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Thank you everyone for your encouragement !!! 😊

will post an update day after tomorrow..

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Posted: 15 years ago

#12

plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz post soon!!! lol...i'm loving ur story than the original one....i love the fact that u made tara leave for six months...and no shreya track and mama mami household...just SaaVan!!! thanxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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Thanks everyone..
Please find the next update as promised.. 😊

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Episode 3

Weekend – Sanchi and Shravan's bedroom
Sanchi is getting ready.. Shravan comes out of the bathroom walks out without glancing at Sanchi..

Outside bedroom, Nidhi bhabi sees Shravan
Nidhi :- Aaj tu kahi nahi jayega.. Papa ne Sanchi ke mama mami ko khane pe bhulaya hai..
Shravan :- Toh?
Nidhi :- Toh kya? Jab woh log ayenge tujhe ghar me hona zaroori hai..
Shravan shrugs..
Dadi reaches there..
Dadi :- Tu thayaar hokke kahan jaa raha hai? Tuhje nahi maloom aaj sanchi ke mama mami ane wali hai..
Shravan :- Nidhi bhabhi ne bhathaya..
Dadi :- Toh tu kahan ja rahe ho? Or kyon?
Shravan :- Mujhe bunty se milna hai.. use koi kaam tha..
Dadi:- Aab thak Viren ki Shaadi thi.. Aab bunty bi shaadi kar raha hai kya?
Shravan :- Ji nahi dadi..
Dadi:- Dhosthon keliye tere paas waqt hai, lekhin Sanchi ya hamare liye nahin
Shravan :- Aisi baat nahi hai dadi..
Dadi :- tu tara se milne toh nahi..
Shravani :- Nahi .. nahi dadi..
Dadi :- Tu aaj kahi nahi jayega.. aaj hamare saath ghar par hi rahega..
Shravan is miffed.. he goes back to his room.. At this time Sanchi was coming out.. They collide.. eyelock..
Sanchi moves away from Shravan..
Shravan :- Tumhari vagayse mai ab prisoner han chukha hoon.. Vo bi mere hi ghar mai.. Bhahar jaana ho toh sab ki permission lo.. tumhari, dadiki, bhabhi ki, papai ki….. kaka se bi permission leni padegi kya..
Sanchi just looks at him.. does not respond.. walks out…

Dinning table – Jaiswal family and Sanchi's family..
All cracking jokes and talking .. Shravan apprears uninterested.. Dadi, bhahi, Prathap not happy about his behavior..
Mama, mami also notices this but they keep quiet..
Afterwards..
Mama, mami with Sanchi..
Mama :- Beta, Sab teek tho hai na yahan? Tu kush hai na?
Sanchi :- Ji Mamaji, Mai yahan bahuth kush hoon..
Mama :- Shravan kuch ultha pulta sa lag raha tha..
Mami :- Mujhe bi aisa laga..
Sanchi:- Woh.. jya hai na.. Unka dosth buty hai na.. woh bhimar tha.. Shravanji unke ghar se kal late aye the.. isse liye..
Mami :- Vahan usko dekhne wala koyi nahi hai?
Sanchi :- Woh bade dosth hai na..
Mami:- Achha teekh hai..
Then they leave.. Sanchi is relieved [

Shravan –Sanchi bed room
Sanchi is in her nightdress getting ready to sleep.. An irritated Shravan walks in..
Shravan starts shouting at Sanchi :- Mai ithna bore zindagi mai nahi hua hoon.. I feel like a prisoner here..
Sanchi looks at him and switches off the light..
Shravan gets more irritated and frustuated.. He goes and swich on the light, goes near the couch where Sanchi is sleeping..
Shravan :- Mere neendh karab karke tu sone ja rahi hai?
Sanchi :- Aap ko kal office nahi jaana kya?
Shravan :- Office ke bare main tum baat mat karo..
Sanchi :- Achha.. toh kiske bare me baat karoo? Kya baat karna chahte hai app? Raat bhar?
Shravan does not have a reply to this.. :- Mujhe neendh aa rahi hai.. (he switches off the light and goes to bed)
Sanchi smiles..

