenly he saw two bare feet poking out from beneath the bed.

"Khushi." He whispered in a concerned voice. "What the hell happened? Yeh aisi kyun baithi hain. Aur itne gande kamre mein. Aisa kya hua hoga."

He knew something had gone wrong but what he didn't know. The house seemed quiet and so he decided to break in through the back door. The front door would create too much commotion.

He ran to the back door and tried to unpick the lock. He was a master at this. When he was younger he would always unpick the lock to his mums jewellery cupboard when he was younger and then try it all on. Finally he managed to unpick it and he burst in. He ran to the room where Khushi was but the door was shut. He banged on it to get it open.

The more the door banged, the more she quivered up to her to the single sheet draped over she. She tried to contain her sobs but she couldn't stop. She closed her eyes and wished that whatever was coming through that door wasn't Shyam.

Eventually he managed to break through. He ran to the bed and as he knelt down below he saw Khushi in a state he'd never seen before. She was wrapped in a sheet with black and blue bruises all over her body. She was crying as her once chirpy eyes were now just empty. He looked at her and wondered what could have happened.

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Posted: 13 years ago
#39

Omg why?!
Shyam the bas********d!!
What a tramp!
What the hell?!
Why did he do this?!
I thought arnav would reach in time to save her!!
But whats done is done hope he comforts khushi!
Loved the update
you write fantastic!
Update soon!
Thanks for the pm!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMG!!!
I can't believe Shyam actually went ahead and Khushi could do nothing to save herself.
Khushi's pain and anguish is evident through your writing. You've written this part really well, especially given its delicate nature!!
I'm so glad Arnav persisted and managed to get to her at the end. I really want to know what he says or does to comfort her, and how she reacts!!
Thanks for the PM darling!!!
😊
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