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Posted: 15 years ago

hi.. thought will write an ff about this show..
attempting for the first time.. please let me know your comments..
I will continue if you like this..

Please pardon the spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes 😳

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Episode 1

Viren's wedding
Shravan and Bunty in Viren's dressing room
Viren :- Aaj Tara shaadi mein ane wali hai. Tu jazoor unze millena aur sab kuch bhatha dena – contract marriage ke bare mein. Mujhe yakeen hain ki tara tujhe samjegi..
Shravan :- Aggar who mujhse baat nahin karthi tho?
Bunty :- shaadi chal rahi hai toh woh yahan scene nahin create karegi. Yeh tera chance hai.. usse sab batao..
Shravan :- Yeh to teek hai..
And paces restlessly in the room..

Sanchi with Rajshri.. Shreya and Bhahi also present
All giggling and laughing ..
Sanchi :- Tum is jhode me bahut achi lagthi ho.. aur Viren tume bahut kush rakhega..
Rajshri :- Jaise Sharavan tera khayal raktha hai?
Sanchi pareshaan hoti hai lekhin mushkil se haste hue
Sanchi :- Usse bi bahut zyaada..
Closeup on Sanchi sad face…

Shravan :- Bunty, dekh to le ki tara ayi hai ya nahi?
Bunty :- Ha mein dekhe aatha hun
Shravan is pacing …
Bunty comes back and say – lagtha hai who abhi tah ayi nahin..
Shravan is depressed..

Viren comes to the mandap and sits down.. Shravan and Bunty are standing behind him along with his family.
Sanchi, Shreya, Bhabhi and family members bring Rajshri to the mandap..
Shravan is scanning the auditorium looking for Tara..
Sanchi notices this and is sad..
Rajshri comes inside the mandap and sits down..
At this moment, Tara walks in..
Shravan sees Tara and is very relieved.. He slowly moves out of the mandap towards Tara..

Shaadi is in progress .. Shravan comes and stand near Tara..
Tara sees Shravan and is going to walk out when Shravan stops her..
Shravan :- Tara please.. meri baat suno..
Tara :- Mei kuch sun-na nahi chahthi.. Mujhe tujse baat hi nahin karni..
Shravan :- Tara.. tumhe sun-na hi hoga.. Mei tumse bahut pyar kartha hoon.. Mei ne tumhe koyi dokha nahi diya.. Mere Sachi ke saat sachi shaadi hi nahi huyi.. ye to ek samjotha hai.. donon parivaroo ko kush karne ke liye.. (In anger) Sanchi ne mujse sirf paise ke liye saadhi ki hai.. (In typical Shravan style) Mei prove kar saktha hoon. Humne ek contract banvaya hai.. 6 mahine ke baat shaadi tooth jayegi aur sanchi ko 25 lakh mil jayega..
Tara is shocked.. Viren is putting the mangalsootra on Rajshri.. background music going on.. Shravan trying to convince Tara..
After a few mins..
Tara :- Agar yeh sab sach hai toh 6 mahene baat Sanchi se shaadi thudvake ana mere paas.. Tab be mai thumse pyar karti ho to hum baat aage batayenge.. Tab tak mujse baat karne ki koshish he mat karna..
Tara walks out..
Shravan is sad.. He goes back to the mandap.. He is angry with Sanchi and glares at her..
Closeup Sanchis sad face….

Rajshri's bidaii.. Shravan is not at all talking to Sanchi..

Shravan's and Sanchi's bedroom
Shravan is standing near the window with Tara's photo in his hand and Sanchi comes in..
Shravan turns.. seeing Sanchi gets angry..
Sanchi :- Shravan ji, Kya Aap ke or Taraji ke beech koi jadga hua kya?
Shravan :- Tum aiyse pooch rahi ho ki tume humari parvah hai.. Tumhari vagayse aaj Tara muje baat karna nahi chaythi.. Jab tum mere zindagi se hamesha keliye chali jayoogi tab hi woh mujse baat karegi.. Yeh sab tumhari jalti hai.. Kya zaroorat thi mere zindagi mei ane ki? Barbadh kar diya na mujhe??
Shravan walks out in anger.. Sanchi sits on the bed and cries..