Next day office:-
Shravan is doing his work.. In a cabin - Prathap , Saurab, Rajath, Nita in discussion with their designer..
Saurab :- Aggar naye designs Navrathri se pahle showroom me aye toh hume bahut fayada hoga..
Prathap :- Tu sahi kah raha hai..
Rajath also agrees and to designer :- Hume naye designs jald se jald mil jaane chahiye.. chatt me approve karke kaam shuru karvana hai.. thaki hum a naye deadline meet kar sake..
Designer :- Mere staff koi bi free nahi hai.. Ye work shooru kare toh bhaki sab me rukhawat aa jayegi.. Aggar new staff mil jathe tho shayad koshish kar saktha hoon..
Prathap :- Ithe kam samay me kisko kahan se doonde layenge?
Saurab (after some thinking) :- Sanchi … Sanchi madath kar sakthi hai humari.. uskko art me interest hai na.. Who achhe se draw bi kar lethi hai.. woh creative bi lagthi hai..
Prathap :- Yeh idea achha hai..
Saurab (calling Shravan) :- Shraan, Sanchi jab lunch leke ayegi, tab usse bata ki who mujse akke mil..
Shravan :- Kyon bhaiyya?
Saurab :- Hume uski madath chahiye thi..
Shravan :- Sanchi ki madath? Kiss kaam me?
Saurab :- Sanchi se baat hone tho do.. phir bhathaoonga..
Shravan :- Ok bhaiyya..

Lunch time
Sanchi serving Shravan lunch..
Shravan :- Rahhne do.. mai khaoonga.. jaane se pehle Saurab bhaiyya se milke jaa.
Sanchi :- Saurab bhaiyya se? Kyon?
Shravan :- Mujhe kya pata?

Sanchi in Saurab's room .. Saurab is with Prathap..
Saurab :- Sanchi, avo, avo..
Sanchi :- Aap mujse milna chathe the?
Saurab :- baito.. (Sanchi takes a seat) Koi urgent kaam design department me.. hum chahthe hai kit um hamari madtha karo.. tum ko bi ek achha experience hoga..
Sanchi (surprised) :- Mai? Lekin mujhe toh yeh kuch nahi atha..
Prathap :- Pahle designer se toh milo.. Aggar usse tum sahi lagi, toh training who dedengi tumhe.. isme pareshan hone ki koi baat nahi..
Sanchi :- ji… ok..
Saurab :- Kal subhah hi usse mil lena.. Aur athe waqt humhare art works bi sath lana..
Sanchi :- Woh toh mama mami ke yahan hai..
Prathap :- Shravan shyam ko legayenga vaha..
Sanchi :- Ji .. ok..

Lunch room.. Shravan has finished lunch and his lunch box is sitting there .. Sanchi takes it and is leaving when Shravan comes in..
Shravan :- Bhayya ne kyon bhulaya?
Sanchi (smiling) :- Aggar sab teekh hua toh mai bi office join karoongi..
Shravan (shocked) :- Kya???
Sanchi :- hannn
Shravan (disappointed) :- Ghar mai har waqt tum mere sath hothi ho.. ab office me hi…. Yeh kaisi sassa hai .. 24 jantte tumhara chehra dekha padega ….. uhhhhh
Sanchi is sad hearing this but controlling her emotions..
Sanchi :- Mai aapke sath nahi.. design deparment me, Saurab bhaiyya ke sath kaam karne wali hoon..
Shravan (Relieved) :- Toh phir teekh hai…

Precap :-
Designer introducing Sanchi to his team.. Someone walks in ..
That someone :- Sanchi.. tum??
Sanchi :- Anilji???
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Davi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#14

wow...thats gr8. Sanchi joining d office...nice idea,wud b nice if it happened in d serial also....felt really sorry 4 sanchi shravan is so mean...

