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Okay - it's poem time. This one is about Saachi and how she was feeling at the start of the honeymoon about Shravan. I have added a pic to help set the mood. (I am afraid this one is a little lackluster, I had trouble with expressions 😕)


She wants him so badly

She has staked a claim

He does not know

The next 6 eternities are hers with him

If she cannot have this one


She has given all of herself

She has made the entirety of him

Her own.

She knows him like her own reflection.

He is under her skin.

Her lifeblood.


She waits quietly

Stealing glances of him

To nourish the pining.

She ignores his chides

She savors his smiles.

She will make room in his soul.

The process has begun.


Why won't he see?

Silly man of her dreams.

She is a pillar in his life

And unbeknownst to him

She is the answer to all

His quiet prayers in the wind.

She is the one who has not faltered

She is the one who has been constant

She is the one with unbounding

Unconditional love.

If he would just stop long enough

To see.

She screams in whispers,

I am here.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Anu, after all the thinking and processing, you've written THE best. This is so suitable to how Sanchi must've been feeling at that point of her life. Truly amazing!
My favorite lines are these:

Originally posted by: momma1128


If he would just stop long enough

To see.

She screams in whispers,

I am here.

👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Aww thanks Jaan!! 😳
I had a tough time trying to get down what I wanted to say.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: momma1128

Aww thanks Jaan!! 😳

I had a tough time trying to get down what I wanted to say.



And the hard work has indeed paid off! 👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: jahnvi.angel10

Anu, after all the thinking and processing, you've written THE best. This is so suitable to how Sanchi must've been feeling at that point of her life. Truly amazing!
My favorite lines are these:

👏



This is wonderful, Anu. You have expressed beautifully Sanchi's thoughts and feelings at that time. 👍🏼 👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey anu, that was truly amazing, more so coz according to me not only have u described her inbound feelings for shravan, but u have at the same time epitomized her character as well... 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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She is the one who has not faltered

She is the one who has been constant

She is the one with unbounding

Unconditional love.

Anu these words very aptly suit Saachi. You have indeed done a marvellous job of penning Saachi's emotions at that point of time in her life. Its great Ankita emotes and expresses her character's feeling through her face and body language; but its even better to see your thoughts and words describing what she must have felt before that HM.
Kudos to you Anu, poem or prose its as good as it can be!👏👍🏼⭐️
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wow Anu...brilliant poem👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wow what poetry. Absolutely loved it.
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Oh, oh my god, Anu! This was so beautiful! Heartbreaking and yet so joyful at the same time. I just love your poems! Please keep writing more and more :D

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