Next day morning..
Sanchi is making the bed and Shravan walks into the bedroom .. seeing Sanchi, Shravan gets angry
Shravan (In anger) :- Mere zindagi se jaane ke liye kya de saktha hoon?
Sanchi (firmly) :- 25 lakh... Jab aap mujhe 25 lakh denje na tab me aap ko chodkar, iss ghar ko chodkar chali jayoongi.. hamesha keliye.. aggar mujhe paise 6 mahine se pahale mile toh, mei ussii din yahan se chali jayoongi..
Shravan :- Tum dekhna mei jal se jald tumhe paise doonga.. takki muje teri soorat zyada din nahin dekni hogi..
Sanchi :- iss ke liye toh aap ko kaam karna padeka.. khoob mehnat karni padegi..
Shravan :- Tumse chutti pani ki yehi thareekha hai to mai karoonga.. aaj hi aaj mei office jayoonga.. apna bag pack karna shuru karo..
Shravan goes into the bathroom.. Sanchi is standing looking at him..

Shravan comes out of the bathroom wearing blue jeans and yellow t-shirt.. Seeing this
Sanchi :- aap inn kapadom me office jaane wale ho?
Shravan :- Tumhe kya? Tumhe sirf paise se mathlab hai na?
Sanchi :- Agar aap aiyse office jayenge toh koyi aap ko seriously nahi lenge.. koi aap ke saath kaam nahi karna chahega.. toh mujhe paise kahan se milenge? Aasman se??
Shravan :- Toh mei kya karoo??
Sanchi goes and gets black trousers and white shirt for Shravan..
Sanchi :- Ye pahaniye or jayiye..
Shravan takes it from her and walks away to change..

In Hall..
Prathap, Saurab, Rajath and Nita are getting ready to go to office.. Shravan comes in with Sanchi behind him..
Shravan :- Papa.. mei bi office aa raha hoon..
Everyone looks at him.. Dadi and Nidhi bhahi, Saurab and Madhura are happy.. Rajath and Nita just stare..
Prathap :- Achha toh challo..
They all go out..

Dadi to Sanchi .. :- Mei janthi hoon ki isme jaroor thumhara hi haath hai.. jeethe raho beta..
Sanchi smiles..

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Edited by krishnarani - 15 years ago

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its gr8
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--Krish--

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Posted: 15 years ago

@mimas_ence , @Davi - Thank you !! 😊
Will update with a new episode tomorrow

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Posted: 15 years ago

This was great! Update soon, really wanna see what happens next ! :)

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--Krish--

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Posted: 15 years ago

Thanks for the encouragement.. 😊
Please find the next episode

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Episode 2

Shravan is in office along with the staff who teased him earlier.. He is supposed to check the delivery and take stock. Others are doing their job but are watching Shravan and waiting for him to goof up.. Shravan gets irritated but continues with his work.. Few minutes later manager comes to do a spot check on Shravan.. Going through Shravan's files
Manager :- Kitne item check karke enter kiye?
Shravan points to a stack of items and says
Shravan :- Yeh sab enter kiya aur (pointing to second set of items) yeh sab check kiya or ab enter karne wala tha ki ap aagaye..
Manger (in anger) :- Mei ne bathaya tha na, yahan ek ek item important hai.. har item ko individually check karke enter karna.. yeh ek jewellery store hai koi wholesale dookan nahi jahan bundle ko dekha jaatha hai or individual item ko nahi.. agar ginthi sahi nahi hui toh mujhe javab dena padeka sab ko.. ek staff ne bi galathi ki na, dosh poore team par aa jayega.. aur mai nahi chahta ki tumhari vagah se mere kabiliyat team ko ayse sun-na pade.. agar tume kaan karna hai to theek se karo.. varna…..
Shavan gets irritated and walks away in anger.. everyone smirks..
Suddenly Shravan remembers tara's words and sanchi's words.. In Shravan's mind "Mujhe 25 lakh kisi bi keemat par kamana hoga thaki mai sanchi se chutkara paa sakoo.. " Shravan turns back and goes back to the Manager ..
Shravan ( holding back his frustuation and anger) :- Sorry. Mai phir se kar letha hoon.
Everyone is surprised.. Shravan starts to re-do it..

Jaiswal house .. Kitchen..
Preparations on for lunch..
Dadi :- Sanchi, aaj ka lunch tu hi lekhe jaana..
Nidhi :- Woh kaka leke jayenge na.. Sanchi ko kyon thakleef dethi hai aap..
Dadi :- Isme kya thakleef hai.. woh to Shravan ke liye hi toh le jarahi hai.. Kyon Sanchi ?
Sanchi :- Han Dadi.. (Sanchi looks at Nidhi.. Dadi sees this)
Dadi :- Nidhi, tum-he isse koi pareshani hai kya??
Nidhi :- Ji nahi.. Ji nahi..

Office.. Lunch time.. In Staff lunch room..
Sanchi brings lunch.. Shravan is not happy seeing this..
Shravan to Sanchi without letting others hear.. :- Tu yahan kya kar rahi hai? Mere peeche kyo padi rahthi ho?
Sanchi :- Mujhe apke peeche padne ki kya jarrorath hai? Dadi ne bheja hai mukhe.. mere yahan aane se aap ko koi takleef hai toh jaake dadi se bathadena.. (Smiling for others).. Mai toh sift aap ko diya hua wada nibha rahi hoon..
Shravan does not have an answer for this.. They have lunch together..