Plzz cont soon.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#15

Oooh! Love it! Updateee! :)) Thanks for the PM! :]

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gayatri.143

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Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Really good job! :)

pm me the next time u update

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Priya

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Posted: 15 years ago

#17

awesome work...could u plz pm me the next time u update. Also if possible can u write in english instead of hindi so that it will be easier to understand. Thx.

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--Krish--

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Posted: 15 years ago

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Originally posted by: nycsweetie

awesome work...could u plz pm me the next time u update. Also if possible can u write in english instead of hindi so that it will be easier to understand. Thx.

Thanks for your support.. 😊
I will write in eng, it will be easier for me also 😉

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Please find the next Episode..

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Episode 4

Shravan and Sanchi in Mama, Mami's house..
Everyone happy to see them..
Mama :- It is good to see both of you come to our house.. I think it is the first time both of you have come together to this house..
Sanchi and Shravan smile..
They greet everyone and..
Sanchi :- Mami, Saurab bhaiyya wants me to join his team in design department. I am meeting his designer tomorrow and I need my art portfolio.. we came to take it..
Mami is thrilled..
Mami (excitedly):- I am very happy for you.. (to everyone) Have you heard? Sanchi is also going to join their business.. in design department..
Everyone is exicted.. everyone congratulate Sanchi..
Shreya (to Shravan – teasing him) :- Kya jiju, you can't get enough of Sanchi at home.. is it the reason you want Sanchi in office also?? 😉
Shravan smiles coyly and gives Sanchi a knowing look .. Sanchi also looks at him..
They take the artwork, have dinner there and then leave..

Sanchi Shravan bedroom
Shravan :- It is ok that you join office tomorrow.. but make sure that you do not embarrass me there..
Sanchi :- I didn't understand Shravanji..
Shravan :- Behave properly in office and work well.. I do not want people laughing at me because of you.. Otherwise itself I have lots of things to worry about.. Also.. don't come running to me if things don't go well…. We will be co-workers (something clicks) Yes!!.. in office we will be just 2 co-workers and not husband and wife.. understood..
Sanchi :- Ji..
Shravan :- Promise? (Extends his hand)
Sanchi (taking Shravan's hand) :- Promise.. (they look into each other's eyes)..
They let go of their hand and go back to sleep..

Next day morning..
Shravan is driving Sanchi to office..
Shravan :- Don't forget out promise.. we are just co-workers here..
Sanchi :- I haven't forgotten.. Hope you don't..
Shravan :- Hope I don't means what?
Sanchi :- Nothing..
Shravan (trying to read Sanchi) :- one more thing.. don't start crying if someone says anything to you.. This is not home where tears will get you sympathy.. This is office and here people expect good work.. when things are tight people tend to yell.. please don't start crying and create a scene.. One more thing.. we will be co-workers so we are not going to have lunch together..
Sanchi does not respond…

Office
Saurab takes Sanchi and introduces to the Designer
Saurab :- This is Sanchi.. who I was talking about earlier.., Sanchi.. this is Kapil our designer..
Kapil :- Hello Sanchi..
Sanchi :- Hello Kapilji..
Kapil :- Come with me to office, we will have a discussion first and see how capable you are..
Sanchi and Kapil goes to a cabin..
Sanchi shows Kapil her work and they discuss.. end of the meeting Kapil is happy with Sanchi..
Kapil :- Good.. I would love to have you in my team.. come I will introduce you to the team..
Kapil take her to a big room where everyone is working on various designs.. He introduces her to everyone..One guy opens the door and comes in..
That guy :- Sanchi?? You??
Sanchi :- Anil ji??
Kapil :- You guys know each other?
Anil :- Sanchi was my junior in college..
Kapil :- Wow that is great !! They you can show her the ropes and mentor her ..
Anil :- It will be my pleasure..
Sanchi is happy..

