Maryada FF: Vidya-Gaurav (p. 30)

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Hello lovely readers of this forum,
Every show has a way to measure if they have made it - it's when people start writing FFs about it (at least in my humble opinion).
So, I thought I would show some support for this show in the same regard.

I know that a lot of people do not read FFs on forums and I generally reside in the FF forum, but in this one instance, I will break set and post this FF here as well (show of support and widened reader base - two birds at once :)

Please do let me know if this is not allowed. I would be happy to only continue in the FF forum.

Good day,

Devi

Index:



Chapter 60: These Moments

Chapter 61: Intoxication


Disclaimer: .**I do not own Maryada or its characters (although I have taken the liberty of adding my own ;), - Maryada (the show), Star Plus (and whoever else is involved) does. However, this FF is my creative work, and I request that you respect my rights over it. Please do not copy or plagiarize my story in its entirety or in parts or post it elsewhere. Thank you :)**
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Chapter 1 – A Missed Train – Almost…

The train came to life with its fits and starts and she jumped off it, startled, even though she had known that it would have to begin its journey at some point.

"What are you doing, beta? Get back on the train." She heard no less than twenty voices say at once, and for a moment, she could do nothing but just stand there in confusion, refusing to believe that this was actually happening.

She looked intently at her mother, hoping that she would not send her away like this. She loved her village; she wanted to stay here forever. She was not a girl who had any inkling to go anywhere else. Her mother came out of the group of all her relatives who were there at the station and shook her out of her momentary stillness.

"Vidya, baccha, please get back on the train. They are all waiting." Her mother pleaded now and Vidya looked at her, showing her hurt for the first time since this had all happened.

The train was starting to move, albeit slowly, and her mother nudged her towards it now, before her compartment moved so far away that she would have to run after it.

"Go, beti, go…" Her mother said gently now, but insistently.

"Why?" she asked, although the answer to that question was obvious. But she did not want to hear that answer. She wanted to know why they were doing this to her, why her family couldn't see that an alliance from some well-connected family in the city with a groom who spoke perfect English and moved about with a crowd that she had no knowledge of or experience with was entirely unsuitable… How they thought she could adjust to a new city, a new house, a new family, and to living with a man, all on her own… How they thought that she could survive without seeing her father, her mother, her brothers and sisters, her cousins, her chaachas and maasis, her neighbors, her dear friends that she grew up with… how they could think of sending her away from everything that was precious to her in the hope that this was "a good marriage."

Her mother was prevented from answering her question as they both heard, "Vidya Beti…" from behind her. They looked back and saw that it was her mother-in-law, Devyani, standing at the door of their compartment and calling out to her.

Even seeing the kind face of Devyani, Vidya felt no compunction to move at all… she wanted the train to keep going without her… to run away from her completely… But what she wanted was of little consequence… because right then, she heard them all start to chant her name, asking her to run after the train that was moving now at a more rapid pace.

Her mother pushed her more forcefully and without thinking of it, she starting moving towards the point where they all wanted her to reach.

The train picked up even greater speed as she ran after it, thwarting her for her earlier hesitation, and she felt a moment's relief that she may not be able to catch it. She knew it did not solve the problem, that a missed train just delayed the fate that lay ahead of her, but she would make do with a delay for now.

She turned back for an instant and saw that her mother had tears in her eyes. All her other relatives who were clustered around her mother were urging her to run faster.

When she turned back around to face the front, she saw that the groom's younger brother, Aditya, was standing next to Devyani as well, now yelling, "Faster bhabhi… run faster."

They had not allowed her to dress in something simple as she had wanted to. Instead, they had made her put on the most heavy lehenga that she owned, along with the most heavy jewels, which were all weighing her down.

She looked down briefly to hike her skirt up a bit more and when she looked back up, she saw Devyani's concerned face and that of the housemaid Imli. Aditya had disappeared. It was only for a moment though, because suddenly he reappeared.

And he was not alone… He had brought with him the man that she had only married that morning.

