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Posted: 14 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: khansk

Wow! Love the story. Thank God Gopi can rest now. Go Aham Go! Grab your wife!!! Thx for the wonderful part!



Ohhh she won't rest, but she won't be slaving around either.... wait for the next surprise... i wanted to end it in 2 chapters... but just couldn't😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: ruksm

That was great Diya. Ahem is going to be disappointed on not finding Gopi at Mama's place. Nice to see the Kinjal of ur FF as a positive one now. Please do update soon.

👏👏👏


Thanks honey.... although i might fight a lot with bhai against Kinjal, but still she is just a misguided soul... as misguided as Rashi (Bhai this statement is not for your ears... so close them)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: crms

Nice one Diya. Ahem is missing Gopi's services.

You put Gopi in a hotel. Wow, she can happily go in for room service rather than making pooris. Hope Ahem will not bring her back without her enjoying a break.



yup Gopi in a hotel, just enjoying... thats the kind of life i want for Gopi... a pampered one... not without work but where she is appreciated...
Ohhh Ahem will have to die everyday, before i allow them together.... 😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
#24

Originally posted by: Jake-neil

Dont we all knw kokila cares only abt ahem? Lol.. Nice update



Thanks Bro... i was putting more pointed dialogues making Gopi a rebel but that didn't sound right for this story... so desisted
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: monalidp

⭐️Great part Diya😊

I hope Aham has to take 'dar dar ki thokre' before he even gets a glimpse of Gopi.😡


ohhh not only dar dar ki thokre but also har din nayi maut... before he even knows where she is... same goes for the whole Modi n Shah clan... i would love for Jitu Bhai to grow some backbone too
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Posted: 14 years ago
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what a shock it will be for ahem to realise that gopi is not at her mamaji's place...................
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: aamirkhanfan

what a shock it will be for ahem to realise that gopi is not at her mamaji's place...................


Shock, disappointment, worry you name the emotion and he will be feeling it... but he won't feel unconditional love yet
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Superb story, Diya!! Really good parts!! Awesome!!⭐️
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: desisrock

Superb story, Diya!! Really good parts!! Awesome!!⭐️


Thanks a lot Mita😊....
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi all, here is the 3rd chapter.. hope you guys enjoy it... please do let m eknow how the story is moving and if you want any changes

CHAPTER 3

Ahem went to Mamaji's house the next evening and was horrified to find not only Gopi missing, but Kinjal and Dhawal have also not returned home. He was very upset and literally shouted at Mamaji, who was there.

Ahem – Why did you not inform us as soon as you knew that Kinjal and Dhawal are missing? And why did you let Gopi leave in the dead of the night?

Mamaji – We waited because Dhawal is a responsible kid and won't let any harm to come to his wife, unlike someone here. And why do you care about Gopi. Your worry about your sister and brother-in-law is understandable, but why are you worried for Gopi.

Ahem doesn't know what to say to such pointed questions.

Mamaji (with wobbly voice)– She asked me to take her home. I brought her here. Her Mami threatened me with setting herself on fire and before I could stop Gopi, she had already left. I shouldn't have brought her here. I knew how Urmi is but I thought she would take pity on the poor girl. But I forgot who will pity a person whom even God has abandoned. I should have taken her somewhere else, where she would have been safe.

Ahem – Mamaji did you file a police report.

Mamaji – Do you think me such a fool not to do it? I may not be resourceful and wealthy like Modi's but I love my niece a lot, even more than my own daughter. That should tell you something. Never show your face here again. If we get any info about your sister, we will let you know. Please leave.

Hearing the commotion Panna comes there

Panna – Jiju, Mamaji said Gopi Di will come here after Kinjal Bhabhi comes home. Did you bring her with you? Where is Gopi Di?

Ahem doesn't know what to reply to her and leaves with a heavy heart. Right now, not just one, but three people were missing and he didn't have the slightest clue where they were. He drove home at the maximum speed he could. It wasn't 24 hours yet from the time Kinjal and Dhawal went missing, so it can't be reported yet, Mamaji already reported Gopi's disappearance… He wanted to go home and inform everyone, rather than call and shock his Mom. Later he wanted it to report it to police.

He sees his Mom over the phone happily listening to someone while walking near the temple. He thinks of breaking the news to rest of the family first, so they can take care of Koki, if she gets shocked. Rashi, Jigar and Baa were not there.

Ahem – Kaki, Kakaji, Papa…

Hetal – Haan Ahem Dikhra

Ahem – Kinjal and Dhawal have not reached home yet.

Chirag – What are you saying Ahem?

Ahem – Ji Kaka… I am coming from Jitu Bhai's house and he told me they are not there.

Hetal – Ohh where have they gone now? What did Kinjal do again?

Ahem – Jitu Bhai assured me Dhawal is a reasonable person and will take care of Kinjal. He also said they didn't get any ransom call, so they haven't got kidnapped. Atleast, not yet.

Parag – But beta, Kinjal is…..