Anil orienting Sanchi about the work.. Sanchi is listening.. she calls him Anilji..
Anil :- Why you calling Anilji Anilji all the time?? There is only 2 year difference between us.. If I was 10 years your senior then I can understand.. Further, this is office.. people in the same team, If they are almost of the same age group don't call "ji" "ji". So stop calling me Anilji and start calling me Anil..
Sanchi is uncomfortable.. :- But?
Anil :- What but? In college you never used to call me Anilji.. How come u changed so much??
Sanchi (looking lost in thoughts):- Lots of things have changed after that.. I have changed..
Anil :- In what way?
Sanchi :- Most of the people I have met after college, I had to address them with respect.. Otherwise they will feel that I do not respect them and then reject me on that basis…. (A huge pause) when this happens regularly for a long time, one kind of gets used to it..After marriage also it has become a habit..
Anil :- Yeah.. I heard about your marriage.. congrats.. I hope you are enjoying married life..
Sanchi does not say anything.. she just smiles.. Anil notices this.. but does not say anything..
They continue with their work..

Evening – Jaiswal house..
Shravan and Sanchi walks in after work where everyone is eagerly waiting for them..
Dadi :- Sanchi Beta, how was your first day? Did it go well..
Sanchi :- Yes Dadi.. it went well.. I enjoyed working
Nadhi :- That is very good.. Atleast your first day was better than Shravan's..(gives Shravan a dirty look)
Shravan does not like this.. he goes to his room..
Mathura :- How was everyone at work.. Were they helpful to you..
Sanchi :- Yes.. very.. One of the team members there is my senior from college.. so he helped me a lot..
Dadi :- That is really good.. Atleast there is someone to help you out there…. You should be tired.. go freshen up..
Sanchi leaves the hall..

Sanchi Shravan bedroom
Shravan is waiting for Sanchi
Shravan :- Why did you have to boast about your first day to Dadi and Nidhi bhahi?? Why do you have to humiliate me all the time??
Sanchi is hurt by Shravan' comments.. (Sternly) :- I didn't boast about anything.. You were also there.. If my first day at office turned out better than yours.. It is your problem not mine..
Shravan :- My problem is actually you.. From the day I met you, my life has taken a U-turn.. Are you trying to upset my career also???
Sanchi is really miffed :- Your career is in your hands.. if you work hard, you will grow.. Don't blame me for you laziness..
Shravan :- You are calling me lazy??????
Sanchi :- Why not?? You go to office 1 day, take leave 3-4 days.. does not work in office .. always cribbing about something.. What is it? If not laziness??
Shravan :- uh.. people take time to get used to a new environment..
Sanchi :- Some people start getting used to it from first day onwards.. No point in being jealous about it..
Shravan :- Jealous ??? I am jealous of you?? (starts laughing) .. you are crazy.. (goes to freshen up)..
Sanchi standing there looking at him..

Next day Office – Lunch time..
Shravan is having lunch in staff room.. Prathab sees this..
Prathap:- Why are you having lunch alone?? Where is Sanchi??
Shravan is tensed :- eh… eh.. she is having lunch with her team..
Prathap :- Why? Did you have a fight??
Shravan :- No.. Sanchi.. eh.. wanted to get to know the team better..
Prathap, not believing Shravan.. calls Sanchi.. Shravan is at tender hooks seeing this..
Prathap (over phone) :- Sanchi? Where are you?
Sanchi :- In design department.. with my team..
Prathap :- Why are you not having lunch with Shravan? Did he say anything?
Sanchi (alarmed) :- No.. No..eh..i thought I will have lunch with the team.. I am new here.. so thought having lunch with them will help me work with them better..
Prathap :- Hmm ok..
Prathap gives a stern look to Shravan and goes out of lunch room.. Shravan is relieved..

Precap:-
Shravan in Sanchi's work place..
Shravan :- come on lets go..
Sanchi (regrettably):- I am not done with my work yet.. I will take 1 more hour to complete this..
Shravan :- I am not your chauffer .. to be available for your beck and call….
Sanchi :- It is kind of urgent.. I have to complete this today.. otherwise whole schedule will go for a toss..[?]
Shravan :- Ok.. ok. I will stay today.. but tomorrow onwards if you need to stay late.. find your own transportation.. or learn driving

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