At the unexpected appearance of her groom at the door of their compartment, the edge of the long dupatta that was covering her hair suddenly snagged on a wick sticking off a column nearby. She looked back just in time to see it dragged off of her, revealing her long straight hip-length hair for all the world to see. She looked back in alarm towards the front and saw that he had jumped off the train. She looked on in shock as he rushed towards her and grabbed her hand in his to run back towards the train. Something about the removal of the dupatta made her jewels and dress seem lighter and feeling a hand helping her gave her a burst of energy as she ran in earnest now, wanting to reach that train before it sped away from the both of them.

They were there before long and she felt Aditya's hand pull her up just as her groom lifted her off the ground and onto the steps of the train. She turned back towards the entrance just in time to see him jump on as well, crowding her off the step and making her stumble. He caught her before she fell and she grabbed onto him as well to steady them both.

She was breathing deeply from the exertion, now that the adrenaline rush was over, but he gave little indication that he had just had to jump off the train and rescue an errant new bride lest she get left behind.

It was the first time that she had really seen him up close and she had to allow to herself that he was very handsome. But his body appeared to be the sort that city boys worked on for hours in the gym to achieve, not like the natural lanky tone that her village boys had from being outdoors and climbing and running about or doing productive labor all day. She preferred the latter much more.

She let go of him quickly, just as he took his hands off her as well.

"Thank you." She said, looking up at him briefly as she moved up the stairs to allow him room to come in.

"No problem." He told her just as succinctly before he moved in and walked down the aisle of the train and away from her and his family without once looking back.

She thought that maybe he was a taciturn man, not very social… maybe that was the reason that they had brought him to the village to get married off. She knew very well what these city families were looking for in a traditional village girl… they wanted some girl who was ignorant and submissive, good with the household chores, and willing to bear whatever was wrong with her husband with patience, love, and prayers.

"Vidya beti…" she heard her name and brought herself back from her musings and turned to face her mother-in-law who was now standing by her side with Imli and Aditya.

She tried to bring a slight smile to her face and hoped that she was forgiven for her folly earlier.

"Are you okay? Are you hurt?" Devyani asked and Vidya looked at her now in genuine surprise as she nodded.

"I will get you something to drink. Maybe this lehenga is too hot for this weather. Would you like to change?"

Vidya nodded gratefully for the woman's intuition and for a moment thought that she would cry again thinking of her mother.

"You can run like the wind, Bhabhi!" Aditya said with a laugh and she turned to face him. Unlike the man that she had married, his brother looked like a charming and mischievous sort, easy to laugh and find amusement.

She smiled at his statement and thought that at least two people in the house that she was going to seemed kind.

Edited by sridevi27 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Firstly, you are a beautiful writer. The description of each and everything in the first chapter is very well written. The train sequence can be pictured on them because maryaada is associated only with the trains😆
Great work😊
As you used G-V for a FF.. I would clap for you👏 because they seem really boring now.

Edited by amnaM - 14 years ago
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Well said Devi..we need some good FF's on it and especially on our famous tortise couple..



who seem to be going no where in serial 😳 and thanks a lot to you we can atleast read them in u r FF..😃

Well i loved the first chapter especially how the emotions of vidya are expressed ..a girl from small town shifting to a city in a new house..with new family who are now her's is difficult for any girl..
The train scene was beautifully written..could actually picturise it..train n maryada ka toh purana ristha hain..😆
Waiting to see what's next in the store for chapter 2!!
Great start i must say!👍🏼

And yes hope u give a name to it..😳
Would be eagerly waiting for the update :) Pm me if possible..only if possible 😃!!

Good wishes..
Sri:-)
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Thank you Sri and Amna!! :) Glad to hear that there is interest in this couple :)
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Thanks for writing a FF. Its interesting.Gaurav Vidya could sure do with some help😆 Could you please also include Aditya Priya scenes. Looking forward to the next part, please update soon.
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Originally posted by: FIZK6

Thanks for writing a FF. Its interesting.Gaurav Vidya could sure do with some help😆 Could you please also include Aditya Priya scenes. Looking forward to the next part, please update soon.


Thank you :) I am not quite sure how this FF will shape up. For now, all I know is that the main leads are VIdya-Gaurav. Thank you for your comments :)


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Chapter 2 – The Journey Begins…


He leaned out of the door at the other end of the compartment and relished the feeling of the wind rushing over his face, practically moving the skin and fascia there with its force. He thought of jumping off for a moment, just like his bride had done earlier.

He had been standing the same way against this door when he had seen her jump off just as the train started moving. He had been surprised that she had done so and had wanted to see what she meant to do. He knew next to nothing about her aside from her name, that she had completed four years of college in some small college in the town not far from her village, that she had been good in her studies, and that she was twenty-four years old. He had not even cared to know that much, but his mother had told him those things repeatedly until they had imprinted itself on his brain. She came from a large and respectable family in her village and was everything his mother apparently wanted in a bahu. It didn't matter that it was nothing he wanted in his wife. He corrected himself, it was not 'what' he wanted in a wife that was the matter as much as 'who.' But his choice was completely unacceptable, as he had been reminded time and again by his mother. His mother… the only one in the world who could make him do something as drastic as this against his will.

As he watched his new bride stand in that railway station, the train starting to move past her, he thought for the first time that maybe he should have figured a way out of this situation without involving someone else. The train started gaining speed and he heard people urge his bride to get back on the train. However, she stood there motionless until his own mother came to the door to call out to her. He saw her turn around to face his mother and saw her mother push her into motion. His bride's reluctance was only plain to see…. She did not want to be on this train any more than he did. It was the first time since he agreed to this marriage that he felt something close to relief pass through him. He couldn't give her a life… he just couldn't… his heart and body already belonged elsewhere… but maybe this stranger who had unwittingly entered his life wanted no such thing from him either… maybe she had a story such as his… some sweetheart that she was leaving behind… someone she had been ripped apart from when she had been forced into this marriage…

He saw that she was starting to run towards the train… she was a tall slim girl and her extravagant dress and jewelry were making her advance next to impossible… she wouldn't catch this train, he thought… Another wave of relief passed through him… it was only delaying the inevitable at this point, but maybe some time would help… for what, he knew not…

"Bhaiyya…" he heard Adi call out and knew that he had delayed long enough. She and he were not their own people… they had obligations, duties, lives that were lived for others' happiness and not their own.

He went with Adi and came next to his mother who looked at him with pleading eyes. He sighed and leaned out of the train just in time to see her dupatta catch on something and glide off of her. When she looked back at him, he saw the alarm on her face and for that one instant, he felt as if they were kindred souls. There was no one to get him out of this predicament, but she was even worse off, coming away with him to a strange place with no kin or friend.

Before he could think twice of it, he jumped off the train and ran to her, catching her by the hand and pulling her along. He saw her brief start of surprise, but then she got a burst of speed that astonished even him. When they reached the compartment and he lifted her onto the train, his brother was there to give her a hand. His dear brother Adi who was adored by all… Adi who could do no wrong in his father's eyes. But he never held it against his brother; in fact, he could see why Adi was loved by everyone. He adored Adi himself and was glad that there was someone to please his father when he himself as the firstborn was a great disappointment.

She stumbled when he got on and he caught her just as she turned. It was the first time that he had seen her up close and without a dupatta covering half her face. He felt sad when he took in her features… wide big eyes, generous lips, a straight nose, high cheekbones… she really was quite pretty. Such beauty was meant to be admired, maybe even ardently, by some deserving man. Instead, it was destined to be lost on a man such as him… not receiving the appreciation it required… withering away like his mother…

The last thought jerked him out of his reverie and he let go of her.

He heard her thanks and thought that maybe he said something in return as well. But he wasn't sure in his haste to get away from her and them all…

What had he done?

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Edited by sridevi27 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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2nd also done!!
wow gurl..!<3
Haven't read the first one yet.
Surely gonna read them and update both the posts.


*edited*

The second part is also fantastic.
Your description about the character's is outstanding.

Please add me to your PM list.

Edited by amnaM - 14 years ago
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Hiya Devi! Don't think I have seen you at this forum before...welcome! I'm Jaya!

Nice beginning! Enjoyed reading that especially since the chapters focused on the perspectives of Vidya and Gaurav. I do not read FFs but I look forward to reading one on this show. I like that you have maintained the overall sketch of these characters like how it is in the show.
👍🏼

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