Ahem – Nahi Papa… Kinjal has not changed even a bit. She is till selfish and doesn't care for Mom atall. Even though I made her understand Umang's treachery she would still go to him only…

Parag – But Beta…

Ahem – No Papa… don't take her side

Koki – who is taking whose side and about what

Ahem repeats what he told others

Koki – Chup… ek dum Chup… what do you think of yourself? 1st you loved someone who is totally unsuitable, then shunned a gem of a person, making your sister believe you hated your wife, then when Kinjal tried to get you out of the marriage trap and fell into Umang's trap, you are blaming her. You are 4 years older than Kinjal, 4 years more experienced, but still you are blaming Kinjal.

Ahem – But Maa

Koki – Kinjal is in Mumbai with Dhawal and don't you say anything against my dikhri or my vahu.

Ahem – are you serious Mom??? Kinjal is in Mumbai??? Ohh I am so relieved.

Koki – Good, now go freshen up and I'll call you for dinner when it is served.

Ahem – Maa… there is one more thing.

Koki (a little sharply)– now what?

Rashi was entering the hall when she hears this and hides behind a pillar.

Ahem – Gopi is missing since the day she went to her Mamaji's house.

This was something Koki was not ready for.

Koki – what happened? Tell me everything.

Ahem – I only know this much that Urmila ben turned away Gopi from her threshold and Jitu Bhai was helpless as Urmila ben threatened to burn herself if Gopi enters the house. And by the time Jitu Bhai could placate his wife, Gopi had disappeared.

Koki – Have they filed a report yet

Ahem – this morning.

Koki – Any news

Ahem nods his head in negative and Koki and Hetal are very distressed. Rashi sees from behind the pillars and calls her Mom to give her aajtak news report….

Jigar who was sitting with Baa for a while decides to go freshen up when he hears laughter from his room. He being a sweet and simple-minded person doesn't understand what the happy occasion is and catches snippets of conversation as he approached the door. Rashi was telling someone over the phone how the news of Gopi's being missing has given a big blow to kaagdi… she also was telling the person, she did good by throwing that gawar out of the house. Jigar is super shocked and decides to confront her when she hears the last sentence…

Rashi – Mummy, now Modi Mansion is in our hands. Both of us will rule here…

Jigar is truly winded by seeing his wife's colors.

Jigar – the only place you will rule is at your parents' house. Pack your stuff and begone.

Jigar - I will file for a divorce the first thing tomorrow morning and also don't think you will get any alimony, your husband has nothing.

Hearing the commotion the whole family comes there

Hetal – Beta, please calm down.

Jigar – Maa, please let me decide something for myself. I know what I am doing.

Hearing this Hetal subsides

Jigar - Also, every profit goes into a trust, which no one can break, house belongs to Baa, Business belongs to Papa and Ahem Bhai, who have set it up. I am just a salaried man. So the only thing you might get is monthly allowance that I can give you. So, pack your stuff and don't show your face here again…

Rashi tries to plead with Hetal

Rashi – Mummyji, please stop Jigarji. He is misunderstanding

When Hetal tries to intervene again, Jigar stops her.

Jigar – Maa, if she lives here, I'll leave and rent a house. I don't want to live with a two-faced person. Rashi, start packing or I'll just send you with the clothes on your back.

Hetal gives a helpless look to Rashi. No one else interferes.

Rashi packs her bag and leaves for her home

Hetal – Jigar Dikhra, atleast tell me what happened.

Jigar recites everything he heard. Everyone is shocked to hear this and are very worried for Gopi. Gopi had nowhere else to go, so where could she be. Koki gives a mean eyed look to Ahem as if she wanted to say 'its all your fault, pray nothing happens to that girl, or…..'. she left that thought unfinished.

Here Rashi reaches her parent's home and starts bawling on Urmi's shoulder, who keeps asking what happened. When she doesn't reply and keeps crying, Urmi shouts at her

Urmi – Rashi, stop it now. Your problem can't be as big as mine.

Rashi is shocked as to what might have happened, when she notices Dhawal and Kinjal missing.

Rashi – Where are Dhawal Bhai and my Sistr-In-Law?

Urmi – that is what has me in dilemma?

Rashi – Mummy, what do you mean?

Urmi – Dhawal has taken Kinjal to Mumbai, without even informing us. He called once they got off the train in Mumbai to onform that they have reached safely and not to worry. Now how will I insult badi Kaagri… Choti Kaagri is not here anymore

Rashi – Mummy, why are you just thinking of yourself? Jigarji threw me out of the house and he is filing for divorce tomorrow.

Urmi – WHAT??? What did you do?

Rashi – What do you mean by what I did? I was talking to you telling you about happenings in Modi Mansion, as you had asked me.

Urmi – are bewkoof… You should make sure that no one knows… Kalakari should be such that your right hand shouldn't know what the left hand did. Now what will we do? How will we go to shopping, spa?

Rashi – Mummy, you are worried just about yourself, what about me?

Urmi – we will do some kalakari to get you back into Modi Mansion

Rashi – But what, Mummy?

Urmi – We will say you are pregnant with Jigar's child.

Rashi – But Mom, we don't have that kind of relationship and even if you try to convince them, they'll just take us to court. That will never work

Urmi (Smirking) – we will see…


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