Evening.. Office..
Manager is checking Shravan's work..
Manager :- Achha theek hai.. aggar pahle se hi aissa kartha toh kaam poora hota.. Kal jaldhi se jald yeh poora karna.. aur bhi bahut zaare kaam hai.. sab kaam sahi time par hi katham karne hai.. koi ho yahan special treatment nahi milne wala..
Shravan is pissed hearing this..

Jaiswal house.. after office hours..
Everyone comes back from office.. Shravan goes to his room directly without greeting anyone.. Seeing this Sanchi follows him to his room..
Shravan is muttering..:- Din bar khade hokar kaam karo aur shyam ko gali sunu.. ji kartha hai usse kuch doon.. (Sees sanchi..) Tumhari vagay-se mujhe yeh din dekne padthe hai.. Chayan se jee lene ke bajai mujhe jaali sun-ni padthi hai.. Mai sab logon ko ek masak ban chukka hoon.. Mujhe yeh sab karne ki koi zaroorath nahi hai.. Mujhe kissi ke liye kuch karne ki zaroorath nahi hai..
Sanchi :- (playfully) Sivah mere.. Aggar mujhe paise nahi mile.. toh mai yahan se jaane wali nahi hoon..
Shravan :- Paisse .. paisse.. Koi aur ki chintha nahi hai thuje? Mujpe hai beethi hogi kabhi socha hai tu-ne?
Sanchi :- Mai kyon sochu? Ham-ne wada kiya tha na ki hum ek doosre ke liye kuch nahi karenge.. (being coy) aap chahthe hai ki mai yeh wada thodoo?
Shravan :- (pauses..) Nahi (Walks away..)

Dinner table..
Everyone having dinner..
Dadi :- Shravan, Sanchi ke saath office me lunch kaisa tha?
Shravan and Sanchi look at each other..
Shravan :- (after a pause).. Achha tha dadi..
Dadi :- Toh Sanchi tum roz lunch le jaana mere Shravan ke liye.. Office me kitne kaan honge.. tu-hi usski sahara ban-na..
Sanchi :- Ji dadi..

Weekend Hilltop restaurant..
Shravan - Vireen aur Bunty ke saath..
Shravan :- Vireen married life kaise chal raha hai?? Batha na..
Bunty :- Batha .. batha....(slapping Viren's back) Bhabhi kaissi hai??
Vireen (a bit embarrassed) :- Hai.. theek hai..
Shravan :- Theek hai ? yaaaaaaaa????
Vireen :- Bas bas..
Vireen's phone ring..
Vireen on phone :- Hello… Mai apne doshthon ke saath hoon.. …… Abhi? … Achha achha.. Mai abhi atha hoon..
Vireen :- Mujhe jaana chahiye.. Ghar me Rajshri mera wait kar rahi hai..
Shravan :- Lehin tu abhi toh aya ..
Vireen :- Meri shaadi sachi me huyi hai.. Mujhe kahi jaane se pahle usse poochna padtha hai.. Maine koi ghadbhad ki toh woh jaake sab ko bhatha degi aur mai phas jayoonga.. Rajshri Sanchi nahi hai.. Jo sab kuch sabse chupa kar rahthi..
Shravan (after a pause) :- Sanchi ko beech me kyon lathe ho yaar?
Bunty :- Thuje jaane hai na, tu chal.. Baad me milthe hai.. bye..
Vireen leaves..
Bunty to Shravan :- Ab yeh Rajshri se pooche bina hamse mil hi nahi saktha.. Milna kya.. who koi kaam rajshri ke permission ke bina nahi kar saktha.. hume usse milne ki umeed hi chodni hogi.... (pause) who shaadi karke phas gaya yaar.. (pause) Aggar shaadi karni ho, toh contract marriage.. teri tarah.. aur biwi ho toh Sanchi jaisi.. Thaki hum jo jee me aye kar sake..
Shravan is silent…

Precap :-
Jaiswal office - Prathap, Saurav, Rajath and Nita in discussion with designer..
Rajath :- Hume yeh design jaldi se jaldi mila chahiye..
Designer :- Mere staff sab busy hai.. aggar madath keliye koi miltha toh shayad dekh saktha hoon..
Saurav :- Sanchi toh draw kar sakthi hai na.. woh creative bi lagthi hai... Usse poocho??
Prathap :- Yeh acchi baat hai..

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Let me know your comments..

Edited by krishnarani - 15